The Beast and The Swallow

by Ariana Vivoni

Warning This fiction contains:
  • Profanity
  • Sexual Content
  • Traumatising content

Of all the tales in all the lands, there isn't a story more famous and more heart wrenching than the one about the Beast and the White Swallow.

Never heard of it? Then come closer.

For it is about to unfold before your very own eyes.


In a far-away land of snow and mystery, the fates of two bastards entangle.

He is a warrior and a ruler. She is a physician with a tormented past.

Now both of them will have to learn not only to live together but also to fight against any and all that threaten to ruin their happiness. Amongst chaos, schemes, and war, will they manage to fulfill the most difficult task - finding the way to each other's heart and soul?

The path won’t be easy. A dark cult and even darker magic are resurfacing after years of slumber. And while they wreak havoc in the lands of Norden, the Star-gazer’s voice echoes in the night heralding a dangerous future:

When the Beast falls, the Swallow shall triumph.

For the Sun to shine over Norden, the Swallow must be devoured.


Many thanks to @AngrySpider for composing this soundtrack for the story: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=YrzUOUCrMA4

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Table of Contents
Chapter Name Release Date
1. A Beast from the North ago
2. The night of the banquet ago
3. The darkness before dawn (1) ago
4. The darkness before dawn (2) ago
5. Troubles at sea (1) ago
6. Troubles at sea (2) ago
7. A friend ago
8. Tales of Norden (1) ago
9. Tales of Norden (2) ago
10. The Eternal Flame (1) ago
11. The Eternal Flame (2) ago
12. Welcome to castle Ildemar ago
13. The Blood of Norden (1) ago
14. The Blood of Norden (2) ago
15. The Thief (1) ago
16. The Thief (2) ago
17. Clash of Wills (1) ago
18. Clash of Wills (2) ago
19. Separation (1) ago
20. Separation (2) ago
21. To each their own demons (1) ago
22. To each their own demons (2) ago
23. Turbulent meetings (1) ago
24. Turbulent meetings (2) ago
25. Enemies within (1) ago
26. Enemies within (2) ago
27. Evil flowers (1) ago
28. Evil flowers (2) ago
29. Chaos and hexes (1) ago
30. Chaos and hexes (2) ago
31. The depths of darkness (1) ago
32. The depths of darkness (2) ago
33. Resolve (1) ago
34. Resolve (2) ago
35. Preparations (1) ago
36. Preparations (2) ago
37. A glimpse of hope ago
38. The Monster (1) ago
39. The Monster (2) ago
40. The trap springs ago
41. Flames of rage ago
42. Death's touch (1) ago
43. Death's touch (2) ago
44. Shadow and Light ago
45. Ghosts of past and present (1) ago
46. Ghosts of past and present (2) ago
47. The forbidden arts ago
48. A painful truth ago
49. Darkness ahead (Book 1 - END) ago
EXTRA - History, Politics and Maps ago
EXTRA II - Art, art, and more art ago
Book II - Hearts of Snow and Shadow - Preview ago
II-1. Sinister daybreak ago
II-2. Master and Servant (1) ago
II-3. Master and Servant (2) ago
II-4. Temptations (1) ago
II-5. Temptations (2) ago
II-6. Schemes and schemers ago
II-7. Snakes in the Lion's den (1) ago
II-8. Snakes in the Lion's den (2) ago
II-9. A weary Lion (1) ago
II-10. A weary Lion (2) ago
II-11. Break and mend (1) ago
II-12. Break and mend (2) ago
II-13. Heart to heart ago
II-14. The sage in the tower ago

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David F. Weisman
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Despite her illegitimate parentage, the Royal prince orders Lorelei to marry his bastard brother, the grim and mysterious Duke of the North.


While still incomplete, this is the best story I've seen on Royal Road yet! (Mild spoilers from early on ahead, I only discuss later chapters in vague terms so as not to spoil the suspense).

