Vaudevillain

Vaudevillain

by tetran

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Dylan is your average nerd. He works downtown for an architecture firm during the day and enjoys all manner of games and media in his spare time. But while Dylan likes all forms of sci-fi and fantasy, he really likes the genre of superheroes.

So when an indie company releases a virtual reality MMO where players choose to play as heroes or villains, Dylan immediately buys into it. He has a specific type of character he really enjoys watching, something that always makes his inner child laugh in delight. The Saturday morning cartoon villain.

Yes, those inept, bungling, yet highly dangerous villains found in so many of Dylan's cartoons as a child. He loves how they always come up with strange ways to conquer the world and how they get thwarted every weekend. He remembered laughing at every silly antic, every cliched shout of "Curses! Foiled again!" He loves it so much he decides to take this idea into the MMO.

But to grab a playerbase, the company has announced a promotion that players with a high enough reputation can get contacted to become permanent raid bosses in the game. Those chosen will be paid as if employees of the company. Serious players all hoping to live the dream of playing videogames all day rush to purchase copies of World of Supers!

What will happen when Dylan, someone playing the game for fun, clashes with these overly serious players?

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Table of Contents
Chapter Name Release Date
Prologue - A World of Supers ago
1 - Dylan Makes a Decision ago
2 - Character Creation ago
3 - Powers and Workouts ago
4 - Clothes Make the Villain ago
5 - Make Do With What You Have ago
6 - A Good Villain Plans ago
7 - Stealthy Escapes and Secret Bases ago
8 - Face off at the Mall ago
9 - Grand Theft Computer ago
10 - Lackeys and Bases ago
11 - Patching Things Up ago
12 - Completing the Theme ago
13 - Just Another Day at the Beach ago
14 - Under the Sea ago
15 - Getting What You Came For ago
16 - Making a Villainous Escape! ago
17 - Making New Friends ago
18 - The Start of Something Big ago
19 - Sending a Message ago
20 - Grandstanding is an Important Part of Any Villainy ago
21 - All According to Plan ago
22 - Heroically Angry ago
23 - Interlude: John ago
24 - Getting Back Into It ago
25 - Ganked ago
26 - Going on an Invention Spree ago
27 - Petty Theft is For Minions ago
28 - A Wonderous Fight ago
29 - Collecting a Crew ago
30 - Ride the Wave ago
31 - Repping Your Team ago
32 - Patch Notes 2, Electric Boogaloo ago
33 - New Mechanics ago
34 - Hanging Out, Making Plans ago
35 - Secret Identity Origin Stories ago
Interlude: A Great Premise With Slapdash Mechanics ago
36 - Chatting and Contraband ago
37 - Base Defense ago
38 - You Aliens Get Off My Lawn! ago
39 - Ninjas Be Sneakin' ago
40 - Tentative Teamups ago
41 - Team Tension ago
42 - Tension Explodes ago
43 - Preparations ago
44 - Acquiring the Pieces ago
45 - Minion Testing ago
46 - Operation Start ago
47 - Roosevelt Deja Vu ago
48 - Don't Jinx It ago
49 - Jailhouse Rock ago
50 - Prison Break ago
51 - Boss Fight ago
52 - Mild Panic ago
53 - Ambush ago
54 - Characterization ago
55 - A Nasty Surprise ago
56 - Mansion Blues ago
57 - Betrayal ago
58 - Falling Out ago
59 - Flipping Out ago
60 - The Best Laid Plans ago
61 - Drawing a Line ago
62- Clandestine Meetings ago
63 - Teamups Aren't Just for Heroes ago
64 - Sweet Creations ago
65 - The Candy Queen of Crime ago
66 - Rocking with Riptide ago
67 - Poor Form ago
68 - To War ago
69 - Tactical Retreat ago
70 - Calm Before the Storm ago
71 - Gearing Up ago
72 - The Fight Begins ago
73 - And So it Ends ago
74 - Names and Things ago
75 - Building Up ago
76 - On to New Heists ago
77 - Upgrades, People. Upgrades! ago
78 - Mutatholis, The City of Mutants ago
79 - Proper Attire is Important ago
80 - In the Spotlight ago
81 - The Finishing Touches ago
82 - Marching Order ago
83 - Chaos on the Field ago
84 - Cleaning Up ago
85 - Cave Ins ago
86 - Fire Works ago
87 - A Dull Escape ago
88 - Heading Home ago
89 - New Members ago
90 - Fleshing Things Out ago
91 - From the Ground Up ago
92 - Patch Notes 3: Third Time's the Charm ago
93 - Patch Notes the Third: Part Deux ago
94 - Patch Part Three: Weird Science ago
95 - Creepy Critters ago
96 - The Earth Rises ago
97 - Bring the Thunder ago
98 - Role Play ago
99 - Planning in Waves ago
100 - Time to Grind ago
