Warning This fiction contains:
  • Gore
  • Profanity
  • Traumatising content

This is rated R. 

 Viewer discretion is strongly advised; depressing elements are prevalent.  This is a tragedy, and will have a dark tone, dealing with the complexity of human morality. The subject matter in this book (genocide, psychological manipulation, abuse, xenophobia) are meant to be taken seriously. They are NOT meant to be seen as melodrama, or to be inserted as shock value; the goal is to not exploit or disrespect the real life experiences others may have.

Hence why this novel may be triggering, and it is STRONGLY suggested you do NOT read this if you are sensitive to these themes.  It is to explore the damaging effects of war.  Do NOT read if you are sensitive to heavy traumatizing content, graphic war scenes, or mental instability. This does not appeal to Royal Road and has traumatic elements that are only suitable for a mature audience. It is merely practice before I send it off for publishing, once edited and trimmed.. 

Ripped away from his country home as a child and raised by powerful government authorities, a young man born with hydrocyrokinetic abilities poses a serious threat to valuable water resources on his homeland, causing everything to crash and burn. It’s not until a blossoming friendship is born after enduring years of painful isolation that he must do everything he can to protect his newfound loved ones, and face his complicated past as dangerous circumstances arise. 

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 The opinions and thoughts of the characters are not mine. If you are sensitive to traumatic content, do not read. Do not read if you are sensitive to mental illness, genocide, graphic violence, or the reality of war. If I need a break from writing, since I am working two jobs and am in college, especially during finals week, I will let everyone know when I need to take a break. 

Warning: This is rated R. It will be a dark, heavy story. For those who are squeamish about blood, systematic oppression, violence, genocide, slavery, prejudice and psychological instability this story is not for you. Characters do not have plot armor. There will be very dark and heavy themes that may be triggering, disturbing, or upsetting to audience members. They are not put in for shock value, but are intended to be criticized for why they are bad and the effects they have on each character.

Hence why this a tragedy, and is a slice of death. Once again, those who do not wish to see these topics portrayed, this story is not for you. 

I ask that while you critique this story, you do it in a respectful way. 

All feedback, critique and suggestions are welcome; feel free to comment. I am trying to grow and improve my writing, so constructive criticism behind advanced negative reviews are appreciated. If anyone leaves a review for the sake of tearing me down or being an asshole in general, I will make sure that they get the hell off my page. I am also interested in any ideas people may have for the drafting process. In other words, if you want to tear apart my story, do it properly, please.

Anyone attacking me personally will be reported and blocked, especially as the fiction gets longer. I do not need anymore negativity or harassment. For those who take the time out of their day to read and offer helpful feedback, I truly appreciate you all, and you are the best.

You have been warned.

Thank you. 

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AN INTRIGUING NOVEL

Reviewed at: Chapter 13

The story: It follows the life of Mouse a man born with hydrocyrokinetic abilities who must do everything he can to protect his newfound loved ones and face his past as dangerous circumstances arise. This is a beautifully written book with interesting story line that keeps growing and expanding without deviating from the main plot. 

The style: The author writes from the first person central point of view. We are able to observe the thoughts, expressions and emotions through the main character's eyes.

The grammar: Excellent.

The characters: Although the focus is on the MC, the characters  involved are well defined and properly written. The MC, in particular, is simply a delight.

Well done, author. Keep up the good work. 

The in-between
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Honestly, this is one of the most novel experiences I've ever had. Never before have I read a piece of fiction this familiar yet so fantastical. 

Drops is quite possibly the most unique story on this site, with its gritty storytelling and (in my experience) a whole new refreshing concept.

Please, give this underrated gem a try. It's phenomenal.

Rabid Fan
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Good Book for the firm of heart.

Reviewed at: Chapter 31

War is an ugly thing ,it gets even uglier with superpowers.

Fantastic work though it does get pretty bad if you dont like tragic storys.

Starts off pretty strongly and spirals towards great bouts of depressing awesomeness.

There are minor issues though as when an extra point of view is added the formatting changes a bit too drastically and detracted a touch.

It's epic stuff and I do look forward to any new chapters.

 

ilikecakesoyeah
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Truly, a gem in the making.

This fiction really lives up to the ganre tragedy- more so than many a 'proper' book.

The writing is beautifully paced and extremely immersive, with almost perfect grammar. 

Starting this story was a heart wrench, with the childlike narrative of the main character making it so much more painful.

I can say without a doubt that I will be following this until no more updates come!

BusinessSN
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It probably is good but

Reviewed at: Chapter 1

The story might be good, but when a story goes somewhere I hate it not in the way you think it's more my mood will change to sad and depressed and I don't like that , so thank you for putting the warning up for me and any other person who read it