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A New World. A Thousand Threats. Welcome to The Continent.

Felix's life on Earth had become a series of dead-end jobs, ruined relationships, and rotating apartments smaller than most postage stamps. By all accounts, even his own, he was a coward. Too afraid to move forward, to take risks. Yet when given the chance to choose between risking his life or walking away from a deadly encounter, he didn't hesitate.

Moments before his untimely demise, Felix was snatched from earth and thrust into a magical world known only as ‘The Continent’. Empowered by the ‘System,' he learns that he can strengthen himself through combat and dedication. To survive he'll have to push himself beyond his limits, or else fall to the monsters all around him.

Levels, stats, and magic. Death is the start of a terrible fate, but if he lives…who knows what he will become.

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294 Chapters
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Chapter One - 001 ago
Chapter Two - 002 ago
Chapter Three - 003 ago
Chapter Four - 004 ago
Chapter Five - 005 ago
Chapter Six - 006 ago
Chapter Seven - 007 ago
Chapter Eight - 008 ago
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Chapter Eighty Four - 084 ago
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Chapter Eighty Seven - 087 ago
Chapter Eighty Eight - 088 ago
Chapter Eighty Nine - 089 ago
Chapter Ninety - 090 ago
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Chapter One Hundred and Seventy – 170 ago
Chapter One Hundred and Seventy One – 171 ago
Chapter One Hundred and Seventy Two – 172 ago
Chapter One Hundred and Seventy Three - 173 ago
Chapter One Hundred and Seventy Four – 174 ago
Chapter One Hundred and Seventy Five – 175 ago
Chapter One Hundred and Seventy Six – 176 ago
Chapter One Hundred and Seventy Seven – 177 ago
Chapter One Hundred and Seventy Eight – 178 ago
Chapter One Hundred and Seventy Nine – 179 ago
Chapter One Hundred and Eighty - 180 ago
Chapter One Hundred and Eighty One – 181 ago
Chapter One Hundred and Eighty Two – 182 ago
Chapter One Hundred and Eighty Three – 183 ago
Chapter One Hundred and Eighty Four - 184 ago
Chapter One Hundred and Eighty Five - 185 ago
Chapter One Hundred and Eighty Six - 186 ago
Chapter One Hundred and Eighty Seven - 187 ago
Chapter One Hundred and Eighty Eight - 188 ago
Chapter One Hundred and Eighty Nine - 189 ago
Chapter One Hundred and Ninety - 190 ago
Chapter One Hundred and Ninety One - 191 ago
Chapter One Hundred and Ninety Two - 192 ago
Chapter One Hundred and Ninety Three - 193 ago
Chapter One Hundred and Ninety Four - 194 ago
Chapter One Hundred and Ninety Five - 195 ago
Chapter One Hundred and Ninety Six - 196 ago
Chapter One Hundred and Ninety Seven - 197 ago
Chapter One Hundred and Ninety Eight - 198 ago
Chapter One Hundred and Ninety Nine - 199 ago
Chapter Two Hundred – 200 ago
Chapter Two Hundred and One – 201 ago
Chapter Two Hundred and Two - 202 ago
Chapter Two Hundred and Three - 203 ago
Chapter Two Hundred and Four - 204 ago
Chapter Two Hundred and Five - 205 ago
Chapter Two Hundred and Six – 206 ago
Chapter Two Hundred and Seven – 207 ago
Chapter Two Hundred and Eight – 208 ago
Chapter Two Hundred and Nine – 209 ago
Chapter Two Hundred and Ten – 210 ago
Chapter Two Hundred and Eleven – 211 ago
Chapter Two Hundred and Twelve – 212 ago
Chapter Two Hundred and Thirteen – 213 ago
Chapter Two Hundred and Fourteen - 214 ago
Chapter Two Hundred and Fifteen – 215 ago
Chapter Two Hundred and Sixteen - 216 ago
Chapter Two Hundred and Seventeen – 217 ago
Chapter Two Hundred and Eighteen – 218 ago
