Unbound (LitRPG Portal Fantasy)

Unbound (LitRPG Portal Fantasy)

by Necariin

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A new world. A thousand threats. A mysterious new Race.

On the first day, Felix woke near an acidic sea, five moons hung in the sky, and a monster tried to eat him. It was a far cry from his normal life on Earth, and he soon realized he'd been transported farther than he could imagine.

Bombarded by a mysterious System that is changing him on a fundamental level, Felix must survive in a world not meant for the weak.




Welcome to the Continent. We hope you survive.


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Chapter Name Release Date
i - Prologue ago
ii - Prologue 2 ago
Chapter One - 001 ago
Chapter Two - 002 ago
Chapter Three - 003 ago
Chapter Four - 004 ago
Chapter Five - 005 ago
Chapter Six - 006 ago
Chapter Seven - 007 ago
Chapter Eight - 008 ago
Chapter Nine - 009 ago
Chapter Ten - 010 ago
Chapter Eleven - 011 ago
Chapter Twelve - 012 ago
Chapter Thirteen - 013 ago
Chapter Fourteen - 014 ago
Chapter Fifteen - 015 ago
Chapter Sixteen - 016 ago
Chapter Seventeen - 017 ago
Chapter Eighteen - 018 ago
Chapter Nineteen - 019 ago
Chapter Twenty - 020 ago
Chapter Twenty One - 021 ago
Chapter Twenty Two - 022 ago
Chapter Twenty Three - 023 ago
Chapter Twenty Four - 024 ago
Chapter Twenty Five - 025 ago
Chapter Twenty Six - 026 ago
Chapter Twenty Seven - 027 ago
Chapter Twenty Eight - 028 ago
Chapter Twenty Nine - 029 ago
Chapter Thirty - 030 ago
Chapter Thirty One - 031 ago
Chapter Thirty Two - 032 ago
Chapter Thirty Three - 033 ago
Chapter Thirty Four - 034 ago
Chapter Thirty Five - 035 ago
Chapter Thirty Six - 036 ago
Chapter Thirty Seven - 037 ago
Chapter Thirty Eight - 038 ago
Chapter Thirty Nine - 039 ago
Chapter Forty - 040 ago
Chapter Forty One - 041 ago
Chapter Forty Two - 042 ago
Chapter Forty Three - 043 ago
Chapter Forty Four - 044 ago
Chapter Forty Five - 045 ago
Chapter Forty Six - 046 ago
Chapter Forty Seven - 047 ago
Chapter Forty Eight - 048 ago
Chapter Forty Nine - 049 ago
Chapter Fifty - 050 ago
Chapter Fifty One - 051 ago
Chapter Fifty Two - 052 ago
Chapter Fifty Three - 053 ago
Chapter Fifty Four - 054 ago
Chapter Fifty Five - 055 ago
Chapter Fifty Six - 056 ago
Chapter Fifty Seven - 057 ago
Chapter Fifty Eight - 058 ago
Chapter Fifty Nine - 059 ago
Chapter Sixty - 060 ago
Chapter Sixty One - 061 ago
Chapter Sixty Two - 062 ago
Chapter Sixty Three - 063 ago
Chapter Sixty Four - 064 ago
Chapter Sixty Five - 065 ago
Chapter Sixty Six - 066 ago
Chapter Sixty Seven - 067 ago
Chapter Sixty Eight - 068 ago
Chapter Sixty Nine - 069 ago
Chapter Seventy - 070 ago
Chapter Seventy One - 071 ago
Chapter Seventy Two - 072 ago
Chapter Seventy Three - 073 ago
Chapter Seventy Four - 074 ago
Chapter Seventy Five - 075 ago
Interlude - Volume II ago
Chapter Seventy Six - 076 ago
Chapter Seventy Seven - 077 ago
Chapter Seventy Eight - 078 ago
Chapter Seventy Nine - 079 ago
Chapter Eighty - 080 ago
Chapter Eighty One - 081 ago
Chapter Eighty Two - 082 ago
Chapter Eighty Three - 083 ago
Chapter Eighty Four - 084 ago
Chapter Eighty Five - 085 ago
Chapter Eighty Six - 086 ago
Chapter Eighty Seven - 087 ago
Chapter Eighty Eight - 088 ago
Chapter Eighty Nine - 089 ago
Chapter Ninety - 090 ago