101 - Defensive Preparations ago
102 - Droning On ago
103 - Final Touches ago
104 - Alien Wave Tactics ago
105 - Before the Big Reveal ago
106 - Ironing Out the Kinks ago
107 - Broadcasting Announcements ago
108 - Recruitment Announcement ago
109 - Only a Little Overboard ago
110 - Meet and Greets ago
111 - Anticipation ago
112 - Game Start! ago
113 - Making Waves ago
114 - A Short Lived Pet ago
115 - Chased Down ago
116 - Traps Within Traps ago
117 - Harmless Pranks? ago
118 - Color Commentary ago
119 - Gas Leaks ago
120 - Cruisin' Ahead ago
121 - Sea Villain, Attack Villain ago
122 - You Should Have Thought it Through ago
123 - Not So Sweet ago
124 - Recruiting in Bulk ago
125 - Dance of The Dead ago
126 - Team Bonding ago
127 - A Taste of Battle ago
128 - Behind Door Number Two ago
129 - Giger's Got Nothing on This Guy ago
130 - A Hard Won Fight ago
131 - Fighting On The Trucktops ago
132 - Life In The Fastlane ago
133 - Wave Goodbye ago
134 - A Haven No More ago
135 - Creating Sticky Situations ago
136 - A Change of Plans ago
137 - The Beginnings of War ago
138 - Dexterous Dextra ago
139 - Five Man Band ago
140 - Collateral Damage ago
141 - Who Needs to Aim Anyways? ago
142 - Clean Up ago
143 - Heroic Discoveries ago
144 - Blimpin' Ain't Easy ago
145 - Pieces Coming Together ago
146 - Into the Fray ago
147 - A Grand Entrance ago
148 - Making it Work ago
149 - The Zloppelin ago
150 - The Air Out of His Sails ago
151 - Down With the Ship ago
152 - Supervillain Landing ago
153 - A Fight of Words and Fists ago
154 - Time to Gloat ago
155 - Showdown in the Sky ago
156 - Limiting Options ago
157 - Fall From Grace ago
158 - The Escape ago
159 - On to New Heists ago
160 - Moving Up In the World ago
161 - Good To Be Back ago
162 - Expanding the Workforce ago
163 - Engine Troubles ago
164 - Revving Up ago
165 - One Last Invention ago
166 - Minions! Assemble! ago
167 - Hidden Dealings ago
168 - Sneaking In ago
169 - Secret Agent Villain ago
170 - Free For All ago
171 - Mad Scramble ago
172 - Get Down Mr. President! ago
173 - Infiltration Station ago
174 - Fight For A Cause ago
175 - The Escape ago
176 - And I Woulda Got Away With It Too! ago
177 - Not Out of The Woods Yet ago
178 - Crime's Over, Go Home ago
179 - Motoring On ago
180 - Changing It Up ago
181 - Laser Focus ago
182 - Should Do It My Way ago
183 - Making Waves In Toedo ago
184 - Gentlemanly Competition ago
185 - Signing Off ago
186 - Five Star Wanted Level ago
187 - Self-Destructive Tendencies ago
188 - Heading Home ago
189 - Getaway Cars Come in Style ago
190 - Invitations and Infiltrations ago
191 - Games With Friends ago
192 - Patch Notes For the Discerning Player ago
193 - The Rise of Empires ago
194 - Parading Around ago
195 - Start Your Engines! ago
196 - Iconic Traps From An Iconic Villain ago
197 - Road Rage ago
198 - Mad Maxing ago
199 - Making Up Lost Time ago
200 - Spinning's a Good Trick ago
201 - Cementing the Lead ago
202 - Ah, Hubris ago
203 - Quartet-ing With Death ago
204 - External Combustion ago
205 - The Home Stretch ago
206 - Unexpected Winners ago
207 - Eyes on the Prize ago
208 - For the Last Time! ago
209 - Better Minions for Better Villains ago
210 - Power Talks ago
211 - Spoiled for Choice ago
212 - Cane Your Spells Do That? ago
213 - Spell Armed ago
214 - The Day You Lost to Dr. Zlo! ago
215 - Emails and Theorycrafting ago
216 - New Threads ago
217 - Jacques-ing Around ago
218 - A True Visionary ago
219 - Keep Moving Forward ago
220 - Interrupted Entrances ago
221 - Medical Emergencies ago
222 - Smash and Grab ago
223 - Ambushed ago
224 - Old Friend, Same Enemy ago
225 - Sinking Skyline ago
226 - Reputation Reset ago
227 - Served Cold ago
228 - Bringin' It Back ago
229 - Company Policy ago
230 - Crushed Hopes ago
231 - Ideas of World Domination ago
232 - Re-Arming ago
233 - Rebuilding ago
234 - Villainous Vengance ago
235 - Reflection ago
236 - Preparation Station ago
237 - Swish and Flick ago
238 - Planning Stages ago
239 - Moon Landing ago
240 - Dark Side of the Moon ago
241 - Tremble Before Me! ago
242 - Getting Everything Together ago
243 - Behold! ago
244 - Touching Down ago
245 - Choke Points ago
246 - A Super Entrance ago
247 - Impossible Odds ago
248 - Surrender? Never! ago
249 - Rooftop Brawls ago
250 - Down To The Wire ago
251 - Doomed ago
252 - You Fiend! You Blew Up The Moon! ago
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Pete
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Weak beginning but becomes okay

