The Calamity of a Reborn Witch

by Vera Anne Wolf

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**WARNING: The following story contains DARK, TRAUMATIZING elements that may not be appropriate for young viewers or those who struggle from traumatizing events. If you're not good with mature content, regardless of your age, this story is not for you. You have been warned. It's nowhere near as bad as GOT but it has dark shit. Again, you have been WARNED. Plenty of other less dark webnovels to safely read. **

**Additional Warning: A minimal amount of LGBT content is included in this story. There is no TAG for this so I'm including it here. If that makes you uncomfortable, go ahead and give it a pass. **

 

Previously titled: A Maiden's Frozen Heart.

An Isekai, Fantasy Regency, Thriller with Witches, Gods, and plenty of Betrayal.

{Book 1: A Den of Wolves} 

What if you knew the future? But what if that future was not yours?

After a gruesome death, Carina was reborn in Lafeara as Lady Maura, the unwanted “half-blood” of an impoverished noble family. The previous Lady Maura was publicly executed as part of a conspiracy to conceal the murder of Queen Eleanora.

With Maura’s memories to guide her, Carina prepares to follow her predecessor’s path into the palace as part of the Selection to become Crown Princess Eleanora’s lady-in-waiting. Her meticulous years of planning and preparation to ensure her survival, fulfill Maura’s revenge, and avert the oncoming Calamity will require every ounce of courage, cunning, and intellect she can muster.

Because Carina has more than one secret which she can not reveal—her true identity among them—but even more treacherous is her frozen heart and the ice magic that comes with it.

After all, they still burn witches in Lafeara.

{Book 2: A Crown of Crows} 

The problem with changing the past is that the future changes with it.

Although Carina survived the Selection and earned a place in the palace beside the Crown Princess, her battle to change the future and protect Lady Hana, the future Queen’s favored lady-in-waiting, is far from over.

As Carina becomes further entwined in the hidden witch covens of Lafeara, their history and magic unravel a dangerous secret long forgotten by most. It is not just Maura’s memories that threaten to shift the balance of Carina’s carefully laid plains but her own forgotten past as well.

And the more mysteries Carina uncovers, the fewer allies she finds standing on her side. Everyone wants something, but the most dangerous players in this game of mortals and witches are the gods themselves, who have their own sordid plans for Carina’s frozen heart.