Chapter Ninety One - 091 ago
Chapter Ninety Two - 092 ago
Chapter Ninety Three - 093 ago
Chapter Ninety Four - 094 ago
Chapter Ninety Five - 095 ago
Chapter Ninety Six - 096 ago
Chapter Ninety Seven - 097 ago
Chapter Ninety Eight - 098 ago
Chapter Ninety Nine - 099 ago
Chapter One Hundred - 100 ago
Chapter One Hundred and One - 101 ago
Chapter One Hundred and Two - 102 ago
Chapter One Hundred and Three - 103 ago
Chapter One Hundred and Four - 104 ago
Chapter One Hundred and Five - 105 ago
Chapter One Hundred and Six - 106 ago
Chapter One Hundred and Seven - 107 ago
Chapter One Hundred and Eight - 108 ago
Chapter One Hundred and Nine - 109 ago
Chapter One Hundred and Ten - 110 ago
Chapter One Hundred and Eleven - 111 ago
Chapter One Hundred and Twelve - 112 ago
Chapter One Hundred and Thirteen - 113 ago
Chapter One Hundred and Fourteen - 114 ago
Chapter One Hundred and Fifteen - 115 ago
Chapter One Hundred and Sixteen - 116 ago
Chapter One Hundred and Seventeen - 117 ago
Chapter One Hundred and Eighteen - 118 ago
Chapter One Hundred and Nineteen - 119 ago
Chapter One Hundred and Twenty - 120 ago
Chapter One Hundred and Twenty One - 121 ago
Chapter One Hundred and Twenty Two - 122 ago
Chapter One Hundred and Twenty Three - 123 ago
Chapter One Hundred and Twenty Four - 124 ago
Chapter One Hundred and Twenty Five - 125 ago
Chapter One Hundred and Twenty Six - 126 ago
Chapter One Hundred and Twenty Seven - 127 ago
Chapter One Hundred and Twenty Eight - 128 ago
Chapter One Hundred and Twenty Nine - 129 ago
Chapter One Hundred and Thirty - 130 ago
Chapter One Hundred and Thirty One - 131 ago
Chapter One Hundred Thirty Two - 132 ago
Chapter One Hundred and Thirty Three - 133 ago
Chapter One Hundred and Thirty Four - 134 ago
Chapter One Hundred Thirty Five - 135 ago
Chapter One Hundred and Thirty Six - 136 ago
Chapter One Hundred and Thirty Seven - 137 ago
Chapter One Hundred and Thirty Eight - 138 ago
Chapter One Hundred Thirty Nine - 139 ago
Chapter One Hundred and Forty - 140 ago
Chapter One Hundred and Forty One - 141 ago
Chapter One Hundred and Forty Two - 142 ago
Chapter One Hundred and Forty Three - 143 ago
Chapter One Hundred and Forty Four - 144 ago
Chapter One Hundred and Forty Five - 145 ago
Chapter One Hundred and Forty Six - 146 ago
Chapter One Hundred and Forty Seven - 147 ago
Chapter One Hundred and Forty Eight – 148 ago
Chapter One Hundred and Forty Nine - 149 ago
Chapter One Hundred and Fifty - 150 ago
Chapter One Hundred and Fifty One - 151 ago
Chapter One Hundred and Fifty Two - 152 ago
Chapter One Hundred and Fifty Three - 153 ago
Chapter One Hundred and Fifty Four - 154 ago
Chapter One Hundred and Fifty Five - 155 ago
Chapter One Hundred and Fifty Six - 156 ago
Chapter One Hundred and Fifty Seven - 157 ago
Chapter One Hundred and Fifty Eight - 158 ago
Chapter One Hundred and Fifty Nine - 159 ago
Chapter One Hundred and Sixty - 160 ago
Chapter One Hundred and Sixty One - 161 ago
Chapter One Hundred and Sixty Two - 162 ago
Chapter One Hundred and Sixty Three - 163 ago
Chapter One Hundred and Sixty Four - 164 ago
Chapter One Hundred and Sixty Five – 165 ago
Chapter One Hundred and Sixty Six – 166 ago
Chapter One Hundred and Sixty Seven – 167 ago
Chapter One Hundred and Sixty Eight - 168 ago
Chapter One Hundred and Sixty Nine - 169 ago
