Power Overwhelming

LIke I said in the title: it's good, and has some real potential, but needs some serious editing. My main gripe is that the dialogue seems to switch between only two modes: exposition and snarky/sarcastic/witty exchanges.

The overuse of exposition in dialogue is a very common issue among lay writers, and has been pointed out several times in other reviews, so I'll assume you understand the basic problem (too much lecturing, needs to be broken up and introduced outside of long paragraphs, blah blah blah).

The greater problem that needs to addressed, in my opinion, is the way in which every character seems to communicate exclusively with that knowing/snarky/sarcastic/joking tone. It's frankly annoying, and makes everbody sound like an insecure twelve year old. If nothing else, try to diversify so that not every character basically sounds the same. Ideally, every character (along with their tone and meaning) should be identifiable by their voice alone, making the "said"s and other qualifiers unnecessary (obviously an ambitious goal. But for one that follows the dao of the novel? An obvious ideal.)

There are some other things that I find irritating (especially how mundane Karma's personallity is), but fundamentally the bottleneck for this story achieving some measure of greatness is the dialogue, so I beg of you to do some research on how to structure it well.

This is a really interesting read among the rest of those same old same old novels people write in RR. Wish it has a bit more content describing what the characters are doing in their day to day live as there is too much time skip and scene change. There are basically no real scenes written (besides lewd), just the next one and the next and the one after that.

This story makes good on its promise of lighthearted, overpowered xianxia action with everything you would expect from one, though that includes the usual flaws they tend to have. If you're looking for an overpowered mc who dominates the playing field and accumulates a harem a long the way to overthrow Gods and all that, without the burden of too much emotional investment then this is the story for you. And while this story does all that perfectly, I find myself thinking the story has a lot of potential to be great.

Style: most of the dialogue is basically exposition or sarcastic clapbacks, and that goes for all characters. The story often halts so the author can explain some fact or useless tid-bit of information which sometimes is never used in the story.

Story: I believe it's still too early to say what I think about the story, but so far, I'd say it's pretty damn good, if not quite expected and generic. Like I said earlier, the story is good at what it tries to do, but it doesn't take any risks. It lacks tension since you know the mc will come out on top either effortlessly or with the help of others, though this is a personal gripe. The world the story takes place in is original and lively, though I think the scale is too large to put much detail in. After all, the world is a universe with multiple planes and planets, nevermind countries and sects.

Grammar: the grammar is near-perfect, with few weirdly worded sentences and typos slipping through.

Character: the characters are, in my opinion, stiff and lack life. The main character suffers from overcompetence, which is normal for a xianxia, and the rest of the cast seem to exist only to smother the protagonist in praise or be shocked about their prowess. The cast is diverse and the main circle around our mc each have their own personalities, but something feels lacking, or maybe it's just me.

The skill is there, the purpose is not. The mc seems to feel no challenge. Add to it ass kissing sprinkled on everything, and you have a story that tends on the wish  fullfilement side. You will find some fillers too that ad nothing to the story excpet fan service or rise mc`s nose even higher.

It's just been perfect so far! The style has been great, the story is keeping me very interested and characters make sense. I've read some of the others reviews and I can't help but disagree with most of them. I like it a lot since it's hitting a lot of the points I enjoy reading about in stories. Keep it up!!!

And yet another fresh story by Vihyungrang, this time Xianxia!

While it is rather early to judge and review the story, since there is only the prologue right now, this story already got my interest, as it seems like it will be quite fun, the usual Vihyungrang way, with all kinds of OP hyinks! I look forward to what will come, as this premise certainly sounds like it will get crazy, even for a Xianxia.

And of course, since its from Vihyungrang, those who already have read his other stories, quite know what to expect: all kinds of OP MC craziness, lots of action and adventure, an author who will complete their stories, and has already done that three times so far without letting them fall apart like some other stories usually tend to do in the long run, and theres no incidation that this one will be any different in that aspect, though if someone who has read any of the author's stories and didnt like them, it is rather unlikely they will like this one, though i still would say to give it a try, maybe it will be this one that does it?

