The Menocht Loop

by caerulex

Original ONGOING Action Adventure Fantasy Psychological High Fantasy Magic Male Lead Strong Lead

Additional tags: OP protagonist, time loop, character-focused


Ian Dunai has been trapped in a nightmarish loop filled with contagion, captives, and decemancy for the past three or four years. In that time, he's become a master of decemancy with the ability to control dead matter, whether dried leaves, yellowed skeletons, or hulking corpses.

Little does he know, he's just been stuck on layer one.


Release schedule: Tues-Thurs-Sat releases (3 chapters/week) at 11:30 am EST. 

Book 1, The Menocht Loop, is complete at ~100k words (~370 pages; chapters 1-41).

Book 2, The Eldemari's Wrath, is in progress. (chapters 42 and on)

There is not yet romance written in this fiction between both books, but it is planned.

Constructive criticism welcome. Alternative synopses also welcome.

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Table of Contents
Chapter Name Release Date
Map of the World and Overview ago
1. Yet Again ago
2. Menocht Bay ago
3. The Flower District ago
4. World Shift ago
5. Getting Away ago
6. Confiding ago
7. Potentioreader ago
8. Death Affinity I ago
9. Wyrm ago
10. Invitation ago
11. Formal ago
12. Sylvestri ago
13. Return ago
14. The Prophet ago
15. Rinse and Repeat ago
16. Forward ago
17. Corona ago
18. Jupiter ago
19. Hollow Vengeance ago
20. Sword ago
21. Day One ago
22. Shade and Lux ago
23. The Palace of Fortitude ago
24. Tangled Fate ago
25. Stakeout ago
26. Bait ago
27. Hor'Well ago
28. Leviathan ago
29. Germaine on a Train ago
30. Winery ago
31. Julia Verina Dunai ago
32. A Forced Hand ago
33. A Plausible Theory ago
34. Soul Swarm ago
35. Vision ago
36. Ritual ago
37. Deconstruction ago
38. Flower District, Again ago
39. Remorse ago
40. The Wedding ago
41. Into The Black ago
[The Eldemari's Wrath] 42. Awakening ago
43. Reunion ago
44. Deliberation ago
45. The Bay of Ramsay ago
46. Landfall ago
47. Zukal’iss ago
48. Regret I ago
49. Regret II ago
50. Guardian Druni ago
51. Teatime ago
52. Oath-breaking ago
53. Aunt Maria ago
54. The Last Layer ago
55. The Primes ago
56. Royal Retainer ago
57. Restaurant Redo ago
58. The Demonstration ago
59. Skai’aren ago
60. Arrival ago
61. Practice ago
62. Ascendants ago
63. Appraisal ago
64. Interlude - Cunabulus ago
65. Memory ago
66. The Inevitable ago
67. Pain ago
68. Weaponized End ago
69. The Fassari Summit ago
70. Impulse ago
71. Interlude - Zilverna ago
72. Viable Strategies ago
73. Suran Rindo ago
74. Achemiss ago
75. Resolve ago
76. Gift ago
77. Gala I ago
78. Gala II ago
79. Life Versus Death ago
80. Rematch ago
81. Confrontation ago
82. Unplayed Ace ago
83. Finale ago
84. Alternative Routes ago
85. Auburn ago

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Silentshinigami
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A very well written begining that has instantly hooked me in with an intriuging system of magic that i can't wait to find out about. Hopefully this will be able to develope into a new favourite of mine now that mother of learnings finished. :)

GunsOfPurgatory
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How is this not illegal?

Reviewed at: 28. Leviathan

Like, really, most addictive substances are illegal, so why isn't this one?! I never was one for time loop stories, but this one had me hooked immediately. On to the review:

 

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Both the style and grammar of this story are amazing. The author is clearly more than fluent in English, to the point where I'm not bogged down reading the same words or phrases repeated over and over again.

