Overpowered Death Mage In Another World

by Bone_Crusher

Original ONGOING Action Adventure Fantasy Romance Anti-Hero Lead Harem LitRPG Magic Male Lead Portal Fantasy / Isekai Strong Lead
Warning This fiction contains:
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In a world of VR-MMORPG, I am feared as Death Mage. In the biggest war of VR history I died pathetically at the beginning of the battle but instead of respawning, I'm thrown into a different world.

Wait, I am in my game avatar with all the skills and max level. What? My level if far greater than people of this world.

Along with my servant Amelia, Village girl Myra, Adventurer Claire, and other beauties, I'll start my adventure and build my own empire.

Note: This is my first novel, there might be some mistakes. Feel free to give suggestions and constructive criticism is appreciated.

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Darquesse
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Not bad, But needs work

Reviewed at: Chapter 8

The story isn't anything new, basically just overlord with less NPCs and no base.

The style needs a bit of work, as does the grammar. Characters seem to internalize their shock and awe too much. For example, When somebody finds out the MC's level they stay quiet and internally exclaim how awesome the MC is. On the other hand, this could be used as a good way to get an actual conversation going with the MC, and develop their personalities a bit.

Grammar has a few problems as well. There are words missing, and terms aren't cleared up very well.

OBLIVION LORD
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It's not overlord he tried but failed miserably he claims he doesn't have to do

Reviewed at: Chapter 3

Pathetic , just tried to copy the story of overlord and mixed with it all the shitty 2 dimensional personality also removed the good things of overlord. 2.5 star for writing this and you are new  , 1 star for grammar , 1/2 star for overpowered MC . Don't be disappointed it's really looks like overlord just with personalities missing i mean MC plays a game he is level hundred he dies in game gets transmigrated in game like world with he saves two girls of a village which is being attacked by some Nobel army by killing someone with a overpowered spell and cleans up remaining invaders by summoning undead 

Now the writer claims it is not the exact copy of overlord yes same like I copy my friends project and change the names and a few no. In it and I m only giving this 4 star review because writer asked me to delete my review as he thinks he is new and need few more people to tell him it's like overlord.

At his request and this being his first novel I have changed my initial review of  2.5 stars to 4 stars.

If anyone has read the original overlord then he will know what I am talking about.

Gerald
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A pirated version of Overlord (LN)

Reviewed at: Chapter 4

I don't really recommend plagiarism. Thus if you really want to plagiarize some ideas at least make it unnoticable. 

Lomyril
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This is "Overlord - Lite"

Reviewed at: Chapter 11

This reminds me a lot of the light novel "Overlord" by Maruyama Kugane.  At least, until chapter 9.

The main character finds himself in another world after his video game character dies.  He has various powers and abilities from the game, lots of gold, and his assistant NPC who is beautiful and adores him.

The general plot of the story follows Overlord as well, until chapter 9.  This is the point at which the author starts to make the story more of his own.

With that said, I found it a bit hard to get into this story.  The main character had a decent beginning, but his actions started to become something I couldn't really believe or get into. The NPCs also were acting in a more shallow way.  The main example of this is that a man dies and the other people around him do not grieve for long before moving on with their lives and relationships.

The chapters are pretty short, but it's enough to get you from point A to point B as the story progresses.

Overall, if you liked Overlord and want something like a quick snack to nibble on, this story may be for you.  For me, after 11 chapters, I will be giving this a pass.  I like my stories with a bit more meat to them.  =)

scarletsnake18
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It's inspired by overlord but after a while the author turns the story into his own with twist here and there. I don't think it should get bad reviews because it's like another story a lot of stories do that.

Chronicreader
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Pretty good so far keep it up

Reviewed at: Chapter 18
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 It's inspired by Overlord, but with it's own twists so not a complete copy of Overlord. Idk why people judge this so harshly it's not that bad of a read.

DragoonKnightL
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From ch7.

Fun story so far, fast pace and so far likeable characters.

BAAAB The Lamb God
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I really enjoy the story its pretty great even if the first chapter remind you of overlord it's absolutely not the same thing after but i don't like the vampyre loli because she's a b*tch

Winged Thing
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Standard 'Webnovel' faire.

Reviewed at: Chapter 2

Irredeemable. Read it with low standards and maybe you'll be able to get a chuckle out of it. However, its certainly not trending worthy and I'm unsure as to how it ended up there.

Owen
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Obviously inspired from overlord but he makes it his own in the later chapters, worth a read and I'm just waiting for the bad assness to happen and apparently I need 200 characters to post this review