Chapter Two Hundred and Nineteen – 219 ago
Chapter Two Hundred and Twenty – 220 ago
Chapter Two Hundred and Twenty One – 221 ago
Chapter Two Hundred and Twenty Two – 222 ago
Chapter Two Hundred and Twenty Three - 223 ago
Chapter Two Hundred and Twenty Four - 224 ago
Chapter Two Hundred and Twenty Five - 225 ago
Chapter Two Hundred and Twenty Six - 226 ago
Chapter Two Hundred and Twenty Seven - 227 ago
Chapter Two Hundred and Twenty Eight - 228 ago
Chapter Two Hundred and Twenty Nine - 229 ago
Chapter Two Hundred and Thirty - 230 ago
Chapter Two Hundred and Thirty One – 231 ago
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Chapter Two Hundred and Thirty Three - 233 ago
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Chapter Two Hundred and Thirty Six - 236 ago
Chapter Two Hundred and Thirty Seven - 237 ago
Chapter Two Hundred and Thirty Eight – 238 ago
Chapter Two Hundred and Thirty Nine - 239 ago
Chapter Two Hundred and Forty - 240 ago
Chapter Two Hundred and Forty One - 241 ago
Chapter Two Hundred and Forty Two - 242 ago
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Chapter Two Hundred and Fifty - 250 ago
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Chapter Two Hundred and Fifty Seven - 257 ago
Chapter Two Hundred and Fifty Eight – 258 ago
Chapter Two Hundred and Fifty Nine – 259 ago
Chapter Two Hundred and Sixty – 260 ago
Chapter Two Hundred and Sixty One - 261 ago
Chapter Two Hundred and Sixty Two - 262 ago
Chapter Two Hundred and Sixty Three - 263 ago
Chapter Two Hundred and Sixty Four - 264 ago
Chapter Two Hundred and Sixty Five - 265 ago
Chapter Two Hundred and Sixty Six - 266 ago
Chapter Two Hundred and Sixty Seven – 267 ago
Chapter Two Hundred and Sixty Eight – 268 ago
Chapter Two Hundred and Sixty Nine – 269 ago
Chapter Two Hundred and Seventy – 270 ago
Chapter Two Hundred and Seventy One – 271 ago
Chapter Two Hundred and Seventy Two – 272 ago
Chapter Two Hundred and Seventy Three – 273 ago
Chapter Two Hundred and Seventy Four – 274 ago
Chapter Two Hundred and Seventy Five – 275 ago
Chapter Two Hundred and Seventy Six - 276 ago
Chapter Two Hundred and Seventy Seven - 277 ago
Chapter Two Hundred and Seventy Eight - 278 ago
Chapter Two Hundred and Seventy Nine - 279 ago
Chapter Two Hundred and Eighty - 280 ago
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Chapter Two Hundred And Ninety Nine – 299 ago
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Chapter Three Hundred And Fifteen – 315 ago
Chapter Three Hundred And Sixteen - 316 ago
Chapter Three Hundred And Seventeen – 317 ago
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Chapter Three Hundred And Nineteen – 319 ago
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Chapter Three Hundred and Twenty One - 321 ago
Chapter Three Hundred and Twenty Two – 322 ago
Chapter Three Hundred and Twenty Three – 323 ago
Chapter Three Hundred and Twenty Four – 324 ago
Chapter Three Hundred and Twenty Five – 325 ago
Chapter Three Hundred and Twenty Six – 326 ago
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Chapter Three Hundred and Twenty Eight – 328 ago
Chapter Three Hundred and Twenty Nine – 329 ago
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Chapter Three Hundred And Thirty Seven – 337 ago
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Chapter Three Hundred And Thirty Nine – 339 ago
Chapter Three Hundred And Forty – 340 ago
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Chapter Three Hundred And Forty Nine - 349 ago
Chapter Three Hundred And Fifty – 350 ago
Chapter Three Hundred and Fifty One - 351 ago
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Chapter Three Hundred And Fifty Six – 356 ago
