Magic-Smithing

Magic-Smithing

by kosnik4

Warning This fiction contains:
  • Gore
  • Profanity
  • Sexual Content
  • Traumatising content

I put all the warning tags to give myself creative freedom, but I'm not going to write a story filled with gore or swearing.

This is my first time writing, other than for school projects. I put the gender-bender tag because I wanted to try writing from a female's perspective, and needed an excuse for why my MC reads a little tomboyish. The gender-bender fades into the background over the first few chapters, please don't let the tag keep you away from trying out my story.

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Second chances are rarely earned, and even rarer given. Follow a new life in a new world, where anything is possible. Our MC wakes up, stuck as a baby, needing to decide how she will live her new life. Let's see what future she can forge for herself, when hard work is rewarded with status points and skill levels.

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maclit
Overall

Great story, but cancelled

Reviewed at: Ch: 77

This series was randomly cancelled by the author mid arc and only announced on his Patreon.

I really enjoyed this story.  The MC is OP, but progresses through hard work which I appreciate.  The world is pretty narrow and finally sees some development right before the series is cancelled, but it seems to be a fun world.  

Travis Chin
Overall

Good, but the power spikes don't feel earned

Reviewed at: Ch: 71

It's well written, interesting, and there's a lot to enjoy. On the flip side, many of the things that make the MC powerful are just stumbled into, or make little sense in the context of a larger world.

For example, she gains a legendary max tier ability by... killing an ancient demon that randomly wanders near her village with some throwaway foreshadowing about disappearances.

To kill it, she impromptu uses a branch of magic that no one uses because "It's too dangerous and imparactical", and kills a being many, many times more powerful than her.

Despite the supposed danger, manually telling spells/mana what to do in English has been extremely powerful with little in the way of negative effects or mana waste... and seems like it 1000% should have been exploited by someone. 

Lastly, she levels up much faster than anyone else due to her nature as a reincarnated.  

There's only so many advantages you can give an MC before their accomplishments stop feeling like accomplishments. It feels like the MC is playing at a much easier difficulty than everyone else. It cheapens her accomplishments and makes her failures less sympathetic.

unnatural20
Overall

Potential to be great

Reviewed at: CH: 84

This is a bit of a power fantasy, our MC is a power leveling madwoman in relation to her peers, the setting and premise are pretty run of the mill the execution is not, it is a very solid at worst, the story as of now has potential to become one of the best on the site im going to be honest and say please stay good.

noks
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It's readable. It's one of those OP MC tho, and while some might say that "oh, she's got a lot of opponents so how can she be OP?" well, she's also supposed to be a blacksmith that happens to be able to topple over opponents.

 

It's still somewhat within reason tho, the biggest flaw this story has is its magic, somehow speaking English literally is the equivalent of a superpower. The explanation given was that English was a more efficient language than the one they are currently using. . . wouldn't a society built on magic figure out first and foremost that they should just use an "efficient" language too? I mean, they use magic literally on a daily basis, why develop a language that's not suited for it? Also, what creativity is there in just giving instructions?

The magic system is stupid because of the language part, why can't she just make a spell that pops blood vessels? Cause aneurysms and kill a thousand people? Because of that shitty part an otherwise decent magic system goes to shit.

Think about it? She uses her knowledge of chemistry, but why? Who really knows about how atoms interact with each other? Why not just speak English and say "cut off the space in my enemy's mouth and nose" then just watch them slowly suffocate. See how stupid that magical system is? No matter how much "modern knowledge" the mc knows, she's still an average human and average humans can't really explain atomic interactions.

ZeroSkill
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This is a must read for everyone who likes a good litrpg/fantasy novel!

Reviewed at: Ch: 21

first of all, for all the poeple who want to give this story a try, do it! don't be put off just because of the gender bender tag, it's implemented in a good way and if you are well into the story you kinda forget about it.

now then, this is one of my new favorit novels out there so far. i personally rate it all the up there with storys like rebirth of the thief who roamed the world.

Edit: Still great, well i mean its getting better and better now with all that cool forging stuff . :3

SerialBeggar
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Entertaining, but lacks world building

Reviewed at: Ch: 47

This story is a very nice read.  I recommend it.

 

That said, I have a couple of issues:

1) Lack of world building.  The whole setting so far is the small village the MC was born in, plus her master's house/smith near the village.  As of 24 chapters, only one chapter (8) had the MC walking around the village where she briefly interacted with a few villagers.  Even so, there were no descriptions about the village itself.  

There's also the fact that the MC's father is the village's sole wood cutter and the circumference of the village is about a mile (from the MC running laps around it).  This implies the village is quite small, yet we readers know nothing about it.  There are villagers joking about the MC running all of the time, yet the MC apparently doesn't know them on a personal level.  How can that be in a small village?  It's like the MC never left her house as a kid before she was old enough to look for an apprenticeship.  In addition, it's odd that the MC's mother also seem to very rarely leaves the house.  

2) The MC seems too emotional.  Yeah, the MC is a female now and is/was still a yound kid.  Yet, my understanding is that rural children are usually mentally tougher and city raised kids.  Primarily because a lot of responsibilities is shoved on them and they're allowed to run loose.  Plus in this world, monsters roam around and would periodically attack the village. 

IF the MC had spent any time out of her house and interacting with the villagers (speaking of which, there doesn't seem to be any other kids in this village besides her brother and his girl friend, odd), there should have been many opportunities over the years for her to see, hear, and realize how violent the world is.  She shouldn't have a mental breakdown and faint every time she encounters monsters, except perhaps the first time.  Unless her family really coddled her and negligently didn't teach her the ways of the world.

 

All right, rant over.  The story is still good.  Some of this can be fleshed out with a few side-stories.

SlothfulTiger
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I enjoyed this story, can't wait for more. Keep it up. 

Stillness
Overall

Meandering nowhere

Reviewed at: Ch: 73

I originally started reading this story because I love stories that focus on crafting. It's rare to find a story that does it well, unfortunately, this isn't one of them. 

In regards to the smithing, the author makes the mistake of focusing on the process more than the results. When a non-expert pretends to be an expert, the actual experts can tell. Even if some of it relies of magic. The other problem is that there isn't much focus on crafting.

Across the story, there isn't much focus on anything. There is some overly detailed crafting, some fighting, trading, and magic. If I had to pin the story down as one thing I would call it a fantasy slice of life with boring characters. There are a lot of side character POV scenes, none of which felt meaningful beyond showing the reader events which impact the MC.

The thing that really made this story work was the system. There was progress, exploration, and experimentation of a mostly well designed and interesting leveling system. That's what made the story worth reading. The characters didn't have much depth. The story doesn't take the characters any where interesting, both physically and metaphorically. The writing style wasn't anything special.

There is some good stuff in this story, but for me, the bad is just too much for the story to be worth reading more.

Webnovelsaremyjam
Overall

It's a petty good novel.

Reviewed at: Ch: 36

I would give this story solid 3/5, the writing, grammar and overall way the story is presented is very well done.

I, unfortunately however, have to drop it, I am just not liking the main character, I personally do not like soft characters and the MC is the definition of soft.

If you like characters like this then this story is for you. I apologise author, I was enjoying it up to chapter 32 when it got too much.

His Holiness Lord Potato
Overall

Amazing story and goog characters

Reviewed at: Ch: 45

Progression and interactions're good enough to keep me steamrolling the pages. World building is good I hope author keeps that up. I think she is working even harder than hard worker on earth but who am I to judge almost every one of the novel I read has ultra hard working mc.