Chapter One Hundred and Seventy – 170 ago
Chapter One Hundred and Seventy One – 171 ago
Chapter One Hundred and Seventy Two – 172 ago
Chapter One Hundred and Seventy Three - 173 ago
Chapter One Hundred and Seventy Four – 174 ago
Chapter One Hundred and Seventy Five – 175 ago
Chapter One Hundred and Seventy Six – 176 ago
Chapter One Hundred and Seventy Seven – 177 ago
Chapter One Hundred and Seventy Eight – 178 ago
Chapter One Hundred and Seventy Nine – 179 ago
Chapter One Hundred and Eighty - 180 ago
Chapter One Hundred and Eighty One – 181 ago
Chapter One Hundred and Eighty Two – 182 ago
Chapter One Hundred and Eighty Three – 183 ago
Chapter One Hundred and Eighty Four - 184 ago
Chapter One Hundred and Eighty Five - 185 ago
Chapter One Hundred and Eighty Six - 186 ago
Chapter One Hundred and Eighty Seven - 187 ago
Chapter One Hundred and Eighty Eight - 188 ago
Chapter One Hundred and Eighty Nine - 189 ago
Chapter One Hundred and Ninety - 190 ago
Chapter One Hundred and Ninety One - 191 ago
Chapter One Hundred and Ninety Two - 192 ago
Chapter One Hundred and Ninety Three - 193 ago
Chapter One Hundred and Ninety Four - 194 ago
Chapter One Hundred and Ninety Five - 195 ago
Chapter One Hundred and Ninety Six - 196 ago
Chapter One Hundred and Ninety Seven - 197 ago
Chapter One Hundred and Ninety Eight - 198 ago
Chapter One Hundred and Ninety Nine - 199 ago
Chapter Two Hundred – 200 ago
Chapter Two Hundred and One – 201 ago
Chapter Two Hundred and Two - 202 ago
Chapter Two Hundred and Three - 203 ago
Chapter Two Hundred and Four - 204 ago
Chapter Two Hundred and Five - 205 ago
Chapter Two Hundred and Six – 206 ago
Chapter Two Hundred and Seven – 207 ago
Chapter Two Hundred and Eight – 208 ago
Chapter Two Hundred and Nine – 209 ago
Chapter Two Hundred and Ten – 210 ago
Chapter Two Hundred and Eleven – 211 ago
Chapter Two Hundred and Twelve – 212 ago
Chapter Two Hundred and Thirteen – 213 ago
Chapter Two Hundred and Fourteen - 214 ago
Chapter Two Hundred and Fifteen – 215 ago
Chapter Two Hundred and Sixteen - 216 ago
Chapter Two Hundred and Seventeen – 217 ago
Chapter Two Hundred and Eighteen – 218 ago
Chapter Two Hundred and Nineteen – 219 ago
Chapter Two Hundred and Twenty – 220 ago
Chapter Two Hundred and Twenty One – 221 ago
Chapter Two Hundred and Twenty Two – 222 ago
Chapter Two Hundred and Twenty Three - 223 ago
Chapter Two Hundred and Twenty Four - 224 ago
Chapter Two Hundred and Twenty Five - 225 ago
Chapter Two Hundred and Twenty Six - 226 ago
Chapter Two Hundred and Twenty Seven - 227 ago
Chapter Two Hundred and Twenty Eight - 228 ago
Chapter Two Hundred and Twenty Nine - 229 ago
Chapter Two Hundred and Thirty - 230 ago
Chapter Two Hundred and Thirty One – 231 ago
Chapter Two Hundred and Thirty Two - 232 ago
Chapter Two Hundred and Thirty Three - 233 ago
Chapter Two Hundred and Thirty Four - 234 ago
Chapter Two Hundred and Thirty Five - 235 ago
Chapter Two Hundred and Thirty Six - 236 ago
Chapter Two Hundred and Thirty Seven - 237 ago
Chapter Two Hundred and Thirty Eight – 238 ago
Chapter Two Hundred and Thirty Nine - 239 ago
Chapter Two Hundred and Forty - 240 ago
Chapter Two Hundred and Forty One - 241 ago
Chapter Two Hundred and Forty Two - 242 ago
Chapter Two Hundred and Forty Three - 243 ago
Chapter Two Hundred and Forty Four - 244 ago

