Ragna: A young girl's failure to become a hero

by YAK Edge

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Family, love, a promising military career - Ragna Griffin's life was perfect. Well, it was, but when her kingdom brands her a terrorist, it all falls apart. Caught in the center of a conspiracy, she's forced to flee.

Thus, Ragna sets off on a journey to clear her name. Unfortunately, she'll soon realize the cruel and brutal reality of the real world. Each day, her mind and convictions drift closer to their limits.

In the end, will she persevere or break?

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Table of Contents
Chapter Name Release Date
Table of contents and map of Aes ago
A guide to runes (read after chapter 29) ago
Chapter 01 - Angel and imp ago
Chapter 02 - Millennium Peace ago
Chapter 03 - Valkyries ago
Chapter 04 - Halcyon day countdown ago
Chapter 05 - The end of the beginning ago
Chapter 06 - The curtain rises, the griffin falls ago
Chapter 07 - Call to adventure ago
Extra chapter 1 - Hungry empty vanity ago
Extra chapter 1.5 - Angels with masks ago
Chapter 08 - The angel I hate ago
Chapter 09- Frisian Forset's motel of horror ago
Chapter 10 - The seven in heaven ago
Chapter 11 - Princess illusion ago
Chapter 12 - Sky desire ago
Chapter 13 - The rainbow train ago
Chapter 14 - High speed; high death ago
Extra chapter 2 - Please cry when I die ago
Chapter 15 - Clockwork Horrorshow ago
Chapter 16 - Maestro's first lecture ago
Chapter 17 - The real colors of the world ago
Chapter 18 - Choose the evil, impose the good ago
Chapter 19 - Freedom for lust ago
Chapter 20 - Gods singing in the rain ago
Chapter 21 - Lockdown heretics ago
Chapter 22 - Past marvels ago
Chapter 23 - God abandoned you ago
Chapter 24 - Fly away ago
Extra chapter 3 - Debating life from god's point of view ago
Chapter 25 - An angel and a schism ago
Chapter 26 - Don't take it for granted ago
Chapter 27 - Hiding under the sun ago
Chapter 28 - Language of gods ago
Chapter 29 - Reflections are ephemeral ago
Chapter 30 - Voyagers past the horizon ago
Chapter 31 - Hear. Fear. Clear. ago
Chapter 32 - Eldritch and twisted ago
Chapter 33 - Upon all the universe has to hold of horror ago
Chapter 34 - Placid island amidst black seas of infinity ago
Chapter 35 - Fey ago
Chapter 36 - Night of the albatross ago
Extra chapter 4 - Do you deny yourself? ago
Chapter 37 - New day blues ago
Chapter 38 - Roundtable territory ago
Chapter 39 - Progression stasis ago
Chapter 40 - Watchers under watchmen ago
Chapter 41 - Giri Giri Grigori ago
Chapter 42 – Frozen lights ago
Chapter 43 - Sonnenritter >Knights of the sun< ago
Chapter 44 - Toxic apostles ago
Chapter 45 - Retreat complete ago
Chapter 46 - Beasts of justice ago
Chapter 47 - Sideshow symphony ago
Chapter 48 - Screaming orchestra ago
Chapter 49 - Apostle of storms ago
Chapter 50 - Your cute little sister ago
Chapter 51 - A campaign for true beauty ago
Chapter 52 - Utopia princess ago
Chapter 53 - Goddess is artificial ago
Chapter 54 - Kingdom beyond; Mana City ago
Chapter 55 - Acting without purpose ago
Chapter 56 - Stay with family or not ago