Reviewed at: 49 - Jailhouse Rock

The beginning wasn't very good imo but the premise has enough potential for being amusing that I decided to reach 10 chapters. Which is barely enough for it to become more entertaining. (the beginning lacks amusement, I think the authors sense of Humor might just not fit mine well) now it isn't great but it is a decent read.

 

Edit:now that we are further I think the author doesn't want to write a zany story but a normal story with an Mc who likes playing a zany character. (Which the current character drama chapter seems to confirm. ) That doesn't work very well for me, though based on the rating it does for others. Of course there are many comedy series that mix comedy and serious subplots but as subplots go I don't find the main serious subplot, interpersonal trouble among mmo players, particularly interesting. It just detracts from the entertaining arcs for me. Anyway dropped my rating from 4 to 3.5

tyes77
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It's an elaborate dnd session

Reviewed at: 34 - Hanging Out, Making Plans
If you are looking for a video game novel, this isn't it. If you are looking for a DnD session set in a hero setting then this is for you. Unfortunately I'm not one of those people.
 
The novels style is cringey with old humour and how the old timey villian is so cool. Somehow he ends up 'winning' due to others incompetence instead of his own competence. He doesn't care about score or anything, just having a fun time in the world. A video game world that I don't see how it isnt burnt to the ground with such basic NPCs.
 
DnD is what I compare this to because it cobbled together and things happen only because one of the players thought it would look cool. Plot or characters don't matter at all in this. Everything is done for the fun of it with no substance whatsoever and that is why I can't honestly give this a solid score.
 
Sorry but a story is something more than just a 'fart joke' or what alludes to old timey villian antics.
 
I don't mind others enjoying it mind you, I just don't figure there is anything like a story at all. Character development is obviously a foreign term.
saltywaters
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Overall, read it. This is a fun comedy with fun characters and low stakes.

Style: Vaudevillian has style. It's a story entirely about doing things in a certain way, and it succeeds. Dr. Zlo, great name by the way, sets out to be a cartoon villain, and by God, so far, he's succeeded.

Grammar: Mostly great, definitely readable. The main issue I've had is getting put into the action without knowing the context of what's going on.

Story: The story is extremely fun, and has made me laugh more than once. My issue is this, if you don't get a plot going, even a very basic one, you'll run into major problems down the road. A good rule of thumb is that a plot isn't what the characters want, it's what they need. Right now, everything is purely based on what Dr. Zlo, or Dylan, wants.

The reason this is so important is that without a plot, your characters will not grow. Without character growth, the entire story will stagnate into bland mediocrity. A story's value comes not from what its characters accomplished from page one to 'the end', but how they changed, the people they became. A heroic character becomes the best version of themselves, and a villainous character becomes the worst version.

Character: So far, everyone is working well together. 

Final Analysis for a potential reader: Read this story, you won't regret it.

Final Words for the author: I always wanted to read this story, and I didn't know it till I saw it. I'm trying to think of the most encouraging, positive thing possible I can say to encourage you and help you succeed. Obviously, I've failed to put it succinctly, so I'll just leave you with the knowledge that I tried, and that's how I feel.