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Chapter Name Release Date
Prologue: The End of the Beginning ago
Story Art Work: CoRW - Book 1 & Book 2 (to come) ago
Chapter 1: The Masks of Society ago
Chapter 2: Run Rabbit Run ago
Chapter 3: Less Than Human ago
Chapter 4: The Stench of Gossip ago
Chapter 5: A Manor of Malice ago
Chapter 6: The Taste of Poverty ago
Chapter 7: The Stain of Misfortune ago
Chapter 8: A Brush of Deception ago
Chapter 9: A Taste for Poison ago
Chapter 10: A Touch of Cruelty ago
Chapter 11: The Shadows of Lovers ago
Chapter 12: The Poison of Royalty ago
Chapter 13: The Scorpion of Vetrayna ago
Chapter 14: History Cautions Ambition ago
Chapter 15: Foxes hunt the Rabbit ago
Chapter 16: A Battle of Queens ago
Chapter 17: A Dash of Violence ago
Chapter 18: A Skulk of Beasts ago
Chapter 19: Deal with a Ghoul ago
Chapter 20: Dance with the Devil ago
Chapter 21: A Merciless Dawn ago
Chapter 22: Trail of a Witch ago
Chapter 23: The Winds of Change ago
Chapter 24: A Blindfold of Pride ago
Chapter 25: The Weight of Prejudice ago
Chapter 26: A Theater of Cruelty ago
Chapter 27: The Justice of Beasts ago
Chapter 28: The Value of Virtue ago
Chapter 29: A Nest of Secrets ago
Chapter 30: The Game of Nobility ago
Chapter 31: A Prison of Hope ago
Chapter 32: A Den of Wolves ago
Chapter 33: The Thorns of Nobility ago
Chapter 34: Pride of the Fallen ago
Chapter 35: Shadow of the Scorpion ago
Chapter 36: The Cost of Loyalty ago
Chapter 37: The Weight of Poverty ago
Chapter 38: A Touch of Divinity ago
Chapter 39: Shadow of the Crown ago
Chapter 40: The Bonds of Family ago
Chapter 41: A Test of Grace ago
Chapter 42: A Dance of Courage ago
Chapter 43: A Twist of Fate ago
Chapter 44: The Priest’s Witch Hunter ago
Chapter 45: A Test of Knowledge ago
Chapter 46: A Blade of Justice ago
Chapter 47: An Examination of Truth ago
Chapter 48: A Gift of Friendship ago
Chapter 49: The Lies of Faith ago
Chapter 50: The Taste of Magic ago
Chapter 51: A History of Witches ago
Chapter 52: The Scent of Suspicion ago
Chapter 53: Wolves in the Garden ago
Chapter 54: The Queen of Wolves ago
Chapter 55: The Corruption of Paradise ago
Chapter 56: The Winds of Sorrow ago
Chapter 57: The Final Challenge Begins ago
Chapter 58: A Banquet of Wolves ago
Chapter 59: A Gala of Discord ago
Chapter 60: A Glimmer of Magic ago
Chapter 61: The Fortune of Fools ago
Chapter 62: The Claws of Guilt ago
Chapter 63: Weight of the Dead ago
Chapter 64: The Chill of Death ago
Chapter 65: A Garden of Secrets ago
Chapter 66: A Test of Loyalty ago
Chapter 67: Chosen by the Scorpion ago
Chapter 68: An Oath of Loyalty ago
Chapter 69: A Mother's Love ago
Chapter 70: The Treachery of History ago
Chapter 71: The Color of Desire ago
Chapter 72: The Shackles of Pride ago
Chapter 73: The Shadow of Grief ago
Chapter 74: The Solace of Friendship ago
Chapter 75: Scent of a Witch ago
Chapter 76: Secrets of a Lady ago
Chapter 77: A Matter of Trust ago
Chapter 78: The Color of Betrayal ago
Chapter 79: A Shadow of Deception ago
Chapter 80: A Brotherhood of Sorrow ago
Chapter 81: A Vendetta of Power ago
Chapter 82: A Clash of Wills ago
Chapter 83: A Lover's Cursed Fate ago
Chapter 84: A Broken Family Affair ago
Chapter 85: An Unholy Reckoning ago
Chapter 86: A Baptism of Fire ago
Chapter 87: A Pure-Blood Devil ago
Chapter 88: A Spark of Chaos ago
Chapter 89: A Trail of Destruction ago
Chapter 90: A Twist of Malice ago
Chapter 91: A Storm of Crows ago
Chapter 92: A Sanctuary of Sin ago
Chapter 93: A Feast of Crows ago
Chapter 94: The Rot of Power ago
Chapter 95: A Crown of Vengeance ago
Chapter 96: An Official Death Notice ago
Chapter 97: The Absence of Grief ago
Chapter 98: The Wings of Fate ago
Chapter 99: A Crown of Crows ago
Chapter 100: A Specter of Betrayal ago
Chapter 101: A Treacherous Path Forward ago
Chapter 102: The Beginning of the End { Part 1 } ago
Chapter 103: The Beginning of the End { Part 2 } ago
Epilogue: The Pope of Zarus ago
Interlude Part I: The Disgraced Prince ago
Interlude II: Mask of the Ghoul ago
Interlude III: The Betrayed Prince ago
Interlude Part IV: Goddess of Destruction ago
Special Interlude V: The Crow and the Earl ago
Prologue: A Husk of Mortality ago
Chapter 1: The Fragrance of Sorrow ago
Chapter 2: The Fate of Sisters ago
Chapter 3: The Sting of Gossip ago
Chapter 4: Roses at a Funeral ago
Chapter 5: Tortured and Twisted Grief ago
Chapter 6: A Whisper of Malice ago
Chapter 7: The Weight of Guilt ago
Chapter 8: The Shadow of Valor ago
Chapter 9: The Ties of Blood ago
Chapter 10: The Mark of a Master ago
Chapter 11: A Blade of Secrets ago
Chapter 12: A Trade of Secrets ago
Chapter 13: The Color of Fear ago
Chapter 14: Prince of the Desert ago
Chapter 15: The Bloodlines of Covens ago
Chapter 16: The Shackles of Power ago
Chapter 17: The Ripper’s Smile ago
Chapter 18: Shadow of the Witch Hunters ago
Chapter 19: A Lady of Mystery ago
Chapter 20: The Divide of Power ago
Chapter 21: A Bog of Poison ago
Chapter 22: The Sounds of Discord ago
Chapter 23: A Prick of Cunning ago
Chapter 24: A Breach of Trust ago
Chapter 25: A Trace of Poison ago
Chapter 26: The Scent of Violence ago
Chapter 27: A Play of Power ago
Chapter 28: The Guilt of Providence ago
Chapter 29: A Breath of Deception ago
Chapter 30: The Labyrinth of Anthraticus ago
Chapter 31: Daughter of Frost ago
Chapter 32: The Price of Immortality ago
Chapter 33: A Dangerous Deviation ago
Chapter 34: The Politics of Marriage ago
Chapter 35: A Wave of Ambition ago
Chapter 36: A Prison of Fear ago
Chapter 37: The Web of Politics ago
Chapter 38: The Peril of Gossip ago
Chapter 39: The Scent of Manipulation ago
Chapter 40: A Mark of Enmity ago
Chapter 41: The Taste of Emptiness ago
Chapter 42: A Menu for Disaster ago
Chapter 43: The Weight of Dawn ago
Chapter 44: A Wrinkle of Truth ago
Chapter 45: A Testament of Humanity ago
Chapter 46: A Questionable Alliance ago
Chapter 47: The Spoils of Matrimony ago
Chapter 48: The Fate of a Queen ago
Chapter 49: The Fragrance of Treachery ago
Chapter 50: The Prodigal Son Returns ago
Chapter 51: The Spice of Discord ago
Chapter 52: A Conflict of Interests ago
Chapter 53: The Fangs of Winter ago

