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A particular soul has gone through more reincarnations than it can remember. Used to living quiet and simple lives, the soul is told that the next life would likely be the last one and that it would have to go back home, to the universe where it was first born to live it. A universe that also happens to be the gathering place of other reincarnators and some of the most powerful beings in the multiverse. What can a soul do when thrust in the middle of an emerging conflict? Why would this be the last life the soul can live? And who orchestrated all of this?
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LIke I said in the title: it's good, and has some real potential, but needs some serious editing. My main gripe is that the dialogue seems to switch between only two modes: exposition and snarky/sarcastic/witty exchanges.
The overuse of exposition in dialogue is a very common issue among lay writers, and has been pointed out several times in other reviews, so I'll assume you understand the basic problem (too much lecturing, needs to be broken up and introduced outside of long paragraphs, blah blah blah).
The greater problem that needs to addressed, in my opinion, is the way in which every character seems to communicate exclusively with that knowing/snarky/sarcastic/joking tone. It's frankly annoying, and makes everbody sound like an insecure twelve year old. If nothing else, try to diversify so that not every character basically sounds the same. Ideally, every character (along with their tone and meaning) should be identifiable by their voice alone, making the "said"s and other qualifiers unnecessary (obviously an ambitious goal. But for one that follows the dao of the novel? An obvious ideal.)
There are some other things that I find irritating (especially how mundane Karma's personallity is), but fundamentally the bottleneck for this story achieving some measure of greatness is the dialogue, so I beg of you to do some research on how to structure it well.
The skill is there, the purpose is not. The mc seems to feel no challenge. Add to it ass kissing sprinkled on everything, and you have a story that tends on the wish fullfilement side. You will find some fillers too that ad nothing to the story excpet fan service or rise mc`s nose even higher.
This story makes good on its promise of lighthearted, overpowered xianxia action with everything you would expect from one, though that includes the usual flaws they tend to have. If you're looking for an overpowered mc who dominates the playing field and accumulates a harem a long the way to overthrow Gods and all that, without the burden of too much emotional investment then this is the story for you. And while this story does all that perfectly, I find myself thinking the story has a lot of potential to be great.
Style: most of the dialogue is basically exposition or sarcastic clapbacks, and that goes for all characters. The story often halts so the author can explain some fact or useless tid-bit of information which sometimes is never used in the story.
Story: I believe it's still too early to say what I think about the story, but so far, I'd say it's pretty damn good, if not quite expected and generic. Like I said earlier, the story is good at what it tries to do, but it doesn't take any risks. It lacks tension since you know the mc will come out on top either effortlessly or with the help of others, though this is a personal gripe. The world the story takes place in is original and lively, though I think the scale is too large to put much detail in. After all, the world is a universe with multiple planes and planets, nevermind countries and sects.
Grammar: the grammar is near-perfect, with few weirdly worded sentences and typos slipping through.
Character: the characters are, in my opinion, stiff and lack life. The main character suffers from overcompetence, which is normal for a xianxia, and the rest of the cast seem to exist only to smother the protagonist in praise or be shocked about their prowess. The cast is diverse and the main circle around our mc each have their own personalities, but something feels lacking, or maybe it's just me.
And yet another fresh story by Vihyungrang, this time Xianxia!
While it is rather early to judge and review the story, since there is only the prologue right now, this story already got my interest, as it seems like it will be quite fun, the usual Vihyungrang way, with all kinds of OP hyinks! I look forward to what will come, as this premise certainly sounds like it will get crazy, even for a Xianxia.
And of course, since its from Vihyungrang, those who already have read his other stories, quite know what to expect: all kinds of OP MC craziness, lots of action and adventure, an author who will complete their stories, and has already done that three times so far without letting them fall apart like some other stories usually tend to do in the long run, and theres no incidation that this one will be any different in that aspect, though if someone who has read any of the author's stories and didnt like them, it is rather unlikely they will like this one, though i still would say to give it a try, maybe it will be this one that does it?
So if you are new to this author, id certainly suggest to read their other stories first in the order that they were written in, with each of them being of better quality than the previous one, as the author improved his writing skills over time, and theres also the author's stories taking place in a shared multiverse, and thus at times characters from the author's previous stories appear, though dont force yourself to go through them as especially the earlier ones tend to have some problems, though when you are finally done with reading them all, there will be likely more content to read for this story, which i consider a win-win!
And if you already have read their other stories, welcome to the ride, it will be all kinds of Xianxia craziness this time, so have fun!
Grammar is good, theres alot of descriptions - fillers - explanations. Some parts of it feel like random tutorial in games, if you played 1-2 games its usefull but if ur used to it it just feels unnecessary, so if you are new to this genre its a perfect tutorial/intro to tropes of xianxia.
