RESPAWNED: New Game Plus

Will keep the review short, because there's not a whole lot to comment on at this time. I'm also writing this review because someone decided to post a review akin to a troll post, and I dislike those.

Style:

It's Re:Monster's style of writing, but with a bit more detailed. To me, it feels like I'm reading a steady flow of short stories, as it progresses forward. Props to the author for this, by the way, as I happen to love short stories more so than other novels.

Story:

You have a guy who dies suddenly, and ends up as a reincarnated creature in what appears to be a game. I've seen a few stories like this, so it's not exactly "unique", but still interesting. His death is what fascinated me the most. Instead of a random vehicle that plows into our MC (far too common, and I hate it), this one dies after hitting a wall too hard. After reincarnating, the MC is suppose to be a "villain", but so far, he's more of a hero who has landed in some sort of bazaar twist of fate where the females have dicks. Reminds me of Hyenas, and their hierarchy.

Grammar:

There are mistakes. Such as punctuation errors, missing words, and words that need to be combined because they are, in fact, ONE WORD. Caretaker is one word, author. However, these mistakes don't appear all that often, so he/she is safe from me going into Grammar Nazi Rant Mode.

Character:

Again, the author is trying to portray our MC as a villain, but has instead created a sort of hero vibe. The guy is almost worshiped for being different, have him exploit it until some goblins need to be made examples of. He's supposed to have great/abnormal strength for a male, and yet he uses a brain instead of showing off every now and again. Don't get me wrong, it's a great trait to have, but the author has him rely on it a bit too much. If I was a goblin, I would question it, even if I was an idiot goblin male in that story.

What I am trying to say is it would be better to have our MC abuse his power, if the author is going down the path of a villain, so as to avoid too much heroism.

It's an enjoyable fast read with short chapters. It follows a Diary type of style in which Main character and other characters live day to day like Re:Monster. So far there aren't many chapters and are pretty short, but its still a nice ready with comedy.

This story is by far the comedy themed story i have ever read.It feels new when you read it much like what Re:Hamster did with the whole re-incarnation pattern of most generic novels and just butchers it to shreds and sews it in his on pattern.

This is what this site needs;aspiring artists with a passion to create new stories and think outside the box.

And this is what this author is,an artist which evoke emotions in us that makes us feel something else than just plain simple interest which in time dissipates;which is sense of want(in a comedic sense) and which  is really lacking in this site.

As most comedic works written here lose their 'funk'(if i may say) after like 18 chapters as those  authors become less innovative and get writers block ,which instead of finding the inspiration that made them write in the first place they turn to the works of others for new found inspiration.

This is where most writers fall back into the same generic patterns that the majority of amateurs and declining professionals are in.But some struggle through and find new aspirations and this author i can say is one of them.

The only thing i criticize about this is the spaced paragraphs,simple because no one other than people above the age of 30 uses them anymore and instead of a space we leave a line.

Sorry,just irritated people don't improve with the times.

And 4.5/5 is just because its another "earth becomes a game" theme.Generic-Yes,weirdly interesting that it makes you feel the feeling when you read Re:Hamster for the first time.

Again,sorry

I'm not trying to advertise Re:Hamster or anything its just that its one of those special works in this site like this story here and I just had to relate it.

Can I even review my own writing?

Just testing out if I can do this or not.

It seems counter productive if I can review this.

Right now, I am trying to fill out the 200 Character requirement so that I can submit an advanced review.

EDIT: oh wow I can review my own story. Sweet. I am a hacker mwah haha. (not really)

It shows promise, i like the humor and the protag seems interesting so far.

Although i enjoyed chapters that has been released i have 2 things that needs to be said.

I think tables for stats would clean up your chapters alot and, Why is the text different sizes throughout the chapters!?

I thoroughly enjoyed reading this, the humor was gratifying and I thought it was pretty hilarious that the "chicks" had larger you-know-whats.

But I digress, I sincerely hope you write more as this is one of the better stories on this site.
It sort of reminds me of Cheating Monster: mightiest tadpole, which is a good thing.

Overall - A great read with hilarious references and situations, extremely enjoyable.

Style - After a certain point, the author includes alternate timelines. While interesting, I personally dislike it. Still a great idea, and likely many others will like it, just not for me.

Story -THIS IS NOT SOMEONE REINCARNATED INTO A GAME. Holy crap, it's like some people don't read either the synopsis or the story. 

Now that the rant's over, it's a rather humorous story  that follows an npc that remembers his life, with plots and scheming going on both in the game and in real life. hehehe, the worst escort quest in history was escorting a tribe out of Egypt..... hehehehe. Also has it's serious moments though.

Grammar: Some problems here and there, but in my opinion easily understandable.

Character: The MC isn't good or evil..... he just is. For example, for most people, they can't be characterized as a hero or villain.This guy is representative of that. (Anti-hero doesn't mean villain, it meant not a hero) Other than that, each character seems rather well flushed out, and I find myself enjoying all of them (except for Goblin A, I hate that guy)

When you read genres action and fantasy you expect some cool magic and skills but do not expect them in this story.  while there is some action in first arc but it is only so so....also since you just killed of goblin character(which did have some potential) it went to more slice of life type of story than action. Author mentioned that he wants only few magic in his story like it was in "Game of thrones" but other than not using much magic in story I did not find any similarities. This story makes me feel that author wants to write something original, but it's not working....I'd rather read so called cliche action packed stories with magic than this one.

An enjoyable read once you get into it. (Spoiler: I especially loved how the author mixed in concepts and characters from 'the Hobbit'- Smaug & the lonely mountain- and 'Inception'. And the whole matrix like world were the whole world as the MC knew it was a game and everyone including him were NPCs is a fresh take on things.) There is much comedy without loosing the seriousness of the story.

seriously... its  enjoyable ff.. but i worry for the fact that he's powerless against admins.. lemme weit n see