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A survivor's story of a girl reincarnated into another body with knowledge of future events that will happen with the original. For those familiar, you would notice that it is basically a reincarnated as [insert character type] in a novel. BUT in all honesty, I cannot sum it up in those words, God no I can't. This story is SO MUCH MORE!

There is a great cast of characters that you would love and hate, sometimes both at the same time. The pacing is something I find is one of its strongest parts as the story just GRABS you by the Sleeve and drags you into its beautiful and complex world full of interesting characters. 

Lots of political intrigue mixed in with just enough mystery and drama and I found myself HOOKED by the end unable to put it down. If you like a standard genre done beautifully (Which I wonder how can you NOT love that) then you will LOVE this one. 

There are so many ways the story itself can turn out and there is a lot of connection to the past of the original which I love was not just combined into our character and that she did not just instantly abandon who she is. She is referred with her original name by the narrator and I love that the Original's past affects her but is not considered as her own past. 

The story itself is quite complex and I cannot truly express its beauty without spoiling and even then there is a lot I would miss and I would feel ashamed to do such injustice to the author. So, in the end, I would Like to say; Just read it, give it a try till even if just the 1st chapter, I can positively bet that you will get Hooked and will not be able to put it down till the lastest chapter out. 

For the extremely stubborn here are some points (some people like points so here I go!) 

  • Fast Updates like very fast. 
  • Top 20 Best Rated on RR content level
  • Great Grammer and Editing 
  • Very Well Paced
  • Just Give it a Try, like come on man (or woman). 
  • I rarely give all 5 and the 4 and a half in style is because I could not find anything else to cut

A Gem of a Story I wish I had found sooner.

