The Dragon Emperor

The Dragon Emperor

by DawnRoss

Warning This fiction contains:
  • Profanity
  • Sexual Content
  • Traumatising content

A young warrior of the hated Toradon race wants to save the life of the enemy who once saved his life, but he must betray his duty to his brother and father to do it. (This is a rough draft. Comments and suggestions on how to improve it are welcome.)

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(As of Chapter 15) Has Potential, Hints of a Magic/Psionic System?

Reviewed at: Chapter 15: Incessant Stinkwood

So far the story is some what interesting, yet I think going more in-depth on what powers the brothers have would be beneficial. Something is missing from the story, not exactly sure what it is but overall I am enjoying it. Possibly have more of a backstory would be helpful? Also, is this Book 2 of the series? If so, you may want to mention that in a prologue or the story description.