Ragna: A young girl's failure to become a hero
by YAK Edge
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Family, love, a promising military career - Ragna Griffin's life was perfect. Well, it was, but when her kingdom brands her a terrorist, it all falls apart. Caught in the center of a conspiracy, she's forced to flee.
Thus, Ragna sets off on a journey to clear her name. Unfortunately, she'll soon realize the cruel and brutal reality of the real world. Each day, her mind and convictions drift closer to their limits.
In the end, will she persevere or break?
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Style: The style is well done with little notable issues.
Grammar: Occasional typographical issue, nothing major or intrusive.
Story: This is the strongest point IMHO. After an action packed intro we are treated to some slower paced world-building. This works because the odd hybrid of norse myth and sci-fi is a very interesting place to learn more about, followed by building up to the main plot with all its thriller promises.
Characters: The characters are well done well done but some characters occasionally act a bit too ‘contemporary’, clashing with the interesting and unique setting.
In conclusion: If you want to see out a uniquely curious world where myth meets the mechanical check out Ragna
First of all, this story is competently written. There are some small mistakes/confusion of similar words, but they don't detract from the story. Neither do much the occasional tense slip. The author has a solid technique. I want to emphasize his beautiful use of imagery, something one can really appreciate. The mood is also set with some in-world references - though these do need to be explained further later!
The setting is very interesting: a long-lasting peace forged between belligerant nations after a catastrophe in the past. Of course, they still skirmish in the shadows, and that's one of the roles of the military unit the MC wants to join, following in the footsteps of her parents. The author has created a norse-inspired sci-fi setting, with advanced technologies. The looming breaking of the peace is well-done.
I admit that the new adult style of story has lost some of its luster in my more advanced age, but I can recognize it when it's well done. The MC is midly irritating, but she's clearly being set up to progress and evolve throughout the story. The major characters glimpsed so far have already shown some nice quirks/personalities and I believe this should only improve.
Overall, an interesting and well-done story.
I'll admit, I'm known for not reading stories that don't have the most extravagant covers to catch my interest, but I'm glad that I read this one. It has an excellent mesh of pacing, characters, action, and world building that all fall into a story genre that I wish this site had more of. Because of everything melding so well IMO, I only saw it fit to give it a perfect score by my standards. I couldn't really find reasons to detract from anything because most of my issues were already fixed by the author or explained to me kindly.
The story follows Ragna, a hot-blooded woman on a quest to become a Valkyrie, but is betrayed and now must fight for her innocence and freedom. It is a typical road to innocence story that is well executed and filled with lore and mythos that makes everything come alive.
Everything is beautifully descriptive without going overboard, be it characters or settings, and the action scenes are fluidly written as well. The characters are all unique with distinctly different personalities, and even if you were to scratch out the names of said characters when they spoke, you'd likely still know who was talking anyway.
The thing I'm most impressed with, and love most in a story, though, is originality and creativity. The author has exceeded my expectations in both of those regards and rewarded me with a story that I can't easily liken to anything else I've read or seen in media. Because of that, I plan on following and seeing how Ragna's adventure goes. Stories like this are the type of things I look for on RR and sadly struggle to find. It's good!
This story is worth the read, I recommend it.
Well written and exciting, this story contains twists and layers that you have to put some time into the story to appreciate.
As a fellow author, I know how unforgiving some readers can be, and the only real criticism I might have for this story is that it takes a while to get to a point where you end up caring about the main chatacters...
However, is this a bug, or a feature? That is the difficulty, as I think the author has designed it this way, and I can see why, but I can imagine that many people here wouldn't invest enough time to make it pay out.
Therefore, as I said in the title, this is a complex story that is worth sticking around for!
I've only read two chapters so far, but I loved. The MC Ragna was so funny. I didn't see any problems with the grammar. Ragna is a great character and the ending was good. Story so far was lovely too and I had no issues with the style.
Ragna is the tale of, well, Ragna, a military trainee hoping to become a Valkyrie, which is basically a cross between a super soldier and a celebrity. She's very thoughtful when it comes to morality, especially the differences between a hero and a monster, and very idealistic with her thinking.
The author's liberal use of norse mythology influence to construct their world is great. I've often seen books drawing from greek mythology, but other than the percy jackson spin-off books and the thor movies, we haven't seen too much fiction about scandinavian culture.
