Left the World as Villager A. Came Back a Mecha Pilot.

by UnlimitedMeganeWorks

Original HIATUS Action Drama Fantasy Romance Sci-fi
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Myst Evrard was your typical rural village kid. He once dreamed of fame and a life of adventure but quickly gave up on the idea after realizing he just wasn't cut out for that sort of stuff.

It doesn't really help that his best friend became a monster and demon slaying hero and his first crush turned out to be a long lost princess of the kingdom.

As he finally resolves himself to live a mundane village life, he suddenly encounters an unfortunate accident and dies. Just when he thought things couldn't possibly get any worse...

But when he opened his eyes next, fully expecting to find himself in the netherworld, what he saw was...

Giant robots?!

What the heck was going on?
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decemdies
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*This review is accurate as of chapter 8*

 

I went into this story not expecting anything. But boy, was i proven dead wrong. The writing of the story is very fluid. A tiny bit of grammatical errors as you scroll down for more but it's not enough to hamper the writing. That's because the words used fittingly convey their intended idea.  

Take for instance the very first paragraph of chapter 1:

I suddenly woke up with dog saliva slathered all over my face. Not that I'm bothered by it. It's just our family dog being far too liberal with displaying her affections as always. It's quite cute actually. The only downside is me smelling a bit funny after she's done with me.

The sentences used to convey the ideas are short so you won't get long texts of unending speech. 

And speaking about conveying ideas, the MC's emotions are astutely conveyed. The author describes with just enough detail about how our MC feels. Whether it's from his disappointments from the past or his confusion as he goes to the next world, everything is built up in a slow and steady manner.

Because of that, the MC becomes very relatable. The MC is just like the ordinary us, having weakness but not recognizing his own strengths. 

Since each chapter isn't that long, the story has only started picking up. However, I haven't got bored from reading all 8 chapters so I'm going to recommend this work of fiction.

 

Kaellom
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 Although there's only 7 chapters so far, this story is brilliant! You have good gramma (Praise the gods!) and your character is reasonably in depth. You seem to understand the difference between showing and explaining (Praise the gods even more) which is the workings of a great author! You may find that there are not that many people reading it yet, but once your chapter count hits around 20, your view ratings will skyrocket. One thing you may want to do is shorten the title. On the homepage, you can't see the whole title, all I saw was "I Left the World as Villager A. I Came Back a Mecha" so I thought, 'He turns into a mecha!?' Please keep writing, your story will surely be popular if you do!

FanFicFanatic
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Fresh Concept, Amazing Characterization

I was initially a little skeptical when I read the title, but I have to say your story really grew on me. You make sure to give a vivid sense of imagery instead of just describing the scene. The way you describe the character and his thought process really makes him believable (who doesn't have regrets when it comes to love?). The world building was nice, and you're really fleshing out his new one. However, I also hope that you won't forget to do the same with his old one (which he most likely goes back to). My only piece of advice for the future is: For the love of God, DO NOT nerf the MC. Make his power gain steady or make him OP. Nerf him, and you run the risk of losing a lot of readers, as well as ruining the story. You're grammar is amazing, allowing the reader to be fully immersed in the world. I really hope you keep this up. It'll be a shame if a story with such potential gets dropped due to inactivity. Good luck, I'm rooting for you. :)

Small-san
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Very interesting read!

It's only the second chapter, but the feels are already building up. Can't wait to read what's next!

GunSeraph
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I immensely enjoyed the chapters that are out so far.

The grammar is, as previously mentioned, quite good, a whole realm above other on this site.

The story in itself is interesting, and I believe it hasn't been often that a Fantasy character has been reincarnated into a SciFi setting. At least not to my knowledge. And the overlap of his *spoiler* magical abilities/knowledge with his current life allows for some interesting developments in the future.

I'm looking forward to learning how his Mana-Shaping and Spellwork can and hopefully be integrated into the story. I imagine something along the line of a genius explaining to someone else in the form of "Nonono, it's more like swoosh and bzzt before bang, you know" -well please don't do that but I hope you catch my drift-

The character seems believable, insofar that most people, if given the chance between leaving the comforts of their home to go off to adventure would probably choose similarly to the MC. But now that he hast been thrust away, he has been forced to be on the "Hero's Journey." I do hope that he will return to his home planet/dimension at some point. The problem I see is that his important character growth has already been more or less accomplished, just before his *spoilers* unfortunate demise, so the question is, how will he continue to grow?  How will his experience in this intergalactic war change him? How will his sudden shift to protagonist/hero affect his persona? Will the previous Ego of the body influence him somehow? Could it lead to a potential identity crisis?

The side characters need to be more fleshed out, and hopefully get their own form of growth, but as the story is still in its initial phases you can leave that to future chapters. I do hope to see more of Miss Miya.

I eagerly await further chapters!

Zombie Unicorne
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More like "Left the world as villager A, then became a Mecha Pilot

The title is rather misleading, it makes you believe that the MC is already a mech pilot and have returned to his original world but not really.

 

Don't get me wrong though. I am glad where the story is heading, I'm more interested in the Sci-fi robot world than the fantasy one. I hope the story would stick to the mech world for a very long time.

 

 

posiedons
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I love how you built up the story so far. It just left me wanting to read more. Keep up the Good work.

Darth Meowsers
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 This is off to a very promising start. I look forward to the continuation and hope to be able to support you for a long time to come.

zawilson621
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so far i give it a 5/5

Good grammar

So far good characters

And story

 

But be warned this will turn into a 3/5 if he is weak (lol you don't really care)

And i will rate it a failure (i do know of failures since i am one lol) if he never returns to his world

Of course if you somehow work with it without him returning i will congratulate you for working through the impossible

fiqramz21
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hmm... waiting for more chapter

so.. he will reincarnate to his own world or another world ?

and will you add a side story or something to tell us about what his childhood friend(the hero and the princess) feel when they leave him and when he die ?

sorry for so many question... keep up the good work