The first chapter starts out like a light fun romance, although the author has done more historical research than that would lead you to expect. As the second chapter goes on it turns darker and more serious, then it does so again. Some good people have already died, so we can't have a happy ending for everyone. A couple of larger than life villains fascinate the reader, but mostly we understand why people do what they do. The story has an oddly realistic feel, as the characters cope with similar problems to those that historical people faced in real life.

The fun facts the author highlights at the end of each chapter are sometimes actually fun, and sometimes kind of grim. The realism is occassionally harsh, but even if you've read a lot of fantasy this will stick with you.

The Hallow's eve Knightmare
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I was browsing trending and low and behold a fiction caught my eye, and what a story it is! 

Normally, I’m not one for romance but The Beast and The Swallow is a typical fantasy romance, meets the intrigue of game of thrones, with real research and thought put into it!

There are a few rough patches where the story doesn’t flow between chapters and the passage of time is incorporeal and hard to grasp, a couple awkard sentences and weird wording, a few diction errors and very, very few spelling errors.

However, with how much thought care and effort Lady Ariana Vivoni has put into cutting and forming this jewel, with a little help from the community pointing out these errors and more feeedback, this can easily be placed among the treasury of the royal road’s best rated!

ilir
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In short I give an absolute reading recommendation. I would argue that writing is pretty much at the level of a professional author, well above the RR average.

A few dialogues and monologues seemed a little artificial / unnatural to me. It can also be simply because I am not a native English speaker and I only mention it because there is nothing else to criticize.

TaxReligion
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I'm honestly perplexed as to why this story isn't more popular.  It's a lovely fairy tale, that I enjoyed.  The writing is descriptive, using nice colourful language.  It needs some editing, but nothing detracts from the pace of reading.  I became invested in the characters easily, and the relationship between the two leads Lorelei and Noah.  I also really like the world.  The author used actual history to inform her writing, although the world is made up, grounding it in reality, helping you believe the world which helps with immersion.  Great world-building. I plan to read further.

HoloSol
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Good if you like slow burn romances

Reviewed at: Evil flowers (2)

I highly recommend this story for those who enjoy slow burn romances. As a heads up, go into this expecting to read an actual book and not a webserial/lit rpg. The story feels very planned out with no filler chapters so far. There are no chapters where we just spend a day with the protagonist doing random side tasks. Every chapter has been used to push forward the overarching plot and sub plots in some way. 

Graffiti
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Beauty & The Beast, Royal Road version

Reviewed at: A friend

Some of the longest chapters I've ever read on the site, but overall it was pretty good. If you're the type of person who likes to sit and pass the hours away in peace, you'll enjoy this story. The story is extremely descriptive and detailed, well beyond the typical expectations of a story you might randomly pick up from trending. 

Anyway overall I didn't find much at all to point out that wasn't fixed before I even started reading, so in terms of criticism in regards to delivery, or confusion, there's nothing for me to add. The author stays on top of their game when it comes to that. 

As for the story itself, it was an experience to read (in a good way). Romance novels typically aren't my thing, and I rarely read them willingly. However, this one I'd vouch to be one of the better novels in that genre that sets the standard for how a good romance should be. Some of it felt slightly rushed, or forced, but I don't think it's anything worth complaining about. If anything, my thoughts were simply skewered by personal logic in that regard. The author does maintain a sense of historical accuracy, though. There's plenty of interesting additional facts in the end notes that were a joy to read. 

Overall, to be plainly blunt, this story belongs on trending way more than some of the wild shit I've seen on there. Here's hoping my rate & review encourages others to read and do the same so it can get on the big boy board.

Simian king
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The style. 

The author is making use of the omniscient third person narration. The readers are made to feel the emotions, experience the thoughts and view the world through the eyes of various charactersin the novel. Brilliantly done.

The story.

The story follows the love tale of a bastard warrior prince, Noah, and a bastard physician with a troubled past, Lorelei. The story is detailed and well laid out. As the story progresses, the readers can see its amazing development in relation to the plotline.

The grammar.

Excellent quality. No error that could affect the flow of the story.

The character.