 

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I'm giving this 4.5 stars instead of 5, not because of any deficiency on the author's part, but rather because the story is still just beginning, in all honesty. If I was just judging the main character, I'd give it a 5. However, since we have recently been introduced to the 2nd MC (and some seemingly important side characters), I plan on waiting a little longer to see how their characters develop before editing the character score further.

 

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So far the story is absolutely amazing. We know that there is a reason Ian entered the loop, though we still don't know what that reason is. I was tempted to give the story 4.5 stars, but decided against it, for the same reason that I didn't give the character score 5 stars. The story so far is amazing, and has yet to leave me dissapointed. However, if you aren't willing to wait and deal with the suspense of finding out the "why" behind the events of the Menocht Loop (which I imagine occurs is Book 2), then perhaps this story isn't for you.

Nameless32
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I started this story wanting to read it over the course of a couple days. Instead, I ended up binging it for hours. Read at your own risk, especially if you have to put up your own chapter soon... looks to the side sheepishly

Ahhh, I don't even know where to start. Pick a category... style. 

Caerulex's style in this story is simplistic, effective, and beautiful. Like a high-quality bread, it adds to the rest of the "meal" without getting in the way. Oh, and don't worry about the first person present tense - it's done absolutely perfectly. If anything, this story makes me wish that more stories were written this way. (Though I'd be sorely disappointed in 90% of them. It takes skill to make present tense work so well.)

Now for grammar. As always, it's my shortest category. It's perfect. I haven't noticed any errors in ~30k words, and I don't anticipate finding any anytime soon (because as soon as I'm done with this review I'm going back to binge even more).

Now for story. The Menoch Loop is a slow, character-based mystery that still provides hints of action and development to keep the reader reading. And oh boy, does it keep you reading. I found myself getting excited for things that I really shouldn't have been excited about, and when the first big twist happened, I nearly jumped out of my seat. Wonderfully done, Cae. 

Finally, characters. I wanted to save this one for last because they're truly beautiful. Every chapter, we get a deep glance into Iggy's (Sorry, not calling him Ian. For me, he'll always be Iggy.) psychology, and how he has to deal with the stress and trauma of the loop 

Spoiler: Spoiler

We get to see his struggle to return to normal, his excitement, his disappointment, everything is laid out for us. Like another review said, The Menocht Loop is at its core a study of Iggy's character. Unlike that review, though, I do not at all see why that is a bad thing. This story does it brilliantly, hooking you in in a way that even most action-driven stories can't pull off. I'm so incredibly sad that I'm constrained to 5 stars for this, because if any story ever deserved a 6 in characters, it'd be this one. 

Basically, go read this. This is one of my new absolute favorites on this site (and off this site, for that matter) and I haven't even scratched the surface of what makes it so good. I don't think you need me to tell you, but if for some bizzare reason you haven't checked this fic out, DO IT. It's 110% worth it. You can thank me later. (Or alternatively yell at me for making you stay up all night reading ;))

Scarlust
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Overated fiction but quality character study

Reviewed at: 33. A Plausible Theory

At it's core, 'The Menocht Loop' is a character study.

Recommended for readers who like:

  • Character development
  • Stories exploring psychology
  • Time loops
  • Mystery
  • Overpowered Protagonist (Note: Very little action though)

Not recommened for:

  • Levelling up
  • Battle Junkies
  • Worldbuilding (Note: Interesting world but not explored well)
  • Intrigue
  • Refined writing

 

It's protagonist has been trapped in a time loop for years, all the while learning the darker arts concerning the dead to grow stronger out of necessesity in order to escape. After finally managed to break free of the loop only to discover that it was just the first of multiple layers.
 
The writing is an interesting look into the character and how being trapped within the time loop has effected them personally. There are many interesting philosophical questions that the author, Caerulex, allows the character and story bring to our attention. The protagonist's development as a character is subtle but it is golden. In this respect it is truly a brilliant piece of character writing.

On the other hand, whilst it is a good fiction on the whole, reviewers from Caerulex's other fiction Apex Predator, and readers from the recently finished Mother of Learning who are looking for more time loops have drastically overhyped this story. Whilst it is has been Good enough to keep me reading, I would be hesistant to suggest that it is Great and I feel as though people looking for advice in the reviews should be aware of that going in to avoid betrayed feelings.