 

KrazeKode
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A Super Villain You Would Love To Be

Reviewed at: 33 - New Mechanics

Here to take over the world in style, Dr Zlo aka Dylan comes in living out a wild fantasy I would love to have in reality. With a fairly standard VR SciFi-Fantasy (I don't know which one) albeit with a slight twist the story has a very interesting setting that it builds on. But here's the thing. 

No Elves or Dragons or Dwarves you suckas! (There might be later on, its possible) Dont run away just yet though, instead what this story has is a world of supers. Here you can model your powers and live out your wildest super power dreams. Now in comes Dr Zlo a super villain Mad Scientist full with his wacky minions team and a mission to take over the world. 

You get to watch him as he starts off in the world wondering how this Role playing fan will pull off being a cool and collected super villain that has both grace and style. 

With impossible ideas that we accepted in cartoons brought to reality, it is a wild ride and a thorough joy to read. Here you'll find giant teddy bears minions and other cool things that make you wanna dive into this world and live it yourself.

Ladies and gentlemen what we have here is a Doofenshmirtz done right and in a realistic setting [from Phineas and Ferb for those who didn't realize it and if you still dont know what I mean :) ] and he's no doof either. So you get to read through his exploits and world domination plans in action. Like seriously what else do you need!?

This like my Childhood fantasy that I didn't have come true. I didn't realize how much I needed this till I read it.

Points to read the Story. 

  • It will brigten your day (trust me it will)
  • Imagine making a machine that turns everyone into a dog or cat (yeah it sounds fun I know) you get to see similar stuff here.
  • It doesn't take itself seriosuly (which is an ABSOLUTE positive here) 
  • Overall a killer trust the ratings they wont lie (ok they will slightly due to douchebags but overall it is like 4th on best rated and it well deserves it)
  • I am great and you should trust me (please do so here's a cookie 🍪).

A slightly slow start but it goes straight up from there. Give it at least a few chapters and you'll be HOOKED before you know it. I know I was. 

Cheers!! ; )

bountyhunterninja
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The characters are flat, the conflicts and plot extremely 1-dimensional. And given that this is all taking place in a videogame, I don't feel like that is going to change anytime soon. So what's left to enjoy is Dr. Zlo's schemes, which are pretty much what you expect.

There is essentially no reason to care about what is going to happen, and the plot has already become repititive, alternating between tedious fetch-quests and tropey hero encounters. Overall it is fine? The writing is serviceable, sometimes clunky but clear, but I read about half of what there is so far and I'm not at all invested in the story to keep reading.

Sayeth We
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IT was good, but is starting to drag.

Reviewed at: 142 - Clean Up

I enjoyed the first arc. It made a few strawmans against video game players, but nothing too agreggious. Some characters were paper thin, but most were at least cardboard.

but this latest arc is just boring me. I read a bit into the chapter and then just start skimming. there's nothing to keep me interested. since the annoucement the first book would be published, the quality has dropped.

so while you can, read the first book, up to the creation of menagerie. that's a pretty good place to stop. Once that's removed for publishing, make your own desicion from there.

DoomAlsoDoom
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This late in the game, this story doesn't really need a review from me, but I thought I'd throw my 2 cents in anyway.

I typically despise VR stories. I despise VR Superhero stories even more.

I'm not sure why I started reading this story when it first started popping up, but I'm glad I did.

The grammar is fine. I don't typically notice any overt grammar mistakes, and the prose and word choice has never struck me as out of place or cringey, in context.

Style is such an individual thing, but I enjoy the author's voice in the writing very much. I'm not super enthused about multi-POV stuff, but the characters are good enough that I don't mind it.

I love every single character. The overall characterization is probably the best thing about this fiction. Each one reads and feels like a well thought out invididual and it adds a lot of depth.

The story is just plain fun. The goal of the characters for the majority so far isn't even to "win" anything, it's to have fun, and it reflects in the overall writing.

If you're an on the fence type of reader, I say give it a shot. The worst that could happen is you move on. Otherwise you're in for a great time.

 

Drane
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A MMORPG novel with a funny villain MC that doesn't really make you hate him even if you like hero MC's. The way the author portrait the MC makes it quite easy to relate too with character that doesn't have a 2 dimension personality

Khalaenas
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It's good, got nice characters, believable villains, and a game company that for once is not the best at absolutely everything. What more can I ask for? 

Oh, and it's got super powers too I guess.

 

"Putting awesome quotes in your bio doesn't make you cool. Except when it does."

-Khalaenas, when speaking of Vaudevillians author.

 

 

Lil_crafter
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This story gives me joy i and hope it does for you