Path of Divinity

by D.W. Belfield

Warning This fiction contains:
  • Gore
  • Profanity
  • Sexual Content
  • Traumatising content

The world has been assimilated by the Celestial Archives, a vast system designed to fight the forces that seek to destroy the universe. For most, it's a holy cause that rewards victory with stats, levels, and skills. For Hunter Gold, it's the start of a nightmare. Even in a system dominated by paths, he finds himself taking the road less traveled. 

This is a work in progress. Major editing will be done after the book is complete, so there will be egregious typos and parts that make no sense whatsoever. Please feel free to point any and all of these things out. Chapters WILL get edited, and that editing might break earlier chapters. I will attempt to keep readers apprised of all changes. As always, feedback is welcome and appreciated. 

This is kind of something fun I wanted to write after reading stories like The New World, System Apocalypse, and the Legend of Randidly Ghosthound. I don't know how serious I will be about this story, but I just want to try it out. I imagine that it will become a love child between Fable, Diablo, and Devil May Cry. Enjoy!


The Scourge Wars Universe

Evolve: The Scourge Wars Book 1 (published)

Adapt: The Scourge Wars Book 2 (published)

Resist: The Scourge Wars Book 3 (published)

The Othryrian Archives

Advent (Read on RoyalRoad) 

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WhiteSamurai
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In the present day, there is something to be said about a character that struggles to find their place. Now more than ever, it is truly difficult to imagine what tomorrow will bring, and ever easier to simply fall into the trap of the day to day.

 

The main character of this story, who's last name is Gold, foreshadowing or a reference to the story's potential notwithstanding, is such an individual. 

 

Consider, a character who has a troubled parentage, missing father, and parental figures with expectations in the clouds for someone struggling to stand on their own two feet, and you have Hunter Gold. A man with successful grandparents that never approved of his actual parents. Such a story honestly speaks to a lot of people, and with good reason.

 

The story follows Hunter Gold in a World-Shift event. If you do not know what World-Shift is, it is effectively bringing a story to Earth/The-World instead of an Isekai or reincarnation flick. Needless to say, the new world heavily appears to favor the Do's, the people with strong mentalities that color their life, and discriminates the Naughts, those who struggle to choose and live in a world of grays, blacks, and whites. As such, the main character, a naught, is immediately cast aside by the changing tides, just like many who struggle and are abandoned by their peers today, and falls into actual depths. From there it is an upward climb of temptation that truly seems to encapsulate the struggle many face getting through that struggle, to achieve and do, and I personally appreciate that allusion invoked by the author. The modern underdog finding passion in life is a strong story foundation so long as it holds up.

As someone who often does not delve into the Literary RPG, nor the Game Lite, I often prefer my stories as light on the text boxes as possible. Each story element has its place, and I appreciate that the author knows better than to plaster a status screen, or a level-up window, every few hundred words. Instead, the author has chosen a more layered approach, preferring to have a more humanistic approach to investing into the system. The main character, Hunter Gold, only pays it much mind when he is thinking of what he needs, and sometimes prepares for what he will do with future levels, saving precious page space for more important elements such as action and proper character moments. While the story certainly does not meet my criterion of perfection, it needn't do so either. What you have here is a story which invokes both a close-to-home character design with the action & adventure that has seen the rise of the present Golden Era where Light Novels, Manga, and Anime progress further into the mainstream. As the story progresses, I strongly encourage the author to not lose sight of his roots and to continue to give the readers a proper portrayal of the story they started with: a golden story of a Naught that wanted to Do.

 

No human being nor machine is capable of perfection when handling spelling or grammar, as all have grown frustrated with automatic corrections, or simply used autocorrect instead of learning how to spell a particularly annoying word, and the author is quite human as well. Simply put, the document has an error or two, as is expected from any author. What one can instead appreciate is the willingness of the author to read every comment, correct errors that come up, and then thank each and every person that found an error. A small ask, but one that many authors tend to forget, and a strong demonstration of the difference in mentality that one might expect from an author that has already hit it big as an Amazon Bestseller with his last series. Perhaps that originates best from his military service—a strong sense of loyalty to those who support him—and it does indeed show best in the small things. Thus, I can forgive the small things in turn.

 

Overall, without giving too many spoilers, this story is iconified by its strong character foundations, and the growth of its main lead first, and cemented by strong moral choices in an ever-expanding world. I cannot foresee the road ahead any more than the next reader in line, however, so long as our main lead continues on his journey down that straight and narrow road, your Hunt is over, you've found Gold.

 

Overall | [5.0/5.0] 

Style: [5.0/5.0] 

Story: [5.0/5.0] 

Character: [5.0/5.0] 

Grammar: [5.0/5.0] 

 

[As of Chapter 37]

BonesTD
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An interesting spin on these tales

Reviewed at: Chapter 41

The story so far is very interesting. I've been keeping up with The New World since it's initial release and have been binge reading Randidly Ghosthound the last month or so, so finding another similar story is a pleasant surprise. The story is very interesting and has elements from both stories that are interesting but also has enough of a difference to feel new and refreshing. The MC is very well developed, for how far the story is currently ( chapter 41) and the plot is coming along nicely, being revealed at a pleasant and comfortable pace. Definitely worth a read!

H1togami
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Walking the thin line between Heaven and Hell

Reviewed at: Chapter 28

An excellent story so far showing a man struggling to balance demonic power with the mandate from heaven. When choosing a side will get him killed or push him until a fate worse than death he must walk the line between. A man who has never chosen his own path is now trapped in a situation that gives him a great deal of support and absolutely no direction.

