Original ONGOING Action Adventure
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Just a simple story of Jio De Vil and some other characters.

In Jio's eye, it's either your a friend or a foe. He doesn't care what or where you are from, like a simpleton, but those who hurt him or the people he cares for will pay ten-fold, wishing they never meet him.

Fate can be cruel, but his luck and perseverance trample all odds.

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OK but nothing special.

Reviewed at: Chapter 1-10

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its a 'OK' story nothing GREAT but it will do. If you can stand the grammer the its readible.

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Overall it ok but when you read you will notice the mistakes  and the mistakes keep piling up. And because of that you will miss the story. If you can fix that that will me great it has potential.

If you dont have the time or are not that good at English . Then use Grammerly its free.