Chaos Begets Chaos [Lessons Learned the Hard Way book 1]

by Sara N. Gardiner

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When July is recruited by Death herself to educate a younger Seer about the supernatural, her first lesson is very simple: immortals are dangerous and can’t be trusted. But her warnings fall on deaf ears as her student, Emma, is much too interested in magical beings to be afraid of them. Their lives and lessons are thrown totally off-course by the arrival of Nytep, a Lovecraftian god of Chaos who delights in toying with mortals.

Nytep takes an immediate interest in July and becomes a secret secondary tutor to Emma--but what starts as a game to him will grow into something much more meaningful (and dangerous) for everyone involved. After all, Chaos forces change, whether it’s wanted or not.

[Cover art by Arkkosun on Twitter]

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With its lighthearted atmosphere and solid characters, this story works great as an urban fantasy. While not being totally smiles all the time, the attitude hasn't become grim even when the setting is around a disaster scene.

The characters are all distinct in their personalities and hold to them. My only issue is that motivations are unclear. Why does Death herself care about one child out of hundreds of millions? Why do the conservative, Christian parents let their kid go to a stranger's house unsupervised? It's not too big a deal if you can suspend your disbelief, but to a really nitpicky reader it might get frustrating.