The Ogre's Pendant & The Rat in the Pit

by Traitorman

Warning This fiction contains:
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  • Profanity
  • Sexual Content

The land is conquered.

 

A thief and a demon killer run afoul of its new overlord and the wizard that serves him. Now the wizard seeks his life's ambition, an artifact that will make his word law. Hearing this, the demon killer and thief begin to have ambitions of their own. The race is on for who will reach the artifact first, and an entire barbarian horde is in the running.

 

Yet the prize lies within the Forest of Giants, grown from the corpse of an empire. 

 

There are tales of things that stalk the trees. Tales of those that hunger endlessly. Tales of those that feast on human flesh.

 

Tales of ogres.

 

A Sword and Sorcery story of high adventure.

 

 Complete.

All stories and characters - including The Ogre's Pendant and The Rat in the Pit - written by Traitorman are created by and are the intellectual property of J.M. Clarke

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Chapter Name Release Date
The Wizard-King's Legacy ago
The Night of Sacrifice ago
Thieves, Rope and Liquor I ago
Thieves Rope and Liquor II ago
Assault in the Dark I ago
Assault in the Dark II ago
The Hunt in the Mist I ago
The Hunt in the Mist II ago
Shattered Bones and Ogres ago
The Saint's Plight I ago
The Saint's Plight II ago
The Saint's Plight III ago
The Battle of the Ruined Tower I ago
The Battle of the Ruined Tower II ago
The Battle of the Ruined Tower III ago
The Tears of Amitiyah I ago
The Tears of Amitiyah II ago
The Three that Dwell in Ash I ago
The Three that Dwell in Ash II ago
The Massacre I ago
The Massacre II ago
The Wizard-King's Truth I ago
The Wizard-King's Truth II ago
The Wizard-King's Truth III ago
The Ogre's Pendant ago
Epilogue ago
Book 3: The Rat in the Pit ago
The Poet's Resolve I ago
The Poet's Resolve II ago
The Poet's Resolve III ago
A Snow of Silver I ago
A Snow of Silver II ago
A Snow of Silver III ago
The Rat and the Hawk I ago
The Rat and the Hawk II ago
The Rat and the Hawk III ago
The Wolves of Lycundar ago
Trouble in Paradise I ago
Trouble in Paradise II ago
Trouble in Paradise III ago
Paradise in Trouble I ago
Paradise in Trouble II ago
Paradise in Trouble III ago
Hellfire and Silver I ago
Hellfire and Silver II ago
The Pit of Despair I ago
The Pit of Despair II ago
The Pit of Despair III ago
Manticore I ago
Manticore II ago
Manticore III ago
Manticore IV ago
A Pact in a Poison Garden I ago
A Pact in a Poison Garden II ago
A Pact in a Poison Garden III ago
The Hand I ago
The Hand II ago
The Hand III ago
Beasts I ago
Beasts II ago
Beasts III ago
Beasts IV ago
Beasts V ago
We Are Who We Are I ago
We Are Who We Are II ago
Swords I ago
Swords II ago
Swords III ago
Swords IV ago
Swords V ago
Lycundar's Bane I ago
Lycundar's Bane II ago
A Grim Parting I ago
A Grim Parting II ago
The Final Battle of Lycundar's Arena I ago
The Final Battle of Lycundar's Arena II ago
The Final Battle of Lycundar's Arena III ago
The Rat in the Pit I ago
The Rat in the Pit II ago
The Rat in the Pit III ago
The Rat in the Pit IV ago
The Third Oath I ago
The Third Oath II ago
Epilogue: The After-Thought [End and Afterword] ago

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FortySixtyFour
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The real Ogre's Pendant turned out to be the friends made along the way.

Reviewed at: The Massacre II

Traitorman eschews the thin and reedy Gamelit and LitRPG light novel writing to instead hark back to fantasy storytelling's roots in sword and sorcery. Those well travelled on the Royal Road will appreciate the substance and imagination of The Ogre's Pendant as readers are immediately thrown into an adventure following loyal gal Wurhi and her companion Kyembe as they race from pickle to predicament to plight.

