To Forge a New Dawn

by vsphelix

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When a scribe glimpses the rot beneath a nation's glory, he cannot stay silent in the face of corruption. A single voice can be enough to turn the tides of history. From the humble halls of the Archives, one spark ignites the flame that will consume the world.

As one mere scribe unites an army to topple an empire, he gains followers whose loyalty and ambition will outlast even his own. This is a tale not only of ascension, but of those who flourish in the wake of a revolutionary. Five paths intersect under the scribe’s vision of a new order, driving the ebb and flow of power throughout the land.


Content warning for armed combat. Story complete; updated with major revisions as of 12/31/2020.

Cover art by Fuyu Dust.

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NeoMare
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So I have a very specific rule of not favoriting any story. However, I can't just not favourite ths!

The story is amazing, utterly enthralling. There really are no words to describe how incredibly good this is. Perfect gramar, compelling writing style, and compelling plot. I can't wait to know what happens next.

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A tale, with an unique style

Reviewed at: 4.9 - Ancient Knowledge

 

First review, here we go. 

 

So far, I do not know if I hate it or love it. 

The style, with characters taking the shape of faceless actors, and detached from most of their thoughts, is flawlessly done.

This makes the story feel like a bard's tale, and has given me much to ponder. Readers beware, as if you are looking for a classic power fantasy with self inserts and wish-fulfillment, you shall not find it here.

Think of this as a chronicle of rebellion, betrayal, plots and radicalization (from what I can see so far).

I cannot for the life of me guess what will happen. This is a thrill, as most stories here are nothing but predictable. 

 

Grammar is 10/10. 'nuff said. 

 

As for the characters. Now that is a pickle. They are named after their role, which changes during the story. They are monolithic archetypes, and this is by design. I cannot wait for more interaction, and for the 5th Character to show up. And yes I say 5th as only 5 are Important, as only those 5 matter. 

I have read everything written so far in an hour, and I cannot wait for more. But I am scared of what will happen. 

Is this a fairytale, with a cute bow on top? Certainly not. 

I need more chapters, perhaps all of them, to make a complete review.

This story, as I've mentioned, feels like a bard's tale, and has given me much to ponder. Definitely stealing the style and tone for my d&d games.