Ben's Damn Adventure: The Prince Has No Pants

by saltywaters

Original ONGOING Action Adventure Comedy Fantasy Dungeon GameLit High Fantasy LitRPG Magic Male Lead Multiple Lead Characters Portal Fantasy / Isekai Strong Lead
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A comedy.

All life on Earth has been stolen away by The System, transported to another world at the behest of a distant galactic empire, who lived in terror of humanity's potential.

Ben was a normal, slightly above average man, and had been about to go on the first real vacation of his adult life. Now he must contend with danger and mystery in a world of monsters, magic and treasure, armed with nothing but his wits, and the special item given to him by The System.

This is his adventure.

Welcome to The World.

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zigman2021
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Have you ever seen that writing prompt about how aliens finally come across humans, and they are disgusted and/or terrified at the absurdity of our existence? Well, it doesn't really matter, I just explained it for you. In this story, that is us. Humans are completely impossible and please, for the love of sanity, kill them before their very existence destroys us on accident.

This is a flavor of "system apocalypse" story with its own, unique spin. There's genuinely funny tongue-in-cheek humor, good dialog, and a few scenes have actually been legitimately touching.

It's surprisingly good from a new author. Give it till at least the end of Chapter 3 (5 including prologue) and I don't think you'll regret the time spent.

KoboldPatrol
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Beautiful and funny LitRPG in a Humanity Fuck Yeah universe

Reviewed at: The Ax Beetle: Chapter 13

(as of chapter 13)

Because a universe-wide empire is (rightfully) afraid of one tiny planet with humans on it, they activate what they have used for billions of years whenever they wanted to disappear any opposition: A power that puts all humans and animals into a new world under the RPG-like System where they have to compete not only with the other inhabitants but also with monsters. Fuck Space Elves! The main character Ben just wanted to go to Hawaii on vacation but instead he finds himself in that hostile environment. At least he was able to carefully pick his choices in a helpful "character creation room" first.

Style/Grammar: Most of the story is told in third person internal style from Ben's point of view, with side chapters showing different characters. The descriptions are very good, both world building and word choice are excellent, giving this story a feeling of first rate literature in how much it draws the reader into it. There are also lots of funny elements, mostly in a rather sophisticated way, and the overall tone is surprisingly light. A fly in the ointment is that the litRPG elements feel rather clunky; some of that is because they are often only a list of system messages without any explanations. There is a reason for that in that Ben chose another perk over the "get explanations" option but still, I would prefer to know more about the mechanics. Grammar is mostly okay, there are some recurring errors but those are corrected when pointed out.

Story: System Apocalypse with all humans transported to a new world, that's very familiar to RRL readers. What is very different here is that the system is not of the usual uncaring or even hostile variant, instead it's more like "I have to enforce the rules but here is how you make the best of it, if you can endure my jokes". Also there is a novel and logical idea on why the system exists at all. In following the MC, the readers as usual see how he starts very weak and has dangerous encounters just trying to survive. The compulsions from his class are a bit irritating for me, I hope he can overcome them. The story is told in a good mix of dialogue and action, keeping it interesting. The pacing is good.

Characters: The MC is a great guy well-suited for being isekai'd (there is a good explanation why, none of the usual special snowflake bullshit), he has his personal weaknesses but acts in a smart and believable way. There have not been many side characters so far, but both "not the Devil" and "Small Bus" are fully fleshed out personalities.

All in all this is a high quality story that pushes all the buttons from glorious HFY over exiting action over humor to a bit of philosophy. After delving (*cough*) into a recommendation for this story, I became hooked instantly. No go and start reading, you won't regret it!

Terminal
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Terry Pratchett meets RoyalRoad

Reviewed at: Purple Skies: Chapter 7

7 chapters in and I'm hooked. It pains me to write a review when I could be reading more. Prose is great, world building is great, characters are great. It's got the spark yo.

 

q00u
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This story is unbelievably good.

The grammar was not great, but does appear to eventually get corrected. Which is fortunate.

But the humor is on-point, the plot exciting, and there are hints of a larger plan, which is a good sign. (I'm not a fan of stories that just meander and don't go anywhere)

Many stories here start great and then lose quality over time, so I hadn't anticipated reviewing it (or even reading it) this early. But I just wanted to read the Prologue, just to get a taste for the writing and whether or not I should keep an eye on it in the future.

But I couldn't stop reading, and binged all (11) current chapters. Because it's unbelievably good.

TrueCipres
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Amazing balance between Hilarious and Serious

Reviewed at: Side Chapter 2

 This a jewel of a story; funny and entertaining but capable of stirring other emotions on its reader. I actually felt touched in several chapters and found myself caring for its characters.

One thing I love about this, something other reviewers might had touched upon better, is how it plays with the "humanity" trope in sci-fi. We are by far not the worst assholes around, and it makes sense.

