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Domenic is a sailor who just wants a life at sea. A brewing war between nations turn the already dangerous seas into something perilous. Domenic is forced into an untenable position, one he escapes with his life – though there is a greater cost he’ll have to pay after his deal with the devil.

Join Domenic as he explores the meaning and cost of both servitude and freedom!

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Duck_No_Duck
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First, let me say that I suck at writing a review, but I think this story deserves it. Also, I'm biased as I love stories about the Navy. It's hard to write stories that revolved around a ship since the entire story takes place in a very small world.

Style: When I think of style I think of how talented the author is in making the world/characters they write in stick out. The author has done a very good job of this. I like how the author seems to know a lot about the age of high seas and sailing ships. It really stands out and makes the story really pop out. 

Story:

The world-building in this story is excellent. The action is fast when it happens but more importantly, the story slows down and is still interesting when it does. The plot is driven by both what the MC does and how he interacts with the people around him. What I mean by that is while he is the MC, he is not dictating what is happening. The story is happening to him. That was vague... What I mean is that some stories are driven by the actions of the MC. This story is driven by what is happening around the MC. There is a story that is happening that if you take the MC out it's still there. It just won't go in the same direction. 

Grammar:

I'm horrible with grammar. The only thing I can say here is that I didn't notice anything the took me out of the story. 

Character:

The characters are very vivid and three dimensional. The MC stands out but not in an annoying OP way. MC is noticed because of his competence which is really well done. He's not outstanding, he's just good at his job and it shows. That, and he is lucky as only an MC can be. The only fault I have is when the MC's luck shows its face for the first time. It's slightly unbelieved and OP but doesn't take away that much from the story. 

 

YesorNo
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I say, what a blast it was reading this. It has the most likeable main character I've seen in ages.

And the world it has been set in is equally interesting. You really can't ask for more.

The game stats feel slightly unnecessary, but bring enough to the table to justify their use.

Out of all of the story published so far, I only found myself skimming over the description of the world map. And I do that for all fics.

Spoiler: My only gripe...

So... basically, READ IT. I won't be surprised if it works it's way up to top 5 on Best Rated.

ThatOneGuy
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5 stars first 10 chapters

Reviewed at: 17. Donovan's Reef

I really liked it until he got cursed then it instantly lost any redeeming quality in my eyes. 

Sam Williams
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Honestly it was 5 stars before he made the deal with jones.

It was 4 stars until the navy came to capture him.

Idk what has happened but the last few chapters have been 3 stars tops.

 

Stillness
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I think an author has the right to write their story how they wish, but I think they made a mistake. Before chapter 14 I would say this would be one of the best stories on the site. Now? Well... Anyway. I liked the LitRPG aspect as it gave some flavor without overpowering the story. The characters were very well done and the conflict of the main character, Domenic, tring to find his way in the world was very relatable. I didn't like chapter 14 because Domenic's choice of his path forward in life was made for him. He didn't grow as a character or discover anything. He then proceeds to bum around a pirate town for at least the next 15 chapters which seems to go agaist the spirt of the Heart at Sea perk if not the letter. This seemed like an amazing story of exploration, discovery and growth, but I guess not.

noobody77
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An interesting world ruined by an awful mc.

Reviewed at: 11. Boarding

When I first started reading this I was interested, after all there aren't a lot of sea based stories on this site and this one seemed interesting, but unfortunately the more time I spent with the mc the less I liked him. He's an unintelligent moron with no emotional maturity and a martyr complex who can't stop feeling sorry for himself long enough to get his head out of his ass. His presence truly ruins an otherwise interesting world.

NorskDaedalus
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It's a refreshing twist to have somebody in a LitRPG know all about the system from the start, that gaining stats and levels is just a part of life, and being able to simply jump straight into the story and the interesting bits. It's also a nice change of pace to have a nautical story on RR. While I'm not familiar enough to really know the accuracy of the sailing, what I do know matches with the story.

 

Where this tale goes from here, I don't know. But if the rest of Seaborn continues on with a similar level of quality (both prose and grammatical), I look forward to following it as long as it goes.

izz
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Have been hard for me to read

Reviewed at: 13. Capture

 

 

Made an acc just to make a review.

Heres the thing. I'd say the story is good. Steady progression. Not info dumping crazily, but its there abit.

 

The hardest part would be how the sentence flow. You just kept using 'I'. Understandable, the story is first POV. But man, when you realize how many time your sentence start with 'I' is very much disturbing for me.

 

Other story that i've readt also sometimes first POV. But they don't have this kind of a pattern. Or atleast lower frequencies in using sentence that start with 'I'.

 

Its just wrong. The repetitive feeling that you get from it just make it harder to read.

Vokivas
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If I had to summarize my thoughts, I would say that this story lacks Identity.

There is plenty of stuff there that could be used or expanded upon, but they are by and larged skipped over. It feels like the first fourteen chapters just function as convoluted backstory. As so much is sped through, my assumption is that the writer's real goal was chapter 14 and the rest was necessary to reach that. 

Yet that doesn't have to be true. The story could've been fine starting where it did, but it doesn't line up with the end goal. Instead, these starting chapters act as exposition. They throw characters, backstory, world building, and the system at you one after the other. There are only a few steps away, and they are drowned out by the pacing of the story. Most of chapters are spent introducing plot threads for far in the future, or introducing characters that are minor to the plot. Sometimes the characters are just nobodies, where other characters are made mostly irrelevent by the events of the story. 

Lastly, internal consistency. My main points of discussion being the presentation of the system, and Lawless Jack. First, the system. Seaborn finds itself in a weird place. When it comes to systems, there are two extremes. One is where the system is mysterious and largely unexplored. Where a part of the story is exploring and learning about the system. The other extreme being everyone knowing about the system, or it's mostly intuitive to those who use it. Seaborn finds itself swinging from one extreme to the other, from one chapter to the next. Now, Lawless Jack. Just how did Domenic not hear of him? Jack has an impossibly equipped, trained, and experienced crew. By all established measures, Jack and his crew are an extreme outlier. His reputation should be akin to Blackbeard's. Heck, he has the personal attention of a god like being. Unless there is some scenario where he takes no prisoners. But then some ships are liable to escape boarding. In that case, his ship would be infamous. Whereas Domenic has been living in ports and on the sea his entire life. Living around sailors and merchants, as a sailor, for years. It's sort of silly that Domenic has no clue who this guy is. 


As critical as I'm being, this does deserve some praise. The characters are mostly interesting, yet with how quickly things move they are impossible to become attached to. Your grammar is great. Your grasp on the English language is a step above a lot that can be found on this site. Except it's largely held back by the other problems in the story. 

Flashadows
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This is so far one of the absolute best litrpg stories I have ever read, and I've read as many good ones I could find. The characters are nuanced and interesting, the worldbuiding is comprehensive and tantalizing when combined with the author's willingness to impart informaiton slowly and naturally without resorting to immersion breaking info-dumps. It's at a bit of a turning point right now (chapter 14), and seems like it's about to hit the main stride of the plot. Right now, I can't wait to read the rest.