Well-choreographed action, cunning characters, and a subtly threaded color balance of exposition will keep you wanting a little bit more each time you reach the end of a chapter. Royal Road absolutely needs a little more Forgotten Realms and a little less status windows and quipping pop culture references, and I think in time The Ogre's Pendant will become one of the site's treasured gems for many appreciative readers.

Alright, sometimes Traitorman lays on the similes a little too thick when describing things, but even that's so fun to read that I can't take off more than half a point.

Awyn
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A story that you shouldn't miss!

Reviewed at: The Three that Dwell in Ash II

Honestly, at the start of the novel it was a bit hard to immerse myself, so I had some doubts if I should continue reading it. The information that is given is so much, that is too hard to remember it all and that brings to some confusion.

However!

However, once the action started, I just couldn't stop reading it. The writing style is just amazing and gives you a different way to immerse yourself fully, with no hiccups whatsoever! 

Style:
The style is unique, the flow smooth and everything seems natural. It took me some time to get used to it, but it's totally worth it and brilliant. 

Story:
We start with a lot of introduction that can make us pause, but once the action begins, that introduction comes as helpful. The action is fast paced and natural and the plot is well connected. It's trully enjoyable to read it once I got used to the writing style and the introductions. So much so I didn't realize when I managed to read it all, looking for the next chapter, only to be disappointed. I can't wait for more updates for the novel.

Grammar:
Full score. There was not a single mistake that I saw in all the novel. It's just amazing that the author could keep such a good grammar all the time, like there is a team of editors behind him, making sure everything is in order. (There is, right? Right?)

Characters:
Well developed, every character has depth to him, that makes you fully immersed in them.

Conclusion:
A story that you shouldn't miss! You won't regret your choice reading it.

Nameless32
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As of november 28th, 2020, The Rat in the Pit has finished and the trilogy has reached its conclusion.

Thus, I'm updating this review once more, this time in a less analytical but more personal manner.

I've been reading Traitorman for a long time. I first found him in a swap a good four(?) months ago, and ever since I've been following this story as it steadily advanced towards its conclusion.

I fell in love with the characters by the first chapter, and have re-fallen for them every time I picked this story up again. Traitorman's writing has brought me laughter in boredom, joy in sadness, and inspiration in complacency. It has made me cry multiple times, and I'm not one to usually burst into tears at books or film.

Today, as I finished reading the Rat in the Pit, I was struck with a wave of emotion. It felt like I was leaving behind an era, where this story had been written. No, it may not have topped the charts or reached an astronomical wordcount, but each and every page brought me a kind of joy that I rarely see anywhere else.

Especially on this site, where traditional fantasies are rare and progression is all the rage, this normal, seemingly innocuous DnD style story took my heart and ran with it.

Congratulations, Traitorman, on completing your first trilogy. I look forwards to what's to come.

Your loyal reader and friend, devout member of the Traitorman fanclub,

Nameless

(In case that was too emotional for you, here's the review I left before:)

Note: Updated as of august(?) 2020 to say that everything I say in this review is an understatement. This story literally gave me chills. Read it now or they'll send Eppon after you.

I went into this story with high expectations. Having been hyped up by the self-proclaimed head of the Traitorman fan club, it would be an understatement to say that I stepped in expecting quality. I have to say, not only were my expectations met, but they were BLOWN OUT OF THE WATER.

The story is phenomenal. The world is highly reminiscent of a traditional sword and sorcery type fiction, which is ironically a breath of fresh air on this site where gamelit and isekai are the norm. However, it's not just the world that goes back to its roots. The plot itself seems to reference Dungeons and Dragons and the like, though it puts its own spin on things so that they never feel boring. There's always something going on, and the pacing is some of the best I've seen on RR.

