Valkyria Heart: A modern fantasy

Valkyria Heart: A modern fantasy

by YAK Edge

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  • Sexual Content
  • Traumatising content

Ragna Griffin thought she had figured out the world. However, her life falls apart when her kingdom brands her as a terrorist. Now a fugitive, she sets out to find her father and get it all back. Will she reclaim her life?

Altera Xion strives towards perfection as a Valkyrie. For her mission to prevent a new world war, she neglects her mental health. Will she regret her choice?

Ragna and Altera must explore a wondrous world set on destroying their dreams. The border between magic and technology starts to vanish. Horrors, beauty, and secrets lie behind every corner and within enemies and allies alike. Facing the world's cruelty, will the two persevere or shatter?

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168 Chapters
Chapter Name Release Date
Table of contents and map of Aes ago
A guide to runes (read after chapter 29) ago
Chapter 01 - Angel and imp ago
Chapter 02 - Millennium Peace ago
Chapter 03 - Valkyries ago
Chapter 04 - Halcyon day countdown ago
Chapter 05 - The end of the beginning ago
Chapter 06 - The curtain rises, the griffin falls ago
Chapter 07 - Call to adventure ago
Extra chapter 1 - Hungry empty vanity ago
Extra chapter 1.5 - Angels with masks ago
Chapter 08 - The angel I hate ago
Chapter 09- Frisian Forset's motel of horror ago
Chapter 10 - The seven in heaven ago
Chapter 11 - Princess illusion ago
Chapter 12 - Sky desire ago
Chapter 13 - The rainbow train ago
Chapter 14 - High speed; high death ago
Extra chapter 2 - Please cry when I die ago
Chapter 15 - Clockwork Horrorshow ago
Chapter 16 - Maestro's first lecture ago
Chapter 17 - The real colors of the world ago
Chapter 18 - Choose the evil, impose the good ago
Chapter 19 - Freedom for lust ago
Chapter 20 - Gods singing in the rain ago
Chapter 21 - Lockdown heretics ago
Chapter 22 - Past marvels ago
Chapter 23 - God abandoned you ago
Chapter 24 - Fly away ago
Extra chapter 3 - Debating life from god's point of view ago
Chapter 25 - An angel and a schism ago
Chapter 26 - Don't take it for granted ago
Chapter 27 - Hiding under the sun ago
Chapter 28 - Language of gods ago
Chapter 29 - Reflections are ephemeral ago
Chapter 30 - Voyagers past the horizon ago
Chapter 31 - Hear. Fear. Clear. ago
Chapter 32 - Eldritch and twisted ago
Chapter 33 - Upon all the universe has to hold of horror ago
Chapter 34 - Placid island amidst black seas of infinity ago
Chapter 35 - Fey ago
Chapter 36 - Night of the albatross ago
Extra chapter 4 - Do you deny yourself? ago
Chapter 37 - New day blues ago
Chapter 38 - Roundtable territory ago
Chapter 39 - Progression stasis ago
Chapter 40 - Watchers under watchmen ago
Chapter 41 - Giri Giri Grigori ago
Chapter 42 – Frozen lights ago
Chapter 43 - Sonnenritter ago
Chapter 44 - Toxic apostles ago
Chapter 45 - Retreat complete ago
Chapter 46 - Beasts of justice ago
Chapter 47 - Sideshow symphony ago
Chapter 48 - Screaming orchestra ago
Chapter 49 - Apostle of storms ago
Chapter 50 - Your cute little sister ago
Chapter 51 - A campaign for true beauty ago
Chapter 52 - Utopia princess ago
Chapter 53 - Goddess is artificial ago
Chapter 54 - Kingdom beyond; Mana City ago
Chapter 55 - Acting without purpose ago
Chapter 56 - Stay with family or not ago
Chapter 57 - Niebelungentreue ago
Chapter 58 - Prelude to judgment ago
Chapter 59 - The absurd logic ago
Chapter 60 - Temple of the outer god ago
Chapter 61 - The world end tower ago
Chapter 62 – Level 1 "Heroes never fail": Start ago
Chapter 63 – Level 1 "Heroes never fail": Perfection imperfect ago
Chapter 64 – Level 1 "Heroes never fail": Be a saint or an assassin ago
Chapter 65 – Level 1 "Heroes never fail": Wings of divine right ago
Chapter 66 – Level 1 "Heroes never fail": Saving for hope ago
Chapter 67 – Level 1 "Heroes never fail": Love me, hate me, kiss me, kill me ago
Chapter 68 – Level 1 "Heroes never fail": Dungeons and debauchery ago
Chapter 69 – Level 1 "Heroes never fail": The lightbringer princess ago
Chapter 70 – Level 2 "Bipolar nightmare": Racing thoughts ago
Chapter 71 – Level 2 "Bipolar nightmare": No god, but a meme ago
Chapter 72 – Level 2 "Bipolar nightmare": In a hero's image ago
Chapter 73 – Level 2 "Bipolar nightmare": Broken psyche shards ago
Chapter 74 – Level 3 "The hemorrhage countdown": At the mountain of absurdity ago
Chapter 75 – Level 3 "The hemorrhage countdown": Cry to smile ago
Chapter 76 – Level 3 "The hemorrhage countdown": There is nothing left ago
