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In July 2057, all life on Earth was wiped out by thousands of meteor strikes. Two men survived because they happened to be in the seed vault on Svalbard Island. An alien from a civilization far more advanced than our own sends them back in time to AD 70 with all the supplies that could be found in the seed vault. Will they be able to change the timeline enough that humanity can survive the extinction event of 2057.
Books 1,2, 3, and 4 are now avalable on Kindle Unlimited, as the story is now at book 5
Please note this story does not whitewash history. The Empires of AD 70 did things that would be called ruthless by our times. Things that we would consider war crimes were considered honorable. Superstitions that would horrify us today were commonly practiced. Things like child marriage were not just practiced, but for much of the world was expected. If these things bother you, then you know how the main characters in this story will feel.
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Book 3 here https://www.royalroad.com/amazon/B08S3X9MC9
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Though parts of the story and especially the concept itself is good, it sadly fails in several important ways. Hopefully the author will eventually do a serious rewrite.
Perhaps most importantly just sending 2 people nearly 2k years back in time as normal people would mean genocide of the locals from common ailments they are immune to (diseases would probably kill the protagonists as well). Like in most similar novels on RR, the protagonists are ofc OP in many ways. Unlike most of them however, these guys are just common modern people which are just too successful for their situation. The irony is that in a scifi novel like this, the author could have easily have fixed most of them easily. Just have the aliens change them with nanotech, implants or any similar supertech (which dissolve on death ofc).
Also for a novel that claims to be more "realistic" and brutal in its portrayal of history it gets alot very wrong. The author also has alot of VERY weird ideas about both religion and development. For example claiming how africans needed islam to teach them "modesty" so theyd wear more clothes and avoid illnesses from insect bites or how africans are unable to recognize the advanced concept of "pants". One of the protags wants to improve the water by making coffee and tea common (flawed in off itself), when beer and alcohol much easier served that very purpose for millennia.
In conclusion the suspension of disbelief became too strong and i had to quit, id recommend skipping this one.
Overall review: I like it, Good flavor and heapings of intrigue. It keeps me on the toes I mean it's realistic to a semi-tee What I don't agree with in some other reviews is the unrealistic part. Let's be real here the characters are based on a little over 2 thousand years older civilization. When they go to the past of course they will have their bias thanks to their future knowledge and well future bias.
Style: I like the style of the 2 characters each with vastly different styles of ruling. The style is also getting more a flow as the author writes more and finds/found the style he wanted.
Grammar: Personally I have seen good improvements in grammar and quality writing. The current grammar has been improved and that can be attributed to the author now having worked on writing longer.
Story: While the plot lines are good. I would say that the author might have needed a bit more research. Then again this is a story. Not historically accurate to an everything research paper or something similar.
Character: The character could be improved. However, from the start of the story and some hints dropped from chapters. The characters could definitely change or start a bit over in some way.
This story focus on the point of view of two flawed white Americans. While both Characters are American, we see how different our cultures are based on how you grow up in American. You get one Paul that has to deal with a death trap that is Africa and John that has to deal with wild America. The author tries his best to show how each place is different and how the difficulty needed to run them differs. This story is unique because it does not look away from the main character's flaws and limitations. We get to see them make stupid decisions based on their own biases and weakness. We also get to see how they change along with the story.
Style: I like that we get to see two different cultures being built by two diverse people. We also get to see two primary colonial cultures.
Grammar: while the grammar is not the best, it does not take much from the story. The only things that are noticeable now are some typos.
Storyline: I love the storylines so far. The characters are forced to deal with the repercussions of their past actions. The significant part of the story also gives the reader different points of view from just the main characters. We get to seek the reason that some enemies that the characters make along with the act. Their reasoning is all different; some are for revenge, greed, or self-preservation. The author also made it a point to use historical people and their recorded personalities to give the story more credibility. Now not all of the others. The author's depiction will be accurate, but then again, historical records are not always written truthfully.
Both characters are far from being OP. They make a lot of mistakes, and their knowledge base is very flawed. They may be more intelligent than most Americans, but it is pretty believable what they can make. A relatively well-read individual could acquire the skill and knowledge they show in 28 or 30 years. They may even have better skills than them.
For John, we see how he has to act outside his views and how his children rebel against his ideals. We also get to see how his flaws result in the death or alienation of allies.
For Paul, we see how being in Africa makes him more rigid and more ruthless. We also know the line he will not cross. He understands himself being a monster and is not trying to justify his actions as righteous. He sees it as a needed evil to save humanity.
Really interesting concept and nice intro.
i suspect that this might be overly ambitious for this author although I really Hope I'm wrong because if he could make it work this would be a fantastic story.
Desperately needs an editor!
Well, title says everything.
I think this story is good in the Kingdom building genre, keep it up!
The story is well written and is interesting so far. I would highly recommend to throw most of our values out of the window or at least keep in mind that the values were different back then.
Edit: one problem I have is how some things the main characters accept (way too easily). Otherwise, it is an interesting story with nuggets of information. A must read for those who like civilisation building and development.
Edit 2: The author brings up faulty history and views on religion, as crazynorse mentioned in their review.
Author seems to think non-writing peoples were utterly stupid. While maybe not racist🤷🏾♂️, I'll give the benefit of the doubt. It definitely is under researched for the capabilities of tribal peoples. (http://www.taneter.org/math.html ) Religion, math and science were mixed for these people, you can't appreciate their intelligence without understanding there beliefs outside of a western modern bias. I will say naming the dog General Lee set off warning bells for me but I'll chalk this up to bad research and not cultural self congratulation. Picking Native American and African cultures to strip and replace with modern culture seems exactly like colonialist thought to me. Colonialist (Portugal and Spain in particular) similarly saw Asian cultures as redeemable and other cultures as replaceable mainly through missionary means.