Chapter 57 - Niebelungentreue >Loyalty of the Niebelungen< ago
Chapter 58 - Prelude to judgment ago
Chapter 59 - The absurd logic ago
Chapter 60 - Temple of the outer god ago
Chapter 61 - The world end tower ago
Chapter 62 – Level 1 "Heroes never fail": Start ago
Chapter 63 – Level 1 "Heroes never fail": Perfection imperfect ago
Chapter 64 – Level 1 "Heroes never fail": Be a saint or an assassin ago
Chapter 65 – Level 1 "Heroes never fail": Wings of divine right ago
Chapter 66 – Level 1 "Heroes never fail": Saving for hope ago
Chapter 67 – Level 1 "Heroes never fail": Love me, hate me, kiss me, kill me ago
Chapter 68 – Level 1 "Heroes never fail": Dungeons and debauchery ago
Chapter 69 – Level 1 "Heroes never fail": The lightbringer princess ago
Chapter 70 – Level 2 "Bipolar nightmare": Racing thoughts ago
Chapter 71 – Level 2 "Bipolar nightmare": No god, but a meme ago
Chapter 72 – Level 2 "Bipolar nightmare": In a hero's image ago
Chapter 73 – Level 2 "Bipolar nightmare": Broken psyche shards ago
Chapter 74 – Level 3 "The hemorrhage countdown": At the mountain of absurdity ago
Chapter 75 – Level 3 "The hemorrhage countdown": Cry to smile ago
Chapter 76 – Level 3 "The hemorrhage countdown": There is nothing lefft ago
Chapter 77 – Level 3 "The hemorrhage countdown": Blood sacrifice ago
Chapter 78 - Intermezzo 1 "Requiem and reminiscence": Prey on predator ago
Chapter 79 – Intermezzo 1 "Requiem and reminiscence": Jus ad bellum ago
Chapter 80 – Intermezzo 1 "Requiem and reminiscence": How a hero is born ago
Chapter 81 – Level 4 "Aesir = Asurah": Primordial sea//Fiction cosmogony ago
Chapter 82 – Level 4 "Aesir = Asurah": Fate//Choice autonomy ago
Chapter 83 – Level 4 "Aesir = Asurah": Tragoedia//Comedia ago
Chapter 84 – Level 4 "Aesir = Asurah": Light of ruin//Titan of insight ago
Chapter 85 – Level 4 "Aesir = Asurah": Death drive//Will to survive ago
Chapter 86 – Level 4 "Aesir = Asurah": Fake life//Refuse to die ago
Chapter 87 – Level 4 "Aesir = Asurah": Future silk//Victory in progress ago
Chapter 88 - Intermezzo 2 "Thrash-talk poets": Liars, thieves, and heroes ago
Chapter 89 - Intermezzo 2 "Thrash-talk poets": Crossing fates ago
Chapter 90 – Level 5 "No freedom but my own": March of progress ago
Chapter 91 – Level 5 "No freedom but my own": Ice and blood ago
Chapter 92 – Level 5 "No freedom but my own": The sun's enemy ago
Chapter 93 – Level 5 "No freedom but my own": Dream beyond electric sheep ago
Chapter 94 – Level 6 "Broken idol theory": Transcendent paradox ago
Chapter 95 – Level 6 "Broken idol theory": Why the sun shines in the sky ago
Chapter 96 – Level 6 "Broken idol theory": Choser of the slain ago
Chapter 97 – Level 6 "Broken idol theory": Burning angel, cooling dragon ago
Chapter 98 – Level 7 "Yellow roses, wild hyacinth, sweet alyssum": Delusional grandeur blooms ago
Chapter 99 – Level 7 "Yellow roses, wild hyacinth, sweet alyssum": Valkyria roots ago
Chapter 100 – Level 7 "Yellow roses, wild hyacinth, sweet alyssum": Petals in frenzy ago
Chapter 101 – Level 7 "Yellow roses, wild hyacinth, sweet alyssum": Isolation Evergreen ago
Chapter 102 – Level 7 "Yellow roses, wild hyacinth, sweet alyssum": Breakdown Cotyledon ago