The characters are similarly great. It's nice to see a man/woman duo that doesn't look like it's headed in a romantic direction, and they both have distinct personalities that are already very fleshed out. The big bad especially seems to be given attention when it comes to characterization in the beginning - heck, we learn about him earlier than we learn about our protagonists!

Grammar is always my shortest category, especially when it's as good as this story's is. I think that I caught 1 grammatical error in the entire ~20k words that I've read, and even that one didn't slow my flow at all. (I actually had to go back and check because I wasn't sure whether it was even an error)

Finally, we get to style. I usually do style first in my reviews, but for this one I wanted to save the best for last. Oh my gosh, Traitorman's prose is heavenly. Easily in my top three for this site, if not number one. I don't know if its the sword and sorcery roots or just the author's natural writing, but every time I read this I feel like I'm being serenaded to. I cannot put into words how good the prose is in this story, and even if this type of story really isn't your thing, I would still recommend reading it solely for the prose. Really, it's incredible. I don't know how else to put it.

The only teensy bit of nitpicking that I have is that the beginning goes a little heavy on the terms, but the author has said in a comment that they're more there for background, rather than exposition. I kept up with the key names and races just fine, so this really is just me being nitpicky when I bring this up. And for its purpose, the terms work wonderfully - I feel like that's actually a part of what makes the prose in this story so good.

Overall, just read it. At least the first five chapters, just to see if you'll like it. Because trust me, you will. Everyone can like this story. Brilliant characters, amazing pacing, and as if I haven't said it enough, prose that will knock your friggin socks off. Go, click on that first chapter. Do it. You can thank me once you've binge-read the entire thing in a night.

Briizy
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This is the best story I've read in a while....

Reviewed at: Shattered Bones and Ogres

I would go into detail about each scoring subject. That would be pointless, though, because I have nothing to say of them.

This story? Polished.

The tone? Phenomenal and accurate for the setting.

The writing STYLE? This author has one of the best writing styles I've read (both when considering traditionally published and self-published works). With the descriptive elements that draw the reader in. I know this author has spent a lot of time editing this story because it shows.
I binged 10 chapters in about an hour. 

I will binge 10 more. And then another 10. And so forth.

Fantastic story. Perfect story. I don't think I've ever raved over a book before? Congrats, Traitorman, you have written one of my favorite self published e-reads to date (and I haven't even finished it, yet).

This is a story to watch out for. 

Vowron Prime
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A Story that Rivals Upper-Tier Published Fictions

Reviewed at: The Massacre II

What do you get when you mix R.R. Martin levels of intrigue with Tolkien-esque world-building and characterization with rich dialogue, fast-paced action, and grammar and style on par with the best writers out there? This.

You get this story: The Ogre's Pendant.

What starts as a seemingly simple prison break quickly escalates into an epic heist, and then turns into much, much more, and while the story is a bit of a dense read the first couple of chapters where all the cultures, names, places and characters are introduced, fear not as you will quickly get sucked into Traitorman's universe as you step from adventure to Jurassik horror to epic fight scenes, masterfully narrated all the while.

Edit: My prediction from a month ago has come true, as this story has officially broken into the top ten best rated on RR. If you're reading this, stop and go read the story instead.

Style

As I mentioned, easily on par with most published authors. While normally I look for style disappearing in a novel, this story has its own unique style in spades. Yet not only does it not get in the way, it actually enriches the story, giving it a distinct tone and sense of depth unlike what I've seen from most stories on RoyalRoad. This harmonizes with the worldbuilding and characterization to create a unique and compelling read.

Grammar

6/5, easily. I don't know how Traitorman does it, but this feels like it has been professionally edited by an entire team. Sentences flow beautifully, sentence construction is artful yet understandable, and I did not spot a single typo or grammatical error of any kind(and those usually jump out at me).

