The Cosmic Interloper

by Marmoset Threat

Original ONGOING Adventure Fantasy Psychological Sci-fi Female Lead Magic Male Lead Non-Human lead Portal Fantasy / Isekai Secret Identity Strategy Strong Lead
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A cyborg transhuman escapes corporate indenture and through cosmic coincidence ends up in a fantasy world of full of unique magic, angry people with sharp things, and malicious divine entities.

Disclaimer:

- No blue boxes!

- Hard-ish Sci-Fi

- Hard-ish magic

- There will be fighting occasionally, but this isn't a combat-grinder

- Generally trying to keep this "rational". Please call me out if I slip up

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The writing is well-practiced but beige and contains the occasional spelling mistake and grammatical oddity. Nothing which would prevent understanding but broke me out of immersion a few times.

The characters are well-done and project some depth. They are, however, mostly telling instead of showing who they are. Add in regular explanatory musings by the protagonist and you get the idea: this story, unfortunately, consists mostly of info dumps. 

Don't get me wrong, there's a lot of cool stuff and interesting lore the author leads you through. The problem is that, eventually, it get's tedious to slog through the text walls (sometimes even repetitions). What excarbates this is the rather sedate progression pace of the main story line and the lack of dialogue, witty or not.

For me, the novelties this story has to offer barely outweigh the convoluted writing style. That said the only true novum to me was the idea of mind magic working like cyber warfare.

Again: Don't trust the hype. Read the first four chapters if you want a solid idea, so far there has been no marked change in tone. Personally, I'd say read this if you're in need of distraction (and fond of encyclopedia articles) but don't expect a truly engaging or meaningful story.

Sandsforever
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I think in going to enjoy how this progresses

 

I like the mc so far I normally dont read female povs (cuz I'm the worst) but it has been enjoyable 

Nothing has ripped me out of the story ie no atrocious grammer or spelling errors 

(But then again I went to school in the US so I'm probably just dumb)

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Might become my new favorite story on RR

Reviewed at: 005-C: The Saint, Dreams and Nightmares

I have high hopes for this story, it has been very interesting till now. The portal fantasy trope is a bit overused in my opinion, but the way its handled in this story makes it feel like a fresh and unique concept.

This stories biggest strength is the world building. I am especially impressed with the mc's home world. It is depressingly dystopian, while also being disturbingly plausible. It also manages to convey this rich and layerd world without any infomation bombs. 

Till now none of the characters is going win prizes for their uniquenes, but they do feel like actual people, and not just filler or objects to progress the plot. 

This story puts attention in the details. And it enriches the story a lot. For example: the mc uses killoseconds for timekeeping instead of hours. And this makes a lot of sense for a society that has multiple planets. It also enhances the general alienness of the mc.

The writer shows to have good grasp on basic physics. So there have been no immersion breaking misrepresentations of science till now.

Lord Soul
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Promising piece of Sci-fi magitech

Reviewed at: 001-A: Awakening, Where am I?

from what ive read so far...

The grammar is pretty good.

World elements well built and placed.

Enjoyed the realistic messages as well for the systems.

Promising Premise

RandeKnight
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Better than I expected from the title

Reviewed at: 006-A: Contaminant, Woodswalker

The title was initially a turn off since it sounded like a Xianxia novel.

Gave it a try and glad I did. 

Author makes no bones about following 'the heros journey'.  It's popular because it works.

Intro is a bit longer than needed.  Introduces a bunch of minor characters that we'll probably never see again and details that become irrelevant.

Henry Morgan
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Binged on this story, found it an original take on some common tropes. The MC is well written and her origin story is compelling and absorbing.

In fact the scifi universe at the start of the story is so interesting that i'd happily read a fiction on that as well as the fantasy universe. (The fantasy world is a gread read too)

This is a great story, i would definitely recommend.

BuLLZ3Y3
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Fantastic Sci-fi Romp through a Magical Plane

Reviewed at: 005-D: The Saint, Magic Jar

Reviewed at: 005-D: The Saint, Magic Jar

 

I may be alone, but I absolutely adore when a modern day, or in this case a post-human cyborg, is dropped into a medieval setting and allowed to play with the locals.  It's made all the better when there is magic involved.  Dieties, Demons, and Saints?  Doubly so.  Add on excellent writing, believable characters, and Pratchett-esque trope inversions, and you have a truly marvelous story.

Read the tags well - this is a hard sci-fi, hard magic story with no LitRPG or GameLit mechanics to it.  But if sufficiently advanced technology and sufficiently advanced magic are your wheelehouses, then take this story for a spin, I guarantee you'll enjoy it.

ASeptagonalBullet
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So far this story has been Great! It scratches an itch I had for a while now.

No real errors that I'm aware of, overall very well paced and thought out.

I look forward to more 

ikorack
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Great pacing interesting world creative use of sci-fi and magic

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Please write more dystopian sci-fi

Reviewed at: 005-E: The Saint, An Agreement

Good start, not sure how will it go in the future, but the first chapters are absolutely worth it

I'm not sure about fantasy part of the story, It's good, no doubt, but compared to the original world it just bleak. Reading MC pow in original world is like reading a different book

I'm hoping the author will write something standalone, but dystopian sci-fi only