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Jon Wander

Style: The style is well done with little notable issues.

Grammar: Occasional typographical issue, nothing major or intrusive.

Story: This is the strongest point IMHO. After an action packed intro we are treated to some slower paced world-building. This works because the odd hybrid  of norse myth and sci-fi is a very interesting place to learn more about, followed by building up to the main plot with all its thriller promises.

Characters: The characters are well done well done but some characters occasionally act a bit too ‘contemporary’, clashing with the interesting and unique setting.

In conclusion: If you want to see out a uniquely curious world where myth meets the mechanical check out Ragna


First of all, this story is competently written. There are some small mistakes/confusion of similar words, but they don't detract from the story. Neither do much the occasional tense slip. The author has a solid technique. I want to emphasize his beautiful use of imagery, something one can really appreciate. The mood is also set with some in-world references - though these do need to be explained further later!

The setting is very interesting: a long-lasting peace forged between belligerant nations after a catastrophe in the past. Of course, they still skirmish in the shadows, and that's one of the roles of the military unit the MC wants to join, following in the footsteps of her parents. The author has created a norse-inspired sci-fi setting, with advanced technologies. The looming breaking of the peace is well-done.

I admit that the new adult style of story has lost some of its luster in my more advanced age, but I can recognize it when it's well done. The MC is midly irritating, but she's clearly being set up to progress and evolve throughout the story. The major characters glimpsed so far have already shown some nice quirks/personalities and I believe this should only improve.

Overall, an interesting and well-done story.


Story heavy with lore and action

Reviewed at: Chapter 39 - Sideshow symphony

I'll admit, I'm known for not reading stories that don't have the most extravagant covers to catch my interest, but I'm glad that I read this one. It has an excellent mesh of pacing, characters, action, and world building that all fall into a story genre that I wish this site had more of. Because of everything melding so well IMO, I only saw it fit to give it a perfect score by my standards. I couldn't really find reasons to detract from anything because most of my issues were already fixed by the author or explained to me kindly.

The story follows Ragna, a hot-blooded woman on a quest to become a Valkyrie, but is betrayed and now must fight for her innocence and freedom. It is a typical road to innocence story that is well executed and filled with lore and mythos that makes everything come alive. 

Everything is beautifully descriptive without going overboard, be it characters or settings, and the action scenes are fluidly written as well. The characters are all unique with distinctly different personalities, and even if you were to scratch out the names of said characters when they spoke, you'd likely still know who was talking anyway. 

The thing I'm most impressed with, and love most in a story, though, is originality and creativity. The author has exceeded my expectations in both of those regards and rewarded me with a story that I can't easily liken to anything else I've read or seen in media. Because of that, I plan on following and seeing how Ragna's adventure goes. Stories like this are the type of things I look for on RR and sadly struggle to find. It's good!


This story is worth the read, I recommend it.


Complex story that is worth sticking around for

Reviewed at: Chapter 03 - Ballad of false reality

Well written and exciting, this story contains twists and layers that you have to put some time into the story to appreciate. 

As a fellow author, I know how unforgiving some readers can be, and the only real criticism I might have for this story is that it takes a while to get to a point where you end up caring about the main chatacters...

However, is this a bug, or a feature? That is the difficulty, as I think the author has designed it this way, and I can see why, but I can imagine that many people here wouldn't invest enough time to make it pay out.

Therefore, as I said in the title, this is a complex story that is worth sticking around for!


I've only read two chapters so far, but I loved. The MC Ragna was so funny. I didn't see any problems with the grammar. Ragna is a great character and the ending was good. Story so far was lovely too and I had no issues with the style.


Ragna is the tale of, well, Ragna, a military trainee hoping to become a Valkyrie, which is basically a cross between a super soldier and a celebrity. She's very thoughtful when it comes to morality, especially the differences between a hero and a monster, and very idealistic with her thinking.

The author's liberal use of norse mythology influence to construct their world is great. I've often seen books drawing from greek mythology, but other than the percy jackson spin-off books and the thor movies, we haven't seen too much fiction about scandinavian culture. 

The world is also great - it's like a mix of sci fi and norse myths, which makes for a very interesting choice of weapons and tactics. For example, MC's gravity glove thingy.

The story is also pretty nice. While I haven't read far enough to get a super-solid grasp on it, we start to see the beginnings of what could be a captivating tale by chapter 7, where things start to heat up a little bit.

The grammar is great - I've only seen a few little mistakes here and there. I couldn't believe it when the author told me they were a non-native english speaker, because their prose flows better than like 90% of americans!

