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Rose, a broken doll tossed out into the world with the carelessness befitting her status below humans. However, acquiring a power beyond what she should be able, she fights and Rose Against The Heavens.

The story of a homunculus fighting against fate with a piercing wrath. Raging, an adversary to a cruel world. And taking place in a techno-fantasy.


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A Story Building A World

Reviewed at: Eleven

Plot: The plot comes hand in hand with the world-building, resulting in a Man vs. Society type of conflict. For what it is, much of the plot is trying to catch up to the world building which dominants the content.

Of course, Rose also presents a survival story with all the ways she learns Magecraft to protect herself. Along with some other powers that I haven't quite read much of as of Chapter 11. Either way, she is surviving in a Techno-Fantasy world that works against her

So, you have a mostly Man vs. Society plot with progression and learning as the focus for the protagonist. It's been done before, but the world-building provides one of the best spins you can get from this site.

World-Building: Superb. Although most world-building is delivered through narration, it's always coming and going. There's always something else around the corner (or chapter) and it doesn't disappoint. But there is a slight caveat: it takes up the narration and is just explained whenever it is introduced or when it would be most convenient to introduce. So far, it's a tried and proven method to get a point across, though it leaves little for the reader to come to on their own, save of course, for contradictions which are again explained soon after being hinted to.

Still, the world-building is excellent, although it feels like you're being guided rather than exploring alongside the protagonist.

Characters: While Rose is an excellent model for non-human characters learning about how humans work, the rest are more or less one-and-done characters. So far, many characters are being used to enrich the world with their backstories and actions; it's not a bad thing but they don't serve any purpose after that. Either they're permanently disposed of or just moved past. Although to be fair, each character is given a hint of a well-rounded personality, there just isn't enough time to fully explore it without shifting the focus away from Rose too much.

The only exceptions would be characters heavily relevant to the plot. For example, The Silent Witch. Little of her personality is known, but we are given hints to her motives and history through what she's enabled Rose to do.

Unfortunately, the same could not be said for the Royal Family. Despite having hinted at fully developed personalities, they aren't shown again, but when they're hinted to, you have the image of snotty, back-stabbing characters. This is the same problem for most characters presented so far, but it's worse since these people are set up to be the incarnations of the antagonistic force for the story.

Dialogue: Divulging information about the world and the characters, that's what dialogue is expected to do and this story does not disappoint. Each piece of dialogue is enriching and moves the plot forward. Nuff said.

Writing: As someone who already favors this author's writing style, not much else should be said. But for those unfamiliar with it, the narration is succinct, not overdoing it but not giving too little. The dialogue isn't perfect but it gets the job done. Of course, there are some mistakes and decisions made that are a bit disappointing upon further analysis, but the story works as a world-centric piece.

If you came here for an escape, it's perfect. You just may always be moving forward and that's a guarantee for this author's works.

Other Thoughts: My only other point of interest is the length of the chapters. They're short. That's not a bad thing since the writing is certainly built to carry forward with brief chapters. It just doesn't divulge more, which makes it feel like this world exists because the story exists.

If that confuses you, don't worry cause it's not something just anyone can do. What I hope to see from a story is a glimpse of a world and the feeling that even without the main character's journey, everyone still moves on with their life. In short, it feels like some characters are built to support the story rather than just crossing paths with the protagonist.

Overall: As of Chapter 11, it is a quick-paced Sci-fi/Fantasy story that focuses on world building and how that affects the protagonist, who in turn works around the ways of the world to learn and survive. This was an interesting read and easy to pick back up without getting lost. So it's an excellent story, read it if you can, and appreciate it.

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EXCELLENT WORK

Reviewed at: Thirteen

Style.

The writing style of the author is the omniscient third person narration. A style used to portray the emotional feelings, thoughts and perspectives of various characters with each character having their own arc. So far, the author has been able to portray the emotional feelings and perspectives of her characters, especially the main MC. Other characters too like Idris and Lux, were also portrsyed well. 

Story.

Starting with the synopsis.

"Rose, a broken doll tossed out into the world with the carelessness befitting her status below humans. However, acquiring a power beyond what she should be able, she fights and Rose Against The Heavens. The story of a homunculus fighting against fate with a piercing wrath. Raging, an adversary to a cruel world. And taking place in a techno-fantasy."

The synopsis will definitely attract the attention of the readers. They will want to know more about this Homunculus who is defying the heavens. And once they pick it up, they will be yearning for more. The story has been developing nicely, right from the introduction.

The grammar.

So far, the grammar is of high quality. 

The characters.

The characters are exquisitely done, especially the MC. Her character is well defined and fitted her role perfectly. Most importantly, to see the way the characters are developing, is a source of joy to the readers.

Well done author. Keep it up.