Chapter 77 – Level 3 "The hemorrhage countdown": Blood sacrifice ago
Chapter 78 - Intermezzo 1 "Requiem and reminiscence": Prey on predator ago
Chapter 79 – Intermezzo 1 "Requiem and reminiscence": Jus ad bellum ago
Chapter 80 – Intermezzo 1 "Requiem and reminiscence": How a hero is born ago
Chapter 81 – Level 4 "Aesir = Asurah": Primordial sea//Fiction cosmogony ago
Chapter 82 – Level 4 "Aesir = Asurah": Fate//Choice autonomy ago
Chapter 83 – Level 4 "Aesir = Asurah": Tragoedia//Comedia ago
Chapter 84 – Level 4 "Aesir = Asurah": Light of ruin//Titan of insight ago
Chapter 85 – Level 4 "Aesir = Asurah": Death drive//Will to survive ago
Chapter 86 – Level 4 "Aesir = Asurah": Fake life//Refuse to die ago
Chapter 87 – Level 4 "Aesir = Asurah": Future silk//Victory in progress ago
Chapter 88 - Intermezzo 2 "Thrash-talk poets": Liars, thieves, and heroes ago
Chapter 89 - Intermezzo 2 "Thrash-talk poets": Crossing fates ago
Chapter 90 – Level 5 "No freedom but my own": March of progress ago
Chapter 91 – Level 5 "No freedom but my own": Ice and blood ago
Chapter 92 – Level 5 "No freedom but my own": The sun's enemy ago
Chapter 93 – Level 5 "No freedom but my own": Dream beyond electric sheep ago
Chapter 94 – Level 6 "Broken idol theory": Transcendent paradox ago
Chapter 95 – Level 6 "Broken idol theory": Why the sun shines in the sky ago
Chapter 96 – Level 6 "Broken idol theory": Choser of the slain ago
Chapter 97 – Level 6 "Broken idol theory": Burning angel, cooling dragon ago
Chapter 98 – Level 7 "Yellow roses, wild hyacinth, sweet alyssum": Delusional grandeur blooms ago
Chapter 99 – Level 7 "Yellow roses, wild hyacinth, sweet alyssum": Valkyria roots ago
Chapter 100 – Level 7 "Yellow roses, wild hyacinth, sweet alyssum": Petals in frenzy ago
Chapter 101 – Level 7 "Yellow roses, wild hyacinth, sweet alyssum": Isolation Evergreen ago
Chapter 102 – Level 7 "Yellow roses, wild hyacinth, sweet alyssum": Breakdown Cotyledon ago
Chapter 103 – Level 7 "Yellow roses, wild hyacinth, sweet alyssum": Silver flower on silver platters ago
Chapter 104 – Intermezzo 3 "Comptine du désespoir": Gravitation surréaliste ago
Chapter 105 – Intermezzo 3 "Comptine du désespoir": Amour et douleur ago
Chapter 106 – Level 8 "Against the judgment": Exposition ago
Chapter 107 – Level 8 "Against the judgment": Rising action ago
Chapter 108 – Level 8 "Against the judgment": Climax ago
Chapter 109 – Level 8 "Against the judgment": Falling action ago
Chapter 110 – Level 8 "Against the judgment": Dénouement ago
Chapter 111 – Bond with shadows ago
Chapter 112 – Renewed autumn bonds ago
Chapter 113 – Let the bodies hit the floor ago
Chapter 114 – Dream for future ago
Chapter λ – Stories of you and I (Pride special) ago
Chapter λ-2 – Stories of you and I 2 (Pride special) ago
Chapter 115 – The rose fiend ago
Chapter 116 – Don't thank me ago
Chapter 117 – La princess étranger ago
Chapter 118 – Griffin ago
Chapter 119 – Pray for science ago
Chapter 120 – Two but one ago
Chapter 121 – Rise of the titans ago
Chapter 122 – Nine steps towards fate ago
Chapter 123 – Symposium titanica ago
Chapter 124 – Commerce of Vanitas ago
Chapter 125 – An idiot's wish to change reality ago
Chapter 126 – Vice city beats ago
Chapter 127 – The dulled joy ago
Chapter 128 – Nightmare of Scheherazade ago
Chapter 129 – Crave for more ago
Chapter 130 – Sing of tragedies, not sins ago
Chapter 131 – Honor from the depraved ago
Chapter 132 – Monster ago
Chapter 133 – Gold Experience Recurrence ago
Chapter 134 – Toccata from avengers ago
Chapter 135 – Versus ago
Chapter 136 – Queen Ghoul ago
Chapter 137 – Scars from the eternal sun ago
Chapter 138 – Bring forth your hatred ago
Chapter 139 – Let me be vain ago
Extra Chapter ♚ – Neverwas Extravaganza (April Fool's Special) ago
Chapter 140 – Looking glass escapism ago
Chapter 141 – Oceans to a new world ago
Chapter 142 – Freezing malice ago
Chapter 143 – The curse bringer ago
Chapter 144 – Valkyrian Beast ago
Chapter 145 – Battle against a true hero ago
Chapter 146 – God of thunder ago
Chapter 147 – Knights and eccentrics ago
Chapter 148 – Envoys beyond your confines ago
Chaoter 149 – Ground Zero Funk, Third Reich Punk ago
Chater 150 – Chauvinism in the Pitch-Black ago
Chapter 151 – Empty room psyche ago
Chapter 152 – Deep-Sea Ariosophy Sanctuary ago
Chapter 153 – Loopholes ago
Chapter 154 – Because I'm strong ago
Chapter 155 – Against a common enemy ago
Chapter 156 – Infinity nightmare ago
Chapter 157 – God of the nucleus ago
Chapter 158 – No place for justice ago