 

Please give it read, I cannot imagen you wouldn't laugh with its prologue. 

WarBeast
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Creative and funny story about the terror of humans

Reviewed at: The Ax Beetle: Chapter 13

Very creative story. It sucked me in, so I had to binge read all 13 available chapters.

There is lots of potential and the author appears to have a plan for this story. It's too early for a detailed review but so far so good. 

 

bob925
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Oh man...  the other review, by CasualReaderGreen is spot on.  Despite being very early on in the story myself (just finished chapter 1) I'm loving it.  

The style/tone/humor is very reminiscent of the hitchhiker's guide to the galaxy.  

Writing is clean, minimal grammar type issues, mainly a word lost here or there.  

Edit: caught up to current at Chapter 8.  The meat of the story is just as entertaining as its introduction.  

Casualreadergreen
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If the first two chapters don't hook you in to the story then there is no hope for ye.

Zethuron
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Wild, Weird, Hilarious, and a Great HFY story!

Reviewed at: Don't Give It A Name: Chapter 14

This story is just amazing, its seriously just out there with how wild it is, using all kinds of concepts i thought that woulnt even be possible to combine, yet it manages exactly that! Makes for a great HFY story.

 

The characters, hahaha, the humans are just weird and completely batshit insane, just as The Empire feared. The characters in this story, are absolutely NOT normal by any standards, especially those oddballs of the Space Elves (fuck them). Our MC, Ben is a rather normal dude living just an average life, or atleast was, until some jerk Elf had to interfere with everyone's life, and initiated the System.

I like the little bits of character development the MC gets, even if its only minor, his behaviour though is funny as heck! Especially when Short Bus comes in play, just a such loyal character, and who would have thought that even they were in it all? And other humans are just madmen, bent on doing what they can do the best, being Humans.

 

Basically, this story is classic HFY, for those who dont understand what that is, its Humanity Fuck Yeah, a subgenre of stories where Humanity is like the main focus of the story, being overpowered, plain scary, insane(like here) or all those combined! And even with all the additions, it is still a HFY story at heart, and a great hilarious one at that!

 

An irksome thing with this story is the recent developments with the 'changes' to humanity imposed by the system, which is getting annoying, and i bet that is being doing on purpose gah! I hope he gets rid of that stupid Class soon, given that it wont be anything good for him. Its sort of annoying to see such things happen to him, all because the System is a flipping troll!

Ill have to agree on the fact that the litrpg aspects, seem rather inconsequential, it feels like they do barely matter to the overall story, though i guess that has to do something with the System being able to balance about anything 'broken', as much as it wants. Curse you System, for the removal of the Human bioweapons! There was just so much potentional there, and now its all gone!

 

Grammar is overall good, though could be better, since there are quite some uncorrected grammar mistakes and minor typos yet there, even after being pointed out, though the author is doing an effort to correct them, i still would recommend the author to go through the comment section of all chapters, and consider all the corrections suggested there. But despite that, the grammar is good enough to have barely any problems reading the story.

 

The story also does read very well, with oddly enough, having an excellent balance between all the comedy, absurdity and seriousness, like i dont even know how the author is managing a story so wild and comedic, yet so serious at the same time. It makes for an excellent combination here, and made for a far more enjoyable read than i would have expected upon starting this story.

I absolutely see this being able to become a great story, though i wonder if the author will be capable of the feat of keeping his momentum up in the long term, given that it can be hard to remain funny after a story has been going on for a long while. Keep this up author, you have been doing an great job at this, dont change too much, and dont become stale!

 

I do seriously recommend this, for those searching for that kind of story, that just can make someone laugh or be plainly flabbergasted, also for all fans of HFY. And just read this already if you are still here reading reviews, since just what are you waiting for?!

LittleCreepy
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This here Autor takes the isekaied into another world Trope and runs with it. He gives proper thought to Worldbuilding both worlds, placing interesting questions along our journey throughout them. They both instantly feel like real worlds, with their own history. A single species like the dwarfs could easily spawn their own story.

The space Elfs are imminently punchable. The Dwarfs are a work of awe (despite having only a single Side Chapter so far!) and the Greys just work. The shark is the best buddy you could wish for and the Protagonist binds it all together in a neat and interesting way.

The Characters are the core of this story. Each with their own fears and problems, proud moments and goals. Every character introduced is believable, bringing something new and unique into the story.

I especially like “The Devil”. The chapters with him are great. He really sets this story apart from others, though the shark is a very close second.  Oh God but there is also the D**K Waffle of the space Elfs.

I love how the humans get into the fantasy world. Because of course this random dude would. He is human after all and I would have done the same. There is nothing more human than this.

 

I also like the blatant optimism for our species for once. This whole “Humies bad!” is slowly getting on my nerves, so this is refreshing.