Sunchasers

by Komodon

Original ONGOING Action Adventure Fantasy GameLit High Fantasy LitRPG Magic Male Lead Portal Fantasy / Isekai
Warning This fiction contains:
  • Gore
  • Profanity

As Arthur opens his eyes, he finds himself in an unknown place, smack-dab in the middle of nowhere, without anything to help him survive save for a set of pyjamas and little knowledge of outdoors survival. Follow his steps as he tries to figure out where he is, and what will become of him.


Sunchasers is a Fantasy novel with a sprinkle of lightweight sort of LitRPG (i.e. without Classes or Stats). While the first ten or so chapters of Book I are about Arthur's lonesome survival, the rest of the story focuses more on exploration and the protagonist will come in contact with other people quite often.

The novel is being written in British English and using the metrics system.

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Chase the Sun

Reviewed at: Update

Overall, this is a great story.  The pacing is awesome, keeping you engaged with the characters and story without feeling like you are being rushed through the plot.

Underneath this I have a more complete review and will do my best to avoid spoilers.

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th30dor
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Interesting world building held back by grammar and character development

Reviewed at: Chapter 10

 The prose is not very good. The author is not a native English speaker, and it shows. Phrases that never end. Bad use of commas and full stops. Weird expressions.

Also, overall the writing is awkward. Sometimes the tenses mix. Dialogue does not feel natural, more like people talking from a script, rather than  having a conversation.

The world building, up until now is decent. Interesting premise. Looks like desert pirates of some sort. 

There are issues with the actual plot. The main character acquires what he needs via the power of plot armor. He's in the middle of the desert, dying of thirst, and he literally falls into a lake.

Arthur gets a hidden OP skill. He then discovers one of the limitations right as the training/crafting mini arc is done. Everything so incredibly ham-fisted. 

That brings us to the main character. He is the second coming of Jesus McGiver when needed, while he behaves like a chastised kindergarten boy the next chapter. Arthur experiences wild swings in behaviour, and intelligence based on what is needed to further the plot. Very annoying.

 

Droy17
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This one got potential keep it up. I really like it

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