The Raptor of Life

by Iori Angel

Fan Fiction ONGOING Action Adventure Fantasy Romance Anti-Hero Lead Female Lead Magic Martial Arts Secret Identity Slice of Life Space Opera Strong Lead Super Heroes
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Jean Grey's soul is fused with one's of a recently deceased female geek who knows her marvel lore, as she realizes that she was in the Marvel universe, this new Jean Grey takes her destiny in hand to escape her dire fate.

*This fanfiction has a morally grey MC who is also Bisexual, you have been warned.

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molenir
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So its an interesting fanfic, that melds most of the Marvel characters into one alternate universe.   Theres quite a few problems, but mostly its just a fun, binge-worthy story.  

So, the problems.  Jean Grey is the Phoenix.  The Dark Phoenix.  She seems to slowly be turning to evil.   Deliberately manipulating, and murdering her classmate and his father.  Then, after gaining control of his company, she then loots it of everything.  Though, not really sure why she needed to, since she was in control of it.  

Another thing, there is simply too much relationship stuff.  It completely takes away from the story.  Full disclosure, I'm not a fan of homosexual relationships.  Even Lesbian ones.  That said, if a story is told well enough, I will overlook it.  However with all the making out, romancing, it really detracts from the story.  Add in that Jean is straight.  Emily is too presumably given that she has a kid.  It really seems odd that she has a girlfriend.  If you take out most of the Cindy/Jean stuff, it would make the story, so much better.  I admit that after awhile I started skipping most of the relationship stuff as I was reading, since it was taking away from my enjoyment of the story.

Overall though, it is a rather fun take on the Marvel Universe.

BlackStarLIne
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Full disclosure first off: I'm one of the editors for this novel so I may be slightly biased.

 

Raptor of Life is one of the more well written fanfics i've seen and read. Iori is also not a native english speaker so her overall grasp of english grammar is generally very good.

 

Story wise, it's an interesting take on the Marvel/X-Men universe in so far as our protagonist is none other than Jean Grey. Personally, i've not seen that many Marvel fanfics that choose to deal with characters from the X-Men. Most will deal with some of the more famous faces such as Iron Man. So having a fanfic that follows someone like Jean is a nice change of pace. Jean is going to do her best to not fall into the common traps that may surround her and will quite possibly use them to her own advantage.

 

I'm waffling a little as i'm not quite certain what to say about this novel other than it's pretty damn excellent and you should give it a go.

SunnyShim
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Fun story and actually good superhero fanfiction for once!

Reviewed at: Chapter 11

Finally caught up to this story and I'm really glad I have. I was a bit skeptical about whether or not I would like this story as it is fan fiction and I haven't read much of that in a while but I'm really glad I did. Interesting story and a nice take on already existing characters from Marvel and a bit from DC. Characters and their dynamics are quite fun to read about though the main character is quite overpowered but I'm alright with that sort of thing.

Dionb
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Jean Grey’s full potential realised

Reviewed at: Chapter 11

There's something very satisfying about reading a story on a character you've pondered on before thinking they could've been much more.. be much more.

I'd call it wish fulfilment, because it's fulfilling a wish I wasn't aware I had.

Matt Mar Scott
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 Such an enjoyable story. Jean is such a pleasure. Her other half doesn't take over but offers advice so Jean can still enjoy this life but fight for her life. it well worth reading and waiting for the next chapters

Dadrian Marshall
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This story is amazing, I have always had an issue with how Marvel has treated Jean. And now here is a story with a Jean that is just that, completely unapologetic about how she opperates. Love it and would recommend because this is what we need. Not another wall flower, but a Jean that's willing to survive and do what must be done. 

strangewaraxe
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Very well put together. I knew that there were alternate marvel dimensions and such, but i didn't know of the specifics. This story is made in such a way that i can completely understand the story line even though i don't know all the characters. I'm a little bit annoyed about the mc being a little bit carefree and careless about certain things, but i understand that it makes the story more interesting so I'll refrain from complaining too much. I'm excited for the next chapter, but i can't predict the authors update schedule.

PaulTB
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Protagonist is slipping down the slippery slope at a rate of knots.

Reviewed at: Chapter 11

So this started out a pretty decent fanfic, sure the MC was willing to kill while Charles Xavier wasn't - but face it, that's probably what a lot of us want in a protagonist. But she gets worse. I think the turning point was when she killed someone for what they hadn't actually done yet.

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Harry Osborne. Normon Osborne had done some shady crap, but at that point Harry was just an unpleasant rich brat who didn't even get on that well with his father.

The final nail in the coffin, though, was when she was slaughtering her way through the secret base of the nutcase who kidnapped her and decided that wiping someone's brain and re-writing it so that he was in love with her to serve as her faithful super-powered butler was a cool idea. I mean, he was scum. But turning him into dead scum would have been a fitting end to his tale.

At the start of the story she was all "Oh noes! Charles tried to read my mind, what a sick nasty man he is!" and now she's happily doing much worse because she has the power and it's convenient.

Vanya
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Well worth a read

Reviewed at: Chapter 10

This story is well worth a read, even if you don’t follow the marvel universe all that closely. 

Likeable main group of characters and a good story line.

The biggest drawback I found with this story was a bit rough grammar, however this is worse in the first two chapters and then improves. If this puts you off initially please stick with it as the story is definitely worth giving it a good go.

I knocked out the first chapters and now am eagerly waiting for the next one.

ImperialProcrastinator
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Horrifyingly racist drivel

Reviewed at: Chapter 3

Couldn't get past chapter 3. Wish fulfilling, power trip, egotistical, warped sense of reality, on top of unmitigated racial bias. The soul melding is supposed to be with a French woman, 30 something, with a kid etc, but doesn't read like that at all. Grim overall