I guess it will pick up as it goes like your other novels.
Its your casual xianxia, MC focusing on her basics, trying to hide all of her skills, not using everyting she knows, even tho she set her goal to go all out cuz its her last reincarnation. It is explained so it doesnt feel totally cliche but that explanation feels filler, i guess thats the result of reading alot of novels with cultivation and stuff.
I guess the fact that she had soo many reincarnations and that pointed out so many times, and then listening to basics repeated, and then repeating or explaining it feels off to me, but yea thats a issue with xianxias soo many novels, so many overused tropes, alot of simmilar explanations.
But if you look at it that way, you did a good job at it but then again its too early to judge, i mean we'r only in first academy even tho theres a higher realm an academy there aswell 100 tournaments, competitions inc.
I guess its me ranting. So yea :D.
Chapter one is so overblown it's actually funny. All the different factions congregating to get the Heavenfall prize...which turns out to be something expected, but still, the reveal made me laugh.
Thank goodness we are not getting a blow by blow account of the MC's childhood. Wise choice on the authors part, since the meat of the story is the adulthood world altering events.
The titles and factions can be a bit much to keep track of.
The Aura power was a bit creepily described, and the first hint of how OP Karna will be. Ok, she's been OP from birth. Ok, prior to birth. Haha. Ok, the premise of the story tells us that the MC will be OP. Look at the title!
The vessel and soul concept is fascinating. So is the Spirit Realm. So: nice worldbuilding, basically.
Looking forward to more explanation on why only some people reincarnate. Also, curious about the MC's True Name.
The sudden paragraph of neglect regarding Karna's adoptive parents seemed off based on past descriptions.
Also, is the MC's name Karma, or Karna?! (Edit: thank you to the author for answering my questions and it's always wonderful when the author interacts with the readbase. Especially when the readbase is large, but you still reach out. Commendable!)
Strong start, writing style could use polish, overall I hope there will be twists on the typical story.
I enjoy the premise,but... This sentence sums up how i feel about this book. I have read the authors previous works and i think i figured out what it is that bugs me about his books. He ALWAYS uses phrases like"she made a lot of money she wasn't rich but wasn't poor." Or" she wasnt great fighter but she wasn't bad either"
I don't know why this bugs me ,but it does.love the world though.
For now, this shall be a very basic and short review... ( Because as of this moment there are only 24 chapters)
This is a great start in what I assume to be the third book in Vihyungrang grand Mutiverse spanning epic. So far all we have been shown is the start of our little Divines conquest for power in this very wierd universe. But I have no doubt that once we get past this high school Drama we will start hearing the tale of glory of Karna and her neverending desire to wear PPE equipment on her face!
This universe feels like a mix of Chinese Xianxia and western magical fiction, however unlike Chinese Xianxia our little protag does not start in the worst realm, the mortal ream. She instead starts in the immortal realm with a caring however forgetful father and a bubbly beastwoman of a step mom... sister... auntie?
Seriously though so far there have been so many event drops that I don't even know what is going to happen next, will she adopt a pet dragon!? Start a new religion!? Rekindle an old one?! Detroy all her enemies in holy fire!? I don't know what will happen, so adventure awaits us!
Let us see where this goes and what our little giantess will do!
A fun premise, and decent writing. The pace and drama are kind of ruined by the authors tendency toward long asides though. Every paragraph seems to be double the length they ought to be because the author drones on about things that never matter to the story, or repeats themselves about the details of the MC. And as usual with overpowered/mary sue MCs, the world seems to conform to thier stupidity and plot logic , rather than work with good world building that the MC then deals with.
Do I need to say anything else?
Vihyungrang is probably the god of OP character stories, and you can tell he pulls from elements of his former stories to form his new ones, or at least their base concepts such as how and why magic is and multiversal memery. Very few authors dare to venture their stories to the degree of portraying multi universal madness, but here we are!
There isn't much to see yet, but from what I can read it seems quite like one of the authors older stories, the new journey of an old soul. Which was a treat, and I assume this one will be as well.
If you haven't read or seen his older stories, you should, he is one of the rare authors who truly finishes the stories he makes, making them end in fulfilling forms that don't seem rushed nor forced, planned out right! Note that his stories typically share the same multiverse, or at least some do, and even if they don't they typically feature near identical pieces that make them suspiciously resembling his other stories lore.
Overall a new exciting journey to read! Can't wait to see how this latest OP character in a multiverse of OP characters manages to top the OP charts.
P.S authors stories are like if one punch man was one punch man in a universe of one punch men and was on top of all these one punch men who were also in a multiverse of one punch men who also somehow became the top one punch man of the multiverse of one punch men.
P. S.S that wasn't made to make sense