Solomon's Crucible

by jacobk

Original ONGOING Action Adventure Contemporary Fantasy Dungeon LitRPG Low Fantasy Male Lead Strategy Supernatural
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On the day the System came to Earth, Solomon Gragg had to cut off his own hand. Then things got rough.

The System spreads across the multiverse and shapes it according to its whims. By its own description, it provides a framework for fair competition between sentient beings for resources and advancement. 

Some might question the fairness of a competition between beings born into the System and those who have had it thrust upon them. Some have dedicated a lifetime of study to the System and its mysteries. 

Solomon just wants to kill all the invaders trying to take what's his.

This is a litrpg story. Chapters will be between 1000 and 1200 words each. This story updates six days a week at 1700 EST. 

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Beyogi
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You're not the first guy to wipe your ass

Reviewed at: 5. A Brief Journey

you don't get a special title. You don't get extra skills or gridpoints.

The system apocalypse has arrived and Earth is on a few hours of gracetimer. Now unlike most MCs in such a position our protagonist isn't getting an immediate advantage. He's not the first to kill a monster, he doesn't get a training time chamber in a dungeon, he doesn't even get a bonus for having to cripple himself to get out of a trap.

Meanwhile the grid based system seems to be a bit of a ripoff. The grace timer is incredibly short, and the protagonist needs to spend grid points to finish the tutorial and unlock basic system functions.

The story hasn't progressed much so far, but I'm pretty excited for this one. How will a hardass protagonist do who isn't immediately OP? How much of a hellscape will Earth actually become? What's the rest of humanity going to do?

Jadedmagus
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The system he never wanted.

Reviewed at: 14. A Stuck Landing

Definitely the most disruptive system I have seen to date, and a believable reaction to it.  My suspension of disbelief remained strong, nor did I ever think that the protagonist was acting in a stupid manner given the limited information available.  

 

ShinRa13
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I love when Main Characters have to work for stuff. The grid system is an interesting choice of System. I do want Solomon to become an absolute monster eventually but I want him to have to earn. Also I hope he doesn't become one of those misandrist MCs who hates everyone for no reason.

Ponkatt
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Spoilers for up to chapter 4 (though thats like 20 minutes of reading so it isn't much)

I think the best way to sum up why this story is different and interesting is simple.  One of the selling points of this story is the protagonist doesn't get a bunch of free shit early.  In a way thats true, but not entirely.  See, our protagonist does get a bunch of resources super early.  How, you may ask?  Simple, he cuts off his hand.  Not first to kill a monster, or to unlock a rare skill through chance.  Nope, the poor guy has to cut off his hand.  If you want a story with a smart protagonist where he works for his results (and so far nothing has been nearly as punishing as that first hurtle so it isn't just suffering for the sake of suffering) then I highly recommend this.

TheDragonBeyondTheGate
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Decent start, good technical choices.

Reviewed at: 11. A Warm Welcome

Well written if somewhat standard beginning, decent pace so far, though we need to see how well that keeps when more characters are introduced - there are a number of stumbling blocks at that point.

It's doing what more stories should do - have stats that actually are picked for the story you want to tell, rather than being generically ripped off of old tRPGs, and decisions like 'hp isn't your actual health' gets rid of weird edge cases. And not so edge cases.

Rajvir
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An interesting beginning

Reviewed at: 21. A Simple Plan

Overall the weakest of your stories Jabock but still a rather interesting one all the same, I very much look forward to the world building you'll do when Solomon interacts with the rest of Humanity again.

 

His growth has been interesting to see and well written as always, with the biggest weakness being how generic everything feels.  Compared to all your other stories this one feels the most similar to other stories in the same genre.  Still I have faith that it will feel much more original in the future.

king_s
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not so much a story as it is a log of skill trees

Reviewed at: 34. A Test Run

theres hardly any story at all. its just about a guy that gains skills and gets upgrades. very boring. if your new to litrpg you might like it. but its more of the same. very average

HoloSol
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Heart of Cultivation is phenomenal. This is not so great.

Reviewed at: 36. A Cunning Plan

Boring plot. Boring MC. Boring experience.

As much as I LOVE heart of cultivation that is also written by Jacobk (seriously, check it out), I can't say the same for this lit rpg. Skill grinding and upgrading is meaningless when there is no plot and when I have no investment in the characters. Oh wow, his improvised weapons master has been raised to level 4, and he has also been awarded 9 grid points after killing some boars! The level of story telling is on par with playing in the starting zones of World of Warcraft and just reading the combat log. 

So, what went wrong? Why is this a 2/5 experience and not a 5/5 like heart of cultivation? Well, there are no developed side characters after 150 pages. Let me repeat that: zero. This right here crippled the character development of the MC because the little interactions--the quiet moments between characters-- are usually the most impactful for worldbuilding and character development.

Heart of Cultibation includes a cast of interesting and nuanced characters, which is why I'm so surprised on how this turned out. In the end, this story falls into practically every pitfall the average lit rpg contains. No plot. Poorly writtenly characters; well, just character.

PabloGarcia1
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A very well written story as is normal by jacobk.

It's not like the others litrpg stories with the protagonists being beasts since the minute 1 and i think that is why , despite don't be a big fan of the genre, I'm really liking the story

Blind Snot Dragon
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Standard Litrpg reminiscent of "Old Man's Adventure"

Reviewed at: 36. A Cunning Plan

It's a tad on the grindy side of litrpg but that's to be expected when the mc is by themself. Here's to hoping there are more characters introduced soon!