The Ogre's Pendant

by Traitorman

Original ONGOING Action Adventure Fantasy Female Lead High Fantasy Magic Male Lead Multiple Lead Characters Strong Lead
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The land is conquered.

A thief and a demon killer run afoul of its new overlord and the wizard that serves him. Now the wizard seeks his life's ambition, an artifact that will make his word law. Hearing this, the demon killer and thief begin to have ambitions of their own. The race is on for who will reach the artifact first, and an entire barbarian horde is in the running.

Yet the prize lies within the Forest of Giants, grown from the corpse of an empire. 

There are tales of things that stalk the trees. Tales of those that hunger endlessly. Tales of those that feast on human flesh.

Tales of ogres.

A Sword and Sorcery story of high adventure.

Updates every Saturday until the story is finished.

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Awyn
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A story that you shouldn't miss!

Reviewed at: The Three that Dwell in Ash II

Honestly, at the start of the novel it was a bit hard to immerse myself, so I had some doubts if I should continue reading it. The information that is given is so much, that is too hard to remember it all and that brings to some confusion.

However!

However, once the action started, I just couldn't stop reading it. The writing style is just amazing and gives you a different way to immerse yourself fully, with no hiccups whatsoever! 

Style:
The style is unique, the flow smooth and everything seems natural. It took me some time to get used to it, but it's totally worth it and brilliant. 

Story:
We start with a lot of introduction that can make us pause, but once the action begins, that introduction comes as helpful. The action is fast paced and natural and the plot is well connected. It's trully enjoyable to read it once I got used to the writing style and the introductions. So much so I didn't realize when I managed to read it all, looking for the next chapter, only to be disappointed. I can't wait for more updates for the novel.

Grammar:
Full score. There was not a single mistake that I saw in all the novel. It's just amazing that the author could keep such a good grammar all the time, like there is a team of editors behind him, making sure everything is in order. (There is, right? Right?)

Characters:
Well developed, every character has depth to him, that makes you fully immersed in them.

Conclusion:
A story that you shouldn't miss! You won't regret your choice reading it.

soundsofhysteria
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This is the best story I've read in a while....

Reviewed at: Shattered Bones and Ogres

I would go into detail about each scoring subject. That would be pointless, though, because I have nothing to say of them.

This story? Polished.

The tone? Phenomenal and accurate for the setting.

The writing STYLE? This author has one of the best writing styles I've read (both when considering traditionally published and self-published works). With the descriptive elements that draw the reader in. I know this author has spent a lot of time editing this story because it shows.
I binged 10 chapters in about an hour. 

I will binge 10 more. And then another 10. And so forth.

Fantastic story. Perfect story. I don't think I've ever raved over a book before? Congrats, Traitorman, you have written one of my favorite self published e-reads to date (and I haven't even finished it, yet).

This is a story to watch out for. 

Vowron Prime
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A Story that Rivals Upper-Tier Published Fictions

Reviewed at: The Massacre II

What do you get when you mix R.R. Martin levels of intrigue with Tolkien-esque world-building and characterization with rich dialogue, fast-paced action, and grammar and style on par with the best writers out there? This.

You get this story: The Ogre's Pendant.

What starts as a seemingly simple prison break quickly escalates into an epic heist, and then turns into much, much more, and while the story is a bit of a dense read the first couple of chapters where all the cultures, names, places and characters are introduced, fear not as you will quickly get sucked into Traitorman's universe as you step from adventure to Jurassik horror to epic fight scenes, masterfully narrated all the while.

Edit: My prediction from a month ago has come true, as this story has officially broken into the top ten best rated on RR. If you're reading this, stop and go read the story instead.

Style

As I mentioned, easily on par with most published authors. While normally I look for style disappearing in a novel, this story has its own unique style in spades. Yet not only does it not get in the way, it actually enriches the story, giving it a distinct tone and sense of depth unlike what I've seen from most stories on RoyalRoad. This harmonizes with the worldbuilding and characterization to create a unique and compelling read.

Grammar

6/5, easily. I don't know how Traitorman does it, but this feels like it has been professionally edited by an entire team. Sentences flow beautifully, sentence construction is artful yet understandable, and I did not spot a single typo or grammatical error of any kind(and those usually jump out at me).

