Blessed Time

by CoCop

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Some disasters can only be avoided if you know they’re coming, and even then, sometimes the cure is worse than the disease.


On Karell, you are either blessed by the gods, granted a unique power and the ability to gain experience and levels, or you are forgotten.  Micah Silver was a boy picked for greatness.  Chosen by the gods to bear a mythic power, he longed to take his place amongst the heroes and legends he grew up reading about.

Unfortunately his primary blessing only allows him to travel into the past by sacrificing his class, wealth, and levels.  Even if Micah's unwilling, fate has a way of forcing you to take up your destiny, possibly at the cost of everything.  Over and over again.

-Cover Art by Monomus-

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KuroInfinity
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Greatest strength or greatest weakness?

Reviewed at: Chapter 23 - Third Time's The Charm

This story definitely has potential, but its main hook-- the ability to travel back in time, is also the story's greatest weakness.

The protagonist Micah can travel back in time 5 years using the gift he's been given while retaining his skills and memories, attaining strength he shouldn't at the time while also moving to prevent future events he's aware of.

The catch is that he can only use the ability once every 5 years, the time in-between jumps being used to strengthen himself for the next one.

I can get behind this, as it gives a realistic timeline to justify skill growth. You won't find any anime-protagonists mastering abilities in mere days here. Micah needs to spend literal years to grow and refine his talents, and I appreciate that.

The problem I have is that this completely ruins the pacing. Falling into the usual fallacy of instant gratification common to LitRPGs, months to years can pass in-between chapters to justify an increase of numbers on a blue screen. Character relationships develop completely off-camera, leaving future events that should be heartbreaking as stale and shallow.

Spoiler: Spoiler

Similar problems rise up in regards to 'convenient plot devices to further growth'.

Spoiler: Spoiler

If the author can slow the story down a bit to focus on development outside of the numbers, meaning the characters, their relationships, the world, etc. Making full use of the many timelines this story is permitted to have, I feel like this story would be much better.

VMJaskiernia
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Well this is one of the best fantasy stories I've read on RR. It's a gentle LitRPG, with things like stats and affinities taken into consideration but it's not as super game-y as others can be. Magic and being blessed by gods is important though, and our MC gets to go out of his way to pick.

And he gets a very interesting blessing. Once every 5 years he can go back in time by 5 years, keep his knowledge and skills, but lose his levels.

Where I am in the story now he's still grumpy that this isn't something he can do much with, but I'm betting that a lot of things happen very soon. Over and over again...

Grammar is wonderful, no mistakes. Flow of the story is great, desciptions and backstory woven in without overcrowding, and bringing a good lived in feel to the world.

Wonderful story- if you like fantasy, litrpgs, special characters, time-loops, anything vaguely similar: read it.

Woofcano
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I am writing this review after beta reading the author's manuscript. The review might contain criticisms which are no longer relevant by the time CoCo posts the later chapters on RR. 

Time reset stories are hard to execute. Most authors use it as a crutch to excuse their protagonist's rationale and excellence at tasks a newbie wouldn't display. More than often it leads to poor character development. The heart-rending events that will have moulded the protagonist's personality has already happened.

Blessed Time doesn't suffer from such a problem. We get to know the protagonist before he gets his time reset power and the heartbreak of the situations that forces him to use it. Every time he goes back to the beginning, Micah is not only smarter and has higher skill levels but the events that force him to use the reset also helps him grow as a person.

The above paragraphs justify my reasoning for 5 stars in story and character, so I'll skip typing out these sections—I'm on my phone and have neaty fingers.

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The story suffers from some pacing issues. Early in the story the author uses a few time skips but the build up to them could be a lot better. They feel a bit sudden at times which might jar readers.

Grammar:

Its surprising how clean CoCo's first drafts are. I cant fault him too much in this section as he is bound to do some heavy edits before the story is published on here.

