The Exiled Prince
What worth is a person without mana? A person whom cannot harness magic?
Lazarus was born into the world of Valeria. A world with magic and swords but.... the child was born without mana the very energy used to harness magic. And because of this he was shunned by his family.
Left alone in the darkness of the world, he had nothing more to lose.
Nothing more to hold on to....
WARNING: Contains mature content such as but not limited to (Gore, Violence, Sexual Content)
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Ok so far it’s the prelude to what I think will be a GREAT story due to the authors writing style and pace. Gonna be a fun time with science VS. Magic!
Ok so another few chapters in and it looks like we get a technological OPness in this story butttttttt who knows how much. Sounds like he’s gotten through most of his education to the highschool level buuuttt he does have a crazy inventor dad sooo gonna be fun on the bun
I wanna tell yal why I love these science VS magic stories is because they’re both different sides of the same coin and seeing both elements in one place is extremely fascinating! In reality magic doesn’t exist( Not that science knows of yet…who knows the universe is HUGE, may be some unknown isotope or element that some sentiant species learned to manipulate using their minds or bodies) but in fantasy books the laws of physics change resulting in societies advanced in using the abilities to manipulate the world around them. Then on the science side of the coin, when something as convenient as magic doesn’t exist humans learn to manipulate the world around them using machines, tools and techniques on pace with magic. That’s why this mashup of elements in a story is so very interesting! It’s our reality VS another in a direct matchup to be the most powerful, efficient or badass!
So I love how this story diverts from the mainstream themes and has some surprising plot twists. The complex story line shows that the author knows his stuff. The plot so far has always surprised me, just when I think someone will die, they don't. In a way he is really OP in another way he is at a disadvantage and the author uses this combination to keep the story very interesting. Had my full attention from the beginning. The grammar has been a little iffy. The author really knows how to play with my heartstrings.
It's surprising because I thought the story would be another poorly done science vs fantasy attempt. However, it's actually fairly interesting. Most of the characters are dumb, yet there is enough engagement that I strangely don't have too much of an issue with it. I suspect that a lot of the issues comes from the occasional poor grammar/spelling highlighting smaller problems and making them bigger than they really are. (When you trip over a section with poor grammar or spelling, you tend to stay and reread that section and notice things you usually would just pass over.)
It's weird, because while I read, I felt like I was reading a story with all the characteristics of a slightly below average novel, but after finishing each chapter it felt like I had just read a pretty well-done chapter. A little rough at times, but interesting. Very interesting.
I love this novel... its Story attracts everyone to read it more... The touch of SciFi with a manaless main character... This realistic fantasy is what I yearn for....
To the author ,
Please don't drop this novel , I've been waiting every month for its update...it's well written with unique idea ...
I hope you can get more free time to think great ideas and update this novel more often...
I'm not good at reviewing things, however, I felt that giving this a review would bring it justice. This Story is severely underrated. Even though it has inconsistencies, some problems and mistakes, I never felt annoyed by them. This novel had a way to make me interested of what would happen, even in the first slow paced 10 chapters.
Give it a try, try to read until at least chapter 15-20
It has a lot of potential, and is probably one my favourite novels. I'm just saddened by the fact that it is on hiatus. Well, I can't do jackshit about that anyway.
Good job author ! And if you ever read this, please know that if people like your novel ! (well, if you don't want to continue then do so. Just give some news already damnit ! I'm dying of hope to see the reboot or what's next !)
This is the story that brough me to Royal Road. The premise is very interesting and the main character is well realized. To the point where you really care of his deeds and issues. Some of the secondary characters are a bit weak at times and serve as plot progression more than anything, but they could be so much more with a little more attention.
There are some grammar issues here and there, but nothing serious. The style is consistent and the pace, albeit slow, it does a good work in keeping the tension of the moment and makes thing more belieavable.
Sadly the Author is a bit incosistent with the release schedules and all, which I am sure is because real life issues. The thing is, when he vanishes, I get really sad thinking he dropped the story because this is one I want to see it end, is not one of those you can just toss away.
I highly recommed it.
(Author san. Pls, give Lazarus plasma weaponry)
This isn't really a review more of a soft critic directly to the author on some aspects i think you can improve on.
First off let start be saying i like this story and this critic is in no way a rant(as you can see from the scores i gave). With that said it has, in my opinion, a few flaws.
- His "hatred" towards anything mana related and trying to prove science is better. Of course i realize and understand why he hates mana, but his behavior is a bit to "racist" without the races(couldn't find a better word to explain it ). Basically he wants t prove science is better then mana and shuns everything related to it(at least his behavior till now ch.57). Ironically that is not how science works. Science is to literally use everything at your disposal to experiment in search of new developments in a VERY SIMPLIFIED nutshell.
So the MC isn't anything scientist like. Now it's not that bad yet, but i hope you can slowly make him accept mana(not use per say, i mean mentally accept it) and experiment with mana materials for wahtever come to your head( mana stone flamethrower, enhance his serum with mana, etc . your imagination is the limit) and try to figure out why he can't use even if he can't cure it. Not only will this behavior make him use science more but let's face it,
HE is being a huge crybaby about that.
- Character. - well this is the worst one perhaps ? I mean it has been either enemy or friend. Not one elf is reasonable, NOT ONE. It's like they are bipolars, one moment they are calm the other sh*t hits the fan HARD.And pls do not get rid of of Silphi. Ironically she had the best development explained so far, sure she was a bitch at the start but you explained why, well. So don't get rid of over her just because she doesn't follow the mc around like an obedient dog because sure as hell the mc hasn't done SHT to deserve it , FROM ANYBODY. I mean he doesn't explain anything to anyone and resorts do deceit anytime anyone doubts himeven if just for a second, so a her behavior was justified.
Well that is it. And don't take this critic to heart because i made this so you can improve. I like your story and would like to see it continue until it's finished.
Keep up the good work author-san!!!!!!!
The story really evokes all kinds of emotions from the reader; anger, joy, sadness, etc. Each chapter is always something to look forward to.
Try it, it's quite a good ride !
this story is awesome keep up the good work