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FallWithGrace
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I want to like this story but it's rough

Reviewed at: Chapter Fifty Nine - 059

I want to add this book to my favorites but I don't think I ever will. It will probably remain in my follow list until I get annoyed with it.

Grammar: Excellent 5/5

Style Score: This style of reincarnated to new world rpg has been done before but it doesn't come across as boring. Excellent 5/5

Now you've noticed I've given the character and story scores 2.5 and 3 stars respectively. It's a simple reason. The author has bad habits.

Multitasking storytelling: You're reading a fight scene. The action is intense. There are flashes and bangs and the MC is using cool skills. All of a sudden, at the climax of the fight scene, the author goes into the MC thought process. It's so offputting. You can't take people out of the scene to set future scenes. It's shoddy storytelling. If the present scene has to suffer just so you can give a glimpse of the past or the future then you've wasted pages.

The Main Character thinks too much but grows little. Show don't tell is a powerful tool. Except the author shows every thing that flows through the MCs brain. You're in the middle of one scene but you can't get into the scene because the MC interrupts to show us his thoughts and feelings about some shiny thing. I've grown to resent his presence in a scene. Yes, I hate when the MC is in a scene because I can't enjoy the scene. I'm given one sentence and then he comes in and you're on a tangent. One sentence, three paragraph long tangent, and then back to the scene. You can imagine how slowly the story moves.

Chekov's Gun: It's abused in this story. The switch from scene to MC to scene shits all over this mark of good writing. You're in a scene, gun one locked and loanded, and it's firing. Then the MC interjects to show you another shiny object, gun 2 appears. However, gun 1 is no longer firing. Gun 2 is loaded up and oops back to gun 1. Where is gun 2? Wait for it. Here comes Gun 3.

Edit: Nevermind. It's gone from my follow list. The split story is just too annoying. Split in scene. Multi perspectives. I don't need to see the same story in different perspectives. I don't need to see three differnt scenes in one page.

Mash_Potatoes
Overall

A generic isekai litrpg story featuring a protagonist that progressively gets stronger each and every chapter. The plot armour makes the story lacks excitement as it becomes predictable beyond measure as it is obvious that the MC will always come out on top one way or the other. The MC himself comes off as a rather dense/not-so-bright fellow while the side characters, on the other hand, are, in my mind, purposefully made to be either incredibly stupid or naive in order to allow the plot to progress the way the author wants. 

All that said though, grammar is great and the plot itself somewhat interesting, so if you don't mind all the issues I pointed out in the beginning then you should find it as an enjoyable read.

ceaser
Overall

Even fantasy need to be realistic.

Reviewed at: Chapter Forty Four - 044

(chapter 44) Yeah.. I got to the part where the psychotic woman kidnap the Kids in order to undertake a suicide mission (while she could have left em at the entrance of the forest where there aint an army of man eating giants) and the only guy Who notice a problem with it is painted as a selfish asshole by the author. Yeah totally legit i know..

