A Stranger in Sorcererstown

by Jon Wander

Original ONGOING Action Adventure Fantasy Anti-Hero Lead Magic Strong Lead
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The ancient city-state of Sorcererstown, the world’s capital of magic where the most legendary wizards, warlocks, and royal mages learned their secret craft was nothing like what the Stranger expected it to be.

Not a sorcerer has drawn breath there in years, only sorceresses fill the Great Schools of Magic and the petty squabbling between them has grown into full-blown war with the money vaults, spellbooks and armories thrown open to call and empower the best mercenaries, cutthroats and killers from all corners of the map and blast anyone unfortunate enough to get caught in the middle.

That middle is where the Stranger decides is the best place to ply his own unique set of skills in a daring plan to make pawns of the powers that be and reach an endgame opposed to all other factions in town.

But with the arcane arts being thrown around like sling stones, suspicions running high with everyone from the new hires to the headmistresses of the Great Schools and a looming threat of a supposedly unbeatable warrior on his way to the battleground of the once a great city-state it doesn’t take much for a wanderer’s plans to earn him nothing but an unmarked grave.

It’s all or nothing in here in Sorcererstown and in this deadly game everyone is playing for keeps.

Let’s begin.

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This summary is for the first book in a trilogy, all of which will be posted as one webnovel.

Cover courtesy of Fuyu Dust

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WisdomKing
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1- Story

Question: Have you ever watched a western movie? 

Ok, imagine a lawless town, somewhere in the wild west, where the mayor and the Sheriff are corrupted, the different gangs in town are at war against each other, dead bodies laying down the streets, there's no peace, the once glorious towns is now a shadow of its former self. 

And then comes a cowboy, a lone cowboy, a... dangerous lone cowboy,  nobody knows who he is or where he's from.

ok, now rewind and throw some magic in the mix😁. 

 

2- Worldbuilding

I think the Author is doing a great job with the world building, We are not being given too much nor too little  information. 

 

3- Characters 

-The Mc's a mysterious dude, we don't know much about him, he seems ruthless and cold but shows mercy when needed. He came with a purpose but we are kept in the dark about his goals. I have to say this is what makes this story interesting.

-So far not many characters have been introduced but... one thing is for sure, all the characters introduced so far feel alive, they do things for solid reasons. 

 

4-Style

Personally, i don't have much to complain about. The story flows well, you can tell the Author has experience when it comes to writing novels

 

5- Grammar 

There are few typos, here and there but nothing that can stop you from enjoying the story.

 

6-The hicks

My main problem so far is that we don't know what the Mc's thoughts are nor what he feels. 

like, what are his thoughts about the people around him or the people he is meeting for the first time.

The only time so far (if i remember correctly) that we had a glimpse of what he was thinking was when he met Annabelle.

 

Fun fact, The town seems to have become a mess after the last sorcerer died, now the different schools of magic are full of women and they don't get along.

 

Nole Moody
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An engaging magical western

Reviewed at: 7. An Uninvited Companion

I've only read a handful of chapters so far and normally I'd wait before posting a review, but the story has grabbed me enough to judge the general quality of things to come.

The characters are engaging and interesting and the pacing is perfect. The main character comes across as a brooding gunslinger type straight out of a spaghetti western and I'm already drawn in to the story and expect to be reading this for a long time to come :D

I like that the MC isn't an 'instant hero' to everyone in the story and while over-powered has drawbacks which make him seem human. The mystery of who he is also intruiges me. 

(Will update this review as I read further)

RiahWeston
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Who says I can't be the one guy shooting magic bullets?

Reviewed at: 17. Guess Who?

Got to say magic + wild west + dynamic factional squabbling = interesting blend! I didn't know what to expect other than maybe Bloodborne-style environment from the cover and first chapter feel, which A Stranger In Sorcerertown delivers, minus the plagues of course. Now I just got to hope and wait for the eldritch horrors to pop up. *Crosses fingers*

Style & Story - Great on both accounts. The story is solid and blends together multiple genres in a dynamic sort of way that makes it feel really fleshed out. Only real qualm with the style is how much is left out of the Stranger thought process despite the Point of View. So 4.5/5 for Style and 5/5 for Story.

Grammar - Didn't say any errors, so don't care and therefore a 5/5.

Characters - We're talking about a well fleshed out town of chaos and squabbling, it's only natural that the characters are fleshed out also with emotions and little tidbits that help expand about the setting at every turn. Definitely a 5/5 for Character.

TL;DR - Hurry up and read it while it is fresh! 

C.R. Mcmahon
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Magic, and the Wild west. What a wonderful combination.

Reviewed at: 2. About Town

The writing here is professional, and I was honestly a bit blown away by it. "The amount of blood I have spilt would float a fleet of ships" ...wow. If you are searching for a high tier, interesting, and wonderfully done story congradulations! This is it.

Normally I am not a fan of guns in a magical setting, but if I were to like it, this is how. Such flourish, and creativity used in writing these battle scenes. 

If you are looking for a magical story full of action, and an amazing setting please read this. 

 

Goswick
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Reminds me of the Dark Tower Series

Reviewed at: 4. Pay Negotiations

Alright, so my early impressions on this are that it's a rather beautiful work with artful worldbuilding and a rather intriguing air of mystery. It reminds me somewhat of The Dark Tower books by Stephen King with its arcane western fusion, which - if you were going for that, then congratulations - you hit the nail on the head. The story is tremendously written and has a rather nice style, and though there is the occasional mistake or two, I think the story stands well enough on its own that such rare mistakes do little to detract from the story being told.

 

Style

Style is one of the areas where this story really excels, and though there are a few nitpicky things I'd improve in the description of the local environment, the writing style evident in this story is engaging and meshes well with the environment itself. It feels gritty, and the story is served very well by the descriptive prose.

