Magic-Smithing

Magic-Smithing

by kosnik4

Warning This fiction contains:
  • Gore
  • Profanity
  • Sexual Content
  • Traumatising content

I put all the warning tags to give myself creative freedom, but I'm not going to write a story filled with gore or swearing.

This is my first time writing, other than for school projects. I put the gender-bender tag because I wanted to try writing from a female's perspective, and needed an excuse for why my MC reads a little tomboyish. The gender-bender fades into the background over the first few chapters, please don't let the tag keep you away from trying out my story.

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Second chances are rarely earned, and even rarer given. Follow a new life in a new world, where anything is possible. Our MC wakes up, stuck as a baby, needing to decide how she will live her new life. Let's see what future she can forge for herself, when hard work is rewarded with status points and skill levels.

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Mynthio
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Exquisite Fiction, right here, right now!

Reviewed at: Notice

To start, don't read this review but 'Magic Smithing' instead it is much better, I guarantee it.

With that said, this really is a LitRPG even if it doesn't have the tag and the newer chapters are prone to have more grammar mistake since the comments haven't pointed those out yet.

But anything that is pointed out will see a rapid response and thus the quality of the story increases until becoming this truly delightful story that is well worth any fan of Fantasy novels. Don't let yourself be discouraged by the Gender Bender tag, any elements pertaining to it are so minimal you wouldn't even notice without it being pointed out.

Now, don't take my word for it and just read it for yourself.

stonedalpaca
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A worthwhile read that's just getting better

Reviewed at: Ch: 16

An excellent story! Don't be put off by the gender swap, it's not really much of a to-do. It's purely used as a vehicle for the author's defence in the event of ignorance regarding writing a female protagonist.

There are a decent number of typos and grammar errors early on, but the later chapters have been getting better and the author's improvement in writing style, dialog, and pacing are palpable with the last few chapters feeling more and more like a published novel I'd pay money for.

Really look forward to what this will become!!

Maxsimal
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Starts off decent, needs more work

Reviewed at: Ch: 32

Was an ok litrpg/isekai for a while.  Nothing marvellous, and definitely suffering from an MC developing a little over the top OP, but serviceable.  Lots of little annoying bits, like medieval people speaking in absurdly precise percentages, but it was working.

 

Around chapter 30 though, whatever editting or proofreading that had been applied to seems to have been lost, and the story quality dipped, while at the same time the MCs unexplained ass-pull magic abilities take an unfortunate turn for the worse.  

Mightgai
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Good story but MESSY author

Reviewed at: Ch: 77

I'm literally commenting because the author wrote an apology about his messy posting on his patreon and I WOULD PAY MONEY to see the comment section. I stopped paying back in June but YALLLLLLLLLL the comment section was wild before BUT THEN IT WAS COMFIRMED and I want to be a fly on the wall. If ppl have screenshots. DM me🤣

Harmless.Carrot
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Initially interesting but Author lost the plot

Reviewed at: Ch: 64

It was initially fun / interesting but then the Author lost the plot. I read till Chapter 90 but even till then the MC has not made a single true runed magic item - ie it's a very slow read.

What makes it worse is that the Author keeps giving view points of random people. Chapter 90 was the last straw for me as then Author gave the view point of a MOB character... so yeah, that's enough. I have no interest in mob characters.

Bookman
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Up front: I only give 5 stars to true masterpieces.
Fictions like lord of the ring , the song of ice and fire etc.
The avrage story on RR gets 2,5 stars from me.
Anything abouve that is good.

Now to this story.
Dam this is good.
I was leary at the beginning of another story of a man becomming a woman but so far it looks like the MC accepted her fate.
I just hope that this doesnt turn into another lesbian MC. The fact that nearly every lesbian in fiction is poorly portraid at the best of times in most fictions aside,
Its the term "male turns female and is only liking other females" that is so overused that i can only roll my eyes whenever i see another fiction fall to it.
Dead gods cant a female mc fall in love with a male?



Now that aside the story so far is still in its child shoes.
Yes the MC is allready pretty high level but we are still in the starting villiage in terms of story.
For now i am praying for a fast forward to the help ariving.
Im eager to see the rest of the world you forshadowed.
It promisses a lot and it shows that the villiage is allready to small for someone of her calliber.

