Warning: the first blue box appears at chapter 24.

David always lived his life, looking at the world through a film of grey. He knew he was dull, he knew he was worthless. And the world was too.

His life ended in an instant, hit by a truck. Then he woke up again, and the System gave him a mission.

Pretty standard isekai, so far.

The only problem was that whenever he died, he respawned. After agony and pain, he would come back reforged. And so he died, again and again.

And when he completed his mission, another one awaited. On and on. 

But his life had meaning now.

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[I have read up to and including chapter 8]

This story seems to be hampered by its own impatience to get points across. It seems to be stuck in "tell, don't show" for large portions of chapters.

Style:

The narration style is clean cut and straight to the point. There is little wrong with it, but also little exceptional or especially good. Descriptions of environment, actions and events take easy paths with a small vocabulary certainly making the story easy to read for non-native readers, but at the same time bland in terms of language.

In terms of genre, the story sticks to a very simple and basic Isekai+Reincarnation+GameLit structure. Even the character begins to think in gamer terms and it is obvious from early on that we are going to be shown mostly the protagonist climbing up the power ladder with ease and admiration.

Story:

The story spends most of its time telling and explaining, rather than showing and moving. Most of the characters up to chapter 8 seem to exist solely to give exposition and background knowledge, including the protagonist. As with the actual events, promise is certainly there, a little village that endears itself to the reader, but like all else, it is buried under stylistic and character errors.

Grammar:

A rough and bumpy ride and many phrases seem either stale due to a lack of vocabulary or stilted due to an attempt to perk it up farther than it reaches.

Character:

The protagonist is apparently supposed to be empty and blank so the reader can project themselves onto him, going so far as the character themselves believing they are bland and empty. The story could have gone for a gradual character development that goes from 0 to 100 in terms of crass personality, but it instead then crams several arcs worth of character development into a few paragraphs and a timeskip. It could have pulled off either well, but instead it tries to have its cake and eat it and fails at both.

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I already like this story. The grammar is good, and there has clearly been put a lot of thought into it. The way the characters behave is realistic and logical. There is a bit of confusion sometimes as to who is thinking or speaking at the moment, but it's overall readable. I like it a lot.