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Strong FL- political intrigue, magic, slow burn romance = sold

Reviewed at: Author's Note: Hiatus (Update)

Author has a talent for writing. She clearly plans ahead, as there are times where you wonder if her decision for the charecters was correct only to find that every bit of her writing has purpose else where in the novel. There is foreshadowing, more showing than telling and the romance is perfect. Its slow burn, it isnt rushed, there isnt anything cringey, or forced. The plotical aspect was done well, though I wish to see more. There isnt any slapback Young Master How Dare bs for filler drama and just to forward the plot.  When mc gets served, she often finds her hands tied behind her back, however she carefully lays her plans thick like a chess move 30 steps in advance, and with a little bit of luck she is able to suceed.

Style: This is a third person novel, where we mainly see the perspective of mc, but also we get the view of other charecters, as well as what they are thinking. When I first started reading this novel, it was the style that captured me. Author writes in a way where the dialogue is interactive, and not amateur. Many times, writers will fall for the trap of basic dialogue that takes away the juice of high potential stories. In this novel, the dialouge serves to propel the plot as it should and isnt used for inane word count. Lastly, the style gives the atmosphere of a mideval genre, as it should. In amateur novels, we often find mistakes such as modern lingo, and the author does her best to avoid this allowing a fully immersive experience in her story.

Story: Like I mentioned before, this is a novel where there is equal parts of political intrigue, a slow burn but spicy romance, magic, witch hunts and a tension that makes you wonder why all the bad things happen to good people. There is so much world building. Unlike amateur writers, author is an expert at world building, releasing just the right amount of snippets as to how the world around mc works, how the plotics and religion work at a grand scale and how individuals not only make up the parts but play a large role in the whole. For a quick summary, its about mc whos a half witch with ice powers, escapes an abusive family not through god forsaken isekai plot armor and such, but with careful meticulous planning. We all read xiaxia, where reincarnated mc comes back as this brand new bad bitch, slaps back the step mother and sis, and somehow convinces the abusive father to give the property ownership or some cop out. This novel is realisitic. When you transmigrate, modern women or not, circumstances will force your hand. And force her hand it did. She had to use external help, forge a fake identity, use what knowledge she had of the future to set up secret finances. All in the meantime, we the readers feel the tension of the ever glorius religion sneaking up behind mc, in their hunt to eradicate witches. And lastly for those who are here for the romance, you are in for a treat. Mc isnt one of those women who capture the ML interest by being the mc by virtue. And my god, nothing frustrates me more than seeing a paradoy of a "dominant yasss queen" FL snatching away the ML with her "magical skills" and glorius mc pussy. She is NOT a damsel, she does NOT rely on male lead or his friends. She instead, crafts plots within plots to save her ass , and appropriately uses her knowledge of the future when she can. 

 

Charecter- strong powerful female lead, doesnt rely on ML for anything, not even his friends like some other "strong" wannabe female leads of other novels would. The side charecters are fleshed out, and the writing allows the reader to visualize and understand what true toxic patriarchy would have looked like back in the day, and no its not flowery, and no its not exaggerated sjw stuff. Yes it is brutal just like reality

grammar- easy to read, im no grammar expert, but its solid

With equal aspects of suspense, mystery and thriller this is a reincarnation novel done right.  Highly reccomend, praise the ice witch

 

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Overall 5/5 - Look here, everyone here is saying that this novel is publish ready quality, so what are you waiting for???

Style 5/5 - The style is omniscient 3rd person, it was clear and concise, it read very smoothly, and didn’t stumble in the slightest, but maybe that’s because the story itself was too gripping, so I didn’t notice anything wrong ¯\_( ≖ ᴥ ≖ )_/¯ 

Grammar 5/5 - I spotted nothing wrong, but then again, maybe the godly quality story was distracting me, and I was too busy being dragged along for a ride to notice, 10/10 would read again. 

Character + Story 5/5 - Where do I even start? I was recently taught that “good plot can’t save bad characters, but good characters can save bad plots.” But what happens if both plot and characters are good? You get the ‘literal’ (*wink* *wink*) perfection that is ‘The Calamity of a Reborn Witch’! 