Here are some comments and critiques of the story so far. Be aware that there are some minor spoilers regarding the content. I have avoided anything story ruining but if you want to avoid them entirely, I advise you skip 1.

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 As a final note: 
Do not read the comments on chapters because the author has put so many spoilers about future plot. Like I'm up to the most recent chapter and I already have parts spoiled for me. No joy is to be gained from reading them.

uictoriam4
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An excellent time-loop fiction

Reviewed at: 27. Hor'Well

This one is hard not to recommend. The time loop is interesting and very well executed. The MC is OP but the reasoning for that is pretty good.Character execution is also top-notch ,and  interactions are not just one dimensional. It is, in fact similar in quality and feel to Mother of Learning(btw another great fic) but the magic and world are wildly different and still very well organised with affinities and all ,and it feels really well balanced.

We have here a College kid trapped in a time-loop who is searching for a way to get out of the loop. The technology setting is modern with magitech equivalent of our devices. The MC slowly evolves and learns more about the magic time loop(s) he is trapped in.

All in all an excellent read by a talented author.Recommended for time-loop fans and anyone who likes a decent fantasy read of an OP main lead

 

RationalMind
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Professional writing quality. Looking forward to the next chapters.

Recommended for people who are looking for a serious, non-goofy protagonist.

FakeMask
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I'm just so confused

Reviewed at: 5. Getting Away

So this story started one month ago and recently it exploded in popularity. As I write this review it is both among the "Popular this week" and first on "Trending". For a while it was even among the Top 5. Needless to say, after I noticed that I was curious and decided to read it.

And I wouldn't say I was disappointed but... it didn't really live up to expectations?

Don't misunderstand, the story is good and there are no glaring flaws I can point out, it is quite well written. I just don't think it's as good as people are making it out to be. The characters have personality but overall lack depth, the story is intriguing but the foreshadowing isn't that great, the worldbuilding seems to have a few minor inconsistences and the MC is unreasonably over powered.

In the end I could keep reading as the fiction isn't really bad only a bit lacklustre, but it just didn't really appeal to me in any way. It's above average, but it doesn't exactly feel like a passion project, like one of those stories that is unreasonably good because the author put his heart and soul into it.

I don't know, am I the only one feeling this way? I've been scrolling through the other reviews as I wrote this and all of them seem to be overwhelmingly positive, a few mention Mother of Learning and I couldn't help but wonder if this story got so popular because MoL recently ended, but I somehow didn't get that feeling. I also had this hypothesis that maybe it became much better later on, but a lot seem to have read up to the same point I have stopped at, and nothing seems really ground-breaking or top-notch to me.

In the end it's a good read I'm just weirded out because I don't understand why it's held in such high regard.

VMJaskiernia
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I love dark fantasy. When I joined the site this story was trending and I made a note of it, but hadn't gotten around to reading it. Now I have to binge it.

It's a fantasy world, and we follow a decemancer. Essentially a dark magic / necromancer. He's gotten very very good because of many years in a time-loop. And there's a plague.

The world is well established, the magic is explained without it being forced in a weird info-dump, the story well written. You want to know more, and the main character is very interesting. He's basically already OP, so you get to see how the world deals with his titan of a magic user, while he still gets himself into adventures and trouble.

Mattespe
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Fun. Doesn't stay in the loop long and that's great!

Reviewed at: 20. Sword

Really great so far. Doesn't stay in the loop long and has a lot to deal with outside of it. He is not the most powerful character there is but he is certainly strong and growing stronger as he focuses on things that are not his strengths. Fun Read and I would highly recommend

magescape
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61,000 words in and still enjoying it :)

Reviewed at: 7. Potentioreader

Caerulex has the creativity and stamina to write great stories. I'm 61,000 words into The Menocht Loop and still enjoying it! Keep up the good work, I'll be reading along and clicking refresh :)