Lucinda the Shifter

by Kurast

Original ONGOING Action Adventure Fantasy High Fantasy LitRPG Magic
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Unwilling to follow in the footsteps of her parents, Lucinda desperately seeks an alternative while enduring the beginnings of a lifestyle she has no interest in.

What she wants, is to gain the ability to transform into a variety of animal forms. But, first she has to find out what Class that is, and then how to actually become it.

This tale follows the journey of Lucinda. From the largest turning point in her short life, and through the events that follow.

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Milanda
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So first I'm not entirely sure if the emphasis here is supposed to be based on some form of D&D or not. It's a gamelit where the MC begins her journey preparing for the class she wants and things roll from there. At the time of the review she hasn't attained it yet but it's been a bit of a ride getting there.

The writing is solid albeit the author leans for shorter chapters. I'm hopeful for the future and can't wait to see where they go from here. I'd suggest giving it a try for anyone who likes Druidic/nature based MCs

StarFighter
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A promising story, rooting for Lucinda!

Reviewed at: 10. Desperate Pursuit

Game lit typically isn't my thing, but I'm enjoying this story so far. I like Lucinda, and the idea of pursuing forbidden options / going against the grain of your parents wishes makes her a compelling 16 year old. Still, she has lots to learn, and isn't immediately overpowered like a lot of young MCs in coming of age stories. Thus 5/5 for character.

Normal tiny things here and there on grammar, but mostly fine. 4.5/5

Story wise, it hasn't struck me as anything unique, but it also hasn't driven me away with too many stats / leveling chapters (personal preference). Some of the early plot aspects felt a bit contrived, but it soon had me hooked and either got better or I stopped noticing. If you like action / fantasy adventure / game lit, you should check out this story 4.5/5

Style wise, it was refreshing for me to not be overloaded with the game aspects (as of chapter 10). They are there and compliment the story nicely. Sometimes the story feels a bit telly (opposed to show vs. tell), but the information is relevant and interesting.

Also, as a sci-fi fan who loves DS9, shape shifters are the best!

 

 

TheWitchOfTheRock
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TLDR: Good story, keeps the "game" feel without getting me bogged down in details and stats. I more feel like it's a real word, just with game mechanics, which is good!

Style is good. A few spots here and there were the abruptness of a sentence or the way a paragraph was cut off was a little jarring, but no big issues. 

 

Grammar: some  issues with sentence structure in the beginning, but it improved quickly. Maybe a quick reread of the first chapter might  help


Story is good!  It's a basic story, but  it has heart, and that's what's importnat. 

 

Character: Keep me interested in the character, and you keep me interested in the story. Lucinda has me interested. 

glbell
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A fun coming of age story with a theme that pairs well with the shifter setting

Reviewed at: 24. Communication and Learning

This story is pretty enjoyable so far. It reminds me of the YA fantasy books I would read when I was younger that I would get lost in on the car ride home. A nice, light LitRPG story.

Style

I enjoyed the author's writing style in this story. Words and sentences, thoughts and descriptions, flowed together nicely, and it wasn't choppy or hard to slug through. The perfect balance of flowery and straight-forward.

The dialogue is a bit flowery too, but I think it fits with the setting of the story.

Grammar 

There were a couple of spelling and punctuation errors here and there but nothing that a quick run through grammerly and prowritingaid can't help.

Story/ Character

I really enjoy the main character, Lucinda. She has an innocence to her and a strong will to be her own person yet a hesitance to move forward that's relatable. I also enjoyed when the story delved into her thoughts because, frankly, if I were in some of the situations she found herself in I would be thinking the same thing.  Her drive to break free from her parent's expectations and do what she wishes is also something that people might find relatable. The struggles she experiences after certain pitfalls may also be relatable to readers.

Additionally, the world-building was quite nice and the reader will be able to get a pretty clear picture of what kind of society the characters are living in in the first couple of chapters.

The relationship dynamics in this story are interesting and it's fun to see all the characters interact with one another. However (and this is a personal opinion) her relationships with some of the older cast in the story are a bit too spicy for me. These relationships "fit" and "makes sense" in the context of the story but the recurrent age gap is a bit uncomfortable. Again, this is just my opinion. 

I'm interested to see how Lucinda grows in her travels and how her shifter powers play into her coming of age.

Anyways, long story short, who hasn't wanted to be able to turn into an animal?

Frogs
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Off to a good start.

Pros: Nice magic system with some soft litrpg elements and some dungeons and dragons type classes thrown in. The shapeshiftig is believable in the context of the story. The characters (for the part) are pretty well thought out. Most of their motives are believable but there are some where I question their actions as being a bit too odd. I suck at grammar so take my grammar score at face value. The only thing I can say is that nothing pulled me out of the story.