The characters in this story are truly great. The author just has a way of getting you to care about each and every one of them, and they don't seem like the typical tropes either. We get an intimate look into Ragna's thoughts, her relationship with Sven, and even how she views the world. I even found myself liking the father, which is something not a lot of stories manage, especially given his money-grubbing tendencies haha.

Overall, a fantastic read. Those who want a break from the typical elves and dwarves fantasy: maybe give this one a try!


The story itself is an interesting one. The world building is quite intricate and it takes a twist on Norse mythology that I haven't encountered before in any other story.

The story/plot/world building aspects are by far the best parts of the story. You have an ongoing mystery on a coup going on that's fun to theorize about and then one of the later chapters introduces you to another aspect of the plot that's probably going to take over the story (maybe, we'll see).

The characters are more on the back burner, they have distinct personalities but they aren't as... fetching? As the plot. Ragna herself is a naive and conceited one year cadet that slowly learns the reality of what the world is really like. 

Grammar and style wise- there are some clarity issues and the occasional typo. 


Unintelligent Donkey

I have to start out by saying that I loved the use of Norse mythology within the context of the world the novel lies in, as someone who appreciates foreign cultures, it was very fun to read. Mixing and matching myth with modern/hi-tech science was done really well by the author and the resulting effect was something very unique. 

The world-building was fantastic, I really appreciate a well-written setting, reading this novel, I could feel the world within ‘Ragna’ come alive, and I loved it! The author was very, very descriptive with regards to the world.

The characters were fun, they have their funny moments, they have their strong moments and there are moments where they feel more vulnerable, which is something I really like. But, I haven’t gotten too far yet, so there’s a lot of things regarding the characters that I’m not 100% certain about. However, I really loved the dynamic between Ragna and Sven, they’re a rather well-suited pair, her with a bit of a headstrong personality, and Sven with his more supportive style.

There wasn’t much to say about the grammar, nothing popped out to me that felt too wrong, and the ‘mistakes’ are probably something I only view as such due to my wonky grammatical sense.

Overall, I really loved the novel! I’ll definitely give it a further read when I start having a bit more free time.

Dick Benetton

As of Chapter 7, Ragna reads like an action movie—complete with intense fights and pretty scenes.


Author YAK Edge has a very distinct and unique vision, painting a world that to me, feels like Final Fantasy XIII. The scenes are all described with great prose and the YAK Edge crafts scenes with a stylish, yet appropriate command of the English language without making it too bombastic. My issue with the first arc is this—there's just too many terms and characters appearing that it takes away my experience from enjoying the scenes. Instead of visualising the atmosphere or the mood, my mind is bombarded with "who's who again?" or "what's this?". The lore, terms and characters should be drip-fed. As of right now, the information overload somewhat distracts from the amazing prose and scenes.


Behind the beautiful yet convoluted scenes, lie a story of grand proportions. The pacing is great, with action sequences that already hooked me in as well as powerful forces and a deep and engaging world which will undoubtedly set the story in an epic adventure. The first arc really has the making of a great inciting incident.


Tense-wise I didn't detect anything wrong, however, there were parts where characters screamed or shouted, but their dialogue ends with full stops instead of exclamation marks. It's jarring for me to picture people shouting without "!" at the end of the sentence. But that's just a minor nitpick, overall it's very readable and easily digested.


There's a lot of depth to the characters. While I do feel they can get a bit too chatty, especially during fights, the characters have great, distinctive personalities and do not feel boring even once. Their relationships are dynamic, their interactions are engaging, and they certainly would do well if they appeared on a reality TV show.

To Conclude

If you can look past unfamiliar terms and characters appearing without much to latch on, this is a 5 star fiction hands down. Lively, adrenaline pumping and emotionally driven, I sincerely hope Ragna gets a webcomic adaptation—it's an amazing piece of literature that would be even more outstanding through visual storytelling.   


Military scifi-fantasy at a fast pace

Reviewed at: Chapter 06 - Halcyon day countdown

The story pulled me in. There's enough desciption to show you the world, action to keep you interested, and inter-personal conflict to keep you wondering what's next.

I love the addition and remaking of Germanic mythology in this world.