I actually liked the premise, the story has many major plot holes, and exaggerated plot armor, but i could handle them, what put me off is the convulted sense of justice in the story and how natural the author try to make it seems lol

So im puting it off here i guess. 

Ruyxi Sylpheyes
Overall

Never-ending struggle and that's the problem

Reviewed at: Chapter One Hundred and Seventy Eight – 178

The story just follows the Main character felix as he goes from one fight to the next with no real breaks in between. Sure there is a chapter here or there where the story slows down to give context and explinations, but the story is just never ending violence and fighting with no breaks in between to really savor anything about the world the author has built. I just find myself skipping whole chapters, just watching for level ups and such to tell me how much Felix is screwed and what went wrong this time. I hope in their next book the author breaks up the violence with world building, exploration and development outside of simple levels more than they did in this book. Still the book is not painful to read like other books, but definitly mediocre in my eyes.

Tacroy
Overall

Misadventures of a glorious idiot

Reviewed at: Chapter Twenty Seven - 027

I agree with pretty much all of the negative feedback this story has received.

The main character makes really stupid decisions. He should have died just from being dropped in an over-leveled zone as a level zero character. He should have died multiple times over from the (totally forseeable) results of his own actions. He definitely should have been struck down by the gods of cliche for acquiring a pet in the most trite way physically possible.

But none of that really matters. This isn't that kind of story; this isn't a powergamer figuring out the nooks and crannies of the system, or a soft modern person being flensed by a hardcore and gritty world.

This is an uncomplicated power fantasy, an adventure of the old and pulpy school. It's the kind of story that always has life-or-death stakes and therefore has no stakes at all, because of course the MC isn't going to die. The entertainment isn't "will the MC succeed?" - it's being along for the ride as he does, and by the skin of his teeth because that is what's narratively required.

This is not Evangelion; it's Gurren Lagann.

Whoopsydaisy
Overall

Plot armor and soon to be OP MC

Reviewed at: Chapter Eleven - 011

The MC has plot armor for days and a maxed out Luck stat. He triples his strength stat by doing push-ups for a day and then proceeds to trip over a waterfall that gives him a perk for surviving, while unconscious, due to the strength of his plot armor.

The grammar is good.

The character is mostly there to move the POV and be the thing that gains levels and stats and titles like beads at mardi gras.

The story is, at Chapter 11, entirely focused on the various Rare stats, titles, and whatnot that the MC can find dropped at his feet.

This is not a malicious review, there is promise here but if you've read 1 wuxia/xanxia story on RR, you've read this story. The only thing it's missing is an abusive female character, a doting female character, and the MC to bang his way through the entire female population.

caracco
Overall
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It was good at first, but it keeps repeating itself. Felix is not a bad character itself, but he isn't evolving, he always makes the same choice, and I don't like it.

in the end, the real problem is that it is repeating itself while not advancing fast enough.

Obviously, this is my opinion and someone else will think that it is extremely good and that I am exaggerating the problems, but I don't think so.

I will say that if you don't care about repetitiveness you will like this story, but as I don't I'll stop reading it.

My only hope is that this will not turn like some other system stories in a parody of itself, going on forever and without a real end.

Now a bit of rant. I can understand that after 220 chapters Felix is still weak and all, but I can't really accept that he fall always for the same kind of scheme and problems.

First the Maw, then Vellus.

He seems a slave of the plot, never thinking about what he is going to do and always following the others. I really can't comprehend him.

Then I can't really understand how the hell this system works, how the hell he could be strong and weak as much as it is needed for the plot without any consistency or how could Vess still be able to fight at his level after he became a primordial and has tens of bonuses.

 

irondruid7
Overall

I worry for the characters agency. Railroaded?

