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Domenic is a sailor who just wants a life at sea. A brewing war between nations turn the already dangerous seas into something perilous. Domenic is forced into an untenable position, one he escapes with his life – though there is a greater cost he’ll have to pay after his deal with the devil.

Join Domenic as he explores the meaning and cost of both servitude and freedom!

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Have been hard for me to read

Reviewed at: 13. Capture

 

 

Made an acc just to make a review.

Heres the thing. I'd say the story is good. Steady progression. Not info dumping crazily, but its there abit.

 

The hardest part would be how the sentence flow. You just kept using 'I'. Understandable, the story is first POV. But man, when you realize how many time your sentence start with 'I' is very much disturbing for me.

 

Other story that i've readt also sometimes first POV. But they don't have this kind of a pattern. Or atleast lower frequencies in using sentence that start with 'I'.

 

Its just wrong. The repetitive feeling that you get from it just make it harder to read.

IsTiredAndNeedsToPoop
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This story is a well written LitRPG, without the annoying table spam (or litrpg lite for the purists?). The characters are well done, and likeable.

However, the main attraction for me is the original setting. This story is set at sea, with the MC being a sailor, and the world is build around sea-lore rather than the usual tolkien elves. And damn is that a breath of fresh air in the LitRPG genre. Highly recommended!

Tricto
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Really refreshing start. It's completely different of what I'm used to with LitRPG. 
Waiting to see the development of this work, but if it can keep its creativity and personality.. can be something good. 

I recommend it if you want something novel, different of the typical system-like works seen in here. 

John Marcus
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What feels like a relatively new take on litrpg. Unique setting (ocean and harbor). Unique mc. Distinct cultures. Unique dynamic of mc interacting with individuals who are a product of said cultures. Mythos.

All in all a unique tapestry of writing that sucked me right in.

Feels like the author hasn't overloaded their mind with litrpg tropes.

Hendrik Ottersbach
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A beautiful crafted story where you realize that the author got quite a bit of experience.

I only got one point to critique - The slow start: Everything up to chapter 15 seems like a big prolugue and while reading I always missed the progression of the story and the protagonists powers. There is no sense that the main quest has already begun and that hinders the readers involvement in the story. He is a sailor that helps sailing a ship from point A to point B. Not to save the kingdom someone other got that quest. His task is only to sail the ship. That does not make for a very good fantasy plot and as a reader you always feel, that this is probably not the real plot. A lot of litrpg or cultivation stories manage to mask that lack of progression of the main plot with the progression of the protagonist skills and powers. But the skills our main character got from the start seem lackluster and all strength he gains seem marginal. A couple percent here and there. That only gets more pronounced through the fact that he does not spend his experience or ability points. All in all lost quite a bit of interest while reading the first 200 pages, but your turn around at chapter 15 manged to get me involved again.

 

Oh, also you need to add a magic tag to the story. 

FuzzyZergling
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Fairly unique plot with few spelling/grammatical errors. Protagonist is slightly bland, but it's still the beginning of the story (chapter 16 as of this review), so we'll see where he goes.

sandro530
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Nothing special t'ill the end of chapter 13

Reviewed at: 14. Curse

The beginning is a little slow showing us the life of our MC what he wants to do in the future his skills and potential. Nothing special, now at chapter 13 is the moment where the difference between good fiction and bad fiction truly begins. All it needs now, is a frequent release without hiatus or being dropped.

Animan
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Original, very fast addicting piece of the good stuff.

Reviewed at: 16. Experiments

I didn't think I needed the story about the sea lover... Clearly I was wrong. Thank you Sir.

 

I am not really a sea lover myself, but I appreciate a good climate where I see it. This story has plenty of it. Ohh my.. the smile completely covered my face seeing the shanties for the first time. I heard them in my head and just couldn't stop myself from trying to sing them.

 

Characters: Haven't seen many but all who were illustrated were nicely fleshed out. Main character is very likable, and his "cheat" is just awesome. It is not shoved in him stupidly but is strongly related to his personality. Really. Gimme more of him!!

 

Style: Even though I probably prefer 3rd person narration, this was captivating and very easy to read.

Grammar: Very good, easily readable. Not too convoluted sentences. Information flows well.

Story: Well-paced and interesting. MC free to pursue his love and wishes while also put at the wider path that may lead to the world reaching outcomes. Truly cannot wait what he will go for.

RPG elements: Shown in a non-invasive way. They clearly are part of life for the denizens of the portrayed world, not something brute-force inserted for the sake of gamification.

 

 

SaintxMeow
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Absolutely stellar take on Litrpg

Reviewed at: 16. Experiments

If every litrpg was as detailed as this one is setting out to be, I believe this would be a much more popular genre; It is a little slow to start but thats not necessarily a bad thing.

namesarehard
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A genuine gamelit world

Reviewed at: 16. Experiments

I am not great at reviews and people with much better writing skills have already explained what makes it so wonderful, so I'll stick to my favorite part of the story. The people and culures in this story feel like they have actually lived with the System. Its not just the adventures, almost every kind of person we have met and their associated culture feels like it has been affected by the System in a meaninful way.