Bored Gamer in Other Worlds

by Immovable87

Original ONGOING Action Comedy Fantasy Satire Anti-Hero Lead Harem High Fantasy LitRPG Male Lead Strong Lead Wuxia Xianxia
Warning This fiction contains:
  • Gore
  • Profanity
  • Sexual Content
  • Traumatising content

Bored Gamer in Other Worlds. A spoiled brat journeys in mystical worlds and beyond. 

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Angeldeth
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Interesting twist on wuxia

Reviewed at: Chapter 20

I am not sure why this currently has only 3 stars as an overall rating but the story is well written, enjoyable and leaves me wanting more.  It's a mix of litrpg, wuxia and idle game all in one.  The only gripe I have is that the chapters are a bit short, however that should not impact the overall rating.

zigman2021
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That abomination of a second chapter is enough for anyone to run the other way screaming.

For some reason the author chose to describe sex in the most awkward and explicit way possible, while also using only clumsy euphemisms. It's terrible. Read it for the cringe factor and then never again.

Winterwisp
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The beginning needs improvement

Reviewed at: Chapter 10

I have to agree with a previous review that the beginning of the story is not ideal, but it's not that terrible. The premise of the story is pretty interesting; I especially like how the main character's new body is that of an old man, rather than a young kid - as is usually the case in this kind of story. However, while the writing is technically solid, most of the events are confusing and poorly described, leaving me guessing what's going on.

Style: Much of my criticism in this area stems from the confusion described above. The descriptions are few, and when there are several characters with internal monologue at the same time, it becomes difficult to know which character we are experiencing the world through. Aside from the confusion, there are too many capitalizations and use of the exclamation mark. The tone of speech should be clear from descriptive context such as, '"Bla Bla," he said, with a face red from anger' or something similar.

Grammar: This is the most solid part of the story. Few mistakes, and an overall good grasp of the language. Some areas of improvement, though: when referring to someone directly with a title instead of their name, like say 'host', the title should be capitalized like: "I agree, Host." And, when using direct speech like "That's right," he said, there should not be full stop between the speech and the 'he said' - instead it should be marked with a comma - unless there is an exclamation- or question mark.

Story: Like I said, the premise is interesting enough, but the execution is lacking. The biggest issue are the initial chapters, which are supposed to hook you on the story, but if I did not intend to give the story a shot, I would have stopped at chapter 2, simply because I had no idea what was happening through to this point.

Characters: I don't think I can find one instance in which I found the MC is likable. I'm told he is something of a perfect being, without any apparent flaws, and nothing about him makes me inclined to root for him. Furthermore, it is confusing to me how the MC has two names, one in public and one only the readers know. It's superfluous, and only makes reading a chore. That being said, at least he is capable, which is why I'm not scoring it too harshly.

Overall: I think there is potential in the story if some of the more grueling issues are resolved. As a reader, I should not have to work overtime to understand any single event. That takes attention away from more interesting subjects like any undercurrents or possible foreshadowing, and makes reading into work rather than a pleasure.