I mentioned that the story was amazing even in the style and grammar section, it definitely affected my reading experience a lot. If half-way through the novel, the author decided to write it in Russian instead and I was forced to use google translate to read the novel, I would still read the next ten books, the plot is that good.

Although the start of it felt cinderella-isque (evil steps sis and bad mom yo…), but it quickly transitioned into something else pretty quickly, the MC, Carina/Maura is definitely not a princess waiting to be rescued. She’s fun to read, because she doesn’t lie down at take shit from other people, and she’s definitely not the type to be married off like some piece of furniture! (oops, spoiled a bit there…) I don’t wanna spoil any more details, so give it a read!

The characters are very, very well written, you legit hate the step-sisters and the mom by the end of the first ten chapters, like gut-wrenching hate, like hate enough to be willing to go to court over the murder of a non-existent character hate. On the bright side, you’ll fall in love with the MC pretty fast, she’s sweet, kind, and stronk (this is not a typo, this is intentional), be honest with me, who wouldn’t like a charming, quick-witted and active protagonist?

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The Style.

This is omniscient third person narration style. The question is if the author execute it well. And the answer is yes. The author is able to portray the emotional expression, thoughts and perspectives of the different characters at the same time without affecting the flow of the story. And the scenes are a written delight.

The Story.

Right from the story line in the synopsis, readers are already captivated, so they want to know more.

The story is about a young girl called Carina, who died and was reborn in another girl's body in another world. Now, some readers tend to mix this up a lot. This is transmigration isekai (into a different body in a different world), not reincarnation. Reincarnation is a different thing entirely. That said,  this story brings back the memory of the inhumane condition women are put through in the ancient times. But luckily for us, our protagonist female lead has some special powers to help her through. Beautiful story.

The grammar.

The grammar is excellent. Nothing much to say.

The character.

The characters are well defined. The characters are well written and well fitted to their roles. After reading more chapters, I have to say that the characters are becoming one of the strongest part of the work. The author is putting do much effort into them, especially the MC. Great job.

Great piece of writing. Highly recommended.

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Fantastical Isekai Thriller with Court Intrigue

Reviewed at: Interlude II: Mask of the Ghoul

In this story, a young woman is reborn on a new world where magic exists and she is an untrained witch. She has some foreknowledge of future events in this new world that do not turn out well for her current identity. Using this foreknowledge, the young witch tries to bring about a different future while contending with the fact that she is the unwanted bastard child of a noble family, living in a misogynistic and monarchical society where she is not quite at the bottom strata, but very far from the top. And in a country where they burn people for being witches.

I really, really like this story. But it is not for everyone, as there are some polarising aspects to it. Besides the warnings about possibly traumatising elements (e.g. murder, sexual violence, mutilation, etc.) and a minimal amount of LGBT content in the story tags and the summary, I shall start with a few of my own:

If you want a straightforward story where the reader has an almost omniscient view of what is going on and for it to be clearly spelled out what each characters’ goals are and where they stand, this story is not for you. If you want an action-packed story with explosions and adrenaline-pumping set pieces every chapter (or at least every other chapter), this story is not for you. If you want a story where the Main Character (MC) is infallible or at least never does anything that ends up causing problems for themselves, this story is not for you.

Which brings me to the characters in the story. Carina is a smart and capable MC. However, she is not infallible or OP. She is proactive and plans ahead, but she sometimes makes mistakes and is not all-knowing. In fact, because of the writing style, the readers sometimes learns critical information that she does not know and may only find out much later, if at all. This makes her a rounded and more realistic character who is competent, but not perfect. Much like how no one in real life is perfect. And this is not just the story of Carina/Maura. She is definitely the main character, but the other named characters are not bit players that solely exist to populate her world. They are characters in their own stories (with their own goals and desires that they work towards achieving or defending) that just happen to reside in the same world and interact and affect one another. Like the real world, and completely different than a Gary/Mary-Sue story where the world and characters only revolve around the main character and do nothing else but help or hamper them.