This story is entirely centered around the two protagonists, neither of whom particularly needed to be white American men - being Norwegian would make sense given that they start off in a Norwegian facility in Norway, or being random ethnicities from around the world would make sense given that they're in the definitive be-all and end-all of seed genebanks - with almost no personality at all given to anyone else.
Style: The style is heavy on White Jesus, light on technical details - the non-dialogue writing does a lot more telling than showing, but the telling itself is at least reasonably robust. Dialogue often feels stiff and stilted, though some of that could be argued to be the result of speaking newly-learned languages, it also leans heavily on anachronism, ex: one of the African villagers says "guys" in his as-yet-unnamed language.
Story: Oh boy where to start. The story is a trainwreck and I can't really sum up fifty-odd chapters of complaints in one review so let me just start with the fundamental premise, which is that "let's split up, we can cover more ground" across time (6 months) and space (North America and Africa) is a good idea, with no concern that one of them might break a leg or come down with a cold or any of the countless things that can befall a singleton. Having thus split up, they also make no effort to find any other people, both just existing in solitude until people happen to stumble upon them.
Grammar: Undoubtedly the strong point of this story, the grammar is mostly fine - a fair number of mixups between unusual homonyms (peddle vs pedal, horde vs hoard) but the author generally knows the which "your" you're supposed to use and when it's time to use "its" rather than "it's".
What characters? White Jesus #1 is conveniently unburdened by any earthly ties and is happy to get sent back to the past and get to work single-handedly building and operating the first iron smelter in the entire world, fighting two lions at once and then acting modest about it when appropriately-incredulous natives show up to talk about it in inappropriately-reverential tones, with Abilio (African villager #1, one of two non-protagonists who eventually show some spark of personality) helpfully fetching his own sister as an offering to this weird-looking person who does inexplicable things and with whom they have no method of communicating. Et cetera et cetera child soldiers, ritual execution, imperialism, and so on and so forth - read it if you're that curious. Meanwhile, elsewhere:
White Jesus #2 however apparently had a wife and children in Texas, none of whose names we ever learn, and processes his grief by robotically performing the work of ten people until a conveniently beleaguered tribe of past-dwellers stumbles upon him and his huge cache of way more food that one person could reasonbly eat or hope to preserve given the materials on hand, who he then defends with his three wolf puppies he found that are thereafter forever referred to and treated as dogs (even though wolves are emphatically not dogs) and his spectacularly quick-firing bow. Of the two protagonists this guy is, relatively speaking, the less problematic being generally happy to just work on farming and construction and only gunning people down when they come looking for trouble
At first, Earth's Eulogy read kindof clunky. The grammar felt bad, and the story presentation a little awkward and not entirely believable. However, the more I read the more entertained I was. The story expanded, and the authors strengths came to bare.
Earths Eulogy surprised me with its complexity. It posed interesting ideas and juggled varying story elements masterfully. The two characters, John, and Paul both went in entirely different directions, and I will say, that by the time of this review, I grew to love both stories.
Now, for the intricacies of the review. The style was pretty straightforward, nothing grand or elaborate, but it worked. The story deals a lot with time skips, and the author doesn't skip a beat when it comes to presenting meaningful information. I give it a 4/5.
The story at first was strange and hard to grasp, but the more I read, the more I realized just how amazing it actually was. It's the centerpiece for the novel, and the author presents it in a way that's engaging and easy to love. I give it a 5/5.
The grammar is where I'm a bit more taken back by. Some people literally can't read a book with a single grammar mistake, some don't care at all. While grammar mistakes occur, especially towards the beginning, the author slowly improves to the point where it's easy to look past it. Because of this later improvement im giving a it a higher score than I might otherwise have done. So, 4/5.
Lastly, the characters. I'll be honest, the characters might not be the most in-depth, but when it comes to managing dozens of different characters, the author does it masterfully. This makes up for the lack of in-depth character development, because the story simply isn't focused around that. This is a kindom building story, and as such I give it some leeway. The way he's able to juggle so many diverse characters is what really impresses me. So, it give it a 4/5.
I look forward to continue following this novel. And for anyone who's looking at giving it a shot, make sure to read it through till the end. It's great.
While the dialogue can be a bit clunky, I think the author does a wonderful job of conveying what the people of that era and geographic area would think of the things that the main characters develop, while his choices of words can be a tad bit repetitive I think that they are still great nonetheless
The premise is very intriguing and while the author (i think) could've conveyed it better, its probably the best it'll be written for a long while, the author has also developed farther as he's written the story, and im glad to say I was there for all of it.
While I'm not sure if English is the authors native language, it might be, it might not, the grammar isn't bad or anything, however it can be a bit lackluster at times, I don't believe the author has an editor, though I may be wrong, and the author is also releasing these as paid books, so we aren't getting the perfect product either, but that said, the author has done a great job conveying what they mean with what they have.
The author has done a great job conveying the thoughts and feelings of every character, from John the timid 21st century homesteader, to Abilio, the traitorous brother in law of paul, while the author has stumbled a few times, that's to be expected, no one is perfect, he's done a good job writing character dialogue and interaction, if a bit clunky at times, I really am proud to say
I've been here from the start
Thanks for the story C.J.