Blood Destiny

by Awyn

Original ONGOING Action Fantasy Psychological Romance Anti-Hero Lead Gender Bender Magic Portal Fantasy / Isekai
Warning This fiction contains:
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  • Profanity
  • Sexual Content
  • Traumatising content

Blood.
Everyone has it.
Everyone needs it.
The part of us that we can't survive without.


Destiny.
The way you walk without realizing it.
The path in which people denied to exist.
At the end, is it there or not?


Is there a connection between those two? Erin didn't know.
What Erin knew, however was that blood was sweet, too sweet and at the same time too horrifying.
And what destiny gave to Erin was a new body, a body he dreamed about, but at the same time a new life that was too hard to live in.


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That is a rewrite of the novel: Life Of The Vampire Girl


Cover Art: Sinpathy

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CoCop
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This novel feels like a throwback (in a good way) to the glory days of vampire fiction.  I like action in my books, don't get me wrong (and don't worry, Blood Destiny has action), but if I'm reading Vampires I want the focus to be Pathos, and boy does this have Pathos.  It might not be every readers speed, but that doesn't mean it isn't worth a try.  Give it a read and find out.

Style
I have some concerns here, but they're all cosmetic.  I'm not a huge fan of SFX in novels and the spacing the author uses, but beyond that, the writing is good.  I will note that there are multiple POVs but it doesn't dilute the story (my main problem with multiple POVs).  In short, I have some aesthetic quibbles but the meat of the style is good.

Grammar
I've read this both on scribblehub and here.  Although the scribblehub version has some grammatical/spelling issues, they're almost all cleared up here.  I've noticed a copule things that caused me to quirk an eyebrow but overall its very good.

Story
The story is mostly character focused introspection.  My four star here indicates that I've liked what I've read (obviously I'm not done) but that the story hasn't been the focus of the novel.

Character
This is where the story shines.  It's an exploration of a new world and character and the author does a very good job of it.  I'm not going to go too in depth here because it will lead to spoilers, but the character development/drama are what make this worth reading.

Vowron Prime
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A Promising Start to a Character-Driven Story

Reviewed at: Chapter 7: First Meeting
This story gives me serious Transylvanian vibes. Dracula, dark castles, creepy forests; the works. And that's a great thing because this story has atmosphere and emotional tension in spades. Sure, the gender-bender "sucked into a game character isekai" start might have been done before, but the story gets continuously more gripping as we uncover the dark underpinnings of the new world that our MC Erin finds himself in. And it's himself vs herself for now, but we are seeing a slow-yet-steady progression towards embracing that identity, so it seems like that will resolve well before any of the romance aspects begin for those who may be worried about that.
 
Style
The style is well-done and generally disappears, letting readers dive into the story and the universe. But the author manages to convey a powerful sense of dark foreboding vampirism that I have to give this a 5. To me, it genuinely echoes vampire classics, and I keep expecting to see Dracula pop up somewhere(he hasn't yet, sadly, though we do have someone else who seems oddly similar).
 
Story
This story has some serious potential. We already see that this is going to be a deeply emotional tale, and coupled with the factions and elements we've seen thus far, I am expecting some juicy plot points here. That said it is still pretty early on, so the story hasn't really had time to mature. If this goes where I'm hoping it does, I can see this becoming a 5.
 
Characters
This is where I expect we will see the most improvement going forward. Note, the characters are well-done, but the main character is very much in an early phase where they are trying to figure things out, both about coming to terms with their gender, as well as how to deal with their isekai situation. Right now we've seen a frightened character who is reacting rather than taking action proactively to resolve those tensions. I am 100% confident we will see some immense progression here; it's one of the things I'm most looking forward to!
 
Grammar:
Great! I have no complaints here, and I hear it is much improved from the original(which I did not read). I've only spotted minor mistakes.
 
So if you're considering picking this one up, I'd encourage you to read. The atmosphere, setting, and depth of emotion alone will make it worth your while, to say nothing of the story's potential.
 
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A Light Novel with a Dark Undertone

Reviewed at: Chapter 6: Acceptance

Blood Destiny has bite. 

As a western style light novel it takes a set up we see often in such isekai: A gender bender translocation and adds some somber thought to it.

We follow Erin, a young man with gender identity issues as he is taken to a journey that changes his world, his flesh and his very identity. 

The focus on the psychological effects of the latter are what really give Blood Destiny its potential, and the writer is improving with each chapter.

Style
This maybe the weak point of Blood Destiny. Awyn's prose is good, but not at its full pootential yet. Some awkward sentences rob scenes of certain punches and add some barriers to immersion. That said, the prose is understandable and does not ruin clarity.

If you are used to reading translated works, then you will not find the style an issue at all.