Cons: Some of the motives and behaviors of the supporting charters are a bit off.  Examples under the spoilers. One encounter (see second spoiler below) seemed rushed.

Spoiler: Spoiler

 

Spoiler: Spoiler

 Otherwise very good story so far.

 

parkertallan
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Great Story and Wonderful Characters

Reviewed at: 13. Dead of Night

"Lucinda the Shifter" is a wonderful story about a young woman's journey to achieving her dream of becoming a Shifter. As we first meet Lucinda, we immediately see her determination to defy her parents' expectations to follow her dream. The author does a good job of exploring Luinda's internal battle as she fears hurting her parents, yet can't accept the choice they've made for her.

However, this isn't a mere coming of age story. As she begins training to become a Shifter, strong LitRPG and D&D elements enter the story. The system the author has come up with is wonderfully detailed, yet is explained well.

Strong secondary characters, particularly Lucinda's mentor, greatly enhance the story. The wordplay between mentor and apprentice is particularly well done.

The grammar had a few minor issues, but is overall quite good.

Filled with excitement, humor, and a few unexpected turns, "Lucinda the Shifter" is well worth the read.

Olympic
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Better than expected!

Reviewed at: 9. Coming of Age

I somehow didn't think a story of a shapeshifter would be all that enjoyable but I ended up finishing all the available chapter in a day :P 

 

I think that tells you all you need to know, but just to list it out.

The characters were very likeable in my opinion and the interaction were enjoyable and were fairly realistic.

The relationship between her and her mentor while some probably find it iffy, for me it produced some fun banter and the intamite scenes aren't described so for me atleast I don't mind relationship in the book and find their interactions to be enjoyable. 

looking forward to the next available chapters!

RoseButter
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A calm coming of age story

Reviewed at: 26. Eclectic Entourage

This story is not about heroes or grand adventure. This story is about a young woman finding her way in the world. Most of the readers on this site will not enjoy the tone, the pace, the characters, or their decisions. I however, found the story touching. This story is calm and peaceful feeling (despite encounters with violence), delicately balancing the themes of a litrpg with a coming of age adventure. Our heroine makes mistakes, but is all-together human. At this point in the story, she is still infused with wonder and discovery, which makes for a nice breath of fresh air.

ManeReader
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The best and worst of 'coming of age'

Reviewed at: 26. Eclectic Entourage

This is an interesting story. It's very well written, but for some reason the way the story flows makes it hard to want to 'turn the page'. Again, it's well written so it isn't a matter of quality. Whether it's the needless use of overly lengthy sentences or the somewhat generic fantastical tone or some combination of word choice and sentence structure, the flow of the story just doesn't jive with me. What's being said is interesting but how its being communicated is less so. 

Never noticed any grammatical mishaps. 

Coming of age stories present a curious situation, character growth becomes easy while side characters become difficult (more on the latter later). Character growth gets easier because it's the story. Who Lucinda becomes and how she becomes that person, is the story. It's personal and based on internal conflicts rather than external ones. Of course external conflicts exist, but their role is more as fuel for more interesting internal ones. The author does this very well, both presenting interesting conflicts and allowing Lucinda tackle them in ways that are engaging. I'm not that big on LitRPG, but the genre is probably the best when character growth is a key element of the story. It definitely works to this story's favor. (Obviously if you just like LitRPG, this features the standard elements. I'm not the best at judging the quality or originality of 'systems' tho)

On the character side of things. I don't think I like a single character besides the MC. Her mentor turn fling dude, dude is decent, but even he could use a bit of work. This is a common issue in coming of age stories, how do you write the side characters? How do you make then full fleshed individuals when 1. Much of the screen time needs to be spent on the MC and their growth 2. If they feature in the early stages of the story, they have to in some way be shaping that growth. Whether it's through direct support, or presenting a challenge the MC can solve relatively quickly. and 3. Young character's tend to lack the ability to exert influence on others, so interactions with the MC become one dimensional. While the author, for the most part, dodges the third issue the other two issues are unaddressed. That leaves characters with very little time to accomplish a very specific goal before quickly being shunned to the back of our minds. Even as the story progresses, most side characters merely exist to service Lucinda's story rather than be individuals in their own right. 

Overall, it's a good coming of age story that features both the best and worst of its subgenre.

JamesSteimel
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The story is well written except for the sudden curve ball the author throws with the relationship between the MC and her mentor. Although the ages are disconcerting, it's really the dynamic between them that feels off and ruins the story for me. I don't think their relationship provides all that much to the story and it could use a rewrite to fix this issue as I've seen it's the only one plaguing readers.