Story

The story is still early on, but even at this point there has been so much that's happened. Plot points feel natural and not forced, like the expected obvious outcome given the characters and their circumstances. Yet the author still manages to surprise the reader in novel ways, always keeping things interesting. Pacing is just about perfect - my only minor comment here is that the introduction of so many races/terms/cultures early on forced me to slow down a bit to truly digest all of that.

There too, however, we don't get exposition dumps, but rather learn of these things naturally through the course of the characters' actions or via clever narration. Once past the that though, things really got into their groove and I was hooked the rest of the way.

Characters

Some of the most well-developed characters I've seen on RoyalRoad, and their personalities are shown not told to us, through dialogue and their own actions. The main character Kyembe and Wurhi duo complement and balance each other perfectly. There are also some pretty frikkin' awesome side characters that you will no doubt come to enjoy as much as the mains.

Even the antagonists - especially the antagonists - are well-developed. Not one of them feels flat or two-dimensional, even if they've only recently been introduced. The worldbuilding helps in that department, instantly giving characters a sense of history and depth.

In conclusion, this story is definitely worth your read. It's deep, intelligent, yet also fast-paced and suspenseful. In my mind it is easily Best Rated top ten material on this site.

TheWitchOfTheRock
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A world that’s easy to slip into.

Reviewed at: The Hunt in the Mist

I was worried this was going to be a slow read, but we get into the action pretty quick. 

 The first bit is working to set up the characters, the world, the power in that egg and what's possibly at stake here, setting up the story until it's time to sit back and watch the dominos fall. 

Characters are memorable and  believable; I won't add more as that's really all that's needed. 
Can't wait to see here it goes. 

thriceborn
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To anyone reading my prior review from The Dreaming Sceptre....all my dreams have been realised. Only complaint is very minor grammar/word choice issues in some of the latest chapters. Nothing a good proofread won't fix.

And speaking of fixes...Traitorman. Please. I need moar my friend. Phenomenal story and characters, everything I hoped and dreamed for. This story really is a gem and I applaud you sir.

Truly.

Also might be fanboying.

And trying to fill the 200 character requirement.

Is it working yet?

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Doesn't matter, if you can read this and not enjoy, we can't be friends.

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Ok, FINE, seriously, this is a masterful story. Somewhat predictable, but damnit, it's got all the points that make the heart sing. Enjoyable banter, heartfelt emotional "awwww's," bone-crushing action, and the genuine character growth.

Barbarians, Ogre's, demon's, werewolves, oh my!

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 Still haven't filled the owed count yet.

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Is it characters or words?

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Fuck it, take my money!

Just end this never ending word writing hell!

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Ok, seriously, does every review need 200 words? I've met the limit right? Can you improve upon perfection?

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Ok, fine, nothing's perfect. But seriously?! Still?!?!

Vera Anne Wolf
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Adventure awaits—do you dare to begin?

Reviewed at: Thieves Rope and Liquor II

 

The Ogre’s Pendant is like a breath of fresh air for those who enjoy a well-crafted omniscient fantasy, reminiscent of Tolkien in its ability to weave a story, characters and world-building together to paint an epic tale well worth the read. The magic, despicable villains, ogres, and not so shiny heroes are very much alive, and each struggle towards their purpose that (for ill or for good) has brought them all in search of The Egg of Gergorix.

I found nothing to critique in this story beyond differences of preferences in pace, style, and exposition, which I know better than to comment on as a writer myself. The Grammar was flawless. The word choices remarkably unique and well-executed. The characters so far, as mentioned above, vibrant and intriguing. The Ogre’s Pendant is a hardy tale to sink one’s teeth into, preferably with a nice flagon of ale, or whatever choice drink is closest. Adventure awaits—do you dare to begin?

Corbin Rook
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Deserves more reviews and reads than it currently has, but it's not a tale of some dork sucked through a magic portal from Earth to stare at poorly constructed stat boxes, so what're ya gonna do?