Story 
These are early days yet, but so far the story has served a good introduction to Erin's plight and the narrative therein. It's focused on Erin's internal conflicts and her struggle with her new situation.

The events of the story are good, but I think it suffers from pacing issues. I honestly think that with some focusing it might have gotten to this point in the story quite a bit earlier. 

Grammar
The grammar for Blood Destiny is understandable, but not always the most correct. There are awkward sentences here and there that might - as I said - take some impact from the prose. However, all of is understandable.

Characters
By far the strongest aspect of Blood Destiny is its main character, who is very well explored. There is a side character who we get to know in great detail as well, while other characters have just been introduced. 

Awyn focuses a lot on characterization, character development and character details. This makes characters come to life quickly. I also am fully engaged in Erin's journey and inner struggle. I look forward to how she develops.

Conclusion 

Much like Erin, we readers are on the cusp of a new world here. Blood Destiny is a growing work that combines isekai structure with self reflection. If you like a light novel with a slower pace and more somber tone, I recommend you give this a try.

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A fun well written isekai. Gamer gets hit with an ad online to make a new character and start a new life. Even though he's warned it seems close enough to standard ad talk that he doesn't notice.

 

Now Erin is in a new world, with a new body, and a new species.

Good writing, going for emotional impact and character driven. Will be fun to read.

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I don't like vampires, but I like this

Reviewed at: Chapter 5: A new place

Modern vampire fiction has put me off the fantasy creatures long ago. I hate the angst, moody characters, romanticism that follows them and the sparkles.

Fortunately, Blood Destiny skips all of that and goes straight into the very realistic grittiness and cursed existence of what being a vampire really is like.

Style:

I rated the story low in this section because it very much reads like a light novel. This is a personal complaint and since it doesnt affect the overall rating, I thought I'd air my grievances. The author needs to read some meaty novels not on the web and develop his writing voice. The LN style is fine for the web, but I'm aware of the author's aspirations and believe he can do a lot more.

Story:

Not much to say here. To me the gender swap didn't make a lot of sense. However, I haven't read a lot of gender bender fiction. This is not an issue with a trans character but I haven't actually seen how the author makes it relevant to the story. From what I read, it's a dude in a female body that but still uses the Male pronoun. Perhaps, I'm a tad ignorant or didn't get far enough to see how the author uses this to play a part in the story.

Grammar:

No glaring errors but the story could do with a light line edit.

Characters:

This is where Blood Destiny shines. No sparkles, brooding character or unnecessary angst. Our protagonist is at war with her vampiric curse. She doesnt want to kill people but when the hunger and rage kicks in, there is no stopping it. Erin's bloodthirst and the resulting regret has been my favourite part of the story so far.

Primate
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The Story.

The story is about a young guy who was transmigrated into the body of an ancient vampire in a different world entirely. It showcased a great view of the vampire kind and the emotional aspect of the characters without deviating from the plotline. The story definitely has a huge potential to be a vampire classic.

The Style.

The author is using the omniscient third person narration. The readers are able to view the world from different characters' perspectives, experience their various feelings and thoughts. It's well executed here.

The Grammar.

The grammar is of high quality. No major errors that could disrupt the flow of the story.

The Character.

The author has devoted a lot of effort and time into building the characters, creating exciting read. From the MC to the other side kicks, all the characters are well written and fitted their various roles.

Grest job, author. Keep up the good work.   

Ashish choudhary
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so far it is enjoyable to read, even though I don't read vampire stories generally.

Failedspark2003
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The story is a rewritten version of Life Of The Vampire Girl. I read the story till it got dropped. I don't know why though, cuz it was a good story. If i had to rate that original i'd give it a 4. i don't rember a lot and its a while since i read the original but so far it started almost exacly the same. Its feels a bit more complete, fluid i would say. .

So if this quality would keep up, and the plot would be just as interresting if not better than the previouse one. 

Sofar i got nothing to say, like there isn't much to complain or compliment. It's just 4 chaps and till it's your typical Create your character computer advertisement genderbender type of isekai.

i do like how certain keyparts of the story and character emotional events stayed the same. The mc itself stays somewhat the same and is luckily less panicked and or angry at his new gender, which is the sole thing i didn't like about the last story. (was almost overwelming in the last story for like 80chaps or so)

Laberintos
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So far the story is really a joy to read. The only problems I would like to point out are the sometimes to forced changes of his thinking pattern. It is a little bit abrupt and not as fluent in development as i would wish. Also, sometimes the writing style or grammar isn't as good as other stories here, but definitely very enjoyable to read.

Wolfie
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Feels auto-translated

Reviewed at: Chapter 2: Encounter

Number of use-of English errors makes me think that the novel was written in another language and then auto-translated into English. If you want good level of grammar, keep going.