Ghosts Within

Ghosts Within

by AdamJay

Warning This fiction contains:
  • Profanity
  • Sexual Content

Remy was the best thief this side of old Boston. Well, he used to be the best. Now, Remy's nothing but a washed up con-man turned private investigator who owes a lot of money to the wrong people. Taking one last job to scrap together enough money to get out of town, he finds himself ensnared in schemes well over his paygrade. To save his own skin, he'll need use skills long gone to rust, old acquaintances who'd just as soon see him dead as succeed, and more than a bit of luck. 

Ghosts Within takes place in a semi post-apocalyptic world where the lines between technology and magic are blurred and scattered cities are the last refuge of civilization. Essentially, it's Blade Runner + Ocean's 11 with the magic system from Bioshock.

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36 Chapters
Chapter Name Release Date
Chapter 1: A Bad Day ago
Chapter 2: Aspirin and Cigarettes ago
Chapter 3: Beach Dreaming ago
Chapter 4: Undercity Blues ago
Chapter 5: The Keymaker ago
Chapter 6: The Key ago
Chapter 7: Greased Up Heart ago
Chapter 8: The Inspector ago
Chapter 9: Lyin' Through Your Teeth ago
Chapter 10: Undercover ago
Chapter 11: Sticky Floors and Locked Doors ago
Chapter 12: Coffeehouse Vibes ago
Chapter 13: A Happy Arrangement ago
Chapter 14: Exhaust Fumes and Cheap Cigarettes ago
Chapter 15: The Beltrider ago
Chapter 16: Displacement ago
Chapter 17: A Bad Walk and Some Bad News ago
Chapter 18: Old Wine ago
Chapter 19: Smokeshow ago
Chapter 20: Just Like Old Times ago
Chapter 21: Above the Clouds ago
Chapter 22: The Freeworker ago
Chapter 23: A Well-Worn Shoe ago
Chapter 24: A Cockroach & a Weak Man ago
Chapter 25: A Warning and A Chance ago
Chapter 26: Beneath the Freeworker ago
Chapter 27: Familiar Faces ago
Chapter 28: Showtime ago
Chapter 29: A Bloody Rose ago
Chapter 30: Beyond the Ghostfence ago
Chapter 31: Snuffing the Candle ago
Chapter 32: Hard Goodbyes ago
Chapter 33: Desperate Times ago
Chapter 34: The Worst Fucking Cigarettes ago
Chapter 35: A Different Kind of Freedom ago
Epilogue: The Inspector's Flight ago

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If you're a fan of film noir, this is going to be right up your alley. Even if you're not, it's a fun-loving story that's easy on the eyes.

 

--Style--

This is its strongest point and, golly, when it's good, it's very good.

If you've ever watched Double Indemnity, the narration in "Ghosts Within" could basically be read in Fred MacMurray's voice, despite a considerably different setting and a very different main character in Remy. It's true to the genre and it feels so right.

 

--Story--

Not as strong as style as there are the few odd parts that seem a bit incongruous and forced in. There is, in particular, a fun race sequence that doesn't entirely fit in with the rest of it, but it's fine in its own right. 

 

-Grammar--

Strong with the occasional slippage here and there, but nothing glaring or particularly worthy of note. Specifically, there are no frequent malapropisms or verbal crutches that need to be corrected.

 

--Characters--

Remy, the protagonist, is a delightful schlub who really ties the whole book together for me. I don't know why, but I relate to broken down frumpy alcoholics. His relationships are a hot mess, too. This ties back into style because he's a very strong film noir protagonist whose inner monologue is a constant wave of melancholic rumination punctuated by periodic glimmers of happiness.

 

Very nicely done.