The Path Unending

by Vesvius

Original HIATUS Adventure Fantasy Male Lead Martial Arts Reader interactive Slice of Life Supernatural Xianxia
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The following is a crossposted quest from Sufficient Velocity, edited with slight revision for spelling, grammar, and characterization. If you'd like to get involved with the actual quest, head on over here and join in!

Kong Zhi wants to make his family proud. He wants to be a charmcrafter supreme, creating wonders others only dream of while becoming a pillar of his clan. He wants to ascend and become more than mortal, he wants to wield the power of anam like it's second nature, he wants to be strong, he wants to have friends, he wants to do the right thing, he wants.... Kong Zhi wants a lot of things.

Thankfully, Kong Zhi is not alone. He has the best decision making process that anyone has ever had: you.

...Kong Zhi is screwed.

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Edkose
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I'm following the quest as well and it's definitely interesting. It's well worth it to follow both. The quest in order to have an impact on the story and this polished version of it. 

The characters are more fleshed out than other Xianxia stories I've read and the main character is bound to make mistakes due to personal faults of the questers driving him.

It's engaging to read, and I don't think I've been in a situation where I've read a story online again when I've already read the less polished version. 

Vermeer
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An interesting take on the Xianxia Genre

Reviewed at: A Moment in Time

There is a lot to complain about when it comes to reading the Xianxia genre. The uselessness of most characters, the constant meaningless escalation, and the lack of agency with most female characters, etc etc 

This story nearly avoids all these major pitfalls. The protagonist is not an overpowered genius, but he is not a run of the mill artist either. Most characters act realistically and make choices that influence the plot more than just what the MC wants. Some of the strongest characters both in cultivation and character are women. Perhaps most importantly, the main character falls in a niche rarely explored in many xianxia. He is a crafter and its in my humble opinions that the depictions of crafting is where the story shines. Many of the scenes are yet to come on RR, but i encourage some of those who may feel tuned off by a certain character decision to stick with it until some of these moments come before deciding if they want to drop it. I promise you its worth it. 

WalterGL
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Intriguing Beginning, let's see where this goes

Reviewed at: A Place to Rest Your Head

I'm enjoying this so far.  I hope this story continues and we learn more about the systems and the world that Kong Zhi finds himself in.

Aesoir
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Honestly I couldn't get past the first couple chapters because of the narrative style. Specifically this story's narration refers to the protagonist as "you" as it was originally a "choose your own adventure" type story.  Unfortunately when transitioning to a straight fiction genre, it's in the authors best interest to go through and change the perspective to straight 3rd person. The author is no longer giving the reader any autonomy, he's just (literally) telling "you" what you're going to do. For many people (like myself) the current narrative style is disengaging, and frankly unpleasant to read, and will hamper the success of what would otherwise be an astounding work.

Gamer B
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Good sart with actual character

Reviewed at: A Place to Rest Your Head

Looking to see where this goes. An interesting start to a xianxia. Feels just a xianxia setting but not a true xianxia (ie 2d characters). Characters already seem more fleshed out and meaningful.

 

Mortenkam
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Another great story by Vesvius

Reviewed at: A Place to Rest Your Head

I have been reading this story on Sufficient Velocity and I find it great to read, just like the other things Vesvius has written. The quality of this story is that you can really immerse yourself in this world of Xianxia and get a feeling of how such a world would work and how it would be to be a cultivator in it. This is combined with interesting characters, who all seem to have their own motivations and personalities, which are revealed over time. Vesvius ability to write interesting characters also applies to the main character, Kong Zhi, who has to deal with living up to the family legacy of crafting Charms, while also dealing with making new friends and enemies, and advancing his own cultivation as an Artisan. That Kong Zhi is a crafter, first and foremost, adds an interesting twist to the story, since even if he learns how to fight in the story, it is not what he dedications himself to, nor what he truly excels at, even if he has his martial triumphs. I am personally looking forward to seeing how this story will continue to unfold and to see how Kong Shi will end up in the long run.  

Enjou
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I play the quest over on Sufficient Velocity and it's great fun. It's totally worth rereading here though, as there's a bit of polish done and the occasional new detail added. If you're new, then the tale of Kong Zhi and him trying to get himself through life in the sect is quite entertaining, though he's got his flaws, which in my book just makes him more fun to read.

Artherix
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Best Novel Honestly

Reviewed at: Doublespeak

I mean... it's the best cultivation novel I've read. No Harem, OP protagoniste, no lit rpg, no isekai. And for once, we have a MC from a noble backround. Plots is great, Character development is good enough for now since this is going to be a long book. 

KreenWarrior
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Good Transcription of One of My Favorite Quests

Reviewed at: The Forge Eternal

I'm an active participant in the quest over on Sufficient Velocity and a huge fan of this story and its writer.  I'd say the biggest strength of the story is in its supporting cast and the way Vesvius consistently manages to make the choices the voters make meaningful in the overall plot.  

Our boy Kong Zhi is neither a stereotypical xianxia MC out to dish out disproportionate retribution and seeking to fill a harem, nor a perfect moral paragon.  Rather, he's someone with a sheltered upbringing who's been thrust into a new situation, with competing interests and ideals tugging him in different directions.  Really, he'd be perfectly happy sitting in a workshop and practicing his art/craft, but the world has other plans for him.

Give it a shot, and check out the quest as well.  As good as the transcription here is, there's no substitute for being a participant in the story.

Wistways1
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Magic Kung-Fu school with a reality twist.

Reviewed at: The Forge Eternal

This story is my favorite take on the Xianxia genre. It feels so much more real than a lot of other popular examples. Kong Zhi is a awkward nerd who means good and often gets his foot in his mouth. 
The supporting character are all fully defined characters, with their own personal goals. They all feel like they are in charge of their own stories, going off and doing things, not just coming alive when MC comes around.

I recommend this story for anyone who is sick of the overpowered fantasy that many of these other stories in this genre are. 

Plus the community on Suffiecient Velocity and Discord are really nice. Come join and help us guy our boy the best solution!