So if you are new to this author, id certainly suggest to read their other stories first in the order that they were written in, with each of them being of better quality than the previous one, as the author improved his writing skills over time, and theres also the author's stories taking place in a shared multiverse, and thus at times characters from the author's previous stories appear, though dont force yourself to go through them as especially the earlier ones tend to have some problems, though when you are finally done with reading them all, there will be likely more content to read for this story, which i consider a win-win! 

And if you already have read their other stories, welcome to the ride, it will be all kinds of Xianxia craziness this time, so have fun!

Before I go any farther I feel the need to point something out... THIS STORY IS A POWER FANTASY.  The Mc is incredibly OP and is constantly reminded of it by the adoring people around her.  If that's not your thing, then don't bother reading it.

This style of Mc is pretty much a staple for this author, as shown by the other stories they have posted on this site. That said, I find this one to be my favorite of his stories character wise.

Speaking of their other stories, it seems that this one is set in the same universe... well, "universe" is the wrong term considering that the setting seems made up of a massive multiverse where the different universes are all slightly different. Some have magic and swords, some are high-tech and have jedi-esk powers. The common elements that tie this story to the others are small, but there, but are little more than Easter eggs for people who have read some of the earlier pieces.  Its entirely possible that will change in the future, but who knows.

Back to the characters... Our Mc has knowledge from multiple lives. In fact, the word "multiple" doesn't even do the number justice. She knows the best ways to do virtually everything.  She is also astonishingly beautiful, possesses natural tallent and afinities beyond imagination, and is a wonderful person to her friends. However, the most interesting thing about her is her embodiment of both sides of virtually any ideal or stance.

The side characters, and there are quite a few, are varried and interesting but all share one trait... their admiration of the Mc.  That last part gets sort of old, but otherwise the array of characters makes for an interesting counterpoint to the Mc and act as a good canvas for her to display how amazing she is. 

As far as the setting goes, I find it quite interesting and one of the high points of the story. The universe that most of the story takes place in is tiered with people of different power levels living on different planes, sort of. There is a lower limit requires to asend to a higher tier, but being born on a higher tier doesn't make you automatically stronger than anyone from a lower tier.  The "space" between worlds is also interesting in that it is more like something from D&D than what we know of as space.

The magic systems (for lack of a better phrase) are also quite interesting and extremely varried.  There is the standard fantasy magic and mystica ki powers, along with ratial abilities and divinely granted abilities. Unlike the earlier stories from this author, psychic abilities don't really show up at all even though they are briefly mentioned here and there. 

The power scaling is rather straightforward, and a bit more streamlined than in some of the earlier stories from the author.  Honestly, this part seems to vary from story to story. In one other story the ranks are very obvious for the mc but the meaning of the ranks seems rather vague, while in others the scaleing seems almost non-existent.

Anyway, the setting and abilites are definitely the highlights for me, although I do love me some power fantasy, the characters constantly praising an mc who can seemingly do anything gets sort of dull quickly.  As of writing this review the story has only just reached an important milestone, and I hope that the author can keep up their interest and not allow it to become rushed.  It feels like the story has been speeding up pacing wise recently while also feeling like it should be at a sort of halfway point.

Generally speaking, this is an intersting and worthwhile story to read, and one I highly recomend for anyone interested in fantasy stories with ridiculous powers and perfect mcs.

I enjoy the premise,but... This sentence sums up how i feel about this book. I have read the authors previous works and i think i figured out what it is that bugs me about his books. He ALWAYS uses phrases like"she made a lot of money she wasn't rich but wasn't poor." Or" she wasnt great fighter but she wasn't bad either"

I don't know why this bugs me ,but it does.love the world though.

A fun premise, and decent writing.  The pace and drama are kind of ruined by the authors tendency toward long asides though.  Every paragraph seems to be double the length they ought to be because the author drones on about things that never matter to the story, or repeats themselves about the details of the MC.   And as usual with overpowered/mary sue MCs, the world seems to conform to thier stupidity and plot logic , rather than work with good world building that the MC then deals with.

Simply superb, 6/5 stars. The author's writing and story telling abilities took a leap from book 1 to 2 and continue to improve. This is an awesome multiverse which has been created. Karna is such an interesting character and she has a wonderful cast of characters. There are characters from the other books and it should good an interesting meet and greet.