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Domenic is a sailor who just wants a life at sea. A brewing war between nations turn the already dangerous seas into something perilous. Domenic is forced into an untenable position, one he escapes with his life – though there is a greater cost he’ll have to pay after his deal with the devil.

Join Domenic as he explores the meaning and cost of both servitude and freedom!

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SRyanDickinson
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I'm only a few chapters into the story but find it well written and a compelling read.  Well done.

Gompman
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A great and fun read so far

Reviewed at: 28. A Tense Conversation

This fiction is the best one I've read on this site so far. Interesting character and story, and it makes you really invested in the main character.

The story is interesting, but it has stagnated to a halt in the later chapters 20->. An amazing start nevertheless, and the grammar is really up to par. 

If you are looking for a story that is of high quality and with an interesting premise, I would give this a try. I just hope the story will give me that umph it had earlier, but it's potential is high. 

 
telesto
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Exceptional characterization

Reviewed at: 16. Experiments

Really a great story so far.  The pacing is solid: each chapter is a meaty chunk of plot, with characters that aren't simple archtypes and an exceptional quality of writing.

Marlkaz
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I grew up reading naval fiction especially Alexander Kent so this is both nostalgic and original for me. Looking forward to seeing how it continues!

Major Vex
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Good start becomes silly trainwreck

Reviewed at: 16. Experiments

Rating for first 13 chapters 4.5. 

If the MC died at the end of chapter 13 this would have been a really good short story for RR.  After that the character does a 180 with his whole core personality and the story becomes fanboy fiction servant of the worse character in an already bad Disney franchise.   At least have the decency to post this as fan fiction (without that statement this is stealing Disney's adaptation of Davy Jones)

To the author:  feel free to add a warning of the story change and/or better tags and i'll feel free to edit my review.  complaining about your 0.5 reviews when you don't have any is silly.  people calling me a troll when this is the only bad review  i've posted on RR and after posting it was a good story up to that point is kinda silly.

jxlegend
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Not top 3 material

Reviewed at: 2. Port

As of this review “Seaborn” is number 3 on this site. There are simply too many grammatical and spelling mistakes for that to be possible. I’m not saying it’s bad for this site, it’s above average even though I don’t like it. 

 

And frankly the grammar mistakes are very minor to the point where I look past them without noticing.

 

grammar is not my issue so far.

 

Im only on chapter 2 but my biggest issue so far is the exposition dumps disguised as “normal” conversation/monologue/action and it’s just makes the prose very clunky.

 

Really the line that threw me off more than anything was when he was hit in the stomach while underwater. I don’t remember exactly what it was but it was along the lines of “my air was at 2:11 and instantly went down to 0:00”. 

 

That is not a top 3 line. That is a dogsh*t line. You have a beautiful opportunity to show not tell with something like “...all the air burst from my lungs in a moment of pain” or something (I’m not an author just off the top of my head). But instead it’s not even really telling because the reader has to figure out what happened. 

 

Just because ita litRPG doesn’t mean literally everything has to have a number attached to it.

 

If I was a purist I would rate it 2 stars but I know I don’t even look at stuff on Amazon with less than ~4, so I give it 3.5 because as it stands I won’t read further. 

 

Edit: read more and revised my review since reading more chapters. The first two chapters are rough, and I maintain that there are better, more concise ways to express having breath than a timer. Really breaks the flow.

tonyinallcaps
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This story isn't all fives; there are no perfect stories. But the fact that this work has such high marking with almost 2000 ratings, but that 20 negative advanced reviews can skew it's statistics like this is bull sh*t. I'm just here to try and even that out a bit.

Hammarsten
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I don’t really spend money at all w/ patron but I did for this, can’t stop reading. It is a good read, and fun, w/ adventure. This hits all marks for me. Thank you