False Prophecy

by Amanuensis

Original ONGOING Action Adventure Fantasy High Fantasy

Everyone knows the Prophecy of the Fated King. Everyone knows of his Six Signs and Seven Trials. Everyone knows he is the one destined to lead an army of soldiers and fae into battle against the spectral invaders known as wraiths.

But what if the Fated King failed, and his Prophecy never comes true? What if he was killed surrounded by loved ones and devoted allies? What if he died four years before the inevitable war for our world’s soul?

Humanity could not possibly survive without him.

Could we?

Nise, 217-563 P.R.


False Prophecy is an epic fantasy saga about a world that loses its chosen one four years before the apocalypse he was destined to prevent. The first book takes place during the five weeks prior to this tragic event, following a husband and father named Kon. When discovered to be a Seer - a human blessed with the power to see and bond with the magical fae - Kon is taken away from his family and conscripted into the Fated King's army to play his part in the coming war.


Inspired by Brandon Sanderson's The Stormlight Archive, Wildbow's Parahumans, and countless anime.

Disclaimer: FP's Prelude Novel, A Sung Prophecy, is slow burn and character focused. Expect lots of worldbuilding and an extensively large cast.

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soundsofhysteria
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EXCELLENT FANTASY! A must read :)

Reviewed at: 5. Fate Defied

I have to say that this story swept me off my feet. When I entered it, I thought I would simply like it. However, simply 'liking' is not the way my reading experience went. 
I loved it.

As VMJ said below, I, too, expect this story to become a big hit on the site. 

I noticed no grammar mistakes, the style was impeccable, and the story is on an interesting track. The introduction of Fae in this story is what really swept me off my feet, with the use of prose and exposition that allows me to envision this world, these characters, and their effects on the world! I am blown away--fantastic read, fantastic story, fantastically written. 

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Amazing wonderful fantasy

Reviewed at: 5. Fate Defied

This story is new on Royal Road and I expect it to become very popular soon. It's wonderful and has the skill and writing of a published novel. Grammar and flow is great. Major props to the author for the use of great unique names that put us into a fantasy setting feel right away and all feel natural.

Unlike many stories on RR, the main character in False Prophecy is an almost middle-aged man, 39 year old schoolteacher Kon. Oddly, just a year ago, he began to be able to see fae.

Fae, in this tale, remind me of both guardian angels and the daemons from His Dark Materials. Everyone seems to have one, but not everyone can see them. Few can, in fact, and Kon is trying to keep his new secret hidden so that he isn't drafted for his Sight.

If you want to know more- you should go read the story.

ztaylor
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This right here is what we need more of on this site. This isn't the same story hashed out across 3 billion different settings like so much of what I see, even on the trending page. The author's created something amazing here, somethnig I believe can really shake up the status quo of stories on RR.

The prose is beautifully sullen, even during the lighter moments of the story. That's where the Parahumans influence comes in, I think. It's very Worm-esque, that ever encroaching threat of danger growing closer and closer with every chapter. Once the chapter ends on a happy note, you just feel a pit in the bottom of your stoamch knowing something bad's about to happen.

Grammar is incredible, no typos or mess-ups from what I saw. 

The story is that this world saving hero has failed, something I don't see done very often. It's an interesting story device, as the apocalyptic events described are destined to happen without anyone to save this world. 

But the main character DRIVES this story. Kon is amazing. He's not an angsty teen with world-breaking powers, he's just a man worried about his daughter. His motivations are simple, and completely relatable. 

I'm gonna keep reading, this is incredible, author. Fantastic job. 

Primate
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A PROPHECY OF EXCELLENCE

Reviewed at: 9. Moving Forward

The style.

Omniscient third person narration style. And the author made an excellent use of it. We are able to see the False-Prophecy world true the eyes of different characters involved. 

The story.

The story follows Kon, a 39 year old school teacher, in a world of the gifted ones. A truly captivating story that keeps developing in a brilliant way. A gripping story with a great storyline.

The grammar.

High quality. No noticeable errors that could affect the flow of the story.

The character.

The characters are one of the strength of this book. They are well thought out and defined. You simply have to love the MC, Kon. What a character.

Excellent work. Keep it up, author. 

BTI Penner
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Not a LOTR Carbon Copy

Reviewed at: 5. Fate Defied

I always appreciate when fantasy moves beyond the borders of Tolkien. This story certainly does that. This world is a funhouse mirror image of our own. There are schools like ours, but people are organized into aviary inspired tribes. One of the teachers at this school, Kon, must balance both allowing his daughter to develop her sight and protecting her from her fearful mother.

I'm intrigued to see what comes next!

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Who says I can't hide that I see the fae?

Reviewed at: 5. Fate Defied

False Prophecy is an amazing story that has a heck of a lot of potential! An unique setting and execution of magic is always a major plus, especially if done well. Something like this barely needs any polish to hit the shelves if you ask me.