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Melanthe
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I absolutely adore the worldbuilding within Ragna's story- it's like urban fantasy taken to the next level. It's a wonderful mix of myth and sci-fi. Even the magic itself feels scientific and logical. It takes away the possible mystery and wonder, and leaves behind something cold. It fits its Nordic influence, I suppose.

The style is a consistent third person, and is meant to be omniscient. I don't always love omniscient narration, but it fits the mythological feel of the story. There are very few grammatical mistakes, and it definitely does not take away from my enjoyment of the story. The description is verbose, but not overly so. It's rich. Good work with that!

I think Ragna, the titular main character is the best part of this webnovel. She's consistent and strong, and it's always wonderful to follow her. Great work!

McKing
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First of all, this story is competently written. There are some small mistakes/confusion of similar words, but they don't detract from the story. Neither do much the occasional tense slip. The author has a solid technique. I want to emphasize his beautiful use of imagery, something one can really appreciate. The mood is also set with some in-world references - though these do need to be explained further later!

The setting is very interesting: a long-lasting peace forged between belligerant nations after a catastrophe in the past. Of course, they still skirmish in the shadows, and that's one of the roles of the military unit the MC wants to join, following in the footsteps of her parents. The author has created a norse-inspired sci-fi setting, with advanced technologies. The looming breaking of the peace is well-done.

I admit that the new adult style of story has lost some of its luster in my more advanced age, but I can recognize it when it's well done. The MC is midly irritating, but she's clearly being set up to progress and evolve throughout the story. The major characters glimpsed so far have already shown some nice quirks/personalities and I believe this should only improve.

Overall, an interesting and well-done story.

faciex_prima
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Story – 5/5

The story is quite interesting, I like it so much. The synopsis helped me understand a bit more of the story as I read through the chapters.

Spoiler: Chapter 8

 I have so much more to say, but I can’t find the right words on how to express how I enjoy this story.

