The Cursed Witch (Book One)

by Briizy

Original ONGOING Action Adventure Drama Fantasy Female Lead High Fantasy Magic Male Lead Multiple Lead Characters Ruling Class Strong Lead Supernatural
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PREVIOUSLY KNOWN AS "THE FORBIDDEN PRINCESS"

Book One Synopsis

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In a world of magic, there are those that embrace it and those that vilify it. Cateline Bennett, a princess from the Kingdom of Axulran who has concealed her magic her entire life, is thrust into the world her lineage has spent centuries slandering. Forced to adapt to a new reality far from the royal palace, she must learn how to cooperate with peasants, how to survive a world full of magic, and how to fight in order to live.

As she traverses the Kingdom of Traburg, her newfound friends dig up a darker secret resting beneath their feet that threatens the world as they knew it. Together, they must discover a way to counter these threats; lest they, and all they know, will crumble to ruin.

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MrBadWithNames
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Alright, let me start off by saying I'm not really somone who reads the kind of princessy-romance stuff.

However as of chepter 7, the story really seems well realised, even for somone like me.

 

The amount of effort put into the story is evident, every chapter has a little "Chapter-x" header, plus the little breaks in the story with "Love, ency & magic" is really nice.

I'm happy to say the prologue chapter is essentially just a map and a paragrapth, so that's nice - I always love a good map! 

 

The grammar is basically perfect, not much to say about that.

 

Something I like about the story is the pace, it's quick but not too fast, if that doesn't sound cool to you then rest assured the author adressed this in a comment saying things would slow down.

 

The language is despriptive and gives you a good idea of what's going on, nothing too spectacular, everything is easy to grasp, especially the magic.

 

I'm giving the character score a 5/5, not because I like the MC... it's safe to say I dislike snobby character a fair bit, but while the personality is "eh~", it's all written really well, so I can't fault the story for me not liking a pincess acting like a princess.

I don't know if there will be any more main character anytime soom, so I'll just say the other characters, while short on screen time seem alright and a whole lot more likable.

 

 

Good luck with the story to the author, keep in mind this story kind of falls out of the generic isekai / levelling niche of RoyalRoad, so you might want to just stock up on reviews and figure out a good time to publish, 18:06 IST works best for me, though varrying it a bit is also good.

don't publish shortly before the next hour or you'll get burried under all the schedueled releases, so 5 or 6 minutes after the hour starts is a good time in my experience.

 

George Haufman
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As I pass the beginning portion of the novel my first impressions it is a really silky read most of the time. I can recommend to anyone who likes a good fantasy novel.

Style: No glaring issues in this dept, but I would like a little bit more consistency when it came to pacing. This isn't a huge issue, however so I am more than satisfied

Grammar: Some minor typos here and there, but nothing to fret over. I hardly noticed it at all.

Story: I love the magical academy story you are telling here. There are also themes of a fish out of water story I am enjoying right now. Not only that but I feel like a coming of age arch is happening with the bratty MC rn that will make the character even better.

Character: The interactions between the casts of characters is really fun and witty most of the time. All of the interactions are very organic and fit the overall setting of the story very well. 

McKing
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Sorcery and Mistery

Reviewed at: 15. Phoenix

The author's style has flair, sporting impressive descriptions and depictions. The characters need more time to shine, but already show some interesting nuances. The headmistress is written with particularly good descriptions and suspense.  

The story seems to be following a more classical growing, maturing royal take and with relatable fantasy archetypes. It's very well executed and the suspense so far is good, but I want to be surprised a bit more.

It's well written, but the author slips sometimes. Needs some more editing grammatically wise. Nothing too serious or annoying, but more common than I'd hope.

Toby Ziegler
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Exiled Princess in a Broken World

Reviewed at: 28. Madman

The arrogant princess at the heart of this story is learning how to live outside a palace at the same time she is learning how to tap into and grow with her potential for magic. While the points of view change and are often unreliable narrators, the plight of the princess is central to all else.

The princess is sometimes relatable and often not, but all the characters are deep enough to feel real, rather than monochromatic. If anything suffers from lack of depth, it would have to be the setting itself; the scale of travel and size of the known world seem both off and undersized.

Nothing negative detracts from the enjoyment of the story, however, and I find myself looking forward to the posting of each new chapter. If you enjoy fantasy kingdom intrigues or deep characters, you will likely enjoy this story as well!

ArthurScott
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A Fantastical Masterpiece!

Reviewed at: 28. Madman

CATELINE is a character that possesses many tropes found within humanity; but at the same time, she is unique. 

