Burning Stars, Falling Skies

by CoCop

Warning This fiction contains:
  • Gore
  • Traumatising content

Threedak is a simple Dhajtel. Every night she scavenges and hunts for her tribe in the great desert, relying upon her skill and ancestral memories to avoid the night's many dangers. Her life remains largely the same until one night, one of the gleaming angels that hangs in the night sky falls into her desert. Deciding to investigate, she happens upon a scene far beyond her limited understanding.

The Dhajtel aren't alone. The galaxy is far vaster and more hostile than Threedak's people can even begin to comprehend.

Entrusted with the knowledge and memories of a dead race, it will be up to her to forge Dhajtel society into something that can survive the storm that is to come.

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(This novel is heavy on Kingdom/Empire Building and is an attempt at fairly hard (grounded in real science) Science Fiction)

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readalot
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Original as far as I can tell. I am only at chapter 4 but I am certain I am hooked. The death of humanity will not be forgotten and a new civilization is born.

The only plot hole that bugs me is the purpose of the ark. There wasn't much of a point to so few people escaping no matter how talented they were unless they had some way to rebuild society. If the ship held the genetic information and the tech to restart the race it would make more sense. I hope the purpose of the arks escape is revealed at some point.

parkertallan
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Empire building like you've never seen it before

Reviewed at: Chapter 7 - Conquest

If you like classic sci-fi, you'll love "Burning Stars, Falling Skies." It greatly reminded me of Isaac Azimov's Foundation Trilogy, but with a unique twist; the last remaining humans died when their ship crashed on the Dhajtel planet. And that's just the first chapter.

And so we lament the loss of humanity, well not quite, thanks to the manner in which Dhajtel can absorb the memories of others. It's with the memories of those last humans that Threedak begins to transform her tribal society into an empire. An empire that will avenge humanities destruction.

Watching Threedak's transformation from scavenger/hunter to ruler is fascinating and very well done. Even the tone of the writing changes as she develops more human characteristics. The first four chapters are mostly narration as Threedak quickly advances from Stone Age to Iron Age technology allowing her to begin her conquest of the surrounding tribes. However, it's well written and moves quickly.

Not a lot of character development at this point in the story, but I didn't miss it. Same for dialogue. This is actually fairly common in classic sci-fi so I felt right at home.

ZZZX
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Great work, but might not be for everyone

Reviewed at: Chapter 9 - Nation

So, let me preface this review by saying that this book might not be for everyone. Don't get me wrong, I do believe it is an amazing piece and I do recommend you try to read it until chapter 5-6 at the very least. In general, the first few chapters are significantly slower as the plot is constructed.

Another thing is the whole genre. This isn't really a novel that is about simply "getting stronger" in a fantasy sense. This is a Sci-Fi work with Fantasy tones, but still SciFi mainly.

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Style:

I would say the style used has been very interesting, admittedly it did have a bit more exposition-like segments than what it could've had, but I thought about it and I guess why the author decided to go with it. There is a lot of information to unpack especially early on, and the style gives me a specific feel. I can't say I dislike it, I DO like it. There were few occurrences that I felt could've been done better but that was just me. 

I would give the style 4.5 stars

 

Grammar:

I don't really have any major complaints about grammar. I have been considering whether to give it 5 or 4.5 stars purely due to having some statements that while not grammarly incorrect, just sounded a bit off. But, I am honestly not an expert so my opinion about those is not an objective truth.

So I settled for giving grammar 5 stars.

 

Story:

The story is where this shines, this reminds me of Sci-Fi classics as I went through it. Without spoiling much, the premise of the story is interesting and keeps on giving. What I can say from the synopsis is while there is a factor of "inheriting memories" it is not as cliche as most other novels make it, and instead it is done with a way I haven't seen before. I highly recommend checking this story. Also the later chapters, the story starts to accelerate very fast forward, which I appreciate.

I give the story a solid and clear 5 stars. 

 

Characters:

Generally, this story was not one that was focused on characters, especially at the beginning of the story. Without spoiling (this is becoming my new favorite phrase here lol), everything does make sense in the story. Generally, the main character is interesting and later on, there are also some interesting - albeit one dimensional - characters.

This isn't a complaint mind you. This story works well the way it does because of those parts. It was hard to give a score to characters as I was reading through. Early on I was thinking about as low as 3 stars, however, by the later chapters things accelerate at a very rapid pace.

I decided to settle on 4 stars. partly from what is already there by chapter 9 (where I caught up) as well as the future potential of the next few chapters. 

