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As Leo opened his eyes, he found himself in the body that is not his.
Colt Edgeworth is a man with little to no information in the story Sword of Heaven.
The character Colt Edgeworth died in the hands of his fiancé after experiencing some stabby-stabby action. And that is who Leo had become.
‘I am in a world that has magic, different technology, customs, races, and Gods actually do shit, and I have a woman who loves me but also wants to turn me into swiss cheese...’
He looked at the mirror, contemplated his fate, and came to a single conclusion...
‘So be it, I’ll try living.’
Note: This is my first time writing and English is not my first language, so there are mistakes, I only managed to Re-edit [Volume-1 Chapter 1 - 20], please tell me about the mistakes.
The cover is not mine, I just saw it and thought it was awesome...all rights reserve to the original creator
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I have been reading this and something has felt off the entire time. Other than the fact that grammar causes the story to have absolutely no flow and the random tense and PoV changes that is. It's the fact that I feel like the author doesn't follow the rule of show don't tell.
Maybe they will put something in there that is supposed to show what they want to tell, but they don't put anything behind it. It'll be a few lines for some really big change.
Also everything that happens doesn't have any foreshadowing. And pertinent information is given at the time it is pertinent which makes it feel like it was just something that was added to get the word count up and it isn't really important.
I have four instances that really bothered me. The first was the beginning of the second chapter. The first chapter gave the book a somewhat silly almost cartoonish feel. The beginning of the second chapter was the MC trying to jump out a window to escape, but he was being held down by his butler. Then his sister Risa comes and sees him, and his personality just completely changes. I don't remember there being any reasoning that I saw except maybe when the MC said something like the original body was a coward and scared of his sister.
The second thing is how the MC starts training everyday. That would be no big deal, but he trains until he is collapsed and throwing up from exhaustion. We have been given little to no background on this MC from before the body snatch, but I have trouble believing that this guy would be so determined to train. The reasoning that I believe was given here was that he wanted to do cool stuff like kamehameha and bankai. Just really flimsy reasoning for such a serious effort.
The third thing. One night the MC has a dream where the original owner of the body comes and gives him a few lines. Less than 5. All of a sudden the MC starts saying stuff about him and the body's owner are now one. And he gets his memories and starts crying about stuff that happened to the original body when he brings them up. This two souls becoming one thing should be a big deal. Or it should have always been the case. The after the fact, casual method of it happening is just so annoying.
Fourth, when he goes to the orphanage to adopt his illegitimate daughter her file is kept in a red folder. It then proceeds to give us background on the red folder and the significance behind that. It also says the system hasn't been used for a hundred years and the original body did it to show his taking responsibility. I feel like this is similar to the third point. It is extraneous information that has the only purpose of excusing the actions of the original body. But I don't care about the original body. The original body was never a character, and I have no attachment towards it.
I wanted to like this story. I feel it had a lot of potential. I haven't decided if I will keep reading yet, but it isn't looking likely. It lacks flow, it has no buildup, and sometimes the MC feels more like a sock puppet to advance the plot and make jokes for the author instead of a character. This is my first review, and I could be focusing on the negatives. I think anyone who reads this should still give the book a try.
The story is pretty good, it's no professional author writing this but if you came here looking for that you're in the wrong place.
Only thing that really bothers me is the grammar, oh the grammar.
My advice to the author, just ask a viewer to do some editing on the chapters as im sure there would be a lot of people willing to.
I'm very close to dropping this solely because of the grammar and I beg of you author-san, just get an editor.
This story borrows a lot from the korean wn "Trash of the Count's Family." Just change the Hero who beats MC up in the original story, to Yandere who kills the MC in the original story.
It's an okay story, far from perfect.
My biggest gripe is the author's numerous grammar mistakes. He/she should hire a proof reader, or just proofread the whole thing themselves. Because there are grammatical errors in EVERY chapter.
(surprisingly, though, no spelling mistakes)
It's still perfectly readable, though, but it gets very annoying.
Try it out if you like Reincarnated into Story/Game type of fictions.
I've made it to chapter 72. Dropped it for a while because the grammar was just atrocious. Went back here because... I don't know. Because I hate myself, probably. Also, I'm a sucker for trashy isekai stories.
I missed the 'Martial Arts' tag the first time I saw this, so imagine my surprise when it started to introduce stuff which were vaguely wuxia/xianxia, a genre I hate with a passion.
However, I too, have mastered a secret technique which I have honed through out the years by slogging through countless trashy isekai stories.
Yes, that technique is called: Skipping Paragraphs.