Chapter Three Hundred And Fifty Seven – 357 ago
Chapter Three Hundred And Fifty Eight – 358 ago
Chapter Three Hundred And Fifty Nine - 359 ago
Chapter Three Hundred And Sixty – 360 ago
Chapter Three Hundred And Sixty One – 361 ago
Chapter Three Hundred And Sixty Two - 362 ago
Chapter Three Hundred And Sixty Three - 363 ago
Chapter Three Hundred And Sixty Four – 364 ago
Chapter Three Hundred And Sixty Five - 365 ago
Chapter Three Hundred And Sixty Six - 366 ago
Chapter Three Hundred And Sixty Seven - 367 ago
Chapter Three Hundred And Sixty Eight - 368 ago
Chapter Three Hundred And Sixty Nine - 369 ago
Chapter Three Hundred And Seventy - 370 ago
Chapter Three Hundred And Seventy One - 371 ago
Chapter Three Hundred And Seventy Two – 372 ago
Chapter Three Hundred And Seventy Three – 373 ago
Chapter Three Hundred And Seventy Four – 374 ago
Chapter Three Hundred And Seventy Five – 375 ago
Chapter Three Hundred And Seventy Six – 376 ago
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Chapter Three Hundred And Seventy Seven – 377 ago
Chapter Three Hundred And Seventy Eight – 378 ago
Chapter Three Hundred And Seventy Nine – 379 ago
Chapter Three Hundred And Eighty – 380 ago
Chapter Three Hundred And Eighty One - 381 ago
Chapter Three Hundred And Eighty Two – 382 ago
Chapter Three Hundred And Eighty Three – 383 ago
Chapter Three Hundred And Eighty Four – 384 ago
Chapter Three Hundred And Eighty Five - 385 ago
Chapter Three Hundred And Eighty Six – 386 ago
Chapter Three Hundred And Eighty Seven – 387 ago
Chapter Three Hundred And Eighty Eight – 388 ago
Chapter Three Hundred And Eighty Nine – 389 ago
Chapter Three Hundred And Ninety – 390 ago
Chapter Three Hundred And Ninety One – 391 ago
Chapter Three Hundred And Ninety Two – 392 ago
Chapter Three Hundred And Ninety Three – 393 ago
Chapter Three Hundred And Ninety Four – 394 ago
Chapter Three Hundred And Ninety Five - 395 ago
Chapter Three Hundred And Ninety Six – 396 ago
Chapter Three Hundred And Ninety Seven – 397 ago
Chapter Three Hundred And Ninety Eight – 398 ago
Chapter Three Hundred And Ninety Nine – 399 ago
Chapter Four Hundred - 400 ago
Chapter Four Hundred And One - 401 ago
Chapter Four Hundred And Two - 402 ago
Chapter Four Hundred And Three - 403 ago
Chapter Four Hundred And Four – 404 ago
Chapter Four Hundred And Five – 405 ago
Chapter Four Hundred And Six - 406 ago
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Chapter Four Hundred And Twelve - 412 ago
Chapter Four Hundred And Thirteen – 413 ago
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Chapter Four Hundred And Fifteen – 415 ago
Chapter Four Hundred And Sixteen – 416 ago
Chapter Four Hundred And Seventeen – 417 ago
Chapter Four Hundred And Eighteen - 418 ago
Chapter Four Hundred And Nineteen – 419 ago
Chapter Four Hundred And Twenty – 420 ago
Chapter Four Hundred And Twenty One – 421 ago
Chapter Four Hundred And Twenty Two – 422 ago
Chapter Four Hundred And Twenty Three – 423 ago
Chapter Four Hundred And Twenty Four – 424 ago
Chapter Four Hundred And Twenty Five – 425 ago
Chapter Four Hundred And Twenty Six – 426 ago
Chapter Four Hundred And Twenty Seven – 427 ago
Chapter Four Hundred And Twenty Eight – 428 ago
Chapter Four Hundred And Twenty Nine – 429 ago
Chapter Four Hundred And Thirty – 430 ago
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Chapter Four Hundred And Thirty Nine – 439 ago
Chapter Four Hundred And Forty – 440 ago
Chapter Four Hundred And Forty One - 441 ago
Chapter Four Hundred And Forty Two – 442 ago
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FallWithGrace
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I want to like this story but it's rough