 

Story

The story has strong bones, and as of the first few chapters, is very engaging. In the early chapters, it's not clear what the MC's motivations are, but I think that works with the whole mystery element that this story is going for. Overall, the air of mystery is enticing, and the story gives just enough info to keep you informed while also keeping you guessing.

 

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The author has a wonderful grasp of the English language, well done! Perhaps the only issue I have with grammar on the whole is the rare run-on sentences, which could probably fixed by a few choice commas, but otherwise the grammar is impeccable!

 

Character

Personally, I think the characters in early chapters - such as Selco and Ailia, have very human motivations, and the Stranger seems to be a man with a much larger story: despite how little he lets on. Outside of the important characters, however, some of the more disposable characters can feel relatively flat - especially in the first scene when the Stranger has just woken up. As I read more of the story, perhaps I'll end up amending this portion of the review, but I still like the characterisation for most of the central characters - and I think the story does a very good job overall.

 

I think this story is wonderful, and I hope to see where it's headed!

 

MrBadWithNames
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Fun magic and mindfuckery!

Reviewed at: 13. Bodyguard

The stranger in sorcererstown is a story very reminiscent of a western cowboy move,
The dark, brooding MC on a quest to 'win' the fight over a town with deception and magic.
One of my favourite things about the story is how well the strength of the MC is handled, we're clued on from the very start that he is very powerful - however, unlike many other op mcs, the nameless mercenary uses lies and deception to achieve his goals for the most part.

Style - the story is written in third person and is well-paced, nothing about the formatting stand out which is a good thing.
Story - as of where I am at now in the story, my main wish is to find out more about the MC, we get fed little nuggets of information, they're super fun to put together and try and understand!
(My bet's on the mc being a lich, :D )

Grammar - couldn't find any mistakes! Not much to add!
Characters - I really dig the characters, the mc is stoic but not an edgelord, the various headmistresses all have major flaws, but none of them seem totally evil.
I'm struggling to pick best-boy between the MC and the shop owner.

In conclusion, the stranger in sorcererstown is a fast-paced game of deception and disturbing the local tea shop, I absolutely recommend it for anyone fond of the fantasy or 'mind game' genre!

SimpleCode
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Magic guns. Sorcerers and wizardry. Beautiful worldbuilding. Refined writing. Exquisite descriptions and epic fight scenes. This is what "A Stranger in Sorcererstown" really is.

A marvelous, unique, enticing magical western. If you love a good story, a bad-ass, enigmatic character and lots of action - look no further! 

 

There are some minor defficits, like how the sidecharacters are slightly underdeveloped and flat (especially in the beginning). But that's to be expected to some point - after all, the Stranger doesn't care about the others. He's a witty, lone wolf - and that's enough for character creation.

 

Overall: a solid 5 star. Can't wait to read more!

Primate
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EXTREMELY CAPTIVATING

Reviewed at: 19. The Dragon

 The story. I will start with the storyline.

"The ancient city-state of Sorcerstown, the world’s capitol of magic where the most legendary wizards, warlocks, and royal mages learned their secret craft was nothing like what the Stranger expected it to be. Not a sorcerer has drawn breath there in years, only sorceresses fill the Great Schools of Magic and the petty squabbling between them has grown into full-blown war with the money vaults, spellbooks and armories thrown open to call and empower the best mercenaries, cutthroats and killers from all corners of the map and blast anyone unfortunate enough to get caught in the middle. That middle is where the Stranger decides is the best place to ply his own unique set of skills in a daring plan to make pawns of the powers that be and reach an endgame opposed to all other factions in town. But with the arcane arts being thrown around like sling stones, suspicions running high with everyone from the new hires to the headmistresses of the Great Schools and a looming threat of a supposedly unbeatable warrior on his way to the battleground of the once a great city-state it doesn’t take much for a wanderer’s plans to earn him nothing but an unmarked grave. It’s all or nothing in here in Sorcererstown and in this deadly game everyone is playing for keeps."

This is a captivating storyline. Just reading the synopsis, the readers will be intrigued to check out the full story. And once they pick this up, the readers will know how good a novel it is. The story keeps developing nicely without deviating from the original plotline.

The style is the omniscient third person narration. Although the main focus is on the stranger, there are other characters that the author is also detailing. This enables the author to write from their perspectives regarding their actions, how they feel and their thoughts.

The grammar is really good. This is a well written book. Despite a few minor errors, the flow of the story is never affected.

The characters are gold. The characters really set this novel ablaze. Perfectly defined characters who are well fitted to their roles. 'The stranger' is an extremely interesting character. Right from his first appearance, the tone of his identity was set. And it didn't disappoint. 

Very commendable.    

Morgan Cole
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I love this book. If you're a fan of A Fistful of Dollars or Yojimbo, you'll recognize the story. This is a fantasy version and it's really well done here. Our mysterious stranger arrives in town and begins to pit the rival houses against each other. It's been a while since I've watched any of the movies so I'm not sure how close it hews to the story, but who cares! 

Style: It flows, and it's cool. 

 

Grammar: The only weak point. There are some editing issues that need to be corrected. Really just needs a copy edit pass.

 

Characters: The stranger is really well done. He's not invincible but does a good job convincing the heads of the schools and everyone else that he is. The family that he boards with is well done, and the villains are all different flavors of conniving and wicked.

 

In summary, this is a Western in grimdark Fantasy clothing. It's very well written and it's worth a read.

 

jxlegend
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This is publication worthy. 

 

Brilliant. Great world-building, three-dimensional characters, SHOWING AND NOT TELLING. 

 

Fantastic.