The writing style helps maintain and emphasise the sense of mystery and intrigue that runs throughout the story. It follows the mystery novel style of writing which encourages you to continuously speculate, and revise your hypothesis regularly. It very much operates on show not tell. The writing states what is said and how people act, leaving their own goals and motivations mostly a mystery and up to your own guesswork or what other characters claim those people are trying to do. And whether those characters' claims are true, somewhat misleading or outright lies is itself rarely ever fully spelled out in the moment that they occur. You will need to read on to find that out, though the especially observant might pick up on some hints and tells beforehand. This level of ambiguity will not be to everyone’s tastes. However, if you like a story where new chapters tend to bring just as many (if not more) questions than answers and where things are not spelled out for you, then you are in luck.  

The spelling and grammar are generally good. There are a few minor errors, but most of them seem to have been found and mentioned in the comments and corrected by the author.

In conclusion: If you enjoy mystery novels/political thrillers and are fine with the type of content warned about near the start of this review, this is a very entertaining story and you should at least try it out. Hope this helps.

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This one of the best written stories I've read on RR in terms of spelling, grammar, and sheer quality of prose. While the equivalent of a regency romance with fantasy elements is not my usual fare for light reading, this is truly excellent. Normally I read more Science Fiction than fantasy and more action than intrigue, but the quality of the tale keeps bringing me back. The last thing I read in a similar vein that appealed so was Lois McMaster Bujold's "A Civil Campaign". That was a space opera with lots of comedic elements and a shout out to Heyer as well. This story lacks the comedic element in favor of court intrigue. If Regency or Fantasy are more your cup than they are mine then you need to read this story. It's as good as many a professionally published tale from the established publishing houses and better than many. To the trolls who keep down rating I cry shame on thee! Such baseless calumnies only hide the true gems on this site from ourselves the readers and upset the authors who cater to our pleasures.

If you truly want something to zero rate I can always post my Star Trek fanfic "Mary Sue Dies In the End". It's not even a novel, just a short story. And it is truly awful.

While endless serials like Randidly Ghosthound, Azarinth Healer and Metaworld Chronicles are staples of this site (that I enjoy very much), sometimes a good story well told is all we'll get. But even a good short novel beats watching a series die of dysentery of the word processor as the author strains and fails to extend a tale beyond the limits of its theme and setting.

 

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So, I've had to force myself to stop reading so I can write this review. It is an excellent, compelling read that kept me pressing "Next Chapter" over and over again. I feel as if the author used some kinda magic to compel me to keep reading. 

The strongest point of the novel, for me, is the story and the authors excellent character work. Maura/Carina is an incredibly interesting and nuanced MC. I found myself rooting for her as soon as I began reading and I don't even know who she is. She is smart, independent, caring, and all the other good descriptors you could think of. And you find out these things about her within the first few chapters. Her "family," if they can be considered that, are delightfully villainous. I commented that I would fight them and I mean it. I will fight Carina's whole family by myself because they're a bunch of pompous jerks. And that's a testament to the authors ability to create excellent characters. Maybe they'll grow and get better, idk because I'll have to read more and find out. But I hope they die, my little black heart loves me some good villain/antag deaths. Each and every character introduced slowly unfolds the wider world that the author has built and it is an absolute joy to follow along. I don't even really care about an overarching plot but there are enough hints at something big getting ready to happen that I just wanna hurry up and find out. But I also don't because I wanna learn more about Carina and her closest confidants. So yes, I'll probably be binging this story as soon as I have the time to do so.

As far as style and grammar go, I found nothing that detracted from my reading experience. POV is masterfully used to keep each and every chapter feeling evenly paced. I don't think I've come away from a chapter feeling like something took longer than it needed to. Everything flows well and is absolutely easy to read and binge. I like a clean, clear read and this definitely delivers with that .

In conclusion, I enjoyed this story way more than I'd expected to. While I was reading I kept forgetting that it was an isekai and that's a testament to the authors skill. Most isekai will consistently remind the reader that the MC doesn't belong. But this story does the opposite, the MC has blended in and knows how to survive in this foreign world. She is smart and tactful and definitely not a complete idiot like most isekai MC tend to be. I do feel like Lincoln being alive still is a tragedy but that's a personal problem lol. If any prospective reader is reading this, I encourage you to give this one a read.  

