Grimm Darkfyre -- Darkening Dungeon

by NH Paxton

Original ONGOING Action Fantasy Anti-Hero Lead Dungeon Grimdark High Fantasy LitRPG Magic Post Apocalyptic Urban Fantasy

Grimm Darkfyre is not a hero. In fact, he's hired to kill those who worship heroes. As a Dark Wizard, for the Wizard's Guild, his job is to annihilate good things. 
But when he has an opportunity to turn his life into something entirely different, like owning a dungeon, things look a bit better for him. 
Can he fight against fate, and overcome the obstacles that are trying to hold him back?
If you like Dark Villains, Grim Dark Story-lines, Dungeon Core, Kingdom Building, LitRPG stats, and Anime-style combat and world building, then you're going to love Grimm Darkfyre. 

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elfshanx
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TL;DR: Cool grimdark dungeon building story with some neat twists on the usual litrpg tropes

Overall: Grimm’s journey to take over and defend a dungeon so he can shake the Guild that’s kept him in chains of debt and running murderous errands for them for most of his life is pretty engrossing. The story’s also a cool blend of epic fantasy elements with gamer technology left behind by “the Ancients”, which makes the litRPG aspect of Grimm’s world feel natural to the story instead of shoehorned in. The dungeon lord was kind of the standard villain until Grimm finally got to his boss level and beyond, then things really took off in a dark, dark way. That said, we were warned right in the description that this is a grimdark story, so if that’s not your cup of tea, don’t read it.

Grammar: I can’t find any issues. The storytelling reads really naturally, which is to say that most of the time I just felt like I was watching the story unfold in front of me instead of reading words on a page, which is pretty impressive because who doesn’t like mind movies?

Character: Grimm’s a dark antihero type, who genuinely enjoys the results of killing, namely leveling up, though he might also be having some glimmers of wanting out of the murder hobo game. The cast of characters isn’t huge yet, but the ones who have shown up so far are entertaining—Cinza the psycho fire wizard, Jia the most annoying member of the guild, at least to Grimm. My favorite character started out as Leese with her and Grimm’s hate-hate-but maybe not 100% hate relationship. I still don’t understand all of it, but there have been flashbacks that explain some, so I’m looking forward to finding out more.

Magic or game system: It’s a litRPG, so you’ve got all the usual notifications and boxes, and with the dungeon lord element, there’s also a lot of eldritch dungeon building, which was fun. I will say, the flavor text in this story is hilarious at times, so you might not want to skim past without reading it. There’s also an intriguing mechanic going on with the dungeon creatures’ leveling becoming addicting, which adds an element of tension to Grimm’s hero-killing that was a cool twist on the usual litrpg dungeon leveling systems.

seagull
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So at the moment of review dungeon building is starting:

Solid start of a book,dungeon story are hard to write so curious to see how it will go. Would recommend to read.

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  • In writing, nothing to complain about. Grammar and vocabulary are solid and the flavor texts, as well as spell descriptions are clear and useful, pertaining to the story.
  • Setting is long after post-apocalypse magic world which has interesting mix of technology and magic rarely seen in dungeon litrpg
  • Author took the time to present the MC, it's background and usual character in a interesting way without infodump, which is praiseworthy. His character oscillates a bit too much between  exhausted cynism, regretful criminal and complete murder hobo (in thought process) for me but it is early and might stabilise later.

Excited to see how the dungeon building will go

knutnputn
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It seems pretty good. It's only just beginning so I'm not sure how it will end up but I've been happy so far.