The role of women in the Elizabethan Era had resulted in a negative wave of social belief throughout the ages. Cateline, a morally grey sorceress, takes the reader on a journey that ties this theme to its tailgate and travels through a mystical portal of magic, envy, and perhaps dragons and acrimony. 

It had all begun in Denzethea, where two kingdoms collided under social justice and power. Cateline's character is well-developed and visceral in this setting. She is a master of ice (and other spells apparently) and likes the colour blue. This is a protagonist that shines brightly in the echos of hierarchy, and she divulges a plan to reach her full potential (and you know, stop bad stuff). 

The writing is almost perfect, with little errors scattered about. Grammar doesn't matter anyway.

The story reminds me of Eamon (Edward) de Valera's rise to power in 1932, where he promised an end to Anglo-Irish Treaty of December 1921. Cateline's journey through magic is direct and hair-raising, keeping the reader on their toes. 

The style is the exact same as everything ever written ever, and that's okay, because style doesn't exist. It's prose, and nice. But I think the author uses grandiloquent words at times where smaller ones would suffice. But nobody cares about that. 

Mr Gaffney once said that he's a living legend, and that couldn't be more true in hammering down the plot of this story. Cateline is a legend you tell by embers under moonlight. She is the shadow you see at night, the spiral in the sky (or black hole), and Gecko's favourite character. 

The estranged right opposition in the story allows for a fantastic subplot and is one of the many reasons it's a page-turner (or mouse-scroller). Very well-written. 

The story is pepepapulonticulous in design, structure, and execution. I highly recommend this to Fantasy readers and Science Fiction writers.

Primate
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The Story.

This is an entertaining and intriguing story. It follows the tale of Cateline Bennett, a princess from the Kingdom of Axulran who has concealed her magic her entire life but was later thrust into the world magic. She had to learn how to cooperate with others in order to survive. Brilliant take on the princess tropes that will captivate the attention of the readers.

The Style.

Since we are seeing the world of the forbidden princess through the eyes of the various characters, it depicts the use of the omniscient third person narration. The author is letting the readers experience the character's thoughts, feelings and emotions in a brilliant way.

The Grammar. 

Excellent quality grammar. As far as I read, no noticeable errors that could affect the flow of the story.

The Character.

Well defined characters. They incite different emotional reactions in the readers. Ways that are intended by the author. The MC in particular is just so adorably planned. 

Brilliant writing. Kepp up the good work.

WindyImagine
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Frozen, Eat Your Heart Out

Reviewed at: 25. Frigid Swim

Look this way for masterful descriptions of magic, dialogue that rings out vividly in the mind, and language befitting the royal story of a princess.

Each personality is larger than life, coming alive on the page.  The supporting characters are every bit as interesting as our protagonist.  They're all multi-faceted and very refreshing to read about - there isn't a dull moment with this cast!

The lore is solid and the promises of prophecy leave you wanting more.

Every so often, a word goes missing or a synonym might serve a sentence a little better, but it hardly takes you out of the story.

The author's love of the story is obvious, and that kind of love makes it shine all the more brightly.

CroseBelle
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Your story has a magical tangibility to it, from the way you carry the plot, to how you describe emotions, to the setting. I'm not big on princesses, but I love your writing style(I would describe your writing as elegant and charming), and the prologue was beautiful. I enjoyed the banter of Lil Cateline with her servant and how she's a strong-willed person. There's a hint of mystery that draws the reader in, having them dying to know what's going to happen next. Also, the dynamic of the races in the story adds to the story's realistic qualities, and it's written convincingly. I would recommend this story!(will continue to read)

BTI Penner
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Style: Lush and beautiful, but doesn't veer into purple prose. I never felt confused as to what was going on.

Story: It's a well-crafted fantasy tale. The author takes familiar tropes and weaves them into something unique.

Grammar: Spotless as far as I could tell.

Character: Cateline isn't special because she's a princess, nor because she uses magic. She's special because she protects who she values most, and her magic is tied directly to that need.

VegaMirach
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Princess with a twist!

Reviewed at: 11. Awakening

I personally enjoy fantasy a lot, and this story is not an exception! The story keeps you interested with the chapters, and the characters are well rounded. There are no errors in the grammars, there are only few personal notes on this.

After chapter 3 a lot of characters are introduced in Lighthelm, and it overwhelmed me a little bit, but that may be just a personal thing I sometimes struggle to keep up with, they are well rounded though, and following chapters made it easier  to keep up with them.

And another, at  first glance wasn't sure if I'd like Cateline as the main character, but after a couple chapters she started to grow on me well. She is an interesting character with a lot of personality for sure :)

Will hope in the future we get to know more about the world as well!