The Milostiv
by fawks
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This is the journey of a Young Doctor named Gabrio who was assigned to the Grand Fleet of the Reconnoiter Company, aboard the Grand-Galleon called the Milostiv, which is set to sail to the lands that could not be traversed before the invention of the armaments that could penetrate the scale of the monsters living there. They hope sail to the thousand islands to find wonders and new lands to settle. The Grand Fleet would leave Old Carthan in hopes they could expand their horizons. But then a sudden loom hanged above the Bay of Old Carthan as the Grand Fleet sails for the islands...Thrown into the affairs that will change his life, how could a Doctor keep himself out of the destinies of those who would save the world?
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Terrible terrible grammar
Reviewed at: Chapter 2 - Thoughts To Brew
There is a decent story here. However, it is behind a wall of bad grammar. It is so bad that sometimes I had to reread entire paragraphs in order to understand what is going on.
Wrong tenses, quick and confusing pronoun and PoV changes, spelling errors. Sometimes the phrases don't make sense, and they sound like literal translations of a foreign language into English.
And it's unfortunate. Because there is a cool premise here. A grand expedition into a new world. Some echos of lost memories for our main character. Elves and a low fantasy setting. A Doctor main character. There's a lot of fresh ideas that spark the imagination.
With a thorough grammar review, and a solid edit, this could be something interesting. But as it is right now, its almost unreadable.
Leaves your waiting for more
Reviewed at: Chapter 32: The Graveyard of Giants 3
Don't get my rating wrong, the book has room to improve[while the grammar errors are not that jarring since English isn't my first language]. But the book has something I value much more than impeccable grammar:I find myself looking forward to each chapter, and for that I give such a good rating. It might be the good world building or the interesting characters it might also be the setting which is quite unique [I mean where can your find a book about mystery, fantasy, exploring, medicine in a fantasy world, naval and infantry warfare, fighting giant monsters and maritime nomads]. But the reason this book intrigues me so much sould be a combination as well as some things a reader doesn't recognize continously. So I can only warmly recommend to give this book a chance.