Story

The story is still early on, but even at this point there has been so much that's happened. Plot points feel natural and not forced, like the expected obvious outcome given the characters and their circumstances. Yet the author still manages to surprise the reader in novel ways, always keeping things interesting. Pacing is just about perfect - my only minor comment here is that the introduction of so many races/terms/cultures early on forced me to slow down a bit to truly digest all of that.

There too, however, we don't get exposition dumps, but rather learn of these things naturally through the course of the characters' actions or via clever narration. Once past the that though, things really got into their groove and I was hooked the rest of the way.

Characters

Some of the most well-developed characters I've seen on RoyalRoad, and their personalities are shown not told to us, through dialogue and their own actions. The main character Kyembe and Wurhi duo complement and balance each other perfectly. There are also some pretty frikkin' awesome side characters that you will no doubt come to enjoy as much as the mains.

Even the antagonists - especially the antagonists - are well-developed. Not one of them feels flat or two-dimensional, even if they've only recently been introduced. The worldbuilding helps in that department, instantly giving characters a sense of history and depth.

In conclusion, this story is definitely worth your read. It's deep, intelligent, yet also fast-paced and suspenseful. In my mind it is easily Best Rated top ten material on this site.

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The real Ogre's Pendant turned out to be the friends made along the way.

Reviewed at: The Massacre II

Traitorman eschews the thin and reedy Gamelit and LitRPG light novel writing to instead hark back to fantasy storytelling's roots in sword and sorcery. Those well travelled on the Royal Road will appreciate the substance and imagination of The Ogre's Pendant as readers are immediately thrown into an adventure following loyal gal Wurhi and her companion Kyembe as they race from pickle to predicament to plight.

Well-choreographed action, cunning characters, and a subtly threaded color balance of exposition will keep you wanting a little bit more each time you reach the end of a chapter. Royal Road absolutely needs a little more Forgotten Realms and a little less status windows and quipping pop culture references, and I think in time The Ogre's Pendant will become one of the site's treasured gems for many appreciative readers.

Alright, sometimes Traitorman lays on the similes a little too thick when describing things, but even that's so fun to read that I can't take off more than half a point.

TheWitchOfTheRock
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A world that’s easy to slip into.

Reviewed at: The Hunt in the Mist

I was worried this was going to be a slow read, but we get into the action pretty quick. 

 The first bit is working to set up the characters, the world, the power in that egg and what's possibly at stake here, setting up the story until it's time to sit back and watch the dominos fall. 

Characters are memorable and  believable; I won't add more as that's really all that's needed. 
Can't wait to see here it goes. 

Gabriel Mobius
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A callback to swords and sorcery

Reviewed at: The Night of Sacrifice

This certainly isn't for the faint of heart, but the throwback to the dense prose of sword-and-sorcery genre is definitely a welcome reprieve from the norm. The author strikes a fine balance between delivering chapters thick with information and action while maintaining the chapter-by-chapter cliffhangers necessary in serialised fiction such as this.

 

The setup is wonderful, and I can't wait for more to come.

Rising Myth
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Overall: This page-turner combines excellent character development, devastating action, and grim humour to deliver a fun adventure that all fans of Sword and Sorcery should treat themselves to!

Style Score: The writer utilizes a unique style that drives the story at a good pace while ensuring descriptions capture your imagination and draw you into the action. Each character, from minor to major, has a unique voice and perspective that makes them more believable.

Story Score: The story follows a traditional Sword and Sorcery model, but does it well and still introduces its own spins and twists without losing a sense of the genre. The setting is believable and rich without losing momentum, with information weaved into descriptions seamlessly.

Grammar Score: There aren't any mistakes and sentences flow smoothly, without confusing the reader.

Character Score: All of the characters are amazing - each is memorable and evocative. Even minor characters come across vividly in the descriptions and have clear motivations that live outside the story being told. 

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What a Ride! Intrigue, Tension, High Adventure wrapped in beautiful prose!!!

Reviewed at: The Massacre II

What a ride! This story gives you the great characters, action and intrigues of Sword and Sorcery, without the ugly bits!  

The Ogre's Pendant begins with a prologue that weaves a tale that enthralls, offers a taste of the author's world, and does so with elegant prose that surprises, grabs the reader and holds on.  