Yes, by using this mystical technique, I have persevered through numerous trashy stories, and I have managed see the essence which lies at their core.
In normal English: Skipped through all the wuxia/xianxia bullshit (which can take more than half of some chapters), forced my way through the atrocious grammar with sheer strength of will, and I was pleased to find a decent power fantasy romance story.
It's not an amazing story, far from it: it's generic as fuck, but that's the kind of shit I'm in to, and at the end if the day, it's enjoyable. But I shouldn't have to put myself through so much trouble just to enjoy this story, so I'm not changing my rating.
TL;DR: An enjoyable, generic, isekai power fantasy romance story buried under horrible grammar and even worse (my bias) wuxia/xianxia elements, which are completely skippable and should definitely be skipped.
Author doesn't consider thoughts of the mc about
his transmigration. Other characters take his changes "as is" though it would be
possible that they would think that their child was possessed or got crazy. It looks like everyone take drastic changes in his behavior as granted. Also, author states that this character was mentioned in three lines in a story that mc read before. Is it possible to recognize the story at the beginning from vague descriptions and a name of a "three-line character"? I just cannot believe in this plot, sorry.
The start is pretty decent reincarnation story. It doesn't take itself too seriously which makes it relatively easy to overlook some initial issues. There is even a rather emotional moment hidden in there! There is not too much power scaling silliness either, so lookign good indeed!
Then the author starts to take things more seriously, the lighthearted tone vanishes. Then the story starts to slowly be overwhelmed by mentally unhinged homicidal maniacs (oh dear). And finally, shortly after chapter 100 it becomes truly clear that this is turning into foll blown xianxia. The world is full of characters that give 0 value to human life or outright enjoy the suffering of others. The power scaling gets more rapid and there is even a temporary power boost to help MC overcome an obstacle (how convenient!).
Then to top it off, it turns out that the driving force of the story is literally a couple of insane people, a bunch of zealots and a whole lot of mind control shenanigance.. (and of course all of these are homicidal maniaces who love to torture everybody and anybody, especially childeren as seems to be the best tradition of xianxia these days)
The grammar is not perfect but sufficciently good that it does not significantly detract from reading.(which means its not 5 stars, and then i stop caring)
So, the score.. take this as an average across the book, more properly it would be about a 4.5 for the beginning, somewhere at 3.5 near the latest currently released chapters.. (and about 2 in the currently-imaginary-but-I dread-it-might-become-reality future where the author takes this to it's logical conclusion in about 5 years time).
The first few chapters will be your typical isekai story, but that cant really be changed easily. But after that it shows it colors when Colt finally gets his full memory back and I think the characters only start improving from there. They are believable and interesting with enough depth to keep you interested and not too much exposition to bore you.
The Mc is doing his best without BSing, spending actual effort to show gains(though yes the gains do come in faster than an average person). There is no harem which is a massive plus if you ask me.
You might be thrown off by the yandere wife, but it gives reasons for why she is that way and she does improve away from that.
Really just give it a try, if you make it to chapter 15 and dont like it then it probably isn't your sup of tea.
P.S. chapter 13 doesn't have any plot so you can skip it if you aren't into that(like me)
It looks like a semi entertaining story about being reincarnated as a random nobile in a book who is going to be killed.
I could only get to chapter 15 before I had to stop. The grammar just ruins it for me. The author clearly is not a native english speaker and it shows in every paragraph of every chapter.
I suggest the author source some help with this as grammer is a nightmare to learn.
Come on it was such a nice otome story reincarnation why begin this bullshit with Water Ripples movement arts. There are so much of cultivation stories and you shuld have warned about this shit in first chapter. Now it`s just dissapointing.
I don't think this story will be everyones cup of tea. To start with there is nothing majorly wrong with the story, but equally there are no stand out praise worthy qualities.
The story starts out with a character reincarnated as a 'Trash mob' character from a visual novel that meets apitiful end. The closest thing I could compare it to is The World of Otome Games is Tough for Mobs.
However unlike that story where the main character is pro-active to better the situation he finds himself in, this charcter does not really do anything and feels like he lacks any agency.
In addition the way the story is written feels off to read, but its hard to pinpoint the exact issue. it might be due to sentence structure and grammar?
All in all this story failed to grip me within a few chapters, if you give it a longer read it may improve but I can only go from my experience so far.
Not a lot here yet but it's well written and has one thing that so easily over looked. The mc isn't a idiot, he dosent constantly fall into self pity, he is dare I say it. Likeable. Yup can't wait to see what happens good luck author hope they masses treat you well.