Trials of Sanity

by Senna

Original ONGOING Action Fantasy Psychological Tragedy Anti-Hero Lead Grimdark High Fantasy LitRPG Magic Male Lead Portal Fantasy / Isekai Post Apocalyptic Strategy
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When 23-year-old Leo is suddenly transported to a new dimension filled with horrors, he needs to adapt to survive. Taken from earth together with thousands of others, they must do anything to come out on top. In their new reality, under the all-powerful System, their human limits are no more. Will this newfound power breed cruelty or compassion?

Follow his struggle and journey, as he grabs hold of whatever he can only to see another day and another fight. Human nature and morals will be put to the test with each passing moment. When the horrors of the imagination become all too real, the feeble minds of men and women alike are brought to the brink of insanity.

If we are the product of our environment and culture, what sort of people will be born of a place filled with violence, nightmares, and horror? Forced to fight for his life, Leo must remain sane. And so does the people around him, if he is ever to survive.


Author's note:
This is a work in progress, expect edits and adjustments as the story progress. You should feel more than welcome to express your thoughts and help me in the process of building it.

I intend to post 1 chapter a day, at least.

The reviews have caught up to the release. All chapters are released with a certain standard of quality.

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KanAnkins KanAnkins
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Where is the anti-hero in this? Just cus he kills another fellow human doesn't really make him an anti-hero. It irks me even more 'protect old lady just because feeling' gibirish. It's not love, nor is it any other feeling in particular. Is she his daughter, his mother, or even his uncle? No. She was nice to him. That's it.

 Unnecessarily long POV's if another character. Just reiterating the same events from another POV isn't necessary, especially for 2 long chapters.

Wouldn't be surprised if he kills everyone in the story. Because 'Just freeling bro.' And when you ask the author about it, the answer will come: feeling no explain bro. Brr. Brr.

 

RiahWeston
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Who says I can't keep time while the world ends?

Reviewed at: Note

Always nice to go back to the classics and read an apocalyptic LitRPG

Gammar - Nothing jarring so free 5/5

Style & Story - Both the style and story would well executed and enjoyable. I did find the style be slightly rough around the edges and a bit repetitive at times but nothing bad or too hard to fix and or improve on. Story wise, while it's doing all the classics right. The perfect amount of tensions with the timers. So 4.5/5 for Style and 5/5 for Story

Character - Believable characters with thought out and fleshed out personalities and reactions to all the craziness going on. Always great to see realistic responses in these sort of stories. 5/5 for Story.

TL;DR - If you want a story to read that does LitRPG right, read this for sure.

TheEarlofBronze
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This is seriously one of the best LitRPG's on the site. Right up with Delve.

Reviewed at: 38 - Finally! Magic

There are a few criticisms I could mention, environment descriptions, more varied language, perhaps a couple more hints of the larger plot...

But honestly those are all nit-picks.

The characters are GOOD. Just easy to read, easy to believe people. A real rarity. The MC is well balanced by the author, walking the difficult tightrope of "strongest dude here" and the "If I Fk up i'm dead". He's both practical and emotional, stern and sensitive, strong yet makes mistakes. And best of all, he deals with these mistakes like an adult. Struggling to admit when he's wrong but knowing and doing the right thing in most situations, or at least apologising when he makes a perhaps less than optimal choice, or a choice that others may disapprove of. It's really satisfying to read.

The combat is good, the feeling of looming threat and desperate struggle is very real and gratifying. The Side Cast are all really great too, with very diverse personalities without feeling like standard recast tropes. Sure they fit into general categories "strategy dude, cop dude, mystery girl" but within these tropes they stand out as easily memorable.

Maybe that's the greatest praise I can give this. It's a story I'm going to remember easily. As someone who is able to consume 2/3 stories on this sight a DAY that's a really important thing and this one hits the spot, takes the cake, is the cherry on that cake. I'm impressed, i'm pleased...

And damn do I want more. 

VMJaskiernia
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Not your standard isekai. Instead of starting with the MC dying somehow and being taken into another world, it's more like several thousands of people are taken to a new world. Good news- they have no more human limitations. Bad news- everything else.

This reminds me of a mix of SAO and an apocalypse fic. It's the end of the world, or at least the start of a large number of people in a new horrible world, and a lot of it is going to figure out how to survive.

The prose is great- no grammar errors or issues that I see. The flow is good as well. I love the premise and how it takes a lot of tropes we love and ties them all together. It's 'fun' to have a system and stats, after all, but really- given what sort of hellscape most video games are, do we really want to experience that at that cost?

Adryan Bepe
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One of the few stories that was hard for me to put down until I read the latest chapter. Great use of time and countdown to build hype and intensity. Love the 1st person view that gave us narrow perspective, adding more secluded and mysterious feel. We have yet to understand the system up till CH 15, so I couldn't give a full score yet. Love it so far. 

HashBrown
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A PHENOMENAL STORY IN THE WORKS

Reviewed at: 7 - First Wave

Seeing that this story has only been edited up to chapter 6, I'm gonna review it up to that chapter only.