Again, it is not a complaint. But if you are reading this story to have some characters banter and witness their exchanges primarily this might not be for you. If you are here to witness the growth of the main characters you will enjoy this.

 

Conclusion:

In conclusion, I wholeheartedly recommend Burning stars, Falling skies. It might not be for everyone but I still recommend reading it until at least chapters 5-6 when things start to pick up and accelerate. And I will be personally following the journey that this novel goes through

TheWitchOfTheRock
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When you get into this story, give your mind a little bit of time to build the world. It doesn't take long and when that's done you're thrown into a truly engaging world.  I love stories that really play with  different aliens and alien worlds, and this   Is just *Chef's kiss*

Style: I was never pulled from the story by anything to do with the style


Story: Alien lizard gains human feelings and skills and decided to  use all to push their own civilization forward as they're now - in their minds, a new species! 

 

Grammar: I was never distracted by the  grammar. 

 

Character: I LOVE  Threedak.  You made me care about the character, which is the best you can do, I think. 

NIDHOGGR
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This story is one of the best examples of a true kingdom-building story that I have ever come across, and believe me when I say, I've read hundreds of stories here on RRL in the virtual plane and thousands of books here in the physical plane of Earth. Anyways, uplifting is something that happens in this story, and with the reputation of CoCop, author of quite a few excellent stories behind it, I believe that it truly has what it takes to succeed and succeed it has since this story is also one of the few Kingdom-Building stories on RRL marked as Complete!

q00u
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What if primitive humans knew of an existential threat, a space-spanning empire of invaders? And they had to build their standard of technology from the ground up in order to fight for their right to exist?

That’s almost the premise of this story.

It's fairly short and bingeable. There are plenty of grammatical mistakes, but nothing so egregious that it makes it difficult to keep reading. There is still more story to tell and not every thread gets tied up completely, but it has ending enough.

Final verdict: Worth the read.

Axolot
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This is the second kingdom building novel that i have read so far and  i truly enjoyed it so far.

 

 One  aspect that i would not have expected was the fast paced progression of this story.  That has surprised me in good way.

 

SavageMercy
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Do you like lizards? Worldbuilding? Lizards AND worldbuilding? Well this novel has both, along with an immersive story that shows real progression and drives me to keep wanting to know more!

Good job Mr. Author! I expect much more entertainment out of Threedak and her people!

Redeyes Eclipse
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Awesome originality fresh new excitement

Reviewed at: Chapter 5 - The First Year

I enjoyed everything to the unique creature to the epicness of the alien world I appreciate the author for giving reason to my meaningless existence

Csuite
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Civilisation-building crossed with classic sci-fi

Reviewed at: Chapter 23 - The Last Supper

This is an update to my previous review, where I rated this 4 stars at Chapter 6. Things have definitely changed a lot since, and I've upped the rating to a 4.5.

Burning Stars, Falling Skies is a story that brings me back to the kind of classic sci-fi, in particular short stories, that was concept-driven and technical. It's a civilisation-builder that starts in the equivalent of the stone age and ends up... somewhat more advanced.

The story is very well-written, with only the occasional typo, mostly in the punctuation. I found it mostly engaging, easy to read and follow, with the exception of some highly technical and militaristic sections that went largely over my head. Again, very reminiscent of hard classic sci-fi and a bit too dry for my personal taste.

I was very impressed with the attention to detail of the Dhajtel race. They feel like a truly alien species, yet still relatable in some ways and sympathetic in many, with plenty of unusual features separating them from humans. Which becomes a critical feature given the plot of the story. Very well done.

Spoiler: Spoiler

In my earlier review I mentioned the slow pacing, and boy did I turn out to be mistaken. The story's pace is actually highly variable. This works better than it sounds, at times giving lingering attention to pivotal scenes yet covering years in leaps and bounds at others. Ultimately, this is a story that covers a civilisation's development at a macro scale, while dialling it back enough for us to embark on a meaningful journey with its individual characters.

There are some genuinely emotional moments in the story, and I found myself tearing up on more than one occasion. It's a mark of the skill of the author that they can take a distinctly non-human species and make them so easy to relate to. I also feel the need to mention the ending...

Spoiler: Spoiler

Still not quite a perfect five star read for me due to the intermittent dryness, but it comes awfully close, and my previous review didn't do it justice. It's a good story, with particular sections that leap out as being amazing. The writing quality is great.

If you like seeing a society exponentially progress from humble beginnings; if you like a thoughtful read with well-developed world-building, or if you like the kind of story that impacts your emotions - then I think you'll love it.