When you intruduced the female general, it was said that she is the only female in that position. Most likely due to her beeing the only female with high enough levels in that class.
Thats good.
Far to many female MC storys make the mistake of having nearly every powerfull person be female while even the male powerhouses fail to compare.
Forget about a male of the same age as the female MC beeing equal or more powerfull.
Offcourses this happens the other way around as well but that doesnt make it any less cringeworthy.


The Blacksmithing parts are well done. I have no idea of blacksmithing but they are entertaining enough

The only negativ site i can comment on is this pattern
MC asks master to do something
Master does it.
MC asks master to do something
Master does it
MC asks master to do somthing
Master does it

That is unatural.
IF you work with someone for so long, then you both have and insight into when to help the other and in what action.
That goes double for a master.
The master should know if the apprentice needs help on something without the apprentice calling out every singel action.

You dont need to give confermation of the master helping the mc on every singel step.
you could state it like
Mc asks for help
Master afirms
Then following that the sentences are laid out in
MC does action 1 while master does action 2.

I kinda suck at explaining



All in all in all there is to little story to give anthing more then 4 stars.
When we see more of the world and more characters, then im going to update my review.
Until then i only pray for more updates.

With high regards
Bookman

Hawkstorm125
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Seems to not understand its own context

Reviewed at: Ch: 66

This story up until chapter 64 was a Great read until the author decided to just set up and kill a character in a single chapter because the author failed to consider real scenarios between combatants and then claims "I didn't want to kill the character however they were backed into a corner by the previous chapters." whilst in no way was the character backed into a corner. In the future, I hope the author can keep in mind their actual settings to ensure they aren't simply claiming things when there is no evidence to support it All in all quite disappointed in the way the novel seems to be moving.

His Holiness Lord Potato
Overall

Amazing story and goog characters

Reviewed at: Ch: 45

Progression and interactions're good enough to keep me steamrolling the pages. World building is good I hope author keeps that up. I think she is working even harder than hard worker on earth but who am I to judge almost every one of the novel I read has ultra hard working mc.

Umbral
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Early days, but enjoyable so far

Reviewed at: Ch: 36

The story starts off as you would imagine with the whole Isekai tag, however for the most part the actuall reincarnation is not overly meaningful. To give some context to my earlier statement the main character does not use much of their earth knowledge to effect things, they are mostly comfortable exploring the sytem of this new world and only occasionaly is the reincarnation much of a factor save for the beginning of the story.

Another factor that may put some people off is the genderbender tag, honestly its not important to the story and the protagonist quickly comes to accept their circumstances and its not mentioned again. To be honest the author would have been better off just writing a female character from the start.

Now with that preamble out of the way I better get to discussing the story. Personally I think its quite fun, most of the characters are well written and the way Aaliyah navigates the leveling system is believable.

The author also deserves some praise for the leveling system itself as it is quite different from most Lit RPGS. a quick summary is that people gain exp frim skill level ups in adition to defating enemies. The more advanced the skill the more EXP it provides for example cleaning might be a level 1 skill and smithing might be level 3 skill, Each level of smithing provides significantly more exp than a level of cleaning.

The charactes themselves are fine, mainly just needing to be flleshed out more which will come with time.

I think the stoy will appeal to those of you out there that love a good crafting system in a video game. which ironically leads me to my biggest criticism of the story, the lack of crafting.

Honestly I would have liked it if more time was spent messing with crafting and comming up with new things during the story. Its only just recently that Aaliyah has created her first original recipe. I hope from this point on that we continue to explore this.

All in all I would give the story a reccomendation, yes it has issues but the author does seem to be constantly improving as time goes on.

 

bayks77
Overall

Interesting story

Reviewed at: Ch: 36

It is a really good story, is very much slice of life which I enjoy, with more character interactions than explanations about growth. The only thing reason I gave this 4/5 stars is because I am pretty sure that the author is trying to do this for a job, and literally every chapter is going on about Patreon. I understand that you may want to make money off of this, but when at the start of every ... single ... chapter .... is "sign up for Patreon, they are x ahead" it gets old pretty quickly. If you can avoid that, then it is a pretty good story about creation, instead of just constantly killing, so that is a great premise :) Really enjoy the story, respect you are trying to make money, but please .... rellaaaaax!!! To be fair though, maybe it is me that needs to relax :P