Reviewed at: Chapter Fifty Nine - 059

I want to add this book to my favorites but I don't think I ever will. It will probably remain in my follow list until I get annoyed with it.

Grammar: Excellent 5/5

Style Score: This style of reincarnated to new world rpg has been done before but it doesn't come across as boring. Excellent 5/5

Now you've noticed I've given the character and story scores 2.5 and 3 stars respectively. It's a simple reason. The author has bad habits.

Multitasking storytelling: You're reading a fight scene. The action is intense. There are flashes and bangs and the MC is using cool skills. All of a sudden, at the climax of the fight scene, the author goes into the MC thought process. It's so offputting. You can't take people out of the scene to set future scenes. It's shoddy storytelling. If the present scene has to suffer just so you can give a glimpse of the past or the future then you've wasted pages.

The Main Character thinks too much but grows little. Show don't tell is a powerful tool. Except the author shows every thing that flows through the MCs brain. You're in the middle of one scene but you can't get into the scene because the MC interrupts to show us his thoughts and feelings about some shiny thing. I've grown to resent his presence in a scene. Yes, I hate when the MC is in a scene because I can't enjoy the scene. I'm given one sentence and then he comes in and you're on a tangent. One sentence, three paragraph long tangent, and then back to the scene. You can imagine how slowly the story moves.

Chekov's Gun: It's abused in this story. The switch from scene to MC to scene shits all over this mark of good writing. You're in a scene, gun one locked and loanded, and it's firing. Then the MC interjects to show you another shiny object, gun 2 appears. However, gun 1 is no longer firing. Gun 2 is loaded up and oops back to gun 1. Where is gun 2? Wait for it. Here comes Gun 3.

Edit: Nevermind. It's gone from my follow list. The split story is just too annoying. Split in scene. Multi perspectives. I don't need to see the same story in different perspectives. I don't need to see three differnt scenes in one page.

caracco
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It was good at first, but it keeps repeating itself. Felix is not a bad character itself, but he isn't evolving, he always makes the same choice, and I don't like it.

in the end, the real problem is that it is repeating itself while not advancing fast enough.

Obviously, this is my opinion and someone else will think that it is extremely good and that I am exaggerating the problems, but I don't think so.

I will say that if you don't care about repetitiveness you will like this story, but as I don't I'll stop reading it.

My only hope is that this will not turn like some other system stories in a parody of itself, going on forever and without a real end.

Now a bit of rant. I can understand that after 220 chapters Felix is still weak and all, but I can't really accept that he fall always for the same kind of scheme and problems.

First the Maw, then Vellus.

He seems a slave of the plot, never thinking about what he is going to do and always following the others. I really can't comprehend him.

Then I can't really understand how the hell this system works, how the hell he could be strong and weak as much as it is needed for the plot without any consistency or how could Vess still be able to fight at his level after he became a primordial and has tens of bonuses.

 

Mash_Potatoes
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A generic isekai litrpg story featuring a protagonist that progressively gets stronger each and every chapter. The plot armour makes the story lacks excitement as it becomes predictable beyond measure as it is obvious that the MC will always come out on top one way or the other. The MC himself comes off as a rather dense/not-so-bright fellow while the side characters, on the other hand, are, in my mind, purposefully made to be either incredibly stupid or naive in order to allow the plot to progress the way the author wants. 

All that said though, grammar is great and the plot itself somewhat interesting, so if you don't mind all the issues I pointed out in the beginning then you should find it as an enjoyable read.

ceaser
Overall

Even fantasy need to be realistic.

Reviewed at: Chapter Forty Four - 044

(chapter 44) Yeah.. I got to the part where the psychotic woman kidnap the Kids in order to undertake a suicide mission (while she could have left em at the entrance of the forest where there aint an army of man eating giants) and the only guy Who notice a problem with it is painted as a selfish asshole by the author. Yeah totally legit i know..

I actually liked the premise, the story has many major plot holes, and exaggerated plot armor, but i could handle them, what put me off is the convulted sense of justice in the story and how natural the author try to make it seems lol

So im puting it off here i guess. 

Ruyxi Sylpheyes
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Never-ending struggle and that's the problem

Reviewed at: Chapter One Hundred and Seventy Eight – 178

The story just follows the Main character felix as he goes from one fight to the next with no real breaks in between. Sure there is a chapter here or there where the story slows down to give context and explinations, but the story is just never ending violence and fighting with no breaks in between to really savor anything about the world the author has built. I just find myself skipping whole chapters, just watching for level ups and such to tell me how much Felix is screwed and what went wrong this time. I hope in their next book the author breaks up the violence with world building, exploration and development outside of simple levels more than they did in this book. Still the book is not painful to read like other books, but definitly mediocre in my eyes.

Tacroy
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Misadventures of a glorious idiot

Reviewed at: Chapter Twenty Seven - 027

I agree with pretty much all of the negative feedback this story has received.

The main character makes really stupid decisions. He should have died just from being dropped in an over-leveled zone as a level zero character. He should have died multiple times over from the (totally forseeable) results of his own actions. He definitely should have been struck down by the gods of cliche for acquiring a pet in the most trite way physically possible.

But none of that really matters. This isn't that kind of story; this isn't a powergamer figuring out the nooks and crannies of the system, or a soft modern person being flensed by a hardcore and gritty world.