This is a great area of the novel. Well written and well defined characters. The readers simply have to love the characters of Noah and Lorelei. They are awesome. 

Well done, author.  

NeZotheCat
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One of the Best and truly not Shallow story you can find here.

Reviewed at: Separation (1)
Spoiler: Spoiler

This was my first time reading a story in Royal Road where it is more than 10 records. I am saying this because I made a blunder, I read the most recent chapter which was called SEPERATION (1). In my defense I thought that was chapter 1.

Now I'm telling you all this because even tho I skip and was lost with the characters which I thought would be described later on, I got hook with the story.

The vibe I got after reading it again from the start was The Beast and the Swallow reminds me of stories when I was young. It felt like I could smell the paper as I go through chapter by chapter.

It has this vibe where you could see actual literature when you read it. I remember buying my first book in a mall and was so excited to read it.

Where I came from, the book of my childhood was often written by European or American people. To say that those two race are superior when writing a book is not my intention, but one thing I learned from those book from my childhood, they are known and was sold because they are good.

What I'm saying is if this book was published I'm pretty sure a young me would have bought and read it from the get go.

Unintelligent Donkey
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A fun novel reminiscent of a spicy period piece (͠≖ ͜ʖ͠≖)👌

Reviewed at: The Thief (2)

Style 5/5 - the author’s writing style is very descriptive, you can feel it the moment you start reading it, and you will know that this author is someone who pays attention to detail. You do not feel like you are reading a wordy novel, it feels like you’re reading a comic instead, you actually imagine the world. The author also draws a lot of detail from medieval Europe and adds in footnotes at the bottom of the chapter to explain more about them, which just goes to show how much effort she puts in every chapter. 

Story + Character 4.5/5 - So far, the characters seem to have a very specific trope, the MC is a kind and gentle girl who is suddenly thrusted into the life of this seemingly mean and universally hated male love interest. Her actions in the story causes a spark of interest to alight in this cold-hearted ‘monster’ and their relationship will grow from there. But that is not all the author has to offer, there is a lot of heart in this novel, and the characters and the world around them feel alive, thanks to the author's descriptive style. When our MCs get treated unjustly, we really do feel for them and it's like we are living that moment with them, the author’s style really shines in her story.

Grammar 4.5/5 - I saw a few minor mistakes with tenses, typos, and a few odd word choices (take it with a grain of salt, this is purely opinion-based), but nothing affected my reading experience. Overall, it looked very polished and it's clear that the author gives a lot of attention towards getting her message across the way she wants.

Overall 4.5/5 - I have to say that I loved the novel, even though I’m not a big fan of romance novels, I really enjoyed the political intrigue and the real-world problems (medieval time problems?). Underdog stories are always good fun for me, and the backstory of the MC’s lover was definitely something I enjoyed following.  

HashBrown
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HEART-WARMING STORY

Reviewed at: A friend

The Beast and The Swallow is the story about Noah, a bastard son of the Imperial King and Lorelei, the bastard daughter of Count Orten as they find theirselves into a...

Spoiler: Spoiler

 Style: 5/5

It has a third-person perspective with good descriptive style. The scenes and dialogues were well-written and the worldbuilding wasn't heavy to digest. The only issue was the long paragraphs that can still be divided into smaller parts but those were only minimal so I'll still give a 5 star.

Grammar:

Commendable use of english grammar. There were some typos but also minimal and didn't affect my reading experience. So still 5 stars.

Story: 5/5

The story is interesting. You'll find yourself entertained as you read chapters after chapters, following how the story of  Noah and Lorelei will unfold. Their interaction is becoming more heart-warming as they develop their relationship through the story. 5 stars for me.

Character: 5/5

The characters have depth and have their own characteristics. You can identify them from each other, from the misunderstood Noah to the kind but determined Lorelei. Even the other characters like the d*ck prince Lionel to the awkward page Jess. 5 stars for them.

Over all, I had fun reading the story and I recommend it to the readers wanting a heart-warming romance between two individuals brought by fate.