The world is also great - it's like a mix of sci fi and norse myths, which makes for a very interesting choice of weapons and tactics. For example, MC's gravity glove thingy.
The story is also pretty nice. While I haven't read far enough to get a super-solid grasp on it, we start to see the beginnings of what could be a captivating tale by chapter 7, where things start to heat up a little bit.
The grammar is great - I've only seen a few little mistakes here and there. I couldn't believe it when the author told me they were a non-native english speaker, because their prose flows better than like 90% of americans!
The characters in this story are truly great. The author just has a way of getting you to care about each and every one of them, and they don't seem like the typical tropes either. We get an intimate look into Ragna's thoughts, her relationship with Sven, and even how she views the world. I even found myself liking the father, which is something not a lot of stories manage, especially given his money-grubbing tendencies haha.
Overall, a fantastic read. Those who want a break from the typical elves and dwarves fantasy: maybe give this one a try!
The story itself is an interesting one. The world building is quite intricate and it takes a twist on Norse mythology that I haven't encountered before in any other story.
The story/plot/world building aspects are by far the best parts of the story. You have an ongoing mystery on a coup going on that's fun to theorize about and then one of the later chapters introduces you to another aspect of the plot that's probably going to take over the story (maybe, we'll see).
The characters are more on the back burner, they have distinct personalities but they aren't as... fetching? As the plot. Ragna herself is a naive and conceited one year cadet that slowly learns the reality of what the world is really like.
Grammar and style wise- there are some clarity issues and the occasional typo.
I have to start out by saying that I loved the use of Norse mythology within the context of the world the novel lies in, as someone who appreciates foreign cultures, it was very fun to read. Mixing and matching myth with modern/hi-tech science was done really well by the author and the resulting effect was something very unique.
The world-building was fantastic, I really appreciate a well-written setting, reading this novel, I could feel the world within ‘Ragna’ come alive, and I loved it! The author was very, very descriptive with regards to the world.
The characters were fun, they have their funny moments, they have their strong moments and there are moments where they feel more vulnerable, which is something I really like. But, I haven’t gotten too far yet, so there’s a lot of things regarding the characters that I’m not 100% certain about. However, I really loved the dynamic between Ragna and Sven, they’re a rather well-suited pair, her with a bit of a headstrong personality, and Sven with his more supportive style.
There wasn’t much to say about the grammar, nothing popped out to me that felt too wrong, and the ‘mistakes’ are probably something I only view as such due to my wonky grammatical sense.
Overall, I really loved the novel! I’ll definitely give it a further read when I start having a bit more free time.
As of Chapter 7, Ragna reads like an action movie—complete with intense fights and pretty scenes.
Author YAK Edge has a very distinct and unique vision, painting a world that to me, feels like Final Fantasy XIII. The scenes are all described with great prose and the YAK Edge crafts scenes with a stylish, yet appropriate command of the English language without making it too bombastic. My issue with the first arc is this—there's just too many terms and characters appearing that it takes away my experience from enjoying the scenes. Instead of visualising the atmosphere or the mood, my mind is bombarded with "who's who again?" or "what's this?". The lore, terms and characters should be drip-fed. As of right now, the information overload somewhat distracts from the amazing prose and scenes.
Behind the beautiful yet convoluted scenes, lie a story of grand proportions. The pacing is great, with action sequences that already hooked me in as well as powerful forces and a deep and engaging world which will undoubtedly set the story in an epic adventure. The first arc really has the making of a great inciting incident.
Tense-wise I didn't detect anything wrong, however, there were parts where characters screamed or shouted, but their dialogue ends with full stops instead of exclamation marks. It's jarring for me to picture people shouting without "!" at the end of the sentence. But that's just a minor nitpick, overall it's very readable and easily digested.
There's a lot of depth to the characters. While I do feel they can get a bit too chatty, especially during fights, the characters have great, distinctive personalities and do not feel boring even once. Their relationships are dynamic, their interactions are engaging, and they certainly would do well if they appeared on a reality TV show.
If you can look past unfamiliar terms and characters appearing without much to latch on, this is a 5 star fiction hands down. Lively, adrenaline pumping and emotionally driven, I sincerely hope Ragna gets a webcomic adaptation—it's an amazing piece of literature that would be even more outstanding through visual storytelling.
The story pulled me in. There's enough desciption to show you the world, action to keep you interested, and inter-personal conflict to keep you wondering what's next.
I love the addition and remaking of Germanic mythology in this world.