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Not Your Typical Reincarnation Story

Reviewed at: Chapter 16: A Battle of Queens

When you think Reincarnation, especially on RR, you think power fantasy, leveling, blue boxes, and monsters. This story replaces those tropes with medieval magic, political intrigue, secret identities, and thick, juicy plot, and the execution is masterful to boot!

We start with a car accident, but even there we have a shocking twist(that I won't spoil), which sends us into our fantasy world where Carina's memories meld with the downtrodden daughter of a down-on-their-luck noble family. The author does a phenomenal job at developing the protagonist while also crafting truly despicable, hateable antagonists. Dramatic emotions abound.

Story

At chapter 16, this story is already going places. The author does a great job of maintaining tension in every scene, making this story quite the binge-able read. Coupled with the rich universe and worldbuilding, the plot moves at a brisk pace. At this point, events are building up for what promises to be very exciting upcoming events.

Grammar

Excellent. I only caught occasional typos here and there, but this is among the best writing on this site. It is always a joy to read a story from someone with a mastery of the language.

Style

This is where I have the biggest issues, though admittedly they are still quite minor. Exposition abounds, and while exposition can be used to more-efficiently deliver information, I feel that the narration often falls into the "show don't tell" trap. Dramatic tension that has been beautifully built up is then lost in several paragraphs of explanations of various histories and names that don't have immediate relevance to the scene at hand. I feel like many of these passages could be dropped, postponed, or be shown via character actions, instead of told by narration. Still, there are times when the detailed exposition does pull it off, so this is more a matter of fine-tuning the existing prose rather than a major overhaul.

Character

Another strong point of this story - perhaps the strongest. Carina is an awesome protagonist. Not your usual lead, she shows a great capacity for strategic thinking, economic planning, investing, and knows how to play the game when it comes to medieval politics and nobility. And the antagonists? Wow. I want to see them all die horrible deaths, such is my hatred for them. To be able to elicit such a strong emotional response from a reader is truly an accomplishment. In fact, even the side characters have real depth, and not one feels two-dimensional in any way. Easily 5/5 stars here.

Coming into this, prior to reading the synopsis, I thought it would be some kind of romance by the title and cover.  What I got was a beautifully-written medieval fantasy story about political intrigue, magic powers, secret identities, and more. Well worth your time to read, this fiction crosses genres to create something truly special.

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A Polished Story That Will Take Royal Road By Storm

Reviewed at: Chapter 5: A Manor of Malice

This author does this type of story right. They make the dialogue interesting, they make the exposition tell a story without it being much of an info dump, and I feel that Vera has put a lot of passion into this story and it shows. 

I could go into why I gave 5 stars practically across the board, but it'd be redundant. Basically, most parts of this story are perfect. The characters all have their pros and cons, and their motives (whether they're prevalent to the plot or simply serve for characterization) are realistic and drive reader sympathy. That, on its own, is the reason I think this story is going to take RR by storm!

I marked down style because the author uses adverbs to strengthen her dialogue tags. While this doesn't weaken the actions or tone of the story, I do feel that a quick reread later on will remove a few here and there that aren't needed. Emphasis, the author uses adverbs correctly, just more than I would have hoped!

All in all, this is a phenomenal fantasy story that really grips the reader, whether they're a novice fantasy reader or have been through it all. There will be something for each type of reader in this story, it will be difficult to not like! :)

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This story is fantastically written, with characters I care about, a prologue that immediately ties into the story(always a plus) and a plot that is at once visible and mysterious. You know some of the MC's machinations, but not all, and as more are revealed you come to discover just how clever she is.

The story so far is an easy 5/5. Same for the style. Characters are all wonderfully distinct, so there's another easy 5/5.

Seriously, my only complaint is the need for minor, minor grammatical edits here and there. Like maybe three spots so far. If that.

This will be on trending in one month, mark my words. This is good.