Style: 4.5/5

I would like to give this story a 5 star because of its amazing first person descriptive style of writing. The descriptions of scenes and expression of the characters (especially the protagonist Leo) is well-written, describing everything perfectly. But I saw some issues regarding the mix of past and present tense in the story. The usual approach is to address it in the grammar part of the review but that style wasn't even entirely wrong. I could see why the author wrote it like that. It was to express the thoughts of the protagonist along with the first person perspective narration as you progress the story. But it can be misleading sometimes so I recommend to separate the thoughts from the narration. One suggestion is to convert Leo's thoughts into italics so the narration could be read in a regular font. But it's not that big of an issue to affect the story so i will just give a 4.5 star.

Grammar: 5/5

Well use of english grammar. The construction of words and sentences in both narration and dialogue leave no room for an isuue.

Story: 4.5/5

Still in the early development to give a perfect score. The story is starting to get interesting so as of now, I will give 4.5 stars.

Character: 4.5/5

I was set to give the character a 4 star since the chapters 1 to 5 focused on the worldbuilding, leaving a focus on leo only and giving a little room for the other characters to shine. But chapter 6 changed it and show how Leo interacts with the japanese couple and also introduced new characters that will be an important part along the story. This chapter managed to show their distinct characteristics, preparing the readers on what to expect on later chapters. So I'll give it a 4.5 stars.

Overall, I rate this story a 4.5. It has lot of potential and can be phenomenal if done right in the future.

Morh
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Well written. Fully boring.

Reviewed at: 38 - Finally! Magic

The story is well written. The characters are reasonably realistic and deep (except the feminist quota Super Muscle Woman MMA master that is somewhat the norm on RR, we can expect the LGBT quota next. There is surprisingly not much race quotas except the multiracial aspect of random people from Earth being summoned. No political preaching too.).

The real issue is the non existant story and hyper basic universe. A bunch of people from Earth are sommon in a litrpg  fake city. In this arena, humans fight waves of monsters and level up.

Everything is 0% interesting. Boring litrpg. Boring itemshop where you spend points gained by killing mobs. Boring fighting and skill system (spear fight in police riot gear). No universe building (the world is a fake city arena that is barely described but I imagine a generic US city).

It's the first time I skim through a story on RR. I wanted to see if it would become interesting later since is was pleasing to read from a writting skill perspective and reviews were very positive. But no. It doesn't get better. Same bland universe, bland mobs, bland skills.

kovich
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Really realistic characters

Reviewed at: 19 - Second Wave

Often I read reviews here that talk how characters are realistic and then when I read I see that they are anything but. People often talk realistic when they mean "I liked the characters" /rant over. Here, I finally can say we have a realistic characters in LitRPG. The confusion, fear, lashing out for no apparent reason. It is really well executed.

Story is ok,  the premise might not pull you in, but the execution will and is excellent. Action is vividly described with enough rest in between, which actually blend well with the story. Style is in the service of the story and it adds to the confusion and constant anticipation. All in all a well connected story.

Didn't learn much about characters other then the MC yet but they are introduced well. The MC is your average Joe at this point in an unusual situation. He is likable, and I could easily understand his intentions even if I thought some are bad choices at that point.

Grammar seems to be proofread, not many complaints from me.

DD214
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A Dark Fantasy Apocalypse With A System

Reviewed at: 12 - The Wordsmith

Chapter 1 is a preview of what the MC will eventually become, and I'm pretty excited to see our MC get to the point. In a lot of these types of stories that take on a darker tone it always brings in kind of twisted sexual elements. 

Thankfully it looks like none of those are here. If you like Dark Fantasy and the system apocalypse sub-genre, this is worth your attention as the author hones his craft.

Thistleman
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To be honest, I wasn't expecting to find a story I would enjoy every aspect of.

Usually, I get very nitpicky about them, but at the very least keeping an objective review.

I can promise you that I will finish reading all the chapters of this story at a later date.

Now to the meat of my analysis,

overall the style of the  story makes for a fantastic flow. The change in POV is clear and well done when it happens, and I can clearly and easily follow the progress of events. The story takes on a decent pace, allowing me to follow along without overwhelming me with extraneous details. So far, most things included are appropriate and relevant.

On to Grammar, this is definitely one of the better written stories on the site. Possibly since I am still on the chapters that received edits and plenty of revisions, but so far it is fantastic. 

The story itself is a pretty grim take on the classic Isekai, and it has plenty of uniqueness to stand out from other major stories in the dark Isekai worlds. It reminds me a lot of Gantz, but with a strong high fantasy take, which really hits home on two of my favorite genres. 

All the characters are superb as well, they feel realistic and alive. They are rational, thinking characters and do not feel too contrived. They think and act on the same information we have as the readers, and for me, I greatly enjoy it when I can see a character acting as I might in a similar situation. I am sick to tears of the thick-headed protagonist trope, and while I would not ding a story for it, the presence of decent, regular people is extremely refreshing.

You have earned every star of my review, keep up the good work! I will be back to finish this story >:)