Style – 4.5/5
Very good, it’s written in the Third Person perspective, and the execution was fantastic. The descriptions written by the author are very nice too; it gave me a vivid painting of what was going on as I was reading through the text. The author has a wide vocabulary as from what I could’ve read, so he has large disposal of words ready at hand whenever he needs to write descriptions.

The action scenes in Chapters 1 and 2 are quite fascinating to read, and like I’ve said, his descriptions help a lot.

I also like the little bits at the end of each chapter, explaining things that may be confusing for the reader.

Grammar – 4.5/5
Exceptionally great, I’ve seen no problem except for some minor mistakes.

Characters – 5/5
Our main character is Ragna, and as I read Chapters 1 and 2, I told myself “I probably won’t like her,” but when Chapter 3 came, that’s where it all changed. From then on, I liked her personality. She’s pretty fleshed out, so that’s nice.

As for Altera, at first, I thought she was going to be the antagonist, turns out I’m wrong. That’s a plus for tricking me.

As for Sven, I was about to write something about him, when he just went “Aight, ima head out”...

As for Princess Aurelia, even though it’s just been a few chapters, I've already become intrigued in seeing more of her.

If you ask me who is my favorite out of all, it's either Aurelia or Ragna.

Overall – 5/5
Do I recommend this story? Without a doubt in my mind, absolutely! I'll recommend it to my classmates who are interested in fiction.

durrik
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A Good Fantasy Story Set in a Futuristic World

Reviewed at: Extra chapter 1 - Hungry empty vanity

The start of the story is a little confusing, and I lost track of what was going on. When the action start though the confusion went away and the story started to get more consistent and I had a better idea of what was going on. There is a bit of a rocky start, but afterwards the rockiness is gone.

The story has some different aspects of tension, as there seems to be some romantic tension between the main character and her charge, as well as the obvious combat tension of an action story.

Style: The style is straight forward and simple. The world-building is evident but maybe a bit too much in the background as at the start it is confusing to tell what is going on.

Grammar: The gramma is good to excellent but there are a few places where the wrong words are chosen. These places are few though and do not detract from the story.

Characters: At the beginning the main character is a little unsettled, and its hard to get a grip on her personality, later when the story gets rolling the character locks down. There are a few places in the early portrayal that are a bit jarring.

Onch
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Style: Superb world-building, and excellent action scenes that are greatly narrated and flow perfectly.

Story: So far, the plot is developing nicely and the world is slowly being revealed to the reader.

Grammar: Great grammar, nothing detracting from the story and pleasant to read.

Characters:  Characters are believable and detailed. The way the author writes them by focusing on their emotions and inner thoughts makes the reader care about all of them, which is not an easy feat!

Mitsuaki Seiji
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"We shall rule the world with an iron fist. The peasants will beg; the rich will fear, and all the dandies in the world will beg even more." An out of context quote that does not spoil you the story.

The one thing that captivated me the most about Ragna: A young girl's failure to become a hero is the author's ability to write good dialogue consistently throughout the novel. This is not an easy task and for that we have to thank Ragna, the stoic main character that never bores me. The book also contains detailed worldbuilding, so you don't have to worry about lack of information.

Grammar and Style are both on point. Nothing to report.

I don't regret a single minute spent reading Ragna and I know you'll enjoy it too!

TaxReligion
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This story presents an interesting futuristic (and possibly militaristic?) world.  I think there's magic too since people can teleport.  Overall, reading was enjoyable, the descriptions are very lively.
Style:  This in my opinion is the major problem with the story.  I ended up being confused for the entire section that I read.  The setting is very creative, but you should first concentrate on conveying the setting in as easily understandable a way as possible.  I know you don't want to do an info-dump, but I think an info-dump would be preferable to the confusion I had.  There are transitions to new scenes and no explanation as to when it takes place in relation to where you just were. - This bit, in particular, is easily fixable, just make sure at the start of each scene to quickly explain how long it's been since the last one when it isn't obvious.
Grammar:  This needs an edit.  It conveys the message, but the reader needs to work to move around commas (there are lots of unnecessary commas) or fill in words that aren't there.
Story:  The story itself is quite good.  There's betrayal, death, love, and loss all in the first arc.
Characters: I liked the characters.  Ragna, although not entirely likable, is relatable and interesting.  The side characters do what they have to do.  For the length of the review, there was really only enough time to showcase one character so I can't fault the story for not having fully fleshed out side characters at this point.

