Soulforged Dungeoneer

by SuperSayu

Original ONGOING Action Comedy Fantasy Psychological Anti-Hero Lead Dungeon GameLit Magic Male Lead
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In a modern world with System Dungeons, one guy does stuff.  You know, everyday things like fighting the devil, going to jail for murder, that kind of stuff.  Not... not for murdering the devil.  They're okay with that.

Updates, let's say, Wednesday and Saturday.  I guess.

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meetmycomputer
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It's inconsistent, a story written for fun rather than one crafted to be good. Much like its protagonist, it showed potential at the start, but just fell from there.

Put together plenty of ideas, without working them into a outline and reworking the contradicting parts, and you get something like this. 

It's a mash of interesting and uninteresting dungeon world ideas, worldbuilding from one background uncaringly combined with ideas that would work in a different setting, intriguing hints mixed among unfinished thoughts.

"So, this story gives an interesting look at a world that's just recently been exposed to dungeons and levels... no, nevermind."

"Ah, we have a mature and intriguing protagonist who's quickly rising the ranks of dungeoneers... nope, nevermind."

At the same time, a lot of what's fun about dungeon/leveling stories has been removed here. There are people with levels in the thousands, so we can't be excited about the protagonist gaining levels or racing against antagonists. His class itself is on its way to becoming overpowered, and it just isn't interesting. His ability improvements are vague.

Overall, I'd say it's a story that wants to focus on story elements rather than gaming elements, but it doesn't do well at some of those story elements either. Because it abandons a lot of what makes gaming stories fun, while not actually weaving together a tight story either, it falls short.

Michael Duffy
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It's an interesting idea that is executed well, what more praise can I give?

In terms of grammar, I haven't noticed anything wrong in the chapters at the time of writing, so that's a five star easily.

In terms of style, well, style is a bit vague, so I'll interporate that as how compelling it is, how much do you want to continue reading when you start? Answer; it's pretty compelling, a combination of the unique setting and well executed ideas make it the type of story you'll always want to read just one more chapter of. Also an easy 5/5

In terms of story, it's not something I've seen before and isn't blatantly obvious/easy to predict everything, but is also enjoyable and engaing, more along the lines of "that's great, why didn't I think of that" rather than "allright...sure, I guess that's possible". Additionally, the method and techniques that the author uses to convey certain story elements, such as a time skip, are very good, with a great use of "show don't tell" that not every author on this site uses. 5/5 ez no re

Character wise, it's also good. Characters are complete characatures to engagement breaking levels, but neither are they ineffably complex to the point the reader needs a cork board with arrows and lines connecting every story thread and conversation to follow along. The author toes the line of believability and enjoyability well and doesn't rely too heavily on creative lisence, leading to an enjoyable read, so long as you're not an armchair psychologist trying to find the fucking superego of the characters.

Welp, that's my summary, the author is a good one and has the ability to make good stories, they're 2 for 2 so far.

Mister Bill
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I just finished chapter 11 and had to post a review. This story is so strange and different and fun to read. Absolutely give it a shot and be prepared for the unexpected.

voobwig
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Funny and interesting

Reviewed at: 18. What a pig

I've read one other story by the author (God of Eyes) and it was well written and nothing like this.

 

This is not the usual story on this site, but it does borrow elements from some. It's not a bad thing at as the overall tone is not standard.

It's fast paced and funny. I look forward to reading the rest.

Cap'nSmurfy
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A story that seems to be a parody of itself. The plot is non-existent, the characters are all cartoonishly exaggerated archetypes and the mc has essentially no personality. It's only redeeming feature is the lack of spelling errors.

The story opens with the mc having already obtained his abilities which he proceeds to explain over the next few chapters in a classic example of how to "tell not show". Even then there is virtually no context for these abilities or how they fit into the stories world. By chapter 10 the mc still has no idea what he's going to do and ,much like the story itself, is going nowhere fast. Would not recommend.

Blind Snot Dragon
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It's funny, doesn't take itself too seriously, and was an evening well spent. Honestly what more are you looking for? Give it a try.

furball tiger
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fun, funny, acid trip thru a dungeon

Reviewed at: 21. A quick rest in the sky

This dungeon diving story (so far) is brilliant, deranged, hilarious, and quite original (as in "wtf is the author smoking to come up with this?" at times). Idk how sustainable the setup will prove, or where he/she is going with it, but the first 20 or so chapters are well done and interesting. I LOL'd often enough and loudly enough my spouse came to see what kind of trouble I was getting into. I suspect it'll get darker than I want eventually, but so far it's been fun.

 

Ranthorn
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This is one of the best stories I have read on RR in a while. I noticed no problems with grammar. The characters and stories are pretty good, although it can feel a little rushed at times. Style is excellent, I never felt like I had absolutely no idea what was going on. My biggest problem was that I had a hard time suspending my disbelief for the first 5 or so chapters. I would say give the first ten chapters a shot, then judge it from their.

Overall, I give this story a strong 4.5, and actually feeling like its someone telling a story (although it is a 5 here since RR royally dicks authors if it is less then that.)

 

Ab A.
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Wow !!!! This is hilarious

Reviewed at: 18. What a pig

This is so f***ing hilarious! I can't remember how many times I just balled over from laughing to hard. This a fun read. 

Sandsforever
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I have enjoyed this so far its all bit different of a dungeon dive story

Nothing grammar or spelling wise detracted from the story 

The mc isnt annoying 

The story isnt bad so far worth a shot