The setting is a classic Sword and Sorcery setting complete with thieves, demons, wizards, fantastical lands and more that the author presents using language that's rich and captivating. The prose is so well done that it provides the imagination with vivid scenes that play like a movie!

The narrative is truly well crafted and unfolds with lots of intrigue, surprises and shocks along the way.

I love these characters! Each of them comes alive off the page and has their own distinct voice and unique personality. They are so well written that they stay in your head, and I found myself thinking about them and laughing at something they said or did long after I finished reading a chapter. (I see you Wurhi)! 

Traitorman, is a TRUE storyteller, in the tradition of the great storytellers of the past. From his prologue and throughtout the story, his storytelling skills shine through and he connects with the reader. He even seems to have used the old storyteller's tool of throwing in some familiar references that further drew me in and then I was on the lookout for more along the way. Examples: Cristabel's last name of Esclanore reminded me of "Escanor" from "7 Deadly Sins," "It looked almost too big to be called a sword" reminded me of "It was too big to be called a sword" from Berserk, "Mad Titans" reminded me of "Attack on Titan." I'll be on the lookout for more, Traitorman!

The Ogre's Pendant is an exceptional, satisfying read and deserves ALL THE STARS!!       

CharlesBlythe
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The Ogre's Pendant revolves around the legendary Dragon Egg that becomes the centerpoint of its focus, having multiple parties from known and unknown sides struggling in a grueling race to get their hands on it. Despite the simplistic goal, it makes for an extremely involving story that delves you into the unknown, intrigue and expectation. This alone is reason enough for the average reader to pick this story up. Now on to the intricacies of the story though, because plotwise is not where the authors pen shines the most.

STLYE: A shame I must start with style, since this is the only part that I have a petty mulling complaint to make. The paragraph patterns are overall excellent, however the sometimes frequent single-sentence paragraph breaks throws me off, kicking me out of a rhythm that was otherwise perfectly paced.

However, the medieval and culturally diverse speech the author uses for the characters and in the lines of lore developing makes the world more intriguing to indulge. This is where his skill shines the most, making the extensive vocabulary expand on the world that is expanded on. The pacing of sentences and breaks matches with the rhythm to expect in the scenarios that are presented, appealing to our senses of adrenaline to be more involved.

STORY: The world is placed in an overall epic scene, where you are seeing the lives and choices of legendary champions(Not all champions are heroes, read the story to understand). His style compliments this story's over emcompassing arc. There is a lot of focus to the lore and cultures and different beings, further embellishing the world that you get to love more and more. This is where style benefits the story's world-building, it never feels rushed and always feels right when it is expanded on.

At the beginning, it did feel like as a reader that I was missing out on the nuances and lore that was subtly mentioned or fully immersed in. However, the further you went in the story, the more familiar everything felt. Truly remarkable technique.

GRAMMAR: This catagory can make or break any story arc, and the writer's competence in the English literate technique is incredible. His punctuation, tenses and vocabulary are spot on. Mistakes were far to seldom to speak of, nothing that wouldn't expect unless looking for closely. It clearly made a great story that much better.

CHARACTER: Characters can always be so finicky to develop. The key is always the impression they're supposed to give, and then if they succeeded in that impression. If you can't even remember who is who in the following chapter, the character can feel flat. Again the writer does an incredible job in leaving a masterful impression of the characters he's presented, fully flushing out not just what and who they are, but their side of humanity too. Everyone has ambitions and goals, his characters are not any less human as person should be.

Again, at the beginning it was hard to feel what I was reading, but every chapter did an excellent job teaching us a bit more of our champions and their lore, giving us more of a connection to their personality. Whether they be good or bad.

OVERALL: Just read it already if you read my review up to this point. It is not perfect, but it sure as hell is as close of a good read anyone can ask for.

ratking99
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Conan the Barbarian meets Gotrek and Felix

Reviewed at: The Massacre II

With one of the protagonists being a sarcastic, constantly exasperated shape-shifting rat-lesbian, this story could almost have been written especially for me.

Traitorman continues to masterfully combine Conan-esque swords and sorcery action with wit and humour to break tension and provide levity between the pulse pounding fight scenes.

The personality clash between the leads and the gulf in their relative power levels adds an extra spice to their banter that is just delightful. It's like Conan sharing screen time with a Joss Whedon character.

 Just amazing. 5 Stars.