Altogether, I think this story has potential if it can fix the style problems I saw and the author does an editing pass.   If you can get past a bit of bad grammar, I think you'll enjoy reading this.

GhostlyArtz
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The story itself is an interesting one. The world building is quite intricate and it takes a twist on Norse mythology that I haven't encountered before in any other story.

The story/plot/world building aspects are by far the best parts of the story. You have an ongoing mystery on a coup going on that's fun to theorize about and then one of the later chapters introduces you to another aspect of the plot that's probably going to take over the story (maybe, we'll see).

The characters are more on the back burner, they have distinct personalities but they aren't as... fetching? As the plot. Ragna herself is a naive and conceited one year cadet that slowly learns the reality of what the world is really like. 

Grammar and style wise- there are some clarity issues and the occasional typo. 

 

Unintelligent Donkey
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I have to start out by saying that I loved the use of Norse mythology within the context of the world the novel lies in, as someone who appreciates foreign cultures, it was very fun to read. Mixing and matching myth with modern/hi-tech science was done really well by the author and the resulting effect was something very unique. 

The world-building was fantastic, I really appreciate a well-written setting, reading this novel, I could feel the world within ‘Ragna’ come alive, and I loved it! The author was very, very descriptive with regards to the world.

The characters were fun, they have their funny moments, they have their strong moments and there are moments where they feel more vulnerable, which is something I really like. But, I haven’t gotten too far yet, so there’s a lot of things regarding the characters that I’m not 100% certain about. However, I really loved the dynamic between Ragna and Sven, they’re a rather well-suited pair, her with a bit of a headstrong personality, and Sven with his more supportive style.

There wasn’t much to say about the grammar, nothing popped out to me that felt too wrong, and the ‘mistakes’ are probably something I only view as such due to my wonky grammatical sense.

Overall, I really loved the novel! I’ll definitely give it a further read when I start having a bit more free time.

SomethingNew
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Ever heard of the worldbuilding technique Iceberg Theory?

Ragna basically says the Iceberg Theory can go jump in a lake and melt in the summer sun. Like now.

Everything regarding worldbuilding is shoved at your face.

So.

If you are a fan of intricate and detailed down to the minutiae worldbuilding, Ragna is made for you. You could choose to stay just for the worldbuilding.

There's two glossaries, for goodness sake and a glossary often included at the end of the chapter!

But it is no fun to scroll down every time you're unfamiliar with a term. Or even read it after the fact. So lower style score for me.

Not to mention that the amount of terms exclusive to the world building in this story can be an overwhelming. Some things can still be unclear contextually. 

Basically, I've written so many paragraphs on this one aspect that you can see how over the top it is. 

Ok fine, some of the book, band, and song names are fun, especially with a detailed description in the after chapter glossary.

I do enjoy the viking lore and modern tech combo. It makes for some very clever set ups.

But still, it's too much.

Gah! Need to move onto the characters and plot.

Ok. Breathe.

Characters:

Ragna is naive. Her sense of morality is  understandable, but wouldn't work in reality. The population would be decimated!

Her reaction to several horrific events wasn't fleshed out enough. Like someone dies and at the time she freaks out but a chapter later she's kind of...over it? Nope for me.

But overall, we know she's going to have to acclimate her perspective to her world's reality which draws you in.

Sven is a sweet boyfriend. He's not immature, and he really wants the best for Ragna. His conversations with Ragna's dad tickled my funny bone. Gosh those were some hilarious lines.

Ragna's dad is a tad stereotypical, but he's still wonderful. Again he's got that humor. Like charging his daughter interest on a money loan! Plus there is the whole development later on. Mmmhmm.

The princess knows how to be prim and proper and a vision of loveliness, and she's also got an uncouth side that just fleshed her out beyond the perfect princess.

That's all for now.

I applaud the author for putting so much thought into the story that is being crafted. Just...yeah.

So: TL;DR

Either you'll swim through the worldbuilding and love it, or drown and leave.

Ragna's set up for character growth and even a coming of age into what the world is really like.

The plots between factions and kingdoms exists, but refer to above worldbuilding.