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Ragna Griffin thought she had figured out the world. However, her life falls apart when her kingdom brands her as a terrorist. Now a fugitive, she sets out to find her father and get it all back. Will she reclaim her life?
Altera Xion strives towards perfection as a Valkyrie. For her mission to prevent a new world war, she neglects her mental health. Will she regret her choice?
Ragna and Altera must explore a wondrous world set on destroying their dreams. The border between magic and technology starts to vanish. Horrors, beauty, and secrets lie behind every corner and within enemies and allies alike. Facing the world's cruelty, will the two persevere or shatter?
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I absolutely adore the worldbuilding within Ragna's story- it's like urban fantasy taken to the next level. It's a wonderful mix of myth and sci-fi. Even the magic itself feels scientific and logical. It takes away the possible mystery and wonder, and leaves behind something cold. It fits its Nordic influence, I suppose.
The style is a consistent third person, and is meant to be omniscient. I don't always love omniscient narration, but it fits the mythological feel of the story. There are very few grammatical mistakes, and it definitely does not take away from my enjoyment of the story. The description is verbose, but not overly so. It's rich. Good work with that!
I think Ragna, the titular main character is the best part of this webnovel. She's consistent and strong, and it's always wonderful to follow her. Great work!
First of all, this story is competently written. There are some small mistakes/confusion of similar words, but they don't detract from the story. Neither do much the occasional tense slip. The author has a solid technique. I want to emphasize his beautiful use of imagery, something one can really appreciate. The mood is also set with some in-world references - though these do need to be explained further later!
The setting is very interesting: a long-lasting peace forged between belligerant nations after a catastrophe in the past. Of course, they still skirmish in the shadows, and that's one of the roles of the military unit the MC wants to join, following in the footsteps of her parents. The author has created a norse-inspired sci-fi setting, with advanced technologies. The looming breaking of the peace is well-done.
I admit that the new adult style of story has lost some of its luster in my more advanced age, but I can recognize it when it's well done. The MC is midly irritating, but she's clearly being set up to progress and evolve throughout the story. The major characters glimpsed so far have already shown some nice quirks/personalities and I believe this should only improve.
Overall, an interesting and well-done story.
Story – 5/5
The story is quite interesting, I like it so much. The synopsis helped me understand a bit more of the story as I read through the chapters.
When I read chapter 08, I had an “OHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH” moment which lasted for quite a while. When I first read the synopsis, I asked myself “what conspiracy will she be in”? And then, I found out!
I have so much more to say, but I can’t find the right words on how to express how I enjoy this story.
Style – 4.5/5
Very good, it’s written in the Third Person perspective, and the execution was fantastic. The descriptions written by the author are very nice too; it gave me a vivid painting of what was going on as I was reading through the text. The author has a wide vocabulary as from what I could’ve read, so he has large disposal of words ready at hand whenever he needs to write descriptions.
The action scenes in Chapters 1 and 2 are quite fascinating to read, and like I’ve said, his descriptions help a lot.
I also like the little bits at the end of each chapter, explaining things that may be confusing for the reader.
Grammar – 4.5/5
Exceptionally great, I’ve seen no problem except for some minor mistakes.
Characters – 5/5
Our main character is Ragna, and as I read Chapters 1 and 2, I told myself “I probably won’t like her,” but when Chapter 3 came, that’s where it all changed. From then on, I liked her personality. She’s pretty fleshed out, so that’s nice.
As for Altera, at first, I thought she was going to be the antagonist, turns out I’m wrong. That’s a plus for tricking me.
As for Sven, I was about to write something about him, when he just went “Aight, ima head out”...
As for Princess Aurelia, even though it’s just been a few chapters, I've already become intrigued in seeing more of her.
If you ask me who is my favorite out of all, it's either Aurelia or Ragna.
Overall – 5/5
Do I recommend this story? Without a doubt in my mind, absolutely! I'll recommend it to my classmates who are interested in fiction.
The start of the story is a little confusing, and I lost track of what was going on. When the action start though the confusion went away and the story started to get more consistent and I had a better idea of what was going on. There is a bit of a rocky start, but afterwards the rockiness is gone.
The story has some different aspects of tension, as there seems to be some romantic tension between the main character and her charge, as well as the obvious combat tension of an action story.
Style: The style is straight forward and simple. The world-building is evident but maybe a bit too much in the background as at the start it is confusing to tell what is going on.
Grammar: The gramma is good to excellent but there are a few places where the wrong words are chosen. These places are few though and do not detract from the story.
Characters: At the beginning the main character is a little unsettled, and its hard to get a grip on her personality, later when the story gets rolling the character locks down. There are a few places in the early portrayal that are a bit jarring.
Style: Superb world-building, and excellent action scenes that are greatly narrated and flow perfectly.
Story: So far, the plot is developing nicely and the world is slowly being revealed to the reader.
Grammar: Great grammar, nothing detracting from the story and pleasant to read.
Characters: Characters are believable and detailed. The way the author writes them by focusing on their emotions and inner thoughts makes the reader care about all of them, which is not an easy feat!
"We shall rule the world with an iron fist. The peasants will beg; the rich will fear, and all the dandies in the world will beg even more." An out of context quote that does not spoil you the story.
