In the Sorcerer's Service

In the Sorcerer's Service

by Arushi

A promise kept. A girl, sworn to a sorcerer's service. A mother, exiled and waiting. 

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Spellbound from the very start

Reviewed at: 10 - The Unrest

 This story truly leaves nothing to be desired, unless you particularly dislike it's premises.

Starting out like a classical fairytale it becomes immediatly clear how lovingly crafted the characters are. They are distinct, life-like, in-depth and so well depicted I found myself sympathezing with or loathing them from the get-go. A feat few stories manage on this site. The story wastes no time, however, to transition into a more mature story about dark ploys, debts and human cruelty but never looses the mystical flair. And while so far the scenes/situations are familiar they are so well told it's an absolute joy to read them.

Grammar and vocabulary are as far as I can tell impeccable. Thus overall a clear 5/5 and definite must read.

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  1. This is a quick review up to chapter 8, because I think this story can become quiet good and can use a bit more attention.

So, down to the review.

Style and characters scores are 3 stars only due to the still few content, but they are distinctive, with their own background and the character that it develop due to their way of living.

Story rating is high because I find the set up interesting and i’m curious as to where the author will take this. It has a good potential.

There weren’t any grammatical error that I saw, that broke the flow of the reading.

That’s it for now. I’ll might update this in the future.