Shade aside, it's classic fantasy adventure that makes me think of the Conan the Barbarian stories. The writing is excellent, the characters are interesting, and the setting feels alive. If you can imagine reading something that's not LitRPG, give it a try.

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The adventure is as high as it's body count.

Reviewed at: The Saint's Plight II

When dabbling into the modern fantasy genre these days, one might expect long and involved narratives that span multiple volumes. These tales either revolve around dour, morally ambiguous political struggles while the author forces a massive cast of characters through an unrelenting meat grinder. All for some vague commentary on society or the fantasy genre as a whole. Or, they revolve around ginger-haired, omnicompetent, rock stars who are incapable of telling when a prospective love interest is leading them on.

                Fortunately for us the reader, Traitorman has chosen an alternate path. His serialized writing harkens back to a different time. A time when men were suave, charming, magical dark elves with supernatural powers and women were duplicitous, shapeshifting rat-like creatures motivated solely by greed and their own survival. This unlikely duo is paired together in a series of tales that involve high stakes treasure hunting in a world of magic and mystery.

                These episodic adventures are in a style that predate the time when Tolkien’s seminal work shaped the fantasy genre. They’re evocative of the pulp stylings of Robert E. Howard or Edgar Rice Burroughs. These bite-sized bits of high-adrenaline excitement provide an experience that is equal parts fantasy and high adventure. They’re a welcome alternative to the massive, door stopping tomes that permeate the genre.

                The second installment in the series, The Ogre’s Pendant takes our heroes from the merchant city of the first story and thrusts them into a new, untamed land. Our protagonists Kyembe and Wurhi (the aforementioned magical dark elf and sentient, rat-creature) are plunged immediately into the action. A night of hard-drinking causes them to run afoul of a powerful warlord, his military host, lecherous sons and a decrepit old wizard. They must then escape from the warlord’s camp and compete with their antagonists for a magical artifact of unspeakable power.

                The first installment, The Dreaming Sceptre may have been Traitorman dipping his toes into the genre. But, with the sequel he dives right in. The Ogre’s Pendant is a denser and grittier than its predecessor with higher stakes and even greater threats.  

                With the introduction of Eppon, he has made it clear he plans to expand his writing in new directions. The antagonist of the previous installment, Cas was a man of wealth and sophistication. Through pure cunning and wit he rose to a position of prominence in the opulent merchant city. Not merely content with financial power he sought to excel in other areas as well. With his Chamber of Strength he maintained a power physique and utilized powerful demons to gain a stranglehold on the city. From his introduction it was clear he was not a man to be trifled with. And the additional details hinted at unplumbed depths to his character.

                Eppon however is cut from a different cloth. Braggart, bully and brute, it is clear from the beginning that Eppon was born into a position of privilege he did not deserve. With his introduction I could tell this character was rotten to the core. His boasts were as laughable as they were preposterous.  Traitorman has made it clear that this grotesque abomination of a man is simply a villain through and through. The point is driven even further home by how Kymebe horrifyingly disfigures him. This cut-and-dried approach to the character provides the reader with a conflict they can easily understand. And, it helps to set-up the intense action to come. I don’t want to spoil any more of the story, but let’s just say Eppon suffers a fate befitting his base nature.

                Another new introduction to the mythos is St. Cristabel, a powerful, heavily armored woman warrior with divine powers bestowed upon her by her patron god. Her involvement is as surprising as it is bloody. She provides an additional method for our heroes to even the odds against their antagonists. The only worrying aspect was a potential Kyembe-Cristabel-Wurhi love triangle suggested by a couple of lines of text.

                In summary, Traitorman has produced an entertaining series of stories which are easy for the reader to pick-up and get into. The narrative moves at a brisk pace with quick and brutal action. The characters involved are unique and compelling. The events unfold on the backdrop of an interesting fantasy setting with many details sprinkled throughout that hint at even greater depths.  It is a good read and I look forward to seeing more from this author (and series) in the future.