The one thing that captivated me the most about Ragna: A young girl's failure to become a hero is the author's ability to write good dialogue consistently throughout the novel. This is not an easy task and for that we have to thank Ragna, the stoic main character that never bores me. The book also contains detailed worldbuilding, so you don't have to worry about lack of information.
Grammar and Style are both on point. Nothing to report.
I don't regret a single minute spent reading Ragna and I know you'll enjoy it too!
This story presents an interesting futuristic (and possibly militaristic?) world. I think there's magic too since people can teleport. Overall, reading was enjoyable, the descriptions are very lively.
Style: This in my opinion is the major problem with the story. I ended up being confused for the entire section that I read. The setting is very creative, but you should first concentrate on conveying the setting in as easily understandable a way as possible. I know you don't want to do an info-dump, but I think an info-dump would be preferable to the confusion I had. There are transitions to new scenes and no explanation as to when it takes place in relation to where you just were. - This bit, in particular, is easily fixable, just make sure at the start of each scene to quickly explain how long it's been since the last one when it isn't obvious.
Grammar: This needs an edit. It conveys the message, but the reader needs to work to move around commas (there are lots of unnecessary commas) or fill in words that aren't there.
Story: The story itself is quite good. There's betrayal, death, love, and loss all in the first arc.
Characters: I liked the characters. Ragna, although not entirely likable, is relatable and interesting. The side characters do what they have to do. For the length of the review, there was really only enough time to showcase one character so I can't fault the story for not having fully fleshed out side characters at this point.
Altogether, I think this story has potential if it can fix the style problems I saw and the author does an editing pass. If you can get past a bit of bad grammar, I think you'll enjoy reading this.
The story itself is an interesting one. The world building is quite intricate and it takes a twist on Norse mythology that I haven't encountered before in any other story.
The story/plot/world building aspects are by far the best parts of the story. You have an ongoing mystery on a coup going on that's fun to theorize about and then one of the later chapters introduces you to another aspect of the plot that's probably going to take over the story (maybe, we'll see).
The characters are more on the back burner, they have distinct personalities but they aren't as... fetching? As the plot. Ragna herself is a naive and conceited one year cadet that slowly learns the reality of what the world is really like.
Grammar and style wise- there are some clarity issues and the occasional typo.
I have to start out by saying that I loved the use of Norse mythology within the context of the world the novel lies in, as someone who appreciates foreign cultures, it was very fun to read. Mixing and matching myth with modern/hi-tech science was done really well by the author and the resulting effect was something very unique.
The world-building was fantastic, I really appreciate a well-written setting, reading this novel, I could feel the world within ‘Ragna’ come alive, and I loved it! The author was very, very descriptive with regards to the world.
The characters were fun, they have their funny moments, they have their strong moments and there are moments where they feel more vulnerable, which is something I really like. But, I haven’t gotten too far yet, so there’s a lot of things regarding the characters that I’m not 100% certain about. However, I really loved the dynamic between Ragna and Sven, they’re a rather well-suited pair, her with a bit of a headstrong personality, and Sven with his more supportive style.
There wasn’t much to say about the grammar, nothing popped out to me that felt too wrong, and the ‘mistakes’ are probably something I only view as such due to my wonky grammatical sense.
Overall, I really loved the novel! I’ll definitely give it a further read when I start having a bit more free time.
Ever heard of the worldbuilding technique Iceberg Theory?
Ragna basically says the Iceberg Theory can go jump in a lake and melt in the summer sun. Like now.
Everything regarding worldbuilding is shoved at your face.
If you are a fan of intricate and detailed down to the minutiae worldbuilding, Ragna is made for you. You could choose to stay just for the worldbuilding.
There's two glossaries, for goodness sake and a glossary often included at the end of the chapter!
But it is no fun to scroll down every time you're unfamiliar with a term. Or even read it after the fact. So lower style score for me.
Not to mention that the amount of terms exclusive to the world building in this story can be an overwhelming. Some things can still be unclear contextually.
Basically, I've written so many paragraphs on this one aspect that you can see how over the top it is.
Ok fine, some of the book, band, and song names are fun, especially with a detailed description in the after chapter glossary.
I do enjoy the viking lore and modern tech combo. It makes for some very clever set ups.
But still, it's too much.
Gah! Need to move onto the characters and plot.
Ragna is naive. Her sense of morality is understandable, but wouldn't work in reality. The population would be decimated!
Her reaction to several horrific events wasn't fleshed out enough. Like someone dies and at the time she freaks out but a chapter later she's kind of...over it? Nope for me.
But overall, we know she's going to have to acclimate her perspective to her world's reality which draws you in.
Sven is a sweet boyfriend. He's not immature, and he really wants the best for Ragna. His conversations with Ragna's dad tickled my funny bone. Gosh those were some hilarious lines.
Ragna's dad is a tad stereotypical, but he's still wonderful. Again he's got that humor. Like charging his daughter interest on a money loan! Plus there is the whole development later on. Mmmhmm.
The princess knows how to be prim and proper and a vision of loveliness, and she's also got an uncouth side that just fleshed her out beyond the perfect princess.
That's all for now.
I applaud the author for putting so much thought into the story that is being crafted. Just...yeah.
Either you'll swim through the worldbuilding and love it, or drown and leave.
Ragna's set up for character growth and even a coming of age into what the world is really like.
The plots between factions and kingdoms exists, but refer to above worldbuilding.