False Prophecy

by Amanuensis

Original ONGOING Action Adventure Fantasy High Fantasy

Everyone knows the Prophecy of the Fated King. Everyone knows of his Six Signs and Seven Trials. Everyone knows he is the one destined to lead an army of soldiers and fae into battle against the spectral invaders known as wraiths.

But what if the Fated King failed, and his Prophecy never comes true? What if he was killed surrounded by loved ones and devoted allies? What if he died four years before the inevitable war for our world’s soul?

Humanity could not possibly survive without him.

Could we?

Nise, 217-563 P.R.


To my darling wife and daring daughter,

This may be my only letter for a short time. As of yesterday, I’ve officially graduated from Westwind Academy and been sent on a mission to support the Fated King’s army in an ongoing Trial. Though I can’t write any details, I want you two to know that you shouldn’t be worried. Many powerful fae have guaranteed our success. You can expect to hear from me again in a couple of weeks, but in the meantime, I have a lot to say. Too much to fit in one letter, so I’ll just fill you in on today.

A couple hours ago, a friend told me I saved his life. Before you worry, it wasn’t from danger. He says I saved him from himself. When he was young, his tongue was mangled and never managed to heal right, impeding his speech. Unable to communicate without being taken seriously, he became ostracized and depressed, but with my fae's magic, we were able to restore his voice. The man thanked and hugged me with tears in his eyes. His confidence soared immediately.

Honestly? For the first time since Fate took me from our home? I can say that in that moment, I truly felt happyAfter everything that has happened, my sole regret is that you two aren’t here with me now. Since I’ve arrived, I’ve met people from all walks of life, and they each tell me the same thing. With all the Seers and fae and soldiers, there’s not a safer place to be on Tairn. As such, the Fated King has agreed to let me come get you after he finishes this Trial. There are other families here that march with and support his army. Everyone is so kind and courteous. Many have said they were excited to welcome you two into their community. It’s like one massive, armored flock!

I already know you’re jumping with joy at the idea, Kinjra, but that’s not all. The Fated King volunteered to help me train you in Kolod Vor himself. Though I haven’t known him long, the man is exactly as the Prophecy described. I trust him with our lives, just like we all trust him with our world’s. 

Jrana, honey. I know how you feel about the fae and Fate, but I have to ask. Wouldn’t you rather be together again, as a family? Surely anything would be better than this. Just think about it. Please. Even a minute of consideration would mean the world to me. We’ll return to Kolod Vor after this. In my next letter, I’ll send you our address in the capital.  As soon as I get your reply I can start coming your way.

Running out of space, so I’ll stop here. I hope you both know how much I love and miss you. I think about you two every day. Tell Gul, Cres, and the others I say hi. I’ll try to reach out to them when I have the time and paper.

Sincerely,

Your dashing husband and dazzling father,

Kon, 214-563 P.R.


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Amazing wonderful fantasy

Reviewed at: 5. Fate Defied

This story is new on Royal Road and I expect it to become very popular soon. It's wonderful and has the skill and writing of a published novel. Grammar and flow is great. Major props to the author for the use of great unique names that put us into a fantasy setting feel right away and all feel natural.

Unlike many stories on RR, the main character in False Prophecy is an almost middle-aged man, 39 year old schoolteacher Kon. Oddly, just a year ago, he began to be able to see fae.

Fae, in this tale, remind me of both guardian angels and the daemons from His Dark Materials. Everyone seems to have one, but not everyone can see them. Few can, in fact, and Kon is trying to keep his new secret hidden so that he isn't drafted for his Sight.

If you want to know more- you should go read the story.

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Not a LOTR Carbon Copy

Reviewed at: 5. Fate Defied

I always appreciate when fantasy moves beyond the borders of Tolkien. This story certainly does that. This world is a funhouse mirror image of our own. There are schools like ours, but people are organized into aviary inspired tribes. One of the teachers at this school, Kon, must balance both allowing his daughter to develop her sight and protecting her from her fearful mother.

I'm intrigued to see what comes next!