Daughter of Yser

by Rowain Flynn

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Toria Yser was born to be a monarch, regal and noble blood flowed through her veins, but an act of treachery snatched her from the line of succession. Determined to regain her position and enact revenge on those who opposed her, Toria follows her dark and mysterious aunt to discover the advantages of being on the side of "evil."

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Evil is committed without effort, naturally, fatally

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"Evil is committed without effort, naturally, fatally" - Baudelaire

A great beginning for a story where the main characters embrace their selfishness and desires, and are bold in their wants. If that makes them evil, so be it. What's great here is that the author does not judge, nor entice the reader to do so. It's not edgy, or awesome, to side with evil; the characters just are themselves. 

On the style side, the tropes used being clearly in the fairy tales side of things, few descriptions are needed or offered. The bluntness keeps the story moving and I feel it's a thin line to dance. The world could be fleshed a bit more.

5 stars overall so that story gets trending, maybe more a 4 as of chapter 18. See  below.

 

A few remarks :

  • Each chapter use the POV of a different character and sometimes I had to scroll a bit to have a sense of who was in the focus. 
  • The world building is interesting but feel a bit lacking. The narrative is narrowly framed around the characters - and that's great ! -  but the world outside that bubble feels not really alive. 
  • The motivations of the MC's mother are unclear ( why a son ? ) and she is more a plot device than a well-crafted character.