Style & Story - Style wise this is some pretty professional  with a strong sense of emotion bleeding through every paragraph. My only real complaint is how long the chapters run on for, it's not enough to take off any points but its always something to think about: formatting and writing style should help each other, not wear themselves down. Story wise this a very vibrant setting with unique premises and a strong plot from the get go. The world has a sense of reality and whimisicalness that work well hand in hand and helps make the read more exciting. My only issue with the plotting is the execution of chapter 1: it's not that it was bad but rather it has such a strong impact and finality to it that something best left at the end of a book or to be directly followed. After reading chapter 1 I wanted to see what happened next and so the slow burn "what happened before" left me a bit disappointed even though it was really well written and a good story. So for style I say 5 and for story its a regretable 4.5. That intro chapter was just too good to not be captalized on.

Grammar - I didn't see anything that took me out of reading so an easy 5 there.

Characters - Solid character work with a great family dynamic going on, this is something that felt 100% real despite being a fantasy setting. The innocence and confusion of the daughter, the concern of the mother, and most definitely the complex feeling of the father who is struggling to do what is right and keep his family safe. Everything just fits together.

TLDR: A solid read for those looking their next big fantasy epic to embark on.

joeyslatermilligan
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Disclaimer: I'm much more into sci-fi than fantasy, so this isn't really the genre that I usually read.

That said, I'm glad I checked this story out! I saw in the comments that some people didn't like knowing in advance that a main character was going to be killed, but I actually really like that as a concept. In a way, it makes you treasure the time you have with that character. The idea of starting out with the "chosen" one maaaybe not being as chosen as everybody expected, is a really cool twist on that familiar story.

Some of the fantasy concepts were a bit lost on me, though. For example, I didn't really know what a fae was supposed to be, although I eventually took it to be kind of like a how daemons are described in Phillip Pullman's 'Northern Lights'. (I feel like I might be in the minority here though, so if you're into the fantasy genre you might be totally fine with all the fantastical happenings in False Prophecy).

What I did really enjoy was the writing. Even though the overall style and genre just isn't my personal taste, this writer clearly knows what they're doing! Great dialogue, great grammar - top notch crafting! :)

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A novel that rivals/surpasses that from a professional

Reviewed at: 6. Shadows and Flames

First off I want to start by saying that this story is the type of story that needs to be on trending. This is the standard for a trending story, IMHO. Everything about it is beautiful, and I doubt I could find anything to complain about even if I tried my hardest. 

The grammar is phenomenal; I only found one (ONE) mistake that got fixed in the six chapters I've read. Chapters that individually took me 15 to 25 minutes each to read on average, and I'm a fast reader.

 

The descriptions and details about both the world, the characters, and even the emotional portrayal of them all were fucking PHENOMENAL. It sounds like I'm kissing ass with this review, I know, but I am literally not exaggerating when I say this. This story is legit probably the most vivid book I've read to this day on RR. 

The prose is such a somber and grim plot device that, in accompany with the introduction, made me dread (in a glorious way) reading the next chapters. The fated hero of the world is dead, and his wife breaks down when she receives the news. Then the story hits you with a time reversal so that you could see everything that happened beforehand, and it breaks you down more and more as the history unfolds.

 

Literally seeing "Kon had happiness in his heart" hit me in ways I didn't think possible at the end of the chapters. You get attached to him rapidly as the chapters focus on him, and it's just something I can't express as words, you have to read it and FEEL it. 

This is the standard for a somber, dark story. This should be the standard for this type of genre. 

Without a doubt this will be one of the first stories I get back to when I clear my backlog. This is a perfect 5/5

Jess D. Astra
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Interesting ideas, but too slow for my taste

Reviewed at: 3. The 'Talk' No. 2

Style:

The author has an almost poetic style in their description of the scenes, which is lovely to read.

Grammar: 

The story is told mostly from third limited past tense, but slips in both the limited part and the tense part on a few occasions. There were some spelling errors, but nothing to detract a whole star over.

Story:

There seems to be an interesting story to tell here, but the author isn't getting to it. The scenes drag without much happening, and while they're beautiful to read, it was hard to stay interested in what might come.
I'm not certain who the MC is yet.

It seems to be the father, Kon, but from the prologue I know he dies in 5 weeks. If the story is about his 5 weeks of school and death with the Fated King (or perhaps he hasn't died) I'm not interested in that story. I am hoping the daughter is the MC--which is all the more frustrating that after several thousand words, we're not getting there.

The beings (called humans but don't seem to be) are not well described. I'm finding it difficult to picture what they look like, and the author doesn't help us much other than mentioning "raptor descent." I'm not sure if they look bird-like, have wings and beaks, or if they look very human aside from their hands.

The magic system seems to have a lot of thought behind it, and I'm interested, but have seen too little of it by the end of chapter 4.

Character:

The characters are diverse and well thought out. They have their own needs, desires, and flaws. The backstories lend to their actions and behaviors.