The story is interesting and the grammar is excellent. The main character is really well fleshed out, but I didn't feel that I could give more for character score until I see how the side characters are written.

Am now out of things to write, so please stop reading.

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Rogosh
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Enjoying the story so far, the path sytem reminds me a bit of a few others I have read. This is a good thing, the main character and world seem well built and likable.

The only knock I have is the long term plot, but I feel like this is coming soon. Maybe when he gets to the town.

Reviewed this as of chapter 10.

Wade Mooney
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Style 5/5

I just love this dark matter-of-fact style. It just leaves me wanting more after every chapter and I'm thoroughly impressed with the authors dedication to a consistent release without compromising quality 

Story 4.5/5

While I enjoy the story and the direction it's going; the only gripe I have is that it can get a bit wordy at times without adding a lot to the story. This doesn't detract from the experience for me because I can just skip the less than concise bits and get right back to it. Very often this will get fixed in a final edit as there is nothing wrong with the quality.

Grammar 4.5/5

This is an online posting of a novel. It's still a rough draft. I know and acknowledge that. But I can't give it a full 5/5 because there are a large number of spelling errors over the entire text to date and sometimes the sentence structure can makes things come across unclear (one or two instances. Once again, not story breaking but I can't deny the fact that they are real and present issues in the work.

Characters 5/5

So far, the characters behave according to their established 'nature' and things don't seem bizarre or unexpected.

It's still early days though. There's been minimal interaction with other characters outside of the MC though where there has been it was done well.

 

Overall I won't rate this novel less than 5/5 stars. The only issues with it are completely normal for a draft and the author is fantastic at getting on top or and correcting those errors when they are found.

I'm enjoying the ride and am genuinely excited to see where the story goes from here and I hope to add this book to my library upon its release to kindle.

XystOblivion
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I would like to preface this by saying that this novel is great so far and I would recommend reading it if you are into the litRPG genre and a bit of a darker character. There is a lot more to offer than just that but I'll keep this review limited to the points I think are the biggest. The novel is still in its early stages and as such, this review will be more barebones than, say a review of a 500 page long novel. 

Style: In general, the style is not original. The litRPG sub genre with a past-haunted protagonist is not new and has been around for a while. I'm not going to fault the author for following this trend nor am I going to say it's a bad thing. The author provides his own unique twists and spins on the litRPG sub genre and all the other semi-cliches he decided to use for his framework. The four stars only reflects the fact that I wasn't, per say, wowed by any crazy, innovative ideas.

 

Story: What story there is so far, is quite minimal and is mainly told in the beginning few chapters. The majority of the chapters written after is a sort of mini training arc to get him ready to fight a big baddy to get out of the dimensional rift he is stuck in. Once he is out, I sense that the story will pick back up and some truly interesting plot will occur. I see this happening in the next few chapters as the author himself has expressed his want to get out of the rift in an end chapter annotation. I removed a half star because not much has happened yet and I will most likely adjust the star rating again in the future when more of the story is available.

 

Grammar: Absolutely no qualms. A few slip ups here and there but that is to be expected. No human is perfect and from what I understand, this man does not have an editor currently.

 

Character: Again no qualms. There is really only one character that we have met so far and that is our protagonist. I like the way he is progressing both mentally and physically and look forward to his exploits outside the rift.

Ashyles
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Something to sate your thirst

Reviewed at: Chapter 23

If you loved A New World and LoRG, this story could be for you; if you hated it, you should read the first chapters all the same.

The MC is a guy who didn't know what to do in the world, he was lost, and because the System wants people to follow a Path, he was punished. But you'll see that it isn't easy to make this guy follow a Path.

The description are good and fight can be easily imagined, the world still isn't very explained because Hunter is still in the same place, but what we have is good.

For grammar I only found some typos like inverted characters in a word or a comma before the right place, but with the speed of release I think it's totally excusable.

Like I already said for now we have only seen Hunter, and received description of his family, but they seem pretty believable and reasonable. 

(Hunter is probably going to be a blacksmith and craft things, so if there are people that like that this could be a bonus)

I suggest this story to everyone that likes litRPG, if they are new to the genre or already read a lot, because you'll like it.

Nxeoh
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Seems good so far, but time will tell... I just hope whatever path the MC takes is interesting. The only gripe I have is that the MC barely even reacts to being burned for 3/4 of his HP. It could've been adrenaline or somethin, but I feel like he should react a bit more to pain.

rick james
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Read it all in one day. Don't regret it one bit. Slow but interesting world building. You learn more about the world with the main character which is cool. Although felt a bit bland with the whole good vs evil concept but author managed to make it work. Story is still in the early stages but it has potential. And also doing this review for more chapters lol 😆. As the reader you feel like a frog in a well which is great. Some bits are predictable and we're yet to interact with more characters. But there's a good reason why it's on trending. Author has a good release rate. Hopefully you won't burn out from that. Keep up the good work author . 

And this review needs to be 200 words long. So I'll just start posting random words. Fetish. Wind. Angels. Demons. Map we need a map. Is it a reflection of earth? Map please. Power. Weak. Litrpg sort of element. Food. Food.

It still isn't 200 words. How. Please don't have a lot of money to develop a disclaimer that is unique to make it work on the side of the day to be able to get it was the girl 👧. 

Scesce Scesce
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let's begin with the grammar, i'm not a native, but it seems good to me, as for the story it's basically inspired to randidly and new world by mooson, so i'm kinda of biased, because i love that system.

hard working mc=check

mc who is following his own path=check

badass= check

the chance that the author dissapears seem really slim.

Definitely a novel i recommed.