This is an uncomplicated power fantasy, an adventure of the old and pulpy school. It's the kind of story that always has life-or-death stakes and therefore has no stakes at all, because of course the MC isn't going to die. The entertainment isn't "will the MC succeed?" - it's being along for the ride as he does, and by the skin of his teeth because that is what's narratively required.

This is not Evangelion; it's Gurren Lagann.

Whoopsydaisy
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Plot armor and soon to be OP MC

Reviewed at: Chapter Eleven - 011

The MC has plot armor for days and a maxed out Luck stat. He triples his strength stat by doing push-ups for a day and then proceeds to trip over a waterfall that gives him a perk for surviving, while unconscious, due to the strength of his plot armor.

The grammar is good.

The character is mostly there to move the POV and be the thing that gains levels and stats and titles like beads at mardi gras.

The story is, at Chapter 11, entirely focused on the various Rare stats, titles, and whatnot that the MC can find dropped at his feet.

This is not a malicious review, there is promise here but if you've read 1 wuxia/xanxia story on RR, you've read this story. The only thing it's missing is an abusive female character, a doting female character, and the MC to bang his way through the entire female population.

grovekeeper
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Too much Plot armour and frequent scene mixup

Reviewed at: Chapter One Hundred and Sixty Two - 162

The title makes it abundantly clear.

Story: The MC just doesnt lose. He is thrown into dangerous situation one after the other continuosly and miraculously survves every encounter with new OP skills coming up per second. It is too fast paced with a serious power creep and a luck stat in the thousands. This explains it perfectly -

"The main character will act rashly, act dumb, outright fail in his attacks or skill usage, and yet instead of meeting grizzly demise, will be rewarded with exta skills and levels for overcoming his out stupidity. His mana or stamina will run into zero, but he will muster on, somehow, because reasons. He will fall unconcious or asleep tired after hard battles and nothing will happen to him"

Did I mention that his pet chimera grew sentient after having too much INT and WIS stat?

Another main problem is the scene mixup. As one reviewer put it, there are too much elements mixed into it - Chekov's gun is abused thoroughly. The scene might be in th emidst of the battle then the next one would be about something totally irrelevant like romance shadowing. I get it that the author wants to put in charcater progression, but there are way better places for that.

Characters are mostly relegated to the background with progression happening only when the pov switches. Development of them happens between fight scenes.

Grammar is great and the style is the usual litrpg without the boring parts.

Acerbic
Overall

Ding! Plot Armor skill leveled up to 9000!

Reviewed at: Chapter Twenty Two - 022

So, the book starts with our hero being attacked by a literal Mythic-rank tentacled nightmare monster, all before he has any levels or skills to his name. He, of course, survives this and more so, gets an OP skill.

Expect his plot armor to go even thicker from then on. The main character will act rashly, act dumb, outright fail in his attacks or skill usage, and yet instead of meeting grizzly demise, will be rewarded with exta skills and levels for overcoming his out stupidity. His mana or stamina will run into zero, but he will muster on, somehow, because reasons. He will fall unconcious or asleep tired after hard battles and nothing will happen to him. This is that kind of a novel.

Overall, the book's "story" is a huge stats-fest. We get stats, we train skills, we get more skills, etc., etc. Its like a "Cookie Clicker" game, where the whole game play is just clicking a cookie on screen, for which you are rewarded with tools and bonuses that help you click the cookie even better. A very popular game, I heard, and if you are into this stuff, you will enjoy this book too.

The writing is terrible - grammar is fine, but the narration suffers greatly from "tell, don't show" syndrome. This is compouded by the protagonist being extremely blasé about any wound or suffering he experiences. It comes literally down to him feeling "agonizing pain" in one sentence and going back to "everything is fine" attitude the next one. Presumably, this is explained by his "WIL" stat, but i think its just a cop-out for not be able to write a convincing survivor psyche.

The one point when the novel becomes moderately interesting is an intermission about people who aren't the MC, who aren't OP and "too cool to be affected by emotions".

Traian
Overall

Good start but went bad fast

Reviewed at: Chapter Sixty Nine - 069

Too many things are started but don't go anywhere, too much desperation, the system started ok but got overly complicated, the temperings were pretty weird, the death of the shield maiden was so forced for dramatic effect and so cliché it hurt, the MC seemd a bit more than stupid at times, and while the characters have distinct personalities, they are lacking severly in description