PurpleGloom
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Interesting concept but less tell, more show please

Reviewed at: Chapter 24 - Ritualist

(This gets a little ranty) 

The concept of the story is very interesting to explore. There many directions the story could take. Unfortunately the execution of some parts of the story left much to be desired(mainly in the pacing, characters and some of the aspects of the world building) 

One of the aspects of the story that I think is holding the story down is the pacing. Months pass in between paragraphs where character development that should be happening over various chapters get summarised in two or three paragraphs as something that happened off screen with this sometimes being used to explain away things that have never been mentioned when it’s  convent to the plot(all tell, no show). This gives little reason to care about the characters or anything that happens to them(that would usually be impactful if set up right but mostly feels empty and lacks impact).

sometimes things happen or mentioned offhandedly without (much if at all)any sort of explanation or setup.

Spoiler: Spoiler

 It can bring up more questions than answers (and not in an good way)

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The writing style is ok I guess, but the writing tends to lack much if any descriptions of areas or people to set the scene or to create atmosphere(most detail and explaining goes to the LitRPG elements ,but outside of that it’s rare). We barely get to what characters even look like 90% of the time( I wouldn’t be bothered that much by it if the other issues did didn’t amplify this one) , so on top of the rushed pacing and weak character development, these characters aren’t that memorable or interesting for me to care about them.

All of this makes writing come off as the author being too impatient and wanting to get to plot point A to B with little time in between,  without slowing down the story a bit to build up the plot and characters to get an impactful payoff.

I really hope the author slows down a little so we can grow to care for the character and what happens to them. 

TLDR: the pacing is too fast so other stuff like character development and world building take a huge hit, making it hard to get invested in anything half the time out side of how op the mc gonna get (too much telling, not enough showing).

agu12h
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I can't wait for more chapthers ewe.

Reviewed at: Chapter 2 - Mythic?

Interest system, with the promise of a future with 'strugle' HA!! (inside joke, read it' to understand xD)

Anything with time is gold to me and a little of litrpg is even better~ And I like to give 5 stars to autors with premise to support them (*cough*extra chapther pls*cough*) in the start or end idk xD.

Etc, etc, etc.

I can't wait for more and recommend you read it xD ^~^

TheWitchOfTheRock
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I was looking forward to reading this, and I wasn't disappointed.  I don't want to spoil anything, as any  story assumptions I had from the first couple of chapters were dashed. (In a good way!) 

Story : So far, excellent. The story balances narrative structure with the  'game' elements that make it LitRp

 Style: The style is smooth and buttery, like perfect hollandaise sauce.   

Grammar: I found like, two mistakes in early chapters. Nothing to get in a tizzy over. Didn't pull me from the story 

Character Score: The characters are alive. I can see and hear them. They act like real people. At no point do I think I'm reading a character someone wrote- I'm always reading stuff a characte  is doing.

Awesome writing. Moar plz. 

flavfs
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keep them chapters coming

Reviewed at: Chapter 11 - Once Again

This is gold, I especially like how the development of the mc is handled. Though I am curious how the author will handle the development of other characters, mainly I wish to see if and how the mc affects the development of other characters in different time lines.

BKWildenberg
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Finally, a LitRPG I actually like!

Reviewed at: Chapter 5 - The First Quest

I do not care for LitRPGs. Too often they come off like reading an instruction manual and not a story. It's just not a genre for me. 

That said, I really like this one! The world is well developed, and the rules set in place are easy to follow. I really enjoy how things build off each "reboot", and learning more about the characters in each iteration has been a lot of fun. Can't wait to keep reading! 

DikaFM
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At first, the story gave me the impression of a slice of life genre, but then it change when the war arc came and the characters starts dying. Yet up to chapter 23 there are still a lot of questions and holes needed covering to match the genre tag.

I think the character's interaction and inner dialog need a lot more work done. During the first time line the characters and the interaction between them feels more alive. But after the first "blessed return" the side character seems to solely exist to move the plot and MC like a ragdoll

The story is good, and over all its been enjoyable read.

 

Ps.

English is not my first language (i'm still learning and i hope i was making sense) and so far i was content on staying as a ghost reader, but when the characters started to deteriorate i figured i should write a review, and maybe the author could see and take my point into consideration.

 

 

Mislandor
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Well written - and a very good story

Reviewed at: Chapter 9 - Ambush

a well done story with elements that are not usually seen in Litrpg. Well done - looking forward to seeing how it goes!