Reviewed at: Chapter Twelve - 012

You're feeding him a lot of convenient levels and skills which on it's own isn't too bad at the start of a story. But that new race quest makes it feel like you're railroading the story in a big way(On top of the rather convenient sequence of events leading to his specific race selection). He gets turned into a lost race in an area with a lost temple and he has to stay there and protect it? And on top of that he has a poor opinion of religion in general? The only way to make that interesting imo would be to resist the quest forced on him. The system accepted it, but so what. He just walks off and ignores it entirely.... What would be the consequences of that?

At the very least it's better than pretending he'd risk his life to protect something he doesn't give a crp about. And it would subvert a contrived development and (Depending on the consequences. Like perhaps a god getting upset he didn't follow the plan) build the world/system a bit more. But the last thing I want to feel when following a guy put on an alien fantasy planet is that his adventure is all planned out and he can’t make an original choice.

I don't hate the story yet, but convenient things are really starting to pile up and it feels like you're hamstringing a character with potential agency so his choices lead to something specific. Insert power here with consequences he didn't agree to, feed levels and skills that all culminate in the perfect build in later events and drop him in the middle of his lost ancient heritage... A heritage he only has because of "Fck you, that's what happened" happenstance. Do you see how that could be a problem? Any one of those would be a valid thing to criticize and you keep adding more on top of it. Like a convenient safety zone being there when he gets surrounded by a thousand enemies. You could’ve taught a lesson about being more wary when starting an unnecessary fight with creatures that weren’t bothering him, but he needed the levels soooo…. And then the circle and ruins are his ancestral heritage, sooo…. I don't want to learn what the next "Soooo...." is.

Acerbic
Overall

Ding! Plot Armor skill leveled up to 9000!

Reviewed at: Chapter Twenty Two - 022

So, the book starts with our hero being attacked by a literal Mythic-rank tentacled nightmare monster, all before he has any levels or skills to his name. He, of course, survives this and more so, gets an OP skill.

Expect his plot armor to go even thicker from then on. The main character will act rashly, act dumb, outright fail in his attacks or skill usage, and yet instead of meeting grizzly demise, will be rewarded with exta skills and levels for overcoming his out stupidity. His mana or stamina will run into zero, but he will muster on, somehow, because reasons. He will fall unconcious or asleep tired after hard battles and nothing will happen to him. This is that kind of a novel.

Overall, the book's "story" is a huge stats-fest. We get stats, we train skills, we get more skills, etc., etc. Its like a "Cookie Clicker" game, where the whole game play is just clicking a cookie on screen, for which you are rewarded with tools and bonuses that help you click the cookie even better. A very popular game, I heard, and if you are into this stuff, you will enjoy this book too.

The writing is terrible - grammar is fine, but the narration suffers greatly from "tell, don't show" syndrome. This is compouded by the protagonist being extremely blasé about any wound or suffering he experiences. It comes literally down to him feeling "agonizing pain" in one sentence and going back to "everything is fine" attitude the next one. Presumably, this is explained by his "WIL" stat, but i think its just a cop-out for not be able to write a convincing survivor psyche.

The one point when the novel becomes moderately interesting is an intermission about people who aren't the MC, who aren't OP and "too cool to be affected by emotions".

Astra19
Overall

The largest issue with this series is that the MC is a shouen story with no pacing or real character development, he is constantly placed in life and death situations which he has no chance of winning but he has a lot of plot armor and he survive and is then rewarded for it.

Death has no Consequence and is instead a means of a power up the main character

His pet of 1 day dies and the MC is devistated about it and believes it's his fault, then a message from the system tells him that it can be brought back to life if he is willing to pay an unknown price, he accepts has some soul tearing pain and is then rewarded with additional stat points per level and a compainion which will never betray him. Still haven't seen what the down side which was alluded to in the system mesage.

There isn't any real character development as all his screen time is spent fumbling around trying to survive and what little character development I have seen is MC being rewarded for surviving and the MC being happy about his rewards.

Which is all the time as his plot armor will save him or a Deus Ex Machina will happen that bails him out

So best I can say is if you